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It was clear and purposeful.

There were no weak points.

I agree with the statement. There are three reasons. First, college students need a lot of money. They must pay money to college need to buy , eat, drink in order to be friendly. They should not have their parents pay a lot for . should pay the costs by themselves they should have part-time job. Second, they can make friends when they work. To work together, they will become friendly. It is very good to have many friends. For example, when problem, can the friends advice. Their advice might be different from college friends. It is important to hear many kinds of advice. Finally, to practice for their job in future. If they not have part-time job, they don't know what kind of job is good for them. part-time job good to them. Some people might say that can study more if they don't have . It is , I think it is more important to have . They will be good . It is why I agree with the statement.

I agree with the statement. There are three reasons. First, college students need a lot of money. They must pay money to college. And it needs to buy cloths, and to eat, drink in order to be friendly. They should not have their parents to pay a lot for them. They should pay the costs by themselves. So they should have a part-time job. Second, they can make friends when they work. To work together, they will become friendly. It is very good to have many friends. For example, when he or she has a problem, he or she can want the friends to advice. Their advice might be different from college friends. It is important to hear many kinds of advice. Finally, it is able to practice for their job in future to have a part-time job. If they have not have a part-time job, they don't know what kind of job is good for them. To have a part-time job is good chance to notice them. Some people might say that they can study more if they don't have that. It is true. However, I think it is more important to have that. They will be good person. It is why I agree with the statement.

CHN

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This is logical work.

There's none to mention.

I agree with the statement. There are three reasons. First, college students need a lot of money. They must pay money to college need to buy , eat, drink in order to be friendly. They should not have their parents pay a lot for . should pay the costs by themselves they should have part-time job. Second, they can make friends when they work. To work together, they will become friendly. It is very good to have many friends. For example, when problem, can the friends advice. Their advice might be different from college friends. It is important to hear many kinds of advice. Finally, to practice for their job in future. If they not have part-time job, they don't know what kind of job is good for them. part-time job good to them. Some people might say that can study more if they don't have . It is , I think it is more important to have . They will be good . It is why I agree with the statement.

I agree with the statement. There are three reasons. First, college students need a lot of money. They must pay money to college. And it needs to buy cloths, and to eat, drink in order to be friendly. They should not have their parents to pay a lot for them. They should pay the costs by themselves. So they should have a part-time job. Second, they can make friends when they work. To work together, they will become friendly. It is very good to have many friends. For example, when he or she has a problem, he or she can want the friends to advice. Their advice might be different from college friends. It is important to hear many kinds of advice. Finally, it is able to practice for their job in future to have a part-time job. If they have not have a part-time job, they don't know what kind of job is good for them. To have a part-time job is good chance to notice them. Some people might say that they can study more if they don't have that. It is true. However, I think it is more important to have that. They will be good person. It is why I agree with the statement.

KOR

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28.5

This is directional.

There are some errors in grammar.

I agree with the statement. There are three reasons. First, college students need a lot of money. They must pay money to college need to buy , eat, drink in order to be friendly. They should not have their parents pay a lot for . should pay the costs by themselves they should have part-time job. Second, they can make friends when they work. To work together, they will become friendly. It is very good to have many friends. For example, when problem, can the friends advice. Their advice might be different from college friends. It is important to hear many kinds of advice. Finally, to practice for their job in future. If they not have part-time job, they don't know what kind of job is good for them. part-time job good to them. Some people might say that can study more if they don't have . It is , I think it is more important to have . They will be good . It is why I agree with the statement.

I agree with the statement. There are three reasons. First, college students need a lot of money. They must pay money to college. And it needs to buy cloths, and to eat, drink in order to be friendly. They should not have their parents to pay a lot for them. They should pay the costs by themselves. So they should have a part-time job. Second, they can make friends when they work. To work together, they will become friendly. It is very good to have many friends. For example, when he or she has a problem, he or she can want the friends to advice. Their advice might be different from college friends. It is important to hear many kinds of advice. Finally, it is able to practice for their job in future to have a part-time job. If they have not have a part-time job, they don't know what kind of job is good for them. To have a part-time job is good chance to notice them. Some people might say that they can study more if they don't have that. It is true. However, I think it is more important to have that. They will be good person. It is why I agree with the statement.

TWN

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It is excellent.

There's none to mention.

I agree with the statement. There are three reasons. First, college students need a lot of money. They must pay money to college need to buy , eat, drink in order to be friendly. They should not have their parents pay a lot for . should pay the costs by themselves they should have part-time job. Second, they can make friends when they work. To work together, they will become friendly. It is very good to have many friends. For example, when problem, can the friends advice. Their advice might be different from college friends. It is important to hear many kinds of advice. Finally, to practice for their job in future. If they not have part-time job, they don't know what kind of job is good for them. part-time job good to them. Some people might say that can study more if they don't have . It is , I think it is more important to have . They will be good . It is why I agree with the statement.

I agree with the statement. There are three reasons. First, college students need a lot of money. They must pay money to college. And it needs to buy cloths, and to eat, drink in order to be friendly. They should not have their parents to pay a lot for them. They should pay the costs by themselves. So they should have a part-time job. Second, they can make friends when they work. To work together, they will become friendly. It is very good to have many friends. For example, when he or she has a problem, he or she can want the friends to advice. Their advice might be different from college friends. It is important to hear many kinds of advice. Finally, it is able to practice for their job in future to have a part-time job. If they have not have a part-time job, they don't know what kind of job is good for them. To have a part-time job is good chance to notice them. Some people might say that they can study more if they don't have that. It is true. However, I think it is more important to have that. They will be good person. It is why I agree with the statement.

THA

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24.5

It is logical and purposeful.

It contains several sentence fragments.

I agree with the statement. There are three reasons. First, college students need a lot of money. They must pay money to college need to buy , eat, drink in order to be friendly. They should not have their parents pay a lot for . should pay the costs by themselves they should have part-time job. Second, they can make friends when they work. To work together, they will become friendly. It is very good to have many friends. For example, when problem, can the friends advice. Their advice might be different from college friends. It is important to hear many kinds of advice. Finally, to practice for their job in future. If they not have part-time job, they don't know what kind of job is good for them. part-time job good to them. Some people might say that can study more if they don't have . It is , I think it is more important to have . They will be good . It is why I agree with the statement.

I agree with the statement. There are three reasons. First, college students need a lot of money. They must pay money to college. And it needs to buy cloths, and to eat, drink in order to be friendly. They should not have their parents to pay a lot for them. They should pay the costs by themselves. So they should have a part-time job. Second, they can make friends when they work. To work together, they will become friendly. It is very good to have many friends. For example, when he or she has a problem, he or she can want the friends to advice. Their advice might be different from college friends. It is important to hear many kinds of advice. Finally, it is able to practice for their job in future to have a part-time job. If they have not have a part-time job, they don't know what kind of job is good for them. To have a part-time job is good chance to notice them. Some people might say that they can study more if they don't have that. It is true. However, I think it is more important to have that. They will be good person. It is why I agree with the statement.

CHN

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71.5

Logical points were made

It is error-free.

I agree with the statement. There are three reasons. First, college students need a lot of money. They must pay money to college need to buy , eat, drink in order to be friendly. They should not have their parents pay a lot for . should pay the costs by themselves they should have part-time job. Second, they can make friends when they work. To work together, they will become friendly. It is very good to have many friends. For example, when problem, can the friends advice. Their advice might be different from college friends. It is important to hear many kinds of advice. Finally, to practice for their job in future. If they not have part-time job, they don't know what kind of job is good for them. part-time job good to them. Some people might say that can study more if they don't have . It is , I think it is more important to have . They will be good . It is why I agree with the statement.

I agree with the statement. There are three reasons. First, college students need a lot of money. They must pay money to college. And it needs to buy cloths, and to eat, drink in order to be friendly. They should not have their parents to pay a lot for them. They should pay the costs by themselves. So they should have a part-time job. Second, they can make friends when they work. To work together, they will become friendly. It is very good to have many friends. For example, when he or she has a problem, he or she can want the friends to advice. Their advice might be different from college friends. It is important to hear many kinds of advice. Finally, it is able to practice for their job in future to have a part-time job. If they have not have a part-time job, they don't know what kind of job is good for them. To have a part-time job is good chance to notice them. Some people might say that they can study more if they don't have that. It is true. However, I think it is more important to have that. They will be good person. It is why I agree with the statement.

IDN

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16.5

There is a solid logic and thought.

There are some grammar issues.

I agree with the statement. There are three reasons. First, college students need a lot of money. They must pay money to college need to buy , eat, drink in order to be friendly. They should not have their parents pay a lot for . should pay the costs by themselves they should have part-time job. Second, they can make friends when they work. To work together, they will become friendly. It is very good to have many friends. For example, when problem, can the friends advice. Their advice might be different from college friends. It is important to hear many kinds of advice. Finally, to practice for their job in future. If they not have part-time job, they don't know what kind of job is good for them. part-time job good to them. Some people might say that can study more if they don't have . It is , I think it is more important to have . They will be good . It is why I agree with the statement.

I agree with the statement. There are three reasons. First, college students need a lot of money. They must pay money to college. And it needs to buy cloths, and to eat, drink in order to be friendly. They should not have their parents to pay a lot for them. They should pay the costs by themselves. So they should have a part-time job. Second, they can make friends when they work. To work together, they will become friendly. It is very good to have many friends. For example, when he or she has a problem, he or she can want the friends to advice. Their advice might be different from college friends. It is important to hear many kinds of advice. Finally, it is able to practice for their job in future to have a part-time job. If they have not have a part-time job, they don't know what kind of job is good for them. To have a part-time job is good chance to notice them. Some people might say that they can study more if they don't have that. It is true. However, I think it is more important to have that. They will be good person. It is why I agree with the statement.

TWN

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It was superior in presentation.

There's none to mention.

I agree with the statement. There are three reasons. First, college students need a lot of money. They must pay money to college need to buy , eat, drink in order to be friendly. They should not have their parents pay a lot for . should pay the costs by themselves they should have part-time job. Second, they can make friends when they work. To work together, they will become friendly. It is very good to have many friends. For example, when problem, can the friends advice. Their advice might be different from college friends. It is important to hear many kinds of advice. Finally, to practice for their job in future. If they not have part-time job, they don't know what kind of job is good for them. part-time job good to them. Some people might say that can study more if they don't have . It is , I think it is more important to have . They will be good . It is why I agree with the statement.

I agree with the statement. There are three reasons. First, college students need a lot of money. They must pay money to college. And it needs to buy cloths, and to eat, drink in order to be friendly. They should not have their parents to pay a lot for them. They should pay the costs by themselves. So they should have a part-time job. Second, they can make friends when they work. To work together, they will become friendly. It is very good to have many friends. For example, when he or she has a problem, he or she can want the friends to advice. Their advice might be different from college friends. It is important to hear many kinds of advice. Finally, it is able to practice for their job in future to have a part-time job. If they have not have a part-time job, they don't know what kind of job is good for them. To have a part-time job is good chance to notice them. Some people might say that they can study more if they don't have that. It is true. However, I think it is more important to have that. They will be good person. It is why I agree with the statement.

JPN

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Presentation is logical.

There's none to mention.

I agree with the statement. There are three reasons. First, college students need a lot of money. They must pay money to college need to buy , eat, drink in order to be friendly. They should not have their parents pay a lot for . should pay the costs by themselves they should have part-time job. Second, they can make friends when they work. To work together, they will become friendly. It is very good to have many friends. For example, when problem, can the friends advice. Their advice might be different from college friends. It is important to hear many kinds of advice. Finally, to practice for their job in future. If they not have part-time job, they don't know what kind of job is good for them. part-time job good to them. Some people might say that can study more if they don't have . It is , I think it is more important to have . They will be good . It is why I agree with the statement.

I agree with the statement. There are three reasons. First, college students need a lot of money. They must pay money to college. And it needs to buy cloths, and to eat, drink in order to be friendly. They should not have their parents to pay a lot for them. They should pay the costs by themselves. So they should have a part-time job. Second, they can make friends when they work. To work together, they will become friendly. It is very good to have many friends. For example, when he or she has a problem, he or she can want the friends to advice. Their advice might be different from college friends. It is important to hear many kinds of advice. Finally, it is able to practice for their job in future to have a part-time job. If they have not have a part-time job, they don't know what kind of job is good for them. To have a part-time job is good chance to notice them. Some people might say that they can study more if they don't have that. It is true. However, I think it is more important to have that. They will be good person. It is why I agree with the statement.

CHN

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40.5

Some logical points made.

There are some minor grammar points.

I agree with the statement. There are three reasons. First, college students need a lot of money. They must pay money to college need to buy , eat, drink in order to be friendly. They should not have their parents pay a lot for . should pay the costs by themselves they should have part-time job. Second, they can make friends when they work. To work together, they will become friendly. It is very good to have many friends. For example, when problem, can the friends advice. Their advice might be different from college friends. It is important to hear many kinds of advice. Finally, to practice for their job in future. If they not have part-time job, they don't know what kind of job is good for them. part-time job good to them. Some people might say that can study more if they don't have . It is , I think it is more important to have . They will be good . It is why I agree with the statement.

I agree with the statement. There are three reasons. First, college students need a lot of money. They must pay money to college. And it needs to buy cloths, and to eat, drink in order to be friendly. They should not have their parents to pay a lot for them. They should pay the costs by themselves. So they should have a part-time job. Second, they can make friends when they work. To work together, they will become friendly. It is very good to have many friends. For example, when he or she has a problem, he or she can want the friends to advice. Their advice might be different from college friends. It is important to hear many kinds of advice. Finally, it is able to practice for their job in future to have a part-time job. If they have not have a part-time job, they don't know what kind of job is good for them. To have a part-time job is good chance to notice them. Some people might say that they can study more if they don't have that. It is true. However, I think it is more important to have that. They will be good person. It is why I agree with the statement.

IDN

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well structured essay and wide range of connectors are used to make the essay fluent

there are too many ideas with insufficient supports

I agree with the idea that it is important for college students to have part-time job. Of course, college students have to study study isn't all they have to do. They also have to experience a lot of things before they graduate college and begin work. For example, reading books, listening music, playing sports, and trip. In regard to trip, they can go where they haven't visited, see what they haven't seen and feel something special. College students are not children but also not adults. Time college student is time to experience and feel a lot of things. , prepare to become perfect adults. For that, they need some money have to money they need by themselves because they aren't children. Their parents must give them money and must depend on help of their parents. To money they work and Through using money they work and , they can importance of money and to use money. That's why they to have part-time job.

I agree with the idea that it is important for college students to have part-time job. Of course, college students have to study. But study isn't all they have to do. They also have to experience a lot of things before they graduate the colleges and begin to work. For example, reading books, listening music, playing sports, and trip. In regard to trip, they can go where they haven't visited, see what they haven't seen and feel something special. College students are not children but also not adults. Time during college student is time to experience and feel a lot of things. And so, they prepare to become perfect adults. For that, they need some money. They have to prepare money they need by themselves, because they aren't children. Their parents mustn't give them money and they mustn't depend on help of their parents. To use money they work and get is important. Through using money they work and get, they can know importance of money and way to use money. That's why they have to have part-time job.

IDN

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the essay is well structured which is easily to understand

more than 5 grammar, punctuation, capitalization and spelling errors

I agree with the idea that it is important for college students to have part-time job. Of course, college students have to study study isn't all they have to do. They also have to experience a lot of things before they graduate college and begin work. For example, reading books, listening music, playing sports, and trip. In regard to trip, they can go where they haven't visited, see what they haven't seen and feel something special. College students are not children but also not adults. Time college student is time to experience and feel a lot of things. , prepare to become perfect adults. For that, they need some money have to money they need by themselves because they aren't children. Their parents must give them money and must depend on help of their parents. To money they work and Through using money they work and , they can importance of money and to use money. That's why they to have part-time job.

I agree with the idea that it is important for college students to have part-time job. Of course, college students have to study. But study isn't all they have to do. They also have to experience a lot of things before they graduate the colleges and begin to work. For example, reading books, listening music, playing sports, and trip. In regard to trip, they can go where they haven't visited, see what they haven't seen and feel something special. College students are not children but also not adults. Time during college student is time to experience and feel a lot of things. And so, they prepare to become perfect adults. For that, they need some money. They have to prepare money they need by themselves, because they aren't children. Their parents mustn't give them money and they mustn't depend on help of their parents. To use money they work and get is important. Through using money they work and get, they can know importance of money and way to use money. That's why they have to have part-time job.

CHN

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the writer tried to convey the message which is understandable

details are not in logical order and unclear topic sentence

I agree with the idea that it is important for college students to have part-time job. Of course, college students have to study study isn't all they have to do. They also have to experience a lot of things before they graduate college and begin work. For example, reading books, listening music, playing sports, and trip. In regard to trip, they can go where they haven't visited, see what they haven't seen and feel something special. College students are not children but also not adults. Time college student is time to experience and feel a lot of things. , prepare to become perfect adults. For that, they need some money have to money they need by themselves because they aren't children. Their parents must give them money and must depend on help of their parents. To money they work and Through using money they work and , they can importance of money and to use money. That's why they to have part-time job.

I agree with the idea that it is important for college students to have part-time job. Of course, college students have to study. But study isn't all they have to do. They also have to experience a lot of things before they graduate the colleges and begin to work. For example, reading books, listening music, playing sports, and trip. In regard to trip, they can go where they haven't visited, see what they haven't seen and feel something special. College students are not children but also not adults. Time during college student is time to experience and feel a lot of things. And so, they prepare to become perfect adults. For that, they need some money. They have to prepare money they need by themselves, because they aren't children. Their parents mustn't give them money and they mustn't depend on help of their parents. To use money they work and get is important. Through using money they work and get, they can know importance of money and way to use money. That's why they have to have part-time job.

IDN

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the essay is understandable and writer tried to convey his/her opinion

there are too many ideas with insufficient supports

I agree with the idea that it is important for college students to have part-time job. Of course, college students have to study study isn't all they have to do. They also have to experience a lot of things before they graduate college and begin work. For example, reading books, listening music, playing sports, and trip. In regard to trip, they can go where they haven't visited, see what they haven't seen and feel something special. College students are not children but also not adults. Time college student is time to experience and feel a lot of things. , prepare to become perfect adults. For that, they need some money have to money they need by themselves because they aren't children. Their parents must give them money and must depend on help of their parents. To money they work and Through using money they work and , they can importance of money and to use money. That's why they to have part-time job.

I agree with the idea that it is important for college students to have part-time job. Of course, college students have to study. But study isn't all they have to do. They also have to experience a lot of things before they graduate the colleges and begin to work. For example, reading books, listening music, playing sports, and trip. In regard to trip, they can go where they haven't visited, see what they haven't seen and feel something special. College students are not children but also not adults. Time during college student is time to experience and feel a lot of things. And so, they prepare to become perfect adults. For that, they need some money. They have to prepare money they need by themselves, because they aren't children. Their parents mustn't give them money and they mustn't depend on help of their parents. To use money they work and get is important. Through using money they work and get, they can know importance of money and way to use money. That's why they have to have part-time job.

SIN

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the writer has ability to use complex sentences and wide range of vocab

Few grammar, punctuation, capitalization and spelling errors

I agree with the idea that it is important for college students to have part-time job. Of course, college students have to study study isn't all they have to do. They also have to experience a lot of things before they graduate college and begin work. For example, reading books, listening music, playing sports, and trip. In regard to trip, they can go where they haven't visited, see what they haven't seen and feel something special. College students are not children but also not adults. Time college student is time to experience and feel a lot of things. , prepare to become perfect adults. For that, they need some money have to money they need by themselves because they aren't children. Their parents must give them money and must depend on help of their parents. To money they work and Through using money they work and , they can importance of money and to use money. That's why they to have part-time job.

I agree with the idea that it is important for college students to have part-time job. Of course, college students have to study. But study isn't all they have to do. They also have to experience a lot of things before they graduate the colleges and begin to work. For example, reading books, listening music, playing sports, and trip. In regard to trip, they can go where they haven't visited, see what they haven't seen and feel something special. College students are not children but also not adults. Time during college student is time to experience and feel a lot of things. And so, they prepare to become perfect adults. For that, they need some money. They have to prepare money they need by themselves, because they aren't children. Their parents mustn't give them money and they mustn't depend on help of their parents. To use money they work and get is important. Through using money they work and get, they can know importance of money and way to use money. That's why they have to have part-time job.

TWN

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well structured essay and wide range of connectors are used to make the essay fluent

some grammar, punctuation, capitalization and spelling errors

I agree with the idea that it is important for college students to have part-time job. Of course, college students have to study study isn't all they have to do. They also have to experience a lot of things before they graduate college and begin work. For example, reading books, listening music, playing sports, and trip. In regard to trip, they can go where they haven't visited, see what they haven't seen and feel something special. College students are not children but also not adults. Time college student is time to experience and feel a lot of things. , prepare to become perfect adults. For that, they need some money have to money they need by themselves because they aren't children. Their parents must give them money and must depend on help of their parents. To money they work and Through using money they work and , they can importance of money and to use money. That's why they to have part-time job.

I agree with the idea that it is important for college students to have part-time job. Of course, college students have to study. But study isn't all they have to do. They also have to experience a lot of things before they graduate the colleges and begin to work. For example, reading books, listening music, playing sports, and trip. In regard to trip, they can go where they haven't visited, see what they haven't seen and feel something special. College students are not children but also not adults. Time during college student is time to experience and feel a lot of things. And so, they prepare to become perfect adults. For that, they need some money. They have to prepare money they need by themselves, because they aren't children. Their parents mustn't give them money and they mustn't depend on help of their parents. To use money they work and get is important. Through using money they work and get, they can know importance of money and way to use money. That's why they have to have part-time job.

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well structured essay and wide range of connectors are used to make the essay fluent

there are too many ideas with insufficient supports

I agree with the idea that it is important for college students to have part-time job. Of course, college students have to study study isn't all they have to do. They also have to experience a lot of things before they graduate college and begin work. For example, reading books, listening music, playing sports, and trip. In regard to trip, they can go where they haven't visited, see what they haven't seen and feel something special. College students are not children but also not adults. Time college student is time to experience and feel a lot of things. , prepare to become perfect adults. For that, they need some money have to money they need by themselves because they aren't children. Their parents must give them money and must depend on help of their parents. To money they work and Through using money they work and , they can importance of money and to use money. That's why they to have part-time job.

I agree with the idea that it is important for college students to have part-time job. Of course, college students have to study. But study isn't all they have to do. They also have to experience a lot of things before they graduate the colleges and begin to work. For example, reading books, listening music, playing sports, and trip. In regard to trip, they can go where they haven't visited, see what they haven't seen and feel something special. College students are not children but also not adults. Time during college student is time to experience and feel a lot of things. And so, they prepare to become perfect adults. For that, they need some money. They have to prepare money they need by themselves, because they aren't children. Their parents mustn't give them money and they mustn't depend on help of their parents. To use money they work and get is important. Through using money they work and get, they can know importance of money and way to use money. That's why they have to have part-time job.

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well structured essay and wide range of connectors are used to make the essay fluent

some grammar, punctuation, capitalization and spelling errors

I agree with the idea that it is important for college students to have part-time job. Of course, college students have to study study isn't all they have to do. They also have to experience a lot of things before they graduate college and begin work. For example, reading books, listening music, playing sports, and trip. In regard to trip, they can go where they haven't visited, see what they haven't seen and feel something special. College students are not children but also not adults. Time college student is time to experience and feel a lot of things. , prepare to become perfect adults. For that, they need some money have to money they need by themselves because they aren't children. Their parents must give them money and must depend on help of their parents. To money they work and Through using money they work and , they can importance of money and to use money. That's why they to have part-time job.

I agree with the idea that it is important for college students to have part-time job. Of course, college students have to study. But study isn't all they have to do. They also have to experience a lot of things before they graduate the colleges and begin to work. For example, reading books, listening music, playing sports, and trip. In regard to trip, they can go where they haven't visited, see what they haven't seen and feel something special. College students are not children but also not adults. Time during college student is time to experience and feel a lot of things. And so, they prepare to become perfect adults. For that, they need some money. They have to prepare money they need by themselves, because they aren't children. Their parents mustn't give them money and they mustn't depend on help of their parents. To use money they work and get is important. Through using money they work and get, they can know importance of money and way to use money. That's why they have to have part-time job.

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order keeps the reader interested because wide range of connectors are used

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I agree with the idea that it is important for college students to have part-time job. Of course, college students have to study study isn't all they have to do. They also have to experience a lot of things before they graduate college and begin work. For example, reading books, listening music, playing sports, and trip. In regard to trip, they can go where they haven't visited, see what they haven't seen and feel something special. College students are not children but also not adults. Time college student is time to experience and feel a lot of things. , prepare to become perfect adults. For that, they need some money have to money they need by themselves because they aren't children. Their parents must give them money and must depend on help of their parents. To money they work and Through using money they work and , they can importance of money and to use money. That's why they to have part-time job.

I agree with the idea that it is important for college students to have part-time job. Of course, college students have to study. But study isn't all they have to do. They also have to experience a lot of things before they graduate the colleges and begin to work. For example, reading books, listening music, playing sports, and trip. In regard to trip, they can go where they haven't visited, see what they haven't seen and feel something special. College students are not children but also not adults. Time during college student is time to experience and feel a lot of things. And so, they prepare to become perfect adults. For that, they need some money. They have to prepare money they need by themselves, because they aren't children. Their parents mustn't give them money and they mustn't depend on help of their parents. To use money they work and get is important. Through using money they work and get, they can know importance of money and way to use money. That's why they have to have part-time job.

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the essay is easy to understand and fluent and the ideas is creative

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I agree with the idea that it is important for college students to have part-time job. Of course, college students have to study study isn't all they have to do. They also have to experience a lot of things before they graduate college and begin work. For example, reading books, listening music, playing sports, and trip. In regard to trip, they can go where they haven't visited, see what they haven't seen and feel something special. College students are not children but also not adults. Time college student is time to experience and feel a lot of things. , prepare to become perfect adults. For that, they need some money have to money they need by themselves because they aren't children. Their parents must give them money and must depend on help of their parents. To money they work and Through using money they work and , they can importance of money and to use money. That's why they to have part-time job.

I agree with the idea that it is important for college students to have part-time job. Of course, college students have to study. But study isn't all they have to do. They also have to experience a lot of things before they graduate the colleges and begin to work. For example, reading books, listening music, playing sports, and trip. In regard to trip, they can go where they haven't visited, see what they haven't seen and feel something special. College students are not children but also not adults. Time during college student is time to experience and feel a lot of things. And so, they prepare to become perfect adults. For that, they need some money. They have to prepare money they need by themselves, because they aren't children. Their parents mustn't give them money and they mustn't depend on help of their parents. To use money they work and get is important. Through using money they work and get, they can know importance of money and way to use money. That's why they have to have part-time job.

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Short and simple essay to explain their argument that perfectly states opening, body (include example and explanation) and then closing

Grammatical mistakes for most part of the essay. The part of communication could be explain in a different manner

Have you ever to part time teenager? Most teenagers want to make money without their parents. In my case I could advantages when I worked in a parttime job. First of all, I could different kinds of relationships. As you know, a new circumstance, we meet many people. Every valuable whether like each person. Second, could good skills from a parttime job. restaurant kitchen, could cook food well. Also, if work apparel department store, could people good service and could match clothe well depending on each situation or purpose. Finally, can learn how valuable money is and how to deal with money well. If take money from parents, just waste money easily. However, if earn money for to buy something, money easily and think very carefully when decid to use . my experiences, if you have an opportunity to work in a parttime job, you can economic advantage and social advantage in your life.

Have you ever get to part time after teenagers? Most teenagers want to make money without supporting their parents. In my case I could lots of advantages when I worked in a part time job. First of all, I could make different kinds of relationships. As you know, if I got a new circumstance, we could meet many people. Every people makes you learn valuable things whether you like each person or not. Second, I could have good skills from a part time job. If you work at restaurant kitchen, you could cook foods well. Also, if you work apparel store in department store, you could give people good services and could match clothe well depending on each situation or purpose. Finally, you can learn how valuable money is and how to deal with money well. If you take money from your parents, you just waste money easily. However, if you earn money for yourself to buy something, you couldn't use your money easily and think very carefully when you decide to use that. Through my experiences, if you have an opportunity to work in a part time job, you can learn economical advantage and social advantage in your life.

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Have you ever to part time teenager? Most teenagers want to make money without their parents. In my case I could advantages when I worked in a parttime job. First of all, I could different kinds of relationships. As you know, a new circumstance, we meet many people. Every valuable whether like each person. Second, could good skills from a parttime job. restaurant kitchen, could cook food well. Also, if work apparel department store, could people good service and could match clothe well depending on each situation or purpose. Finally, can learn how valuable money is and how to deal with money well. If take money from parents, just waste money easily. However, if earn money for to buy something, money easily and think very carefully when decid to use . my experiences, if you have an opportunity to work in a parttime job, you can economic advantage and social advantage in your life.

Have you ever get to part time after teenagers? Most teenagers want to make money without supporting their parents. In my case I could lots of advantages when I worked in a part time job. First of all, I could make different kinds of relationships. As you know, if I got a new circumstance, we could meet many people. Every people makes you learn valuable things whether you like each person or not. Second, I could have good skills from a part time job. If you work at restaurant kitchen, you could cook foods well. Also, if you work apparel store in department store, you could give people good services and could match clothe well depending on each situation or purpose. Finally, you can learn how valuable money is and how to deal with money well. If you take money from your parents, you just waste money easily. However, if you earn money for yourself to buy something, you couldn't use your money easily and think very carefully when you decide to use that. Through my experiences, if you have an opportunity to work in a part time job, you can learn economical advantage and social advantage in your life.

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The second half of the essay has a good tone and flow to it

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Have you ever to part time teenager? Most teenagers want to make money without their parents. In my case I could advantages when I worked in a parttime job. First of all, I could different kinds of relationships. As you know, a new circumstance, we meet many people. Every valuable whether like each person. Second, could good skills from a parttime job. restaurant kitchen, could cook food well. Also, if work apparel department store, could people good service and could match clothe well depending on each situation or purpose. Finally, can learn how valuable money is and how to deal with money well. If take money from parents, just waste money easily. However, if earn money for to buy something, money easily and think very carefully when decid to use . my experiences, if you have an opportunity to work in a parttime job, you can economic advantage and social advantage in your life.

Have you ever get to part time after teenagers? Most teenagers want to make money without supporting their parents. In my case I could lots of advantages when I worked in a part time job. First of all, I could make different kinds of relationships. As you know, if I got a new circumstance, we could meet many people. Every people makes you learn valuable things whether you like each person or not. Second, I could have good skills from a part time job. If you work at restaurant kitchen, you could cook foods well. Also, if you work apparel store in department store, you could give people good services and could match clothe well depending on each situation or purpose. Finally, you can learn how valuable money is and how to deal with money well. If you take money from your parents, you just waste money easily. However, if you earn money for yourself to buy something, you couldn't use your money easily and think very carefully when you decide to use that. Through my experiences, if you have an opportunity to work in a part time job, you can learn economical advantage and social advantage in your life.

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Explanation of the value of experience is something that the author value, it makes the essay genuine

A bit confusing to read and the points are not aligned much towards the task.

Have you ever to part time teenager? Most teenagers want to make money without their parents. In my case I could advantages when I worked in a parttime job. First of all, I could different kinds of relationships. As you know, a new circumstance, we meet many people. Every valuable whether like each person. Second, could good skills from a parttime job. restaurant kitchen, could cook food well. Also, if work apparel department store, could people good service and could match clothe well depending on each situation or purpose. Finally, can learn how valuable money is and how to deal with money well. If take money from parents, just waste money easily. However, if earn money for to buy something, money easily and think very carefully when decid to use . my experiences, if you have an opportunity to work in a parttime job, you can economic advantage and social advantage in your life.

Have you ever get to part time after teenagers? Most teenagers want to make money without supporting their parents. In my case I could lots of advantages when I worked in a part time job. First of all, I could make different kinds of relationships. As you know, if I got a new circumstance, we could meet many people. Every people makes you learn valuable things whether you like each person or not. Second, I could have good skills from a part time job. If you work at restaurant kitchen, you could cook foods well. Also, if you work apparel store in department store, you could give people good services and could match clothe well depending on each situation or purpose. Finally, you can learn how valuable money is and how to deal with money well. If you take money from your parents, you just waste money easily. However, if you earn money for yourself to buy something, you couldn't use your money easily and think very carefully when you decide to use that. Through my experiences, if you have an opportunity to work in a part time job, you can learn economical advantage and social advantage in your life.

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Have you ever to part time teenager? Most teenagers want to make money without their parents. In my case I could advantages when I worked in a parttime job. First of all, I could different kinds of relationships. As you know, a new circumstance, we meet many people. Every valuable whether like each person. Second, could good skills from a parttime job. restaurant kitchen, could cook food well. Also, if work apparel department store, could people good service and could match clothe well depending on each situation or purpose. Finally, can learn how valuable money is and how to deal with money well. If take money from parents, just waste money easily. However, if earn money for to buy something, money easily and think very carefully when decid to use . my experiences, if you have an opportunity to work in a parttime job, you can economic advantage and social advantage in your life.

Have you ever get to part time after teenagers? Most teenagers want to make money without supporting their parents. In my case I could lots of advantages when I worked in a part time job. First of all, I could make different kinds of relationships. As you know, if I got a new circumstance, we could meet many people. Every people makes you learn valuable things whether you like each person or not. Second, I could have good skills from a part time job. If you work at restaurant kitchen, you could cook foods well. Also, if you work apparel store in department store, you could give people good services and could match clothe well depending on each situation or purpose. Finally, you can learn how valuable money is and how to deal with money well. If you take money from your parents, you just waste money easily. However, if you earn money for yourself to buy something, you couldn't use your money easily and think very carefully when you decide to use that. Through my experiences, if you have an opportunity to work in a part time job, you can learn economical advantage and social advantage in your life.

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Middle part of the essay sounds sincere and genuine about students wanting something more in life by earning a living

The essay feels too rash and the argument does not make much sense

Have you ever to part time teenager? Most teenagers want to make money without their parents. In my case I could advantages when I worked in a parttime job. First of all, I could different kinds of relationships. As you know, a new circumstance, we meet many people. Every valuable whether like each person. Second, could good skills from a parttime job. restaurant kitchen, could cook food well. Also, if work apparel department store, could people good service and could match clothe well depending on each situation or purpose. Finally, can learn how valuable money is and how to deal with money well. If take money from parents, just waste money easily. However, if earn money for to buy something, money easily and think very carefully when decid to use . my experiences, if you have an opportunity to work in a parttime job, you can economic advantage and social advantage in your life.

Have you ever get to part time after teenagers? Most teenagers want to make money without supporting their parents. In my case I could lots of advantages when I worked in a part time job. First of all, I could make different kinds of relationships. As you know, if I got a new circumstance, we could meet many people. Every people makes you learn valuable things whether you like each person or not. Second, I could have good skills from a part time job. If you work at restaurant kitchen, you could cook foods well. Also, if you work apparel store in department store, you could give people good services and could match clothe well depending on each situation or purpose. Finally, you can learn how valuable money is and how to deal with money well. If you take money from your parents, you just waste money easily. However, if you earn money for yourself to buy something, you couldn't use your money easily and think very carefully when you decide to use that. Through my experiences, if you have an opportunity to work in a part time job, you can learn economical advantage and social advantage in your life.

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A good two to three sentences for each point. And the sentences compliment each other

The point are quite general and well known points

Have you ever to part time teenager? Most teenagers want to make money without their parents. In my case I could advantages when I worked in a parttime job. First of all, I could different kinds of relationships. As you know, a new circumstance, we meet many people. Every valuable whether like each person. Second, could good skills from a parttime job. restaurant kitchen, could cook food well. Also, if work apparel department store, could people good service and could match clothe well depending on each situation or purpose. Finally, can learn how valuable money is and how to deal with money well. If take money from parents, just waste money easily. However, if earn money for to buy something, money easily and think very carefully when decid to use . my experiences, if you have an opportunity to work in a parttime job, you can economic advantage and social advantage in your life.

Have you ever get to part time after teenagers? Most teenagers want to make money without supporting their parents. In my case I could lots of advantages when I worked in a part time job. First of all, I could make different kinds of relationships. As you know, if I got a new circumstance, we could meet many people. Every people makes you learn valuable things whether you like each person or not. Second, I could have good skills from a part time job. If you work at restaurant kitchen, you could cook foods well. Also, if you work apparel store in department store, you could give people good services and could match clothe well depending on each situation or purpose. Finally, you can learn how valuable money is and how to deal with money well. If you take money from your parents, you just waste money easily. However, if you earn money for yourself to buy something, you couldn't use your money easily and think very carefully when you decide to use that. Through my experiences, if you have an opportunity to work in a part time job, you can learn economical advantage and social advantage in your life.

IDN

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The content has good point and give into perspective on student being independent

The essay has a few grammatical errors. The sentences are poorly constructed, especially the beginning

Have you ever to part time teenager? Most teenagers want to make money without their parents. In my case I could advantages when I worked in a parttime job. First of all, I could different kinds of relationships. As you know, a new circumstance, we meet many people. Every valuable whether like each person. Second, could good skills from a parttime job. restaurant kitchen, could cook food well. Also, if work apparel department store, could people good service and could match clothe well depending on each situation or purpose. Finally, can learn how valuable money is and how to deal with money well. If take money from parents, just waste money easily. However, if earn money for to buy something, money easily and think very carefully when decid to use . my experiences, if you have an opportunity to work in a parttime job, you can economic advantage and social advantage in your life.

Have you ever get to part time after teenagers? Most teenagers want to make money without supporting their parents. In my case I could lots of advantages when I worked in a part time job. First of all, I could make different kinds of relationships. As you know, if I got a new circumstance, we could meet many people. Every people makes you learn valuable things whether you like each person or not. Second, I could have good skills from a part time job. If you work at restaurant kitchen, you could cook foods well. Also, if you work apparel store in department store, you could give people good services and could match clothe well depending on each situation or purpose. Finally, you can learn how valuable money is and how to deal with money well. If you take money from your parents, you just waste money easily. However, if you earn money for yourself to buy something, you couldn't use your money easily and think very carefully when you decide to use that. Through my experiences, if you have an opportunity to work in a part time job, you can learn economical advantage and social advantage in your life.

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The essay has a nice rhythm to it. The opening has a good balance in explaining the part time job for those who could not afford uni. Some interactive questions bring a good momentum in the argument

Some sentences has a vague content

Have you ever to part time teenager? Most teenagers want to make money without their parents. In my case I could advantages when I worked in a parttime job. First of all, I could different kinds of relationships. As you know, a new circumstance, we meet many people. Every valuable whether like each person. Second, could good skills from a parttime job. restaurant kitchen, could cook food well. Also, if work apparel department store, could people good service and could match clothe well depending on each situation or purpose. Finally, can learn how valuable money is and how to deal with money well. If take money from parents, just waste money easily. However, if earn money for to buy something, money easily and think very carefully when decid to use . my experiences, if you have an opportunity to work in a parttime job, you can economic advantage and social advantage in your life.

Have you ever get to part time after teenagers? Most teenagers want to make money without supporting their parents. In my case I could lots of advantages when I worked in a part time job. First of all, I could make different kinds of relationships. As you know, if I got a new circumstance, we could meet many people. Every people makes you learn valuable things whether you like each person or not. Second, I could have good skills from a part time job. If you work at restaurant kitchen, you could cook foods well. Also, if you work apparel store in department store, you could give people good services and could match clothe well depending on each situation or purpose. Finally, you can learn how valuable money is and how to deal with money well. If you take money from your parents, you just waste money easily. However, if you earn money for yourself to buy something, you couldn't use your money easily and think very carefully when you decide to use that. Through my experiences, if you have an opportunity to work in a part time job, you can learn economical advantage and social advantage in your life.

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Good argument even though it was a bit hard for me to understand the sentences.

Poorly written such as the grammatical errors, the wrong use of words and the ending is a bit off.

Have you ever to part time teenager? Most teenagers want to make money without their parents. In my case I could advantages when I worked in a parttime job. First of all, I could different kinds of relationships. As you know, a new circumstance, we meet many people. Every valuable whether like each person. Second, could good skills from a parttime job. restaurant kitchen, could cook food well. Also, if work apparel department store, could people good service and could match clothe well depending on each situation or purpose. Finally, can learn how valuable money is and how to deal with money well. If take money from parents, just waste money easily. However, if earn money for to buy something, money easily and think very carefully when decid to use . my experiences, if you have an opportunity to work in a parttime job, you can economic advantage and social advantage in your life.

Have you ever get to part time after teenagers? Most teenagers want to make money without supporting their parents. In my case I could lots of advantages when I worked in a part time job. First of all, I could make different kinds of relationships. As you know, if I got a new circumstance, we could meet many people. Every people makes you learn valuable things whether you like each person or not. Second, I could have good skills from a part time job. If you work at restaurant kitchen, you could cook foods well. Also, if you work apparel store in department store, you could give people good services and could match clothe well depending on each situation or purpose. Finally, you can learn how valuable money is and how to deal with money well. If you take money from your parents, you just waste money easily. However, if you earn money for yourself to buy something, you couldn't use your money easily and think very carefully when you decide to use that. Through my experiences, if you have an opportunity to work in a part time job, you can learn economical advantage and social advantage in your life.

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Excellent opening sentence. Great overall concept.

The idea is clear, but some grammatical errors such as the last sentence. This should say, Moreover, once the experience accumulates, the employer would have a desire to employ you in the future! Change the word employee to employ.

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Part time work is important to students. Although work is different, such as sales workers, etc. But what is to come back. A valuable experience not available in the classroom. Today, finding of new graduates is difficult for most companies work hard to individuals with experience. To have work experience it is important to students. In time to finish the university. Students then have not less. To find work during school. This is a job for a lot. May be employed through the university or find a supplier to the self. Examples of working part time at 7-eleven the service. Those from the expertise of working in your career, human relationships and learn to correct errors and self-development. Therefore say that. Experience from the work that has value. Depending on the students themselves that are working hard. To experience from working much. Students have many different reasons to want to work like money to do anything for leisure. Concluded that experience by working part time are important things to be back is knowledge shall be self Human relationships with colleagues. Learn about working hours and break time, knowledge and expertise in that line all to improve and develop their own following.

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Good understanding of topic and interesting opinion on the subject. Simple word choices.

Several missing words and words in the wrong order.

Parttime work is important to students. Although different, such as sales, etc. valuable experience not available in the classroom. Today, finding new graduates is difficult for most companies work hard to individuals with experience. work experience finish the university have . To find work during schoolis a job for a lotay be employed through the university or find a . Examples of working part time at 7-eleven service. Those from the expertise working in career, human relationships and learn to correct errors and self-development. Therefore thatxperience from has value. epend on the students themselves are working hard experience from working . Students have many different reasons to want to work money to do leisure. onclu experience working part time important knowledge be Human relationships with colleagues about working hours and break time, knowledge and expertise in ll to improve and develop their own following.

Part time work is important to students. Although work is different, such as sales workers, etc. But what is to come back. A valuable experience not available in the classroom. Today, finding of new graduates is difficult for most companies work hard to individuals with experience. To have work experience it is important to students. In time to finish the university. Students then have not less. To find work during school. This is a job for a lot. May be employed through the university or find a supplier to the self. Examples of working part time at 7-eleven the service. Those from the expertise of working in your career, human relationships and learn to correct errors and self-development. Therefore say that. Experience from the work that has value. Depending on the students themselves that are working hard. To experience from working much. Students have many different reasons to want to work like money to do anything for leisure. Concluded that experience by working part time are important things to be back is knowledge shall be self Human relationships with colleagues. Learn about working hours and break time, knowledge and expertise in that line all to improve and develop their own following.

PAK

B1_2

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73

Creative and thought provoking essay.

The paragraph does not really answer the questions, it was off topic. Pay attention to homonyms, as using the wrong word will change the meaning of the sentence. Correct all grammar and punctuation errors.

Parttime work is important to students. Although different, such as sales, etc. valuable experience not available in the classroom. Today, finding new graduates is difficult for most companies work hard to individuals with experience. work experience finish the university have . To find work during schoolis a job for a lotay be employed through the university or find a . Examples of working part time at 7-eleven service. Those from the expertise working in career, human relationships and learn to correct errors and self-development. Therefore thatxperience from has value. epend on the students themselves are working hard experience from working . Students have many different reasons to want to work money to do leisure. onclu experience working part time important knowledge be Human relationships with colleagues about working hours and break time, knowledge and expertise in ll to improve and develop their own following.

Part time work is important to students. Although work is different, such as sales workers, etc. But what is to come back. A valuable experience not available in the classroom. Today, finding of new graduates is difficult for most companies work hard to individuals with experience. To have work experience it is important to students. In time to finish the university. Students then have not less. To find work during school. This is a job for a lot. May be employed through the university or find a supplier to the self. Examples of working part time at 7-eleven the service. Those from the expertise of working in your career, human relationships and learn to correct errors and self-development. Therefore say that. Experience from the work that has value. Depending on the students themselves that are working hard. To experience from working much. Students have many different reasons to want to work like money to do anything for leisure. Concluded that experience by working part time are important things to be back is knowledge shall be self Human relationships with colleagues. Learn about working hours and break time, knowledge and expertise in that line all to improve and develop their own following.

TWN

B2_0

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65

The perspective and examples you gave were very timely and gave validity to the paragraph.

Only capitalize words that require a capital letter. Several incorrect words, sentence structure confusion and examples without context of who you were talking about.

Parttime work is important to students. Although different, such as sales, etc. valuable experience not available in the classroom. Today, finding new graduates is difficult for most companies work hard to individuals with experience. work experience finish the university have . To find work during schoolis a job for a lotay be employed through the university or find a . Examples of working part time at 7-eleven service. Those from the expertise working in career, human relationships and learn to correct errors and self-development. Therefore thatxperience from has value. epend on the students themselves are working hard experience from working . Students have many different reasons to want to work money to do leisure. onclu experience working part time important knowledge be Human relationships with colleagues about working hours and break time, knowledge and expertise in ll to improve and develop their own following.

Part time work is important to students. Although work is different, such as sales workers, etc. But what is to come back. A valuable experience not available in the classroom. Today, finding of new graduates is difficult for most companies work hard to individuals with experience. To have work experience it is important to students. In time to finish the university. Students then have not less. To find work during school. This is a job for a lot. May be employed through the university or find a supplier to the self. Examples of working part time at 7-eleven the service. Those from the expertise of working in your career, human relationships and learn to correct errors and self-development. Therefore say that. Experience from the work that has value. Depending on the students themselves that are working hard. To experience from working much. Students have many different reasons to want to work like money to do anything for leisure. Concluded that experience by working part time are important things to be back is knowledge shall be self Human relationships with colleagues. Learn about working hours and break time, knowledge and expertise in that line all to improve and develop their own following.

CHN

B1_2

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Easy to follow and well thought out.

Some of your verb tenses are not correct. Work on formatting complete sentences. Correct all grammar errors.

Parttime work is important to students. Although different, such as sales, etc. valuable experience not available in the classroom. Today, finding new graduates is difficult for most companies work hard to individuals with experience. work experience finish the university have . To find work during schoolis a job for a lotay be employed through the university or find a . Examples of working part time at 7-eleven service. Those from the expertise working in career, human relationships and learn to correct errors and self-development. Therefore thatxperience from has value. epend on the students themselves are working hard experience from working . Students have many different reasons to want to work money to do leisure. onclu experience working part time important knowledge be Human relationships with colleagues about working hours and break time, knowledge and expertise in ll to improve and develop their own following.

Part time work is important to students. Although work is different, such as sales workers, etc. But what is to come back. A valuable experience not available in the classroom. Today, finding of new graduates is difficult for most companies work hard to individuals with experience. To have work experience it is important to students. In time to finish the university. Students then have not less. To find work during school. This is a job for a lot. May be employed through the university or find a supplier to the self. Examples of working part time at 7-eleven the service. Those from the expertise of working in your career, human relationships and learn to correct errors and self-development. Therefore say that. Experience from the work that has value. Depending on the students themselves that are working hard. To experience from working much. Students have many different reasons to want to work like money to do anything for leisure. Concluded that experience by working part time are important things to be back is knowledge shall be self Human relationships with colleagues. Learn about working hours and break time, knowledge and expertise in that line all to improve and develop their own following.

CHN

A2_0

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79

Interesting perspective given. Good attention paid to using a variety of words.

Pay attention to whether a word should be plural or singular, and correct each word accordingly. When you refer to the 'big city' name the city. The final sentence is unclear. Work on correcting grammatical errors.

Parttime work is important to students. Although different, such as sales, etc. valuable experience not available in the classroom. Today, finding new graduates is difficult for most companies work hard to individuals with experience. work experience finish the university have . To find work during schoolis a job for a lotay be employed through the university or find a . Examples of working part time at 7-eleven service. Those from the expertise working in career, human relationships and learn to correct errors and self-development. Therefore thatxperience from has value. epend on the students themselves are working hard experience from working . Students have many different reasons to want to work money to do leisure. onclu experience working part time important knowledge be Human relationships with colleagues about working hours and break time, knowledge and expertise in ll to improve and develop their own following.

Part time work is important to students. Although work is different, such as sales workers, etc. But what is to come back. A valuable experience not available in the classroom. Today, finding of new graduates is difficult for most companies work hard to individuals with experience. To have work experience it is important to students. In time to finish the university. Students then have not less. To find work during school. This is a job for a lot. May be employed through the university or find a supplier to the self. Examples of working part time at 7-eleven the service. Those from the expertise of working in your career, human relationships and learn to correct errors and self-development. Therefore say that. Experience from the work that has value. Depending on the students themselves that are working hard. To experience from working much. Students have many different reasons to want to work like money to do anything for leisure. Concluded that experience by working part time are important things to be back is knowledge shall be self Human relationships with colleagues. Learn about working hours and break time, knowledge and expertise in that line all to improve and develop their own following.

KOR

B2_0

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Excellent writing, very few errors.

Missing punctuation makes some of the sentences confusing.

Parttime work is important to students. Although different, such as sales, etc. valuable experience not available in the classroom. Today, finding new graduates is difficult for most companies work hard to individuals with experience. work experience finish the university have . To find work during schoolis a job for a lotay be employed through the university or find a . Examples of working part time at 7-eleven service. Those from the expertise working in career, human relationships and learn to correct errors and self-development. Therefore thatxperience from has value. epend on the students themselves are working hard experience from working . Students have many different reasons to want to work money to do leisure. onclu experience working part time important knowledge be Human relationships with colleagues about working hours and break time, knowledge and expertise in ll to improve and develop their own following.

Part time work is important to students. Although work is different, such as sales workers, etc. But what is to come back. A valuable experience not available in the classroom. Today, finding of new graduates is difficult for most companies work hard to individuals with experience. To have work experience it is important to students. In time to finish the university. Students then have not less. To find work during school. This is a job for a lot. May be employed through the university or find a supplier to the self. Examples of working part time at 7-eleven the service. Those from the expertise of working in your career, human relationships and learn to correct errors and self-development. Therefore say that. Experience from the work that has value. Depending on the students themselves that are working hard. To experience from working much. Students have many different reasons to want to work like money to do anything for leisure. Concluded that experience by working part time are important things to be back is knowledge shall be self Human relationships with colleagues. Learn about working hours and break time, knowledge and expertise in that line all to improve and develop their own following.

JPN

B2_0

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92.5

Interesting perspective given. Good use of verbs.

Start by telling the reader what you are talking about with some context statements. Avoid starting sentences with, 'but' and 'and'.

Parttime work is important to students. Although different, such as sales, etc. valuable experience not available in the classroom. Today, finding new graduates is difficult for most companies work hard to individuals with experience. work experience finish the university have . To find work during schoolis a job for a lotay be employed through the university or find a . Examples of working part time at 7-eleven service. Those from the expertise working in career, human relationships and learn to correct errors and self-development. Therefore thatxperience from has value. epend on the students themselves are working hard experience from working . Students have many different reasons to want to work money to do leisure. onclu experience working part time important knowledge be Human relationships with colleagues about working hours and break time, knowledge and expertise in ll to improve and develop their own following.

Part time work is important to students. Although work is different, such as sales workers, etc. But what is to come back. A valuable experience not available in the classroom. Today, finding of new graduates is difficult for most companies work hard to individuals with experience. To have work experience it is important to students. In time to finish the university. Students then have not less. To find work during school. This is a job for a lot. May be employed through the university or find a supplier to the self. Examples of working part time at 7-eleven the service. Those from the expertise of working in your career, human relationships and learn to correct errors and self-development. Therefore say that. Experience from the work that has value. Depending on the students themselves that are working hard. To experience from working much. Students have many different reasons to want to work like money to do anything for leisure. Concluded that experience by working part time are important things to be back is knowledge shall be self Human relationships with colleagues. Learn about working hours and break time, knowledge and expertise in that line all to improve and develop their own following.

TWN

A2_0

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Good beginning and the topic is clear. Confident opinion expressed.

Missing words and several grammatical errors. Spelling errors need to be corrected.

Parttime work is important to students. Although different, such as sales, etc. valuable experience not available in the classroom. Today, finding new graduates is difficult for most companies work hard to individuals with experience. work experience finish the university have . To find work during schoolis a job for a lotay be employed through the university or find a . Examples of working part time at 7-eleven service. Those from the expertise working in career, human relationships and learn to correct errors and self-development. Therefore thatxperience from has value. epend on the students themselves are working hard experience from working . Students have many different reasons to want to work money to do leisure. onclu experience working part time important knowledge be Human relationships with colleagues about working hours and break time, knowledge and expertise in ll to improve and develop their own following.

Part time work is important to students. Although work is different, such as sales workers, etc. But what is to come back. A valuable experience not available in the classroom. Today, finding of new graduates is difficult for most companies work hard to individuals with experience. To have work experience it is important to students. In time to finish the university. Students then have not less. To find work during school. This is a job for a lot. May be employed through the university or find a supplier to the self. Examples of working part time at 7-eleven the service. Those from the expertise of working in your career, human relationships and learn to correct errors and self-development. Therefore say that. Experience from the work that has value. Depending on the students themselves that are working hard. To experience from working much. Students have many different reasons to want to work like money to do anything for leisure. Concluded that experience by working part time are important things to be back is knowledge shall be self Human relationships with colleagues. Learn about working hours and break time, knowledge and expertise in that line all to improve and develop their own following.

THA

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41

Great point written for the final sentence.

Choose simpler words, as some of the vocabulary is difficult to understand. Several grammar and punctuation errors.

Parttime work is important to students. Although different, such as sales, etc. valuable experience not available in the classroom. Today, finding new graduates is difficult for most companies work hard to individuals with experience. work experience finish the university have . To find work during schoolis a job for a lotay be employed through the university or find a . Examples of working part time at 7-eleven service. Those from the expertise working in career, human relationships and learn to correct errors and self-development. Therefore thatxperience from has value. epend on the students themselves are working hard experience from working . Students have many different reasons to want to work money to do leisure. onclu experience working part time important knowledge be Human relationships with colleagues about working hours and break time, knowledge and expertise in ll to improve and develop their own following.

Part time work is important to students. Although work is different, such as sales workers, etc. But what is to come back. A valuable experience not available in the classroom. Today, finding of new graduates is difficult for most companies work hard to individuals with experience. To have work experience it is important to students. In time to finish the university. Students then have not less. To find work during school. This is a job for a lot. May be employed through the university or find a supplier to the self. Examples of working part time at 7-eleven the service. Those from the expertise of working in your career, human relationships and learn to correct errors and self-development. Therefore say that. Experience from the work that has value. Depending on the students themselves that are working hard. To experience from working much. Students have many different reasons to want to work like money to do anything for leisure. Concluded that experience by working part time are important things to be back is knowledge shall be self Human relationships with colleagues. Learn about working hours and break time, knowledge and expertise in that line all to improve and develop their own following.

TWN

B2_0

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46

Supports opinion with reasons, and provides clear explanation of reasons.

The writer connected parts of his piece using words such as also, another, and because.

Is a parttime job important to university students? As a university student, I do not have a parttime job I do think a parttime job is quite essential to an undergraduate. There are several reasons . Firstly, university fees are high. Having a part time job, a student can earn money in order to pay for part of the fees in the university. This can ease the strain of the bread winner of the family. Secondly, having some working experience before can be an advantage when for jobs in the future. Employers in all companies will prefer a person with rich experience a person with none. Thirdly, having a parttime job can practice time management skill. If can do well academic result at the same time doing well in part time job will absolutely be expert in time management. As a result, a parttime job is important to a university student. f your academic result will be affected by having a part time job, it is better you stick to your studies rather than having a part time job.

Is a part time job important to university students? As a university student, I do not have a part time job. But I do think a part time job is quite essential to an undergraduate. There are several reasons behind. Firstly, university fees are high. Having a part time job, a student can earn money in order to pay for part of the fees in the university. This can ease the strain of the bread winner of the family. Secondly, having some working experience before graduated can be an advantage when you apply for jobs in the future. Employers in all companies will prefer to employ a person with rich experience than a person with none. Thirdly, having a part time job can practice the time management skill of a student. If you can do well in academic result and at the same time doing well in your part time job. You will absolutely be an expert in time management. As a result, a part time job is important to a university student. If you your academic result will be affected by having a part time job, it is better you stick to your studies rather than having a part time job.

PAK

B2_0

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The writer tried to work on an ending, perhaps a thought or comment related to his opinion.

Some connections and relationships between events, actions, details or characters is attempted

Is a parttime job important to university students? As a university student, I do not have a parttime job I do think a parttime job is quite essential to an undergraduate. There are several reasons . Firstly, university fees are high. Having a part time job, a student can earn money in order to pay for part of the fees in the university. This can ease the strain of the bread winner of the family. Secondly, having some working experience before can be an advantage when for jobs in the future. Employers in all companies will prefer a person with rich experience a person with none. Thirdly, having a parttime job can practice time management skill. If can do well academic result at the same time doing well in part time job will absolutely be expert in time management. As a result, a parttime job is important to a university student. f your academic result will be affected by having a part time job, it is better you stick to your studies rather than having a part time job.

Is a part time job important to university students? As a university student, I do not have a part time job. But I do think a part time job is quite essential to an undergraduate. There are several reasons behind. Firstly, university fees are high. Having a part time job, a student can earn money in order to pay for part of the fees in the university. This can ease the strain of the bread winner of the family. Secondly, having some working experience before graduated can be an advantage when you apply for jobs in the future. Employers in all companies will prefer to employ a person with rich experience than a person with none. Thirdly, having a part time job can practice the time management skill of a student. If you can do well in academic result and at the same time doing well in your part time job. You will absolutely be an expert in time management. As a result, a part time job is important to a university student. If you your academic result will be affected by having a part time job, it is better you stick to your studies rather than having a part time job.

SIN

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50

Good attempts to introduce a topic and opinion that is focused, clearly stated, and strongly maintained.

Has little or no discernible organizational structure, and does not use linking words or phrases to connect opinions and reasons.

Is a parttime job important to university students? As a university student, I do not have a parttime job I do think a parttime job is quite essential to an undergraduate. There are several reasons . Firstly, university fees are high. Having a part time job, a student can earn money in order to pay for part of the fees in the university. This can ease the strain of the bread winner of the family. Secondly, having some working experience before can be an advantage when for jobs in the future. Employers in all companies will prefer a person with rich experience a person with none. Thirdly, having a parttime job can practice time management skill. If can do well academic result at the same time doing well in part time job will absolutely be expert in time management. As a result, a parttime job is important to a university student. f your academic result will be affected by having a part time job, it is better you stick to your studies rather than having a part time job.

Is a part time job important to university students? As a university student, I do not have a part time job. But I do think a part time job is quite essential to an undergraduate. There are several reasons behind. Firstly, university fees are high. Having a part time job, a student can earn money in order to pay for part of the fees in the university. This can ease the strain of the bread winner of the family. Secondly, having some working experience before graduated can be an advantage when you apply for jobs in the future. Employers in all companies will prefer to employ a person with rich experience than a person with none. Thirdly, having a part time job can practice the time management skill of a student. If you can do well in academic result and at the same time doing well in your part time job. You will absolutely be an expert in time management. As a result, a part time job is important to a university student. If you your academic result will be affected by having a part time job, it is better you stick to your studies rather than having a part time job.

JPN

A2_0

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34

Good attempt to use linking words and phrases although does not use them correctly.

Does not use correct or varied sentence structures, uses simplistic or inappropriate word choice.

Is a parttime job important to university students? As a university student, I do not have a parttime job I do think a parttime job is quite essential to an undergraduate. There are several reasons . Firstly, university fees are high. Having a part time job, a student can earn money in order to pay for part of the fees in the university. This can ease the strain of the bread winner of the family. Secondly, having some working experience before can be an advantage when for jobs in the future. Employers in all companies will prefer a person with rich experience a person with none. Thirdly, having a parttime job can practice time management skill. If can do well academic result at the same time doing well in part time job will absolutely be expert in time management. As a result, a parttime job is important to a university student. f your academic result will be affected by having a part time job, it is better you stick to your studies rather than having a part time job.

Is a part time job important to university students? As a university student, I do not have a part time job. But I do think a part time job is quite essential to an undergraduate. There are several reasons behind. Firstly, university fees are high. Having a part time job, a student can earn money in order to pay for part of the fees in the university. This can ease the strain of the bread winner of the family. Secondly, having some working experience before graduated can be an advantage when you apply for jobs in the future. Employers in all companies will prefer to employ a person with rich experience than a person with none. Thirdly, having a part time job can practice the time management skill of a student. If you can do well in academic result and at the same time doing well in your part time job. You will absolutely be an expert in time management. As a result, a part time job is important to a university student. If you your academic result will be affected by having a part time job, it is better you stick to your studies rather than having a part time job.

THA

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The writer organized her information so that each part of her writing was about one thing.

There are only a few mistakes. some capitals and end marks are correct.

Is a parttime job important to university students? As a university student, I do not have a parttime job I do think a parttime job is quite essential to an undergraduate. There are several reasons . Firstly, university fees are high. Having a part time job, a student can earn money in order to pay for part of the fees in the university. This can ease the strain of the bread winner of the family. Secondly, having some working experience before can be an advantage when for jobs in the future. Employers in all companies will prefer a person with rich experience a person with none. Thirdly, having a parttime job can practice time management skill. If can do well academic result at the same time doing well in part time job will absolutely be expert in time management. As a result, a parttime job is important to a university student. f your academic result will be affected by having a part time job, it is better you stick to your studies rather than having a part time job.

Is a part time job important to university students? As a university student, I do not have a part time job. But I do think a part time job is quite essential to an undergraduate. There are several reasons behind. Firstly, university fees are high. Having a part time job, a student can earn money in order to pay for part of the fees in the university. This can ease the strain of the bread winner of the family. Secondly, having some working experience before graduated can be an advantage when you apply for jobs in the future. Employers in all companies will prefer to employ a person with rich experience than a person with none. Thirdly, having a part time job can practice the time management skill of a student. If you can do well in academic result and at the same time doing well in your part time job. You will absolutely be an expert in time management. As a result, a part time job is important to a university student. If you your academic result will be affected by having a part time job, it is better you stick to your studies rather than having a part time job.

TWN

A2_0

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Strongly maintained opinion with little or no loosely related material.

There are only a few mistakes in grammar, punctuations, and using connectors.

Is a parttime job important to university students? As a university student, I do not have a parttime job I do think a parttime job is quite essential to an undergraduate. There are several reasons . Firstly, university fees are high. Having a part time job, a student can earn money in order to pay for part of the fees in the university. This can ease the strain of the bread winner of the family. Secondly, having some working experience before can be an advantage when for jobs in the future. Employers in all companies will prefer a person with rich experience a person with none. Thirdly, having a parttime job can practice time management skill. If can do well academic result at the same time doing well in part time job will absolutely be expert in time management. As a result, a parttime job is important to a university student. f your academic result will be affected by having a part time job, it is better you stick to your studies rather than having a part time job.

Is a part time job important to university students? As a university student, I do not have a part time job. But I do think a part time job is quite essential to an undergraduate. There are several reasons behind. Firstly, university fees are high. Having a part time job, a student can earn money in order to pay for part of the fees in the university. This can ease the strain of the bread winner of the family. Secondly, having some working experience before graduated can be an advantage when you apply for jobs in the future. Employers in all companies will prefer to employ a person with rich experience than a person with none. Thirdly, having a part time job can practice the time management skill of a student. If you can do well in academic result and at the same time doing well in your part time job. You will absolutely be an expert in time management. As a result, a part time job is important to a university student. If you your academic result will be affected by having a part time job, it is better you stick to your studies rather than having a part time job.

JPN

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Sentences possibly use simple constructions but overall is understandable.

Does not use linking words or phrases to connect opinions and reasons.

Is a parttime job important to university students? As a university student, I do not have a parttime job I do think a parttime job is quite essential to an undergraduate. There are several reasons . Firstly, university fees are high. Having a part time job, a student can earn money in order to pay for part of the fees in the university. This can ease the strain of the bread winner of the family. Secondly, having some working experience before can be an advantage when for jobs in the future. Employers in all companies will prefer a person with rich experience a person with none. Thirdly, having a parttime job can practice time management skill. If can do well academic result at the same time doing well in part time job will absolutely be expert in time management. As a result, a parttime job is important to a university student. f your academic result will be affected by having a part time job, it is better you stick to your studies rather than having a part time job.

Is a part time job important to university students? As a university student, I do not have a part time job. But I do think a part time job is quite essential to an undergraduate. There are several reasons behind. Firstly, university fees are high. Having a part time job, a student can earn money in order to pay for part of the fees in the university. This can ease the strain of the bread winner of the family. Secondly, having some working experience before graduated can be an advantage when you apply for jobs in the future. Employers in all companies will prefer to employ a person with rich experience than a person with none. Thirdly, having a part time job can practice the time management skill of a student. If you can do well in academic result and at the same time doing well in your part time job. You will absolutely be an expert in time management. As a result, a part time job is important to a university student. If you your academic result will be affected by having a part time job, it is better you stick to your studies rather than having a part time job.

TWN

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try hard to use linking words and phrases although does not use them correctly.

Comments do not make sense. The sentences are not in good order.

Is a parttime job important to university students? As a university student, I do not have a parttime job I do think a parttime job is quite essential to an undergraduate. There are several reasons . Firstly, university fees are high. Having a part time job, a student can earn money in order to pay for part of the fees in the university. This can ease the strain of the bread winner of the family. Secondly, having some working experience before can be an advantage when for jobs in the future. Employers in all companies will prefer a person with rich experience a person with none. Thirdly, having a parttime job can practice time management skill. If can do well academic result at the same time doing well in part time job will absolutely be expert in time management. As a result, a parttime job is important to a university student. f your academic result will be affected by having a part time job, it is better you stick to your studies rather than having a part time job.

Is a part time job important to university students? As a university student, I do not have a part time job. But I do think a part time job is quite essential to an undergraduate. There are several reasons behind. Firstly, university fees are high. Having a part time job, a student can earn money in order to pay for part of the fees in the university. This can ease the strain of the bread winner of the family. Secondly, having some working experience before graduated can be an advantage when you apply for jobs in the future. Employers in all companies will prefer to employ a person with rich experience than a person with none. Thirdly, having a part time job can practice the time management skill of a student. If you can do well in academic result and at the same time doing well in your part time job. You will absolutely be an expert in time management. As a result, a part time job is important to a university student. If you your academic result will be affected by having a part time job, it is better you stick to your studies rather than having a part time job.

JPN

B1_2

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2

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4

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30

30

30

States a general opinion that addresses the prompt/task, but may have lapses in focus.

Main idea is attempted, details are general, and writing is straightforward.

Is a parttime job important to university students? As a university student, I do not have a parttime job I do think a parttime job is quite essential to an undergraduate. There are several reasons . Firstly, university fees are high. Having a part time job, a student can earn money in order to pay for part of the fees in the university. This can ease the strain of the bread winner of the family. Secondly, having some working experience before can be an advantage when for jobs in the future. Employers in all companies will prefer a person with rich experience a person with none. Thirdly, having a parttime job can practice time management skill. If can do well academic result at the same time doing well in part time job will absolutely be expert in time management. As a result, a parttime job is important to a university student. f your academic result will be affected by having a part time job, it is better you stick to your studies rather than having a part time job.

Is a part time job important to university students? As a university student, I do not have a part time job. But I do think a part time job is quite essential to an undergraduate. There are several reasons behind. Firstly, university fees are high. Having a part time job, a student can earn money in order to pay for part of the fees in the university. This can ease the strain of the bread winner of the family. Secondly, having some working experience before graduated can be an advantage when you apply for jobs in the future. Employers in all companies will prefer to employ a person with rich experience than a person with none. Thirdly, having a part time job can practice the time management skill of a student. If you can do well in academic result and at the same time doing well in your part time job. You will absolutely be an expert in time management. As a result, a part time job is important to a university student. If you your academic result will be affected by having a part time job, it is better you stick to your studies rather than having a part time job.

THA

A2_0

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7

50

50

50

Provide pretty clear reasons that are supported by facts and details

Familiar words are spelled correctly; spelling errors are “slips” or unfamiliar words spelled phonetically

Is a parttime job important to university students? As a university student, I do not have a parttime job I do think a parttime job is quite essential to an undergraduate. There are several reasons . Firstly, university fees are high. Having a part time job, a student can earn money in order to pay for part of the fees in the university. This can ease the strain of the bread winner of the family. Secondly, having some working experience before can be an advantage when for jobs in the future. Employers in all companies will prefer a person with rich experience a person with none. Thirdly, having a parttime job can practice time management skill. If can do well academic result at the same time doing well in part time job will absolutely be expert in time management. As a result, a parttime job is important to a university student. f your academic result will be affected by having a part time job, it is better you stick to your studies rather than having a part time job.

Is a part time job important to university students? As a university student, I do not have a part time job. But I do think a part time job is quite essential to an undergraduate. There are several reasons behind. Firstly, university fees are high. Having a part time job, a student can earn money in order to pay for part of the fees in the university. This can ease the strain of the bread winner of the family. Secondly, having some working experience before graduated can be an advantage when you apply for jobs in the future. Employers in all companies will prefer to employ a person with rich experience than a person with none. Thirdly, having a part time job can practice the time management skill of a student. If you can do well in academic result and at the same time doing well in your part time job. You will absolutely be an expert in time management. As a result, a part time job is important to a university student. If you your academic result will be affected by having a part time job, it is better you stick to your studies rather than having a part time job.

TWN

B2_0

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32

Arguments included supporting details.

Needs to improve on giving a stronger concluding statement.

I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have part-time job. Of course, I have a part-time job. A part-time job be a valuable experience. Many high school students are a part-time job. Even if they want to work, their parents and teachers . , college students are free to and have a lot of time. They should have a part-time job unless they absent from class because of it. Through a part-time job, I learned difficulty of earning. Therefore, I learned to use money very carefully. This is an important thing in my life. Some people who not a part-time job when they college students will not know difficulty until they get a job. It too late. People not apt to forget things they learned when they were young. My mother said is very valuable for young people to have trouble we experience many things and get a correct view, the right way to think and so on. who acquired will live comfortably from now. A great life waits for them.

I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part-time job. Of course, I have a part-time job. A part-time job must be a valuable experience. Many high school students are banned to have a part-time job. Even if they want to work, their parents and teachers ban to do. But, college students are free to do and have a lot of time. They should have a part-time job unless they are absent from the class because of it. Through a part-time job, I learned a difficulty of earning. Therefore, I learned to use money very carefully. This is an important thing in my life. Some people who did not have a part-time job when they are college students will not know the difficulty until they get a job. It is too late. People do not apt to forget things which they learned when they were young. My mother said It is very valuable for young people to have a trouble. So, we should experience many things and get a correct view, the right way to think and so on. They who acquired them will live comfortably from now. A great life waits for them.

THA

A2_0

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51

55.5

No strong points.

Needs improvement in organizing ideas and sentence structure

I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have part-time job. Of course, I have a part-time job. A part-time job be a valuable experience. Many high school students are a part-time job. Even if they want to work, their parents and teachers . , college students are free to and have a lot of time. They should have a part-time job unless they absent from class because of it. Through a part-time job, I learned difficulty of earning. Therefore, I learned to use money very carefully. This is an important thing in my life. Some people who not a part-time job when they college students will not know difficulty until they get a job. It too late. People not apt to forget things they learned when they were young. My mother said is very valuable for young people to have trouble we experience many things and get a correct view, the right way to think and so on. who acquired will live comfortably from now. A great life waits for them.

I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part-time job. Of course, I have a part-time job. A part-time job must be a valuable experience. Many high school students are banned to have a part-time job. Even if they want to work, their parents and teachers ban to do. But, college students are free to do and have a lot of time. They should have a part-time job unless they are absent from the class because of it. Through a part-time job, I learned a difficulty of earning. Therefore, I learned to use money very carefully. This is an important thing in my life. Some people who did not have a part-time job when they are college students will not know the difficulty until they get a job. It is too late. People do not apt to forget things which they learned when they were young. My mother said It is very valuable for young people to have a trouble. So, we should experience many things and get a correct view, the right way to think and so on. They who acquired them will live comfortably from now. A great life waits for them.

IDN

A2_0

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7

72

63

67.5

The concluding statement made the argument of the essay clearer.

It was quite difficult to understand the essay as it contained long sentences that can be divided into simple and easy-to-understand sentences.

I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have part-time job. Of course, I have a part-time job. A part-time job be a valuable experience. Many high school students are a part-time job. Even if they want to work, their parents and teachers . , college students are free to and have a lot of time. They should have a part-time job unless they absent from class because of it. Through a part-time job, I learned difficulty of earning. Therefore, I learned to use money very carefully. This is an important thing in my life. Some people who not a part-time job when they college students will not know difficulty until they get a job. It too late. People not apt to forget things they learned when they were young. My mother said is very valuable for young people to have trouble we experience many things and get a correct view, the right way to think and so on. who acquired will live comfortably from now. A great life waits for them.

I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part-time job. Of course, I have a part-time job. A part-time job must be a valuable experience. Many high school students are banned to have a part-time job. Even if they want to work, their parents and teachers ban to do. But, college students are free to do and have a lot of time. They should have a part-time job unless they are absent from the class because of it. Through a part-time job, I learned a difficulty of earning. Therefore, I learned to use money very carefully. This is an important thing in my life. Some people who did not have a part-time job when they are college students will not know the difficulty until they get a job. It is too late. People do not apt to forget things which they learned when they were young. My mother said It is very valuable for young people to have a trouble. So, we should experience many things and get a correct view, the right way to think and so on. They who acquired them will live comfortably from now. A great life waits for them.

THA

B1_2

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75

Strong introduction

Fell short with the conclusion

I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have part-time job. Of course, I have a part-time job. A part-time job be a valuable experience. Many high school students are a part-time job. Even if they want to work, their parents and teachers . , college students are free to and have a lot of time. They should have a part-time job unless they absent from class because of it. Through a part-time job, I learned difficulty of earning. Therefore, I learned to use money very carefully. This is an important thing in my life. Some people who not a part-time job when they college students will not know difficulty until they get a job. It too late. People not apt to forget things they learned when they were young. My mother said is very valuable for young people to have trouble we experience many things and get a correct view, the right way to think and so on. who acquired will live comfortably from now. A great life waits for them.

I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part-time job. Of course, I have a part-time job. A part-time job must be a valuable experience. Many high school students are banned to have a part-time job. Even if they want to work, their parents and teachers ban to do. But, college students are free to do and have a lot of time. They should have a part-time job unless they are absent from the class because of it. Through a part-time job, I learned a difficulty of earning. Therefore, I learned to use money very carefully. This is an important thing in my life. Some people who did not have a part-time job when they are college students will not know the difficulty until they get a job. It is too late. People do not apt to forget things which they learned when they were young. My mother said It is very valuable for young people to have a trouble. So, we should experience many things and get a correct view, the right way to think and so on. They who acquired them will live comfortably from now. A great life waits for them.

THA

B1_1

8

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10

8

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8

8

8

80

82

81

The essay presented arguments connected to the topic

Minor grammatical errors.

I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have part-time job. Of course, I have a part-time job. A part-time job be a valuable experience. Many high school students are a part-time job. Even if they want to work, their parents and teachers . , college students are free to and have a lot of time. They should have a part-time job unless they absent from class because of it. Through a part-time job, I learned difficulty of earning. Therefore, I learned to use money very carefully. This is an important thing in my life. Some people who not a part-time job when they college students will not know difficulty until they get a job. It too late. People not apt to forget things they learned when they were young. My mother said is very valuable for young people to have trouble we experience many things and get a correct view, the right way to think and so on. who acquired will live comfortably from now. A great life waits for them.

I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part-time job. Of course, I have a part-time job. A part-time job must be a valuable experience. Many high school students are banned to have a part-time job. Even if they want to work, their parents and teachers ban to do. But, college students are free to do and have a lot of time. They should have a part-time job unless they are absent from the class because of it. Through a part-time job, I learned a difficulty of earning. Therefore, I learned to use money very carefully. This is an important thing in my life. Some people who did not have a part-time job when they are college students will not know the difficulty until they get a job. It is too late. People do not apt to forget things which they learned when they were young. My mother said It is very valuable for young people to have a trouble. So, we should experience many things and get a correct view, the right way to think and so on. They who acquired them will live comfortably from now. A great life waits for them.

TWN

B1_2

4

5

4

3

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4

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3

4

55

37

46

Logical ideas were presented.

Needs improvement on the concluding statement.

I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have part-time job. Of course, I have a part-time job. A part-time job be a valuable experience. Many high school students are a part-time job. Even if they want to work, their parents and teachers . , college students are free to and have a lot of time. They should have a part-time job unless they absent from class because of it. Through a part-time job, I learned difficulty of earning. Therefore, I learned to use money very carefully. This is an important thing in my life. Some people who not a part-time job when they college students will not know difficulty until they get a job. It too late. People not apt to forget things they learned when they were young. My mother said is very valuable for young people to have trouble we experience many things and get a correct view, the right way to think and so on. who acquired will live comfortably from now. A great life waits for them.

I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part-time job. Of course, I have a part-time job. A part-time job must be a valuable experience. Many high school students are banned to have a part-time job. Even if they want to work, their parents and teachers ban to do. But, college students are free to do and have a lot of time. They should have a part-time job unless they are absent from the class because of it. Through a part-time job, I learned a difficulty of earning. Therefore, I learned to use money very carefully. This is an important thing in my life. Some people who did not have a part-time job when they are college students will not know the difficulty until they get a job. It is too late. People do not apt to forget things which they learned when they were young. My mother said It is very valuable for young people to have a trouble. So, we should experience many things and get a correct view, the right way to think and so on. They who acquired them will live comfortably from now. A great life waits for them.

KOR

A2_0

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59.5

Good concluding statement

Excessive use of conjunctions.

I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have part-time job. Of course, I have a part-time job. A part-time job be a valuable experience. Many high school students are a part-time job. Even if they want to work, their parents and teachers . , college students are free to and have a lot of time. They should have a part-time job unless they absent from class because of it. Through a part-time job, I learned difficulty of earning. Therefore, I learned to use money very carefully. This is an important thing in my life. Some people who not a part-time job when they college students will not know difficulty until they get a job. It too late. People not apt to forget things they learned when they were young. My mother said is very valuable for young people to have trouble we experience many things and get a correct view, the right way to think and so on. who acquired will live comfortably from now. A great life waits for them.

I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part-time job. Of course, I have a part-time job. A part-time job must be a valuable experience. Many high school students are banned to have a part-time job. Even if they want to work, their parents and teachers ban to do. But, college students are free to do and have a lot of time. They should have a part-time job unless they are absent from the class because of it. Through a part-time job, I learned a difficulty of earning. Therefore, I learned to use money very carefully. This is an important thing in my life. Some people who did not have a part-time job when they are college students will not know the difficulty until they get a job. It is too late. People do not apt to forget things which they learned when they were young. My mother said It is very valuable for young people to have a trouble. So, we should experience many things and get a correct view, the right way to think and so on. They who acquired them will live comfortably from now. A great life waits for them.

JPN

A2_0

7

3

5

4

6

2

5

2

2

2

33

38

35.5

The writer understood the task and presented logical supporting ideas.

Some sentences lacked words that will complete the idea presented.

I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have part-time job. Of course, I have a part-time job. A part-time job be a valuable experience. Many high school students are a part-time job. Even if they want to work, their parents and teachers . , college students are free to and have a lot of time. They should have a part-time job unless they absent from class because of it. Through a part-time job, I learned difficulty of earning. Therefore, I learned to use money very carefully. This is an important thing in my life. Some people who not a part-time job when they college students will not know difficulty until they get a job. It too late. People not apt to forget things they learned when they were young. My mother said is very valuable for young people to have trouble we experience many things and get a correct view, the right way to think and so on. who acquired will live comfortably from now. A great life waits for them.

I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part-time job. Of course, I have a part-time job. A part-time job must be a valuable experience. Many high school students are banned to have a part-time job. Even if they want to work, their parents and teachers ban to do. But, college students are free to do and have a lot of time. They should have a part-time job unless they are absent from the class because of it. Through a part-time job, I learned a difficulty of earning. Therefore, I learned to use money very carefully. This is an important thing in my life. Some people who did not have a part-time job when they are college students will not know the difficulty until they get a job. It is too late. People do not apt to forget things which they learned when they were young. My mother said It is very valuable for young people to have a trouble. So, we should experience many things and get a correct view, the right way to think and so on. They who acquired them will live comfortably from now. A great life waits for them.

CHN

B1_1

6

5

6

5

6

5

5

4

5

7

75

54

64.5

Good concluding statement.

Minor errors on pluralization and use of linking verbs.

I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have part-time job. Of course, I have a part-time job. A part-time job be a valuable experience. Many high school students are a part-time job. Even if they want to work, their parents and teachers . , college students are free to and have a lot of time. They should have a part-time job unless they absent from class because of it. Through a part-time job, I learned difficulty of earning. Therefore, I learned to use money very carefully. This is an important thing in my life. Some people who not a part-time job when they college students will not know difficulty until they get a job. It too late. People not apt to forget things they learned when they were young. My mother said is very valuable for young people to have trouble we experience many things and get a correct view, the right way to think and so on. who acquired will live comfortably from now. A great life waits for them.

I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part-time job. Of course, I have a part-time job. A part-time job must be a valuable experience. Many high school students are banned to have a part-time job. Even if they want to work, their parents and teachers ban to do. But, college students are free to do and have a lot of time. They should have a part-time job unless they are absent from the class because of it. Through a part-time job, I learned a difficulty of earning. Therefore, I learned to use money very carefully. This is an important thing in my life. Some people who did not have a part-time job when they are college students will not know the difficulty until they get a job. It is too late. People do not apt to forget things which they learned when they were young. My mother said It is very valuable for young people to have a trouble. So, we should experience many things and get a correct view, the right way to think and so on. They who acquired them will live comfortably from now. A great life waits for them.

ENS

ENS

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5

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6

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9

80

59

69.5

The presented idea can be easily understood.

The essay only presented one supporting idea. The essay also contained numerous unnecessary connectors.

I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have part-time job. Of course, I have a part-time job. A part-time job be a valuable experience. Many high school students are a part-time job. Even if they want to work, their parents and teachers . , college students are free to and have a lot of time. They should have a part-time job unless they absent from class because of it. Through a part-time job, I learned difficulty of earning. Therefore, I learned to use money very carefully. This is an important thing in my life. Some people who not a part-time job when they college students will not know difficulty until they get a job. It too late. People not apt to forget things they learned when they were young. My mother said is very valuable for young people to have trouble we experience many things and get a correct view, the right way to think and so on. who acquired will live comfortably from now. A great life waits for them.

I agree with the statement that it is important for college students to have a part-time job. Of course, I have a part-time job. A part-time job must be a valuable experience. Many high school students are banned to have a part-time job. Even if they want to work, their parents and teachers ban to do. But, college students are free to do and have a lot of time. They should have a part-time job unless they are absent from the class because of it. Through a part-time job, I learned a difficulty of earning. Therefore, I learned to use money very carefully. This is an important thing in my life. Some people who did not have a part-time job when they are college students will not know the difficulty until they get a job. It is too late. People do not apt to forget things which they learned when they were young. My mother said It is very valuable for young people to have a trouble. So, we should experience many things and get a correct view, the right way to think and so on. They who acquired them will live comfortably from now. A great life waits for them.

THA

B1_2

6

6

6

5

6

5

6

6

6

5

57

57

57

Main ideas were somewhat clear and provided by sufficient supporting details

Some words and sentence structures seemed to be basic in form.

Study is more important than other for all people . ecause study especially study in school, we can a lot ofknowledge, a lot of friend, a lot of experience etc. example study is nine years. in reality, all people can't continue their because don't have much money. is one factor constrain student to have parttime job,especially a student in university. They must have a parttime job. Why I say like that? because, first not all student in university who pay them. Second, if we have a parttime job, we can study to manage our time, so that time can regular. Third, if we have a parttime job, we can help our parents pay our study in university. we can live ourselves, and we not always to with other peopleespecially our parents. conclusion important college student to have parttime job if we have parttime job, we can help our parents pay our study, we can manage our time, and we can study with our parents forever.

Study is more important than other for all people in the word. Because with study especially study in the school, we can get a lot of knowledge, a lot of friend, a lot of experience etc. for example in Indonesia a necessary study is nine years. But in the reality, all poor people can't continue their study because they don't have much money. There is one factor who constraint student to have a part time job, especially a student in university. They must have a part time job. Why I say like that ? because, first not all student in university, who the parents do not pay them. Second, if we have a part time job, we can study to manage our time, so that their time can regulary. Third, if we have a part time job, we can help our parents to pay our study in university. And we can live with ourselves, and we do not always to announce with the other people especially our parents. The conclusion for the important of college student to have a part time job is if we have a part time job, we can help our parents to pay our study in university, we can manage our time, and we can study about we can't announce with our parents forever.

IDN

B1_2

2

3

3

3

2

3

2

3

3

2

26

26

26

The supporting details were sufficiently provided to support the ideas.

There were several examples when grammar affected the text.

Study is more important than other for all people . ecause study especially study in school, we can a lot ofknowledge, a lot of friend, a lot of experience etc. example study is nine years. in reality, all people can't continue their because don't have much money. is one factor constrain student to have parttime job,especially a student in university. They must have a parttime job. Why I say like that? because, first not all student in university who pay them. Second, if we have a parttime job, we can study to manage our time, so that time can regular. Third, if we have a parttime job, we can help our parents pay our study in university. we can live ourselves, and we not always to with other peopleespecially our parents. conclusion important college student to have parttime job if we have parttime job, we can help our parents pay our study, we can manage our time, and we can study with our parents forever.

Study is more important than other for all people in the word. Because with study especially study in the school, we can get a lot of knowledge, a lot of friend, a lot of experience etc. for example in Indonesia a necessary study is nine years. But in the reality, all poor people can't continue their study because they don't have much money. There is one factor who constraint student to have a part time job, especially a student in university. They must have a part time job. Why I say like that ? because, first not all student in university, who the parents do not pay them. Second, if we have a part time job, we can study to manage our time, so that their time can regulary. Third, if we have a part time job, we can help our parents to pay our study in university. And we can live with ourselves, and we do not always to announce with the other people especially our parents. The conclusion for the important of college student to have a part time job is if we have a part time job, we can help our parents to pay our study in university, we can manage our time, and we can study about we can't announce with our parents forever.

CHN

A2_0

4

4

3

4

4

4

4

4

4

4

39

39

39

The ideas were well presented and logic.

There were some inaccurate words choice that affected the text

Study is more important than other for all people . ecause study especially study in school, we can a lot ofknowledge, a lot of friend, a lot of experience etc. example study is nine years. in reality, all people can't continue their because don't have much money. is one factor constrain student to have parttime job,especially a student in university. They must have a parttime job. Why I say like that? because, first not all student in university who pay them. Second, if we have a parttime job, we can study to manage our time, so that time can regular. Third, if we have a parttime job, we can help our parents pay our study in university. we can live ourselves, and we not always to with other peopleespecially our parents. conclusion important college student to have parttime job if we have parttime job, we can help our parents pay our study, we can manage our time, and we can study with our parents forever.

Study is more important than other for all people in the word. Because with study especially study in the school, we can get a lot of knowledge, a lot of friend, a lot of experience etc. for example in Indonesia a necessary study is nine years. But in the reality, all poor people can't continue their study because they don't have much money. There is one factor who constraint student to have a part time job, especially a student in university. They must have a part time job. Why I say like that ? because, first not all student in university, who the parents do not pay them. Second, if we have a part time job, we can study to manage our time, so that their time can regulary. Third, if we have a part time job, we can help our parents to pay our study in university. And we can live with ourselves, and we do not always to announce with the other people especially our parents. The conclusion for the important of college student to have a part time job is if we have a part time job, we can help our parents to pay our study in university, we can manage our time, and we can study about we can't announce with our parents forever.

KOR

B1_1

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3

28

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28

The ideas were presented in a consistent manner.

There were some inaccurate words choice that affected the text and some words seemed to be basic in form.

Study is more important than other for all people . ecause study especially study in school, we can a lot ofknowledge, a lot of friend, a lot of experience etc. example study is nine years. in reality, all people can't continue their because don't have much money. is one factor constrain student to have parttime job,especially a student in university. They must have a parttime job. Why I say like that? because, first not all student in university who pay them. Second, if we have a parttime job, we can study to manage our time, so that time can regular. Third, if we have a parttime job, we can help our parents pay our study in university. we can live ourselves, and we not always to with other peopleespecially our parents. conclusion important college student to have parttime job if we have parttime job, we can help our parents pay our study, we can manage our time, and we can study with our parents forever.

Study is more important than other for all people in the word. Because with study especially study in the school, we can get a lot of knowledge, a lot of friend, a lot of experience etc. for example in Indonesia a necessary study is nine years. But in the reality, all poor people can't continue their study because they don't have much money. There is one factor who constraint student to have a part time job, especially a student in university. They must have a part time job. Why I say like that ? because, first not all student in university, who the parents do not pay them. Second, if we have a part time job, we can study to manage our time, so that their time can regulary. Third, if we have a part time job, we can help our parents to pay our study in university. And we can live with ourselves, and we do not always to announce with the other people especially our parents. The conclusion for the important of college student to have a part time job is if we have a part time job, we can help our parents to pay our study in university, we can manage our time, and we can study about we can't announce with our parents forever.

THA

B1_1

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21

The main ideas were somewhat clear.

Several errors in grammar, mechanics, and spelling that interfere with understanding were found in the text.

Study is more important than other for all people . ecause study especially study in school, we can a lot ofknowledge, a lot of friend, a lot of experience etc. example study is nine years. in reality, all people can't continue their because don't have much money. is one factor constrain student to have parttime job,especially a student in university. They must have a parttime job. Why I say like that? because, first not all student in university who pay them. Second, if we have a parttime job, we can study to manage our time, so that time can regular. Third, if we have a parttime job, we can help our parents pay our study in university. we can live ourselves, and we not always to with other peopleespecially our parents. conclusion important college student to have parttime job if we have parttime job, we can help our parents pay our study, we can manage our time, and we can study with our parents forever.

Study is more important than other for all people in the word. Because with study especially study in the school, we can get a lot of knowledge, a lot of friend, a lot of experience etc. for example in Indonesia a necessary study is nine years. But in the reality, all poor people can't continue their study because they don't have much money. There is one factor who constraint student to have a part time job, especially a student in university. They must have a part time job. Why I say like that ? because, first not all student in university, who the parents do not pay them. Second, if we have a part time job, we can study to manage our time, so that their time can regulary. Third, if we have a part time job, we can help our parents to pay our study in university. And we can live with ourselves, and we do not always to announce with the other people especially our parents. The conclusion for the important of college student to have a part time job is if we have a part time job, we can help our parents to pay our study in university, we can manage our time, and we can study about we can't announce with our parents forever.

THA

B1_1

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24

Information is relevant and presented in a logical order.

There were several errors in grammar and spelling that interfere with understanding

Study is more important than other for all people . ecause study especially study in school, we can a lot ofknowledge, a lot of friend, a lot of experience etc. example study is nine years. in reality, all people can't continue their because don't have much money. is one factor constrain student to have parttime job,especially a student in university. They must have a parttime job. Why I say like that? because, first not all student in university who pay them. Second, if we have a parttime job, we can study to manage our time, so that time can regular. Third, if we have a parttime job, we can help our parents pay our study in university. we can live ourselves, and we not always to with other peopleespecially our parents. conclusion important college student to have parttime job if we have parttime job, we can help our parents pay our study, we can manage our time, and we can study with our parents forever.

Study is more important than other for all people in the word. Because with study especially study in the school, we can get a lot of knowledge, a lot of friend, a lot of experience etc. for example in Indonesia a necessary study is nine years. But in the reality, all poor people can't continue their study because they don't have much money. There is one factor who constraint student to have a part time job, especially a student in university. They must have a part time job. Why I say like that ? because, first not all student in university, who the parents do not pay them. Second, if we have a part time job, we can study to manage our time, so that their time can regulary. Third, if we have a part time job, we can help our parents to pay our study in university. And we can live with ourselves, and we do not always to announce with the other people especially our parents. The conclusion for the important of college student to have a part time job is if we have a part time job, we can help our parents to pay our study in university, we can manage our time, and we can study about we can't announce with our parents forever.

THA

B1_1

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60

The ideas were presented in logical order

Some words and sentence structures seemed to be basic in form.

Study is more important than other for all people . ecause study especially study in school, we can a lot ofknowledge, a lot of friend, a lot of experience etc. example study is nine years. in reality, all people can't continue their because don't have much money. is one factor constrain student to have parttime job,especially a student in university. They must have a parttime job. Why I say like that? because, first not all student in university who pay them. Second, if we have a parttime job, we can study to manage our time, so that time can regular. Third, if we have a parttime job, we can help our parents pay our study in university. we can live ourselves, and we not always to with other peopleespecially our parents. conclusion important college student to have parttime job if we have parttime job, we can help our parents pay our study, we can manage our time, and we can study with our parents forever.

Study is more important than other for all people in the word. Because with study especially study in the school, we can get a lot of knowledge, a lot of friend, a lot of experience etc. for example in Indonesia a necessary study is nine years. But in the reality, all poor people can't continue their study because they don't have much money. There is one factor who constraint student to have a part time job, especially a student in university. They must have a part time job. Why I say like that ? because, first not all student in university, who the parents do not pay them. Second, if we have a part time job, we can study to manage our time, so that their time can regulary. Third, if we have a part time job, we can help our parents to pay our study in university. And we can live with ourselves, and we do not always to announce with the other people especially our parents. The conclusion for the important of college student to have a part time job is if we have a part time job, we can help our parents to pay our study in university, we can manage our time, and we can study about we can't announce with our parents forever.

JPN

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67

The purpose of writing was somewhat clear, information was relevant and presented in a logical order

Supporting details were not sufficient enough and some words and structures seemed to be basic.

Study is more important than other for all people . ecause study especially study in school, we can a lot ofknowledge, a lot of friend, a lot of experience etc. example study is nine years. in reality, all people can't continue their because don't have much money. is one factor constrain student to have parttime job,especially a student in university. They must have a parttime job. Why I say like that? because, first not all student in university who pay them. Second, if we have a parttime job, we can study to manage our time, so that time can regular. Third, if we have a parttime job, we can help our parents pay our study in university. we can live ourselves, and we not always to with other peopleespecially our parents. conclusion important college student to have parttime job if we have parttime job, we can help our parents pay our study, we can manage our time, and we can study with our parents forever.

Study is more important than other for all people in the word. Because with study especially study in the school, we can get a lot of knowledge, a lot of friend, a lot of experience etc. for example in Indonesia a necessary study is nine years. But in the reality, all poor people can't continue their study because they don't have much money. There is one factor who constraint student to have a part time job, especially a student in university. They must have a part time job. Why I say like that ? because, first not all student in university, who the parents do not pay them. Second, if we have a part time job, we can study to manage our time, so that their time can regulary. Third, if we have a part time job, we can help our parents to pay our study in university. And we can live with ourselves, and we do not always to announce with the other people especially our parents. The conclusion for the important of college student to have a part time job is if we have a part time job, we can help our parents to pay our study in university, we can manage our time, and we can study about we can't announce with our parents forever.

JPN

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72

The ideas were clear and supported by quite detailed information

Some words and sentence structures seemed to be basic in form

Study is more important than other for all people . ecause study especially study in school, we can a lot ofknowledge, a lot of friend, a lot of experience etc. example study is nine years. in reality, all people can't continue their because don't have much money. is one factor constrain student to have parttime job,especially a student in university. They must have a parttime job. Why I say like that? because, first not all student in university who pay them. Second, if we have a parttime job, we can study to manage our time, so that time can regular. Third, if we have a parttime job, we can help our parents pay our study in university. we can live ourselves, and we not always to with other peopleespecially our parents. conclusion important college student to have parttime job if we have parttime job, we can help our parents pay our study, we can manage our time, and we can study with our parents forever.

Study is more important than other for all people in the word. Because with study especially study in the school, we can get a lot of knowledge, a lot of friend, a lot of experience etc. for example in Indonesia a necessary study is nine years. But in the reality, all poor people can't continue their study because they don't have much money. There is one factor who constraint student to have a part time job, especially a student in university. They must have a part time job. Why I say like that ? because, first not all student in university, who the parents do not pay them. Second, if we have a part time job, we can study to manage our time, so that their time can regulary. Third, if we have a part time job, we can help our parents to pay our study in university. And we can live with ourselves, and we do not always to announce with the other people especially our parents. The conclusion for the important of college student to have a part time job is if we have a part time job, we can help our parents to pay our study in university, we can manage our time, and we can study about we can't announce with our parents forever.

THA

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The idea was creative and original

There were several examples when grammar affected the text.

Study is more important than other for all people . ecause study especially study in school, we can a lot ofknowledge, a lot of friend, a lot of experience etc. example study is nine years. in reality, all people can't continue their because don't have much money. is one factor constrain student to have parttime job,especially a student in university. They must have a parttime job. Why I say like that? because, first not all student in university who pay them. Second, if we have a parttime job, we can study to manage our time, so that time can regular. Third, if we have a parttime job, we can help our parents pay our study in university. we can live ourselves, and we not always to with other peopleespecially our parents. conclusion important college student to have parttime job if we have parttime job, we can help our parents pay our study, we can manage our time, and we can study with our parents forever.

Study is more important than other for all people in the word. Because with study especially study in the school, we can get a lot of knowledge, a lot of friend, a lot of experience etc. for example in Indonesia a necessary study is nine years. But in the reality, all poor people can't continue their study because they don't have much money. There is one factor who constraint student to have a part time job, especially a student in university. They must have a part time job. Why I say like that ? because, first not all student in university, who the parents do not pay them. Second, if we have a part time job, we can study to manage our time, so that their time can regulary. Third, if we have a part time job, we can help our parents to pay our study in university. And we can live with ourselves, and we do not always to announce with the other people especially our parents. The conclusion for the important of college student to have a part time job is if we have a part time job, we can help our parents to pay our study in university, we can manage our time, and we can study about we can't announce with our parents forever.

IDN

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Reasonable argument given. Makes effort to explain opinion. Language used is mostly clear.

Not sophisticated in terms of language and content. Try to use more complex language and explore different ideas. Try to involve the reader more.

I am studying at Mae Fah Luang University, Chiang Rai, Thailand. I am studying in school of liberal arts English major. I agree with parttime job. Parttime job can make teenagers increase responsibility develop their own personalities. Teenagers who work parttime job can practice careful when they meet many people and they will know benefit of money how hard to earn it. I agree with a parttime job. The first reason is parttime job can help teenagers prepar life adult that have more responsibility. When teenagers take parttime job must haveresponsibility to manage time for study, relax, work, and travel. Second the young can learn how to with other people adjust unfamiliar environment. Third teenagers learn what want to be in the future. They can plan what they have to learn that useful for their future job. Finally, teenager will know benefit money how hard to earn it, I think that no one wants to waste money that they have to exchange their effort. In conclusion, parttime job is good idea prepa young adult. I hope that schools or universities and parents will support young people work parttime job.

Now I am studying at Mae Fah Luang University, Chiang Rai, Thailand. I am studying in school of liberal arts English major. I agree with part time job. Part time job can make teenagers increase responsibility, develop their own personalities. Teenagers who work part time job can practice to be careful when they meet many kind people and they will know benefit of money, how hard to earn it. I agree with a part time job. The first reason is part time job can help teenagers preparing life to adult that must have more responsibility. When teenagers take a part time job must have responsibility to manage time for study, relax, work, and travel. Second the young can learn how to life with other people, ad just the unfamiliar environment. Third teenagers learn what that she or he want to be in the future. They can plan what they have to learn that useful for their future job. Finally, teenager will know benefit or money, how hard to earn it, I think that no one wants to waste the money that they have to exchange by their effort. In conclusion, part time job is the good idea to prepare the young change to adult. I hope that the schools or universities and parents will support young people to work part time job.

JPN

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46

49.5

Clear purpose of the piece. Original approach to how they go about supporting their argument.

The content does not directly tackle the topic. The writer focuses too much on why college students need money as opposed to the merits of part-time jobs.

I am studying at Mae Fah Luang University, Chiang Rai, Thailand. I am studying in school of liberal arts English major. I agree with parttime job. Parttime job can make teenagers increase responsibility develop their own personalities. Teenagers who work parttime job can practice careful when they meet many people and they will know benefit of money how hard to earn it. I agree with a parttime job. The first reason is parttime job can help teenagers prepar life adult that have more responsibility. When teenagers take parttime job must haveresponsibility to manage time for study, relax, work, and travel. Second the young can learn how to with other people adjust unfamiliar environment. Third teenagers learn what want to be in the future. They can plan what they have to learn that useful for their future job. Finally, teenager will know benefit money how hard to earn it, I think that no one wants to waste money that they have to exchange their effort. In conclusion, parttime job is good idea prepa young adult. I hope that schools or universities and parents will support young people work parttime job.

Now I am studying at Mae Fah Luang University, Chiang Rai, Thailand. I am studying in school of liberal arts English major. I agree with part time job. Part time job can make teenagers increase responsibility, develop their own personalities. Teenagers who work part time job can practice to be careful when they meet many kind people and they will know benefit of money, how hard to earn it. I agree with a part time job. The first reason is part time job can help teenagers preparing life to adult that must have more responsibility. When teenagers take a part time job must have responsibility to manage time for study, relax, work, and travel. Second the young can learn how to life with other people, ad just the unfamiliar environment. Third teenagers learn what that she or he want to be in the future. They can plan what they have to learn that useful for their future job. Finally, teenager will know benefit or money, how hard to earn it, I think that no one wants to waste the money that they have to exchange by their effort. In conclusion, part time job is the good idea to prepare the young change to adult. I hope that the schools or universities and parents will support young people to work part time job.

KOR

B1_1

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5

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36

The writer has a clear position and multiple examples. Each point is communicated clearly.

The language used to explain each point is poor. This means it is difficult to understand a large part of the piece.

I am studying at Mae Fah Luang University, Chiang Rai, Thailand. I am studying in school of liberal arts English major. I agree with parttime job. Parttime job can make teenagers increase responsibility develop their own personalities. Teenagers who work parttime job can practice careful when they meet many people and they will know benefit of money how hard to earn it. I agree with a parttime job. The first reason is parttime job can help teenagers prepar life adult that have more responsibility. When teenagers take parttime job must haveresponsibility to manage time for study, relax, work, and travel. Second the young can learn how to with other people adjust unfamiliar environment. Third teenagers learn what want to be in the future. They can plan what they have to learn that useful for their future job. Finally, teenager will know benefit money how hard to earn it, I think that no one wants to waste money that they have to exchange their effort. In conclusion, parttime job is good idea prepa young adult. I hope that schools or universities and parents will support young people work parttime job.

Now I am studying at Mae Fah Luang University, Chiang Rai, Thailand. I am studying in school of liberal arts English major. I agree with part time job. Part time job can make teenagers increase responsibility, develop their own personalities. Teenagers who work part time job can practice to be careful when they meet many kind people and they will know benefit of money, how hard to earn it. I agree with a part time job. The first reason is part time job can help teenagers preparing life to adult that must have more responsibility. When teenagers take a part time job must have responsibility to manage time for study, relax, work, and travel. Second the young can learn how to life with other people, ad just the unfamiliar environment. Third teenagers learn what that she or he want to be in the future. They can plan what they have to learn that useful for their future job. Finally, teenager will know benefit or money, how hard to earn it, I think that no one wants to waste the money that they have to exchange by their effort. In conclusion, part time job is the good idea to prepare the young change to adult. I hope that the schools or universities and parents will support young people to work part time job.

CHN

B1_2

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10

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65

Involves and questions the reader throughout. Ideas are presented with great originality.

Poor use of language inhibits communication of ideas, which greatly harms the effectiveness of the writing.

I am studying at Mae Fah Luang University, Chiang Rai, Thailand. I am studying in school of liberal arts English major. I agree with parttime job. Parttime job can make teenagers increase responsibility develop their own personalities. Teenagers who work parttime job can practice careful when they meet many people and they will know benefit of money how hard to earn it. I agree with a parttime job. The first reason is parttime job can help teenagers prepar life adult that have more responsibility. When teenagers take parttime job must haveresponsibility to manage time for study, relax, work, and travel. Second the young can learn how to with other people adjust unfamiliar environment. Third teenagers learn what want to be in the future. They can plan what they have to learn that useful for their future job. Finally, teenager will know benefit money how hard to earn it, I think that no one wants to waste money that they have to exchange their effort. In conclusion, parttime job is good idea prepa young adult. I hope that schools or universities and parents will support young people work parttime job.

Now I am studying at Mae Fah Luang University, Chiang Rai, Thailand. I am studying in school of liberal arts English major. I agree with part time job. Part time job can make teenagers increase responsibility, develop their own personalities. Teenagers who work part time job can practice to be careful when they meet many kind people and they will know benefit of money, how hard to earn it. I agree with a part time job. The first reason is part time job can help teenagers preparing life to adult that must have more responsibility. When teenagers take a part time job must have responsibility to manage time for study, relax, work, and travel. Second the young can learn how to life with other people, ad just the unfamiliar environment. Third teenagers learn what that she or he want to be in the future. They can plan what they have to learn that useful for their future job. Finally, teenager will know benefit or money, how hard to earn it, I think that no one wants to waste the money that they have to exchange by their effort. In conclusion, part time job is the good idea to prepare the young change to adult. I hope that the schools or universities and parents will support young people to work part time job.

IDN

B1_1

1

1

1

1

1

1

1

1

2

1

7

11

9

Clear introduction.

Overall poor use of language means that the writer fails to communicate their ideas.

I am studying at Mae Fah Luang University, Chiang Rai, Thailand. I am studying in school of liberal arts English major. I agree with parttime job. Parttime job can make teenagers increase responsibility develop their own personalities. Teenagers who work parttime job can practice careful when they meet many people and they will know benefit of money how hard to earn it. I agree with a parttime job. The first reason is parttime job can help teenagers prepar life adult that have more responsibility. When teenagers take parttime job must haveresponsibility to manage time for study, relax, work, and travel. Second the young can learn how to with other people adjust unfamiliar environment. Third teenagers learn what want to be in the future. They can plan what they have to learn that useful for their future job. Finally, teenager will know benefit money how hard to earn it, I think that no one wants to waste money that they have to exchange their effort. In conclusion, parttime job is good idea prepa young adult. I hope that schools or universities and parents will support young people work parttime job.

Now I am studying at Mae Fah Luang University, Chiang Rai, Thailand. I am studying in school of liberal arts English major. I agree with part time job. Part time job can make teenagers increase responsibility, develop their own personalities. Teenagers who work part time job can practice to be careful when they meet many kind people and they will know benefit of money, how hard to earn it. I agree with a part time job. The first reason is part time job can help teenagers preparing life to adult that must have more responsibility. When teenagers take a part time job must have responsibility to manage time for study, relax, work, and travel. Second the young can learn how to life with other people, ad just the unfamiliar environment. Third teenagers learn what that she or he want to be in the future. They can plan what they have to learn that useful for their future job. Finally, teenager will know benefit or money, how hard to earn it, I think that no one wants to waste the money that they have to exchange by their effort. In conclusion, part time job is the good idea to prepare the young change to adult. I hope that the schools or universities and parents will support young people to work part time job.

TWN

B1_2

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49

52.5

Persuasive. Has a clear argument and provides good reasoning and examples. Engages the reader with questions.

Multiple language errors caused confusion at many points. Should try to engage the reader at the start as well as the end.

I am studying at Mae Fah Luang University, Chiang Rai, Thailand. I am studying in school of liberal arts English major. I agree with parttime job. Parttime job can make teenagers increase responsibility develop their own personalities. Teenagers who work parttime job can practice careful when they meet many people and they will know benefit of money how hard to earn it. I agree with a parttime job. The first reason is parttime job can help teenagers prepar life adult that have more responsibility. When teenagers take parttime job must haveresponsibility to manage time for study, relax, work, and travel. Second the young can learn how to with other people adjust unfamiliar environment. Third teenagers learn what want to be in the future. They can plan what they have to learn that useful for their future job. Finally, teenager will know benefit money how hard to earn it, I think that no one wants to waste money that they have to exchange their effort. In conclusion, parttime job is good idea prepa young adult. I hope that schools or universities and parents will support young people work parttime job.

Now I am studying at Mae Fah Luang University, Chiang Rai, Thailand. I am studying in school of liberal arts English major. I agree with part time job. Part time job can make teenagers increase responsibility, develop their own personalities. Teenagers who work part time job can practice to be careful when they meet many kind people and they will know benefit of money, how hard to earn it. I agree with a part time job. The first reason is part time job can help teenagers preparing life to adult that must have more responsibility. When teenagers take a part time job must have responsibility to manage time for study, relax, work, and travel. Second the young can learn how to life with other people, ad just the unfamiliar environment. Third teenagers learn what that she or he want to be in the future. They can plan what they have to learn that useful for their future job. Finally, teenager will know benefit or money, how hard to earn it, I think that no one wants to waste the money that they have to exchange by their effort. In conclusion, part time job is the good idea to prepare the young change to adult. I hope that the schools or universities and parents will support young people to work part time job.

KOR

B1_2

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3

62

53

57.5

Clear position and multiple points of support. Addresses potential challenges to their position.

Should use more easily understood examples (e.g. 400-500 what?). Try to engage the reader more.

I am studying at Mae Fah Luang University, Chiang Rai, Thailand. I am studying in school of liberal arts English major. I agree with parttime job. Parttime job can make teenagers increase responsibility develop their own personalities. Teenagers who work parttime job can practice careful when they meet many people and they will know benefit of money how hard to earn it. I agree with a parttime job. The first reason is parttime job can help teenagers prepar life adult that have more responsibility. When teenagers take parttime job must haveresponsibility to manage time for study, relax, work, and travel. Second the young can learn how to with other people adjust unfamiliar environment. Third teenagers learn what want to be in the future. They can plan what they have to learn that useful for their future job. Finally, teenager will know benefit money how hard to earn it, I think that no one wants to waste money that they have to exchange their effort. In conclusion, parttime job is good idea prepa young adult. I hope that schools or universities and parents will support young people work parttime job.

Now I am studying at Mae Fah Luang University, Chiang Rai, Thailand. I am studying in school of liberal arts English major. I agree with part time job. Part time job can make teenagers increase responsibility, develop their own personalities. Teenagers who work part time job can practice to be careful when they meet many kind people and they will know benefit of money, how hard to earn it. I agree with a part time job. The first reason is part time job can help teenagers preparing life to adult that must have more responsibility. When teenagers take a part time job must have responsibility to manage time for study, relax, work, and travel. Second the young can learn how to life with other people, ad just the unfamiliar environment. Third teenagers learn what that she or he want to be in the future. They can plan what they have to learn that useful for their future job. Finally, teenager will know benefit or money, how hard to earn it, I think that no one wants to waste the money that they have to exchange by their effort. In conclusion, part time job is the good idea to prepare the young change to adult. I hope that the schools or universities and parents will support young people to work part time job.

HKG

B2_0

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61.5

Clear and easy to understand. Clear position with multiple points of support. Considers multiple viewpoints.

Not the strongest argument. Should try to be more persuasive. Should try engaging the reader more.

I am studying at Mae Fah Luang University, Chiang Rai, Thailand. I am studying in school of liberal arts English major. I agree with parttime job. Parttime job can make teenagers increase responsibility develop their own personalities. Teenagers who work parttime job can practice careful when they meet many people and they will know benefit of money how hard to earn it. I agree with a parttime job. The first reason is parttime job can help teenagers prepar life adult that have more responsibility. When teenagers take parttime job must haveresponsibility to manage time for study, relax, work, and travel. Second the young can learn how to with other people adjust unfamiliar environment. Third teenagers learn what want to be in the future. They can plan what they have to learn that useful for their future job. Finally, teenager will know benefit money how hard to earn it, I think that no one wants to waste money that they have to exchange their effort. In conclusion, parttime job is good idea prepa young adult. I hope that schools or universities and parents will support young people work parttime job.

Now I am studying at Mae Fah Luang University, Chiang Rai, Thailand. I am studying in school of liberal arts English major. I agree with part time job. Part time job can make teenagers increase responsibility, develop their own personalities. Teenagers who work part time job can practice to be careful when they meet many kind people and they will know benefit of money, how hard to earn it. I agree with a part time job. The first reason is part time job can help teenagers preparing life to adult that must have more responsibility. When teenagers take a part time job must have responsibility to manage time for study, relax, work, and travel. Second the young can learn how to life with other people, ad just the unfamiliar environment. Third teenagers learn what that she or he want to be in the future. They can plan what they have to learn that useful for their future job. Finally, teenager will know benefit or money, how hard to earn it, I think that no one wants to waste the money that they have to exchange by their effort. In conclusion, part time job is the good idea to prepare the young change to adult. I hope that the schools or universities and parents will support young people to work part time job.

KOR

B2_0

8

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91

84

87.5

Sophisticated yet easy to understand. Content is clear and has strong purpose.

Recognizing alternative perspectives would make the writing stronger.

I am studying at Mae Fah Luang University, Chiang Rai, Thailand. I am studying in school of liberal arts English major. I agree with parttime job. Parttime job can make teenagers increase responsibility develop their own personalities. Teenagers who work parttime job can practice careful when they meet many people and they will know benefit of money how hard to earn it. I agree with a parttime job. The first reason is parttime job can help teenagers prepar life adult that have more responsibility. When teenagers take parttime job must haveresponsibility to manage time for study, relax, work, and travel. Second the young can learn how to with other people adjust unfamiliar environment. Third teenagers learn what want to be in the future. They can plan what they have to learn that useful for their future job. Finally, teenager will know benefit money how hard to earn it, I think that no one wants to waste money that they have to exchange their effort. In conclusion, parttime job is good idea prepa young adult. I hope that schools or universities and parents will support young people work parttime job.

Now I am studying at Mae Fah Luang University, Chiang Rai, Thailand. I am studying in school of liberal arts English major. I agree with part time job. Part time job can make teenagers increase responsibility, develop their own personalities. Teenagers who work part time job can practice to be careful when they meet many kind people and they will know benefit of money, how hard to earn it. I agree with a part time job. The first reason is part time job can help teenagers preparing life to adult that must have more responsibility. When teenagers take a part time job must have responsibility to manage time for study, relax, work, and travel. Second the young can learn how to life with other people, ad just the unfamiliar environment. Third teenagers learn what that she or he want to be in the future. They can plan what they have to learn that useful for their future job. Finally, teenager will know benefit or money, how hard to earn it, I think that no one wants to waste the money that they have to exchange by their effort. In conclusion, part time job is the good idea to prepare the young change to adult. I hope that the schools or universities and parents will support young people to work part time job.

CHN

B1_2

7

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77

Well-thought and presented argument. Covers various perspectives. All major points were clearly communicated.

Communication could be clearer. Some language errors caused confusion at first.

I am studying at Mae Fah Luang University, Chiang Rai, Thailand. I am studying in school of liberal arts English major. I agree with parttime job. Parttime job can make teenagers increase responsibility develop their own personalities. Teenagers who work parttime job can practice careful when they meet many people and they will know benefit of money how hard to earn it. I agree with a parttime job. The first reason is parttime job can help teenagers prepar life adult that have more responsibility. When teenagers take parttime job must haveresponsibility to manage time for study, relax, work, and travel. Second the young can learn how to with other people adjust unfamiliar environment. Third teenagers learn what want to be in the future. They can plan what they have to learn that useful for their future job. Finally, teenager will know benefit money how hard to earn it, I think that no one wants to waste money that they have to exchange their effort. In conclusion, parttime job is good idea prepa young adult. I hope that schools or universities and parents will support young people work parttime job.

Now I am studying at Mae Fah Luang University, Chiang Rai, Thailand. I am studying in school of liberal arts English major. I agree with part time job. Part time job can make teenagers increase responsibility, develop their own personalities. Teenagers who work part time job can practice to be careful when they meet many kind people and they will know benefit of money, how hard to earn it. I agree with a part time job. The first reason is part time job can help teenagers preparing life to adult that must have more responsibility. When teenagers take a part time job must have responsibility to manage time for study, relax, work, and travel. Second the young can learn how to life with other people, ad just the unfamiliar environment. Third teenagers learn what that she or he want to be in the future. They can plan what they have to learn that useful for their future job. Finally, teenager will know benefit or money, how hard to earn it, I think that no one wants to waste the money that they have to exchange by their effort. In conclusion, part time job is the good idea to prepare the young change to adult. I hope that the schools or universities and parents will support young people to work part time job.

PHL

B2_0

6

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5

5

5

5

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5

4

4

49

49

49

The essay over all was engaging

While the essay was engaging, the overall direction and clarity of the essay connecting to the original question were slightly off.

Having a part-time job university provides lots of personal and social benefits. Not only university students take advantage, but society. Hence, no matter what, it is essential for students to have part-time job. For students themselves, on one hand, they many individual advantages. They earn money for their daily lives learn to become financial independent. Also, teenagers can experience real society before graduation. It's a rare opportunity to build up their own network, which benefits them a lot in future. Moreover, it's easier for them to set up after having work experience. For commercial society, on the other hand, thehigher education level , the higher salary offered. Due to lack of liquid, , it's for small companies to employ educated elits. , undergraduates are suitable choices for these cmpanies. They are not only well-educated, but they also have more creativity than adults who work for many years. Meanwhile, teenagers have a chance to practice their creativity and critical thinking. All in all, based on the points I have mentioned above, it's worth and important for university students to have part-time job.

Having a part-time job during university, it provides lots of personal and social benefits. Not only university students can take the advantages, but also the society. Hence, no matter what, it is essential for whose students to have a part-time job. For students themselves, on one hand, they get many of individual advantages. They earn money for their daily lives that learn to become financial independent. Also, teenagers can experience the real society before graduation. It's a rare opportunity to build up their own network, which benefits them a lot in future. Moreover, it's easier for them to set up targets after having working experience. For commercial society, on the other hand, the higher education level had, the higher salary offered. Due to lack of liquids, but, it's hard for small companies to employ educated elits. So, undergraduaters are suitable choices for these campanies. They are not only well-educated, but they also have more creativity than adults who work for many years. Meanwhile, teenagers have a chance to practice their creativity and critical thinking. All in all, based on the points I have mentioned above, it's worth and important for university students to have a part-time job.

HKG

B2_0

6

6

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5

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5

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9

6

63

63

63

The essay points were clearly lay out

The easy has incomplete and unclear sentences

Having a part-time job university provides lots of personal and social benefits. Not only university students take advantage, but society. Hence, no matter what, it is essential for students to have part-time job. For students themselves, on one hand, they many individual advantages. They earn money for their daily lives learn to become financial independent. Also, teenagers can experience real society before graduation. It's a rare opportunity to build up their own network, which benefits them a lot in future. Moreover, it's easier for them to set up after having work experience. For commercial society, on the other hand, thehigher education level , the higher salary offered. Due to lack of liquid, , it's for small companies to employ educated elits. , undergraduates are suitable choices for these cmpanies. They are not only well-educated, but they also have more creativity than adults who work for many years. Meanwhile, teenagers have a chance to practice their creativity and critical thinking. All in all, based on the points I have mentioned above, it's worth and important for university students to have part-time job.

Having a part-time job during university, it provides lots of personal and social benefits. Not only university students can take the advantages, but also the society. Hence, no matter what, it is essential for whose students to have a part-time job. For students themselves, on one hand, they get many of individual advantages. They earn money for their daily lives that learn to become financial independent. Also, teenagers can experience the real society before graduation. It's a rare opportunity to build up their own network, which benefits them a lot in future. Moreover, it's easier for them to set up targets after having working experience. For commercial society, on the other hand, the higher education level had, the higher salary offered. Due to lack of liquids, but, it's hard for small companies to employ educated elits. So, undergraduaters are suitable choices for these campanies. They are not only well-educated, but they also have more creativity than adults who work for many years. Meanwhile, teenagers have a chance to practice their creativity and critical thinking. All in all, based on the points I have mentioned above, it's worth and important for university students to have a part-time job.

CHN

B2_0

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2

20

20

20

The essay has some good points.

There are tense errors and unclear sentences.

Having a part-time job university provides lots of personal and social benefits. Not only university students take advantage, but society. Hence, no matter what, it is essential for students to have part-time job. For students themselves, on one hand, they many individual advantages. They earn money for their daily lives learn to become financial independent. Also, teenagers can experience real society before graduation. It's a rare opportunity to build up their own network, which benefits them a lot in future. Moreover, it's easier for them to set up after having work experience. For commercial society, on the other hand, thehigher education level , the higher salary offered. Due to lack of liquid, , it's for small companies to employ educated elits. , undergraduates are suitable choices for these cmpanies. They are not only well-educated, but they also have more creativity than adults who work for many years. Meanwhile, teenagers have a chance to practice their creativity and critical thinking. All in all, based on the points I have mentioned above, it's worth and important for university students to have part-time job.

Having a part-time job during university, it provides lots of personal and social benefits. Not only university students can take the advantages, but also the society. Hence, no matter what, it is essential for whose students to have a part-time job. For students themselves, on one hand, they get many of individual advantages. They earn money for their daily lives that learn to become financial independent. Also, teenagers can experience the real society before graduation. It's a rare opportunity to build up their own network, which benefits them a lot in future. Moreover, it's easier for them to set up targets after having working experience. For commercial society, on the other hand, the higher education level had, the higher salary offered. Due to lack of liquids, but, it's hard for small companies to employ educated elits. So, undergraduaters are suitable choices for these campanies. They are not only well-educated, but they also have more creativity than adults who work for many years. Meanwhile, teenagers have a chance to practice their creativity and critical thinking. All in all, based on the points I have mentioned above, it's worth and important for university students to have a part-time job.

THA

A2_0

3

5

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4

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5

4

5

5

3

41

41

41

The easy structure is clear

The essay lacks engagement

Having a part-time job university provides lots of personal and social benefits. Not only university students take advantage, but society. Hence, no matter what, it is essential for students to have part-time job. For students themselves, on one hand, they many individual advantages. They earn money for their daily lives learn to become financial independent. Also, teenagers can experience real society before graduation. It's a rare opportunity to build up their own network, which benefits them a lot in future. Moreover, it's easier for them to set up after having work experience. For commercial society, on the other hand, thehigher education level , the higher salary offered. Due to lack of liquid, , it's for small companies to employ educated elits. , undergraduates are suitable choices for these cmpanies. They are not only well-educated, but they also have more creativity than adults who work for many years. Meanwhile, teenagers have a chance to practice their creativity and critical thinking. All in all, based on the points I have mentioned above, it's worth and important for university students to have part-time job.

Having a part-time job during university, it provides lots of personal and social benefits. Not only university students can take the advantages, but also the society. Hence, no matter what, it is essential for whose students to have a part-time job. For students themselves, on one hand, they get many of individual advantages. They earn money for their daily lives that learn to become financial independent. Also, teenagers can experience the real society before graduation. It's a rare opportunity to build up their own network, which benefits them a lot in future. Moreover, it's easier for them to set up targets after having working experience. For commercial society, on the other hand, the higher education level had, the higher salary offered. Due to lack of liquids, but, it's hard for small companies to employ educated elits. So, undergraduaters are suitable choices for these campanies. They are not only well-educated, but they also have more creativity than adults who work for many years. Meanwhile, teenagers have a chance to practice their creativity and critical thinking. All in all, based on the points I have mentioned above, it's worth and important for university students to have a part-time job.

JPN

B1_2

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3

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25

25

25

The essay opening was engaging

The overall essay was repetitive and lacked clarity.

Having a part-time job university provides lots of personal and social benefits. Not only university students take advantage, but society. Hence, no matter what, it is essential for students to have part-time job. For students themselves, on one hand, they many individual advantages. They earn money for their daily lives learn to become financial independent. Also, teenagers can experience real society before graduation. It's a rare opportunity to build up their own network, which benefits them a lot in future. Moreover, it's easier for them to set up after having work experience. For commercial society, on the other hand, thehigher education level , the higher salary offered. Due to lack of liquid, , it's for small companies to employ educated elits. , undergraduates are suitable choices for these cmpanies. They are not only well-educated, but they also have more creativity than adults who work for many years. Meanwhile, teenagers have a chance to practice their creativity and critical thinking. All in all, based on the points I have mentioned above, it's worth and important for university students to have part-time job.

Having a part-time job during university, it provides lots of personal and social benefits. Not only university students can take the advantages, but also the society. Hence, no matter what, it is essential for whose students to have a part-time job. For students themselves, on one hand, they get many of individual advantages. They earn money for their daily lives that learn to become financial independent. Also, teenagers can experience the real society before graduation. It's a rare opportunity to build up their own network, which benefits them a lot in future. Moreover, it's easier for them to set up targets after having working experience. For commercial society, on the other hand, the higher education level had, the higher salary offered. Due to lack of liquids, but, it's hard for small companies to employ educated elits. So, undergraduaters are suitable choices for these campanies. They are not only well-educated, but they also have more creativity than adults who work for many years. Meanwhile, teenagers have a chance to practice their creativity and critical thinking. All in all, based on the points I have mentioned above, it's worth and important for university students to have a part-time job.

KOR

B2_0

2

3

1

3

2

1

3

3

3

2

23

23

23

The writers feelings and opinion is easily understood

The essay, while insightful, doesn't connect cohesively to the topic at hand.

Having a part-time job university provides lots of personal and social benefits. Not only university students take advantage, but society. Hence, no matter what, it is essential for students to have part-time job. For students themselves, on one hand, they many individual advantages. They earn money for their daily lives learn to become financial independent. Also, teenagers can experience real society before graduation. It's a rare opportunity to build up their own network, which benefits them a lot in future. Moreover, it's easier for them to set up after having work experience. For commercial society, on the other hand, thehigher education level , the higher salary offered. Due to lack of liquid, , it's for small companies to employ educated elits. , undergraduates are suitable choices for these cmpanies. They are not only well-educated, but they also have more creativity than adults who work for many years. Meanwhile, teenagers have a chance to practice their creativity and critical thinking. All in all, based on the points I have mentioned above, it's worth and important for university students to have part-time job.

Having a part-time job during university, it provides lots of personal and social benefits. Not only university students can take the advantages, but also the society. Hence, no matter what, it is essential for whose students to have a part-time job. For students themselves, on one hand, they get many of individual advantages. They earn money for their daily lives that learn to become financial independent. Also, teenagers can experience the real society before graduation. It's a rare opportunity to build up their own network, which benefits them a lot in future. Moreover, it's easier for them to set up targets after having working experience. For commercial society, on the other hand, the higher education level had, the higher salary offered. Due to lack of liquids, but, it's hard for small companies to employ educated elits. So, undergraduaters are suitable choices for these campanies. They are not only well-educated, but they also have more creativity than adults who work for many years. Meanwhile, teenagers have a chance to practice their creativity and critical thinking. All in all, based on the points I have mentioned above, it's worth and important for university students to have a part-time job.

JPN

B1_2

9

5

9

10

6

9

9

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10

6

81

81

81

The essay is mostly concise with good points

The essay has wrong and missing prepositions with unclear sentences in the last paragraph

Having a part-time job university provides lots of personal and social benefits. Not only university students take advantage, but society. Hence, no matter what, it is essential for students to have part-time job. For students themselves, on one hand, they many individual advantages. They earn money for their daily lives learn to become financial independent. Also, teenagers can experience real society before graduation. It's a rare opportunity to build up their own network, which benefits them a lot in future. Moreover, it's easier for them to set up after having work experience. For commercial society, on the other hand, thehigher education level , the higher salary offered. Due to lack of liquid, , it's for small companies to employ educated elits. , undergraduates are suitable choices for these cmpanies. They are not only well-educated, but they also have more creativity than adults who work for many years. Meanwhile, teenagers have a chance to practice their creativity and critical thinking. All in all, based on the points I have mentioned above, it's worth and important for university students to have part-time job.

Having a part-time job during university, it provides lots of personal and social benefits. Not only university students can take the advantages, but also the society. Hence, no matter what, it is essential for whose students to have a part-time job. For students themselves, on one hand, they get many of individual advantages. They earn money for their daily lives that learn to become financial independent. Also, teenagers can experience the real society before graduation. It's a rare opportunity to build up their own network, which benefits them a lot in future. Moreover, it's easier for them to set up targets after having working experience. For commercial society, on the other hand, the higher education level had, the higher salary offered. Due to lack of liquids, but, it's hard for small companies to employ educated elits. So, undergraduaters are suitable choices for these campanies. They are not only well-educated, but they also have more creativity than adults who work for many years. Meanwhile, teenagers have a chance to practice their creativity and critical thinking. All in all, based on the points I have mentioned above, it's worth and important for university students to have a part-time job.

TWN

A2_0

5

6

6

5

5

5

5

5

5

5

52

52

52

Clear argument points were stated.

The essay lack connectivity of which made it to clearly under all the points that were being made.

Having a part-time job university provides lots of personal and social benefits. Not only university students take advantage, but society. Hence, no matter what, it is essential for students to have part-time job. For students themselves, on one hand, they many individual advantages. They earn money for their daily lives learn to become financial independent. Also, teenagers can experience real society before graduation. It's a rare opportunity to build up their own network, which benefits them a lot in future. Moreover, it's easier for them to set up after having work experience. For commercial society, on the other hand, thehigher education level , the higher salary offered. Due to lack of liquid, , it's for small companies to employ educated elits. , undergraduates are suitable choices for these cmpanies. They are not only well-educated, but they also have more creativity than adults who work for many years. Meanwhile, teenagers have a chance to practice their creativity and critical thinking. All in all, based on the points I have mentioned above, it's worth and important for university students to have part-time job.

Having a part-time job during university, it provides lots of personal and social benefits. Not only university students can take the advantages, but also the society. Hence, no matter what, it is essential for whose students to have a part-time job. For students themselves, on one hand, they get many of individual advantages. They earn money for their daily lives that learn to become financial independent. Also, teenagers can experience the real society before graduation. It's a rare opportunity to build up their own network, which benefits them a lot in future. Moreover, it's easier for them to set up targets after having working experience. For commercial society, on the other hand, the higher education level had, the higher salary offered. Due to lack of liquids, but, it's hard for small companies to employ educated elits. So, undergraduaters are suitable choices for these campanies. They are not only well-educated, but they also have more creativity than adults who work for many years. Meanwhile, teenagers have a chance to practice their creativity and critical thinking. All in all, based on the points I have mentioned above, it's worth and important for university students to have a part-time job.

IDN

B1_2

5

6

4

7

6

7

6

7

10

6

48

64

56

The writer provided good points on the pros and cons of getting a part-time job at different stages of the writer's life.

At some points the essay lacked clarity and reader engagement.

Having a part-time job university provides lots of personal and social benefits. Not only university students take advantage, but society. Hence, no matter what, it is essential for students to have part-time job. For students themselves, on one hand, they many individual advantages. They earn money for their daily lives learn to become financial independent. Also, teenagers can experience real society before graduation. It's a rare opportunity to build up their own network, which benefits them a lot in future. Moreover, it's easier for them to set up after having work experience. For commercial society, on the other hand, thehigher education level , the higher salary offered. Due to lack of liquid, , it's for small companies to employ educated elits. , undergraduates are suitable choices for these cmpanies. They are not only well-educated, but they also have more creativity than adults who work for many years. Meanwhile, teenagers have a chance to practice their creativity and critical thinking. All in all, based on the points I have mentioned above, it's worth and important for university students to have part-time job.

Having a part-time job during university, it provides lots of personal and social benefits. Not only university students can take the advantages, but also the society. Hence, no matter what, it is essential for whose students to have a part-time job. For students themselves, on one hand, they get many of individual advantages. They earn money for their daily lives that learn to become financial independent. Also, teenagers can experience the real society before graduation. It's a rare opportunity to build up their own network, which benefits them a lot in future. Moreover, it's easier for them to set up targets after having working experience. For commercial society, on the other hand, the higher education level had, the higher salary offered. Due to lack of liquids, but, it's hard for small companies to employ educated elits. So, undergraduaters are suitable choices for these campanies. They are not only well-educated, but they also have more creativity than adults who work for many years. Meanwhile, teenagers have a chance to practice their creativity and critical thinking. All in all, based on the points I have mentioned above, it's worth and important for university students to have a part-time job.

CHN

B2_0

9

9

9

9

10

8

10

9

10

8

91

91

91

The essay was engaging

The direction in the last paragraph starts to disconnect from the overall flow of the over essay.

Having a part-time job university provides lots of personal and social benefits. Not only university students take advantage, but society. Hence, no matter what, it is essential for students to have part-time job. For students themselves, on one hand, they many individual advantages. They earn money for their daily lives learn to become financial independent. Also, teenagers can experience real society before graduation. It's a rare opportunity to build up their own network, which benefits them a lot in future. Moreover, it's easier for them to set up after having work experience. For commercial society, on the other hand, thehigher education level , the higher salary offered. Due to lack of liquid, , it's for small companies to employ educated elits. , undergraduates are suitable choices for these cmpanies. They are not only well-educated, but they also have more creativity than adults who work for many years. Meanwhile, teenagers have a chance to practice their creativity and critical thinking. All in all, based on the points I have mentioned above, it's worth and important for university students to have part-time job.

Having a part-time job during university, it provides lots of personal and social benefits. Not only university students can take the advantages, but also the society. Hence, no matter what, it is essential for whose students to have a part-time job. For students themselves, on one hand, they get many of individual advantages. They earn money for their daily lives that learn to become financial independent. Also, teenagers can experience the real society before graduation. It's a rare opportunity to build up their own network, which benefits them a lot in future. Moreover, it's easier for them to set up targets after having working experience. For commercial society, on the other hand, the higher education level had, the higher salary offered. Due to lack of liquids, but, it's hard for small companies to employ educated elits. So, undergraduaters are suitable choices for these campanies. They are not only well-educated, but they also have more creativity than adults who work for many years. Meanwhile, teenagers have a chance to practice their creativity and critical thinking. All in all, based on the points I have mentioned above, it's worth and important for university students to have a part-time job.

CHN

B2_0

9

9

9

9

9

9

9

9

9

9

95

90

92.5

comprehensible ideas

structure

Today, more and more college students are taking part-time jobs. told different people hold different viewpoints. Some people agree with the idea of topic A, which part-time job very good for college students. In my opinion, it is not so important for college students to have part-time jobs. I have some reasons to prove my point. Some people think there are some advantages if students take part-time jobs. They think that many students gain experience from part-time job. Some people even say they can practice some good character. On the other hand, students can earn money from part-time jobs. If they are from very famil, they can reduce their family burden. after-school work has brought a lot of problems. For example, some students all the time their part-time jobs and cannot decide study is more important now. So some students now have problems with study and some don't go to class on time. As for me, I think the main task students is to study hard and important knowledge. They can earn money later. college students need to know what important is stud.

Today, more and more college students are taking part-time jobs. It told us different people hold different viewpoints. Some people agree with the idea of topic A, which part-time job is very good for college students. In my opinion, it is not so important for college students to have part-time jobs. I have some reasons to prove my point. Some people think there are some advantages if students take part-time jobs. They think that many students gain experience from part-time job. Some people even say they can have practice some good characters. On the other hand, students can earn money from doing part-time jobs. If they are from very poor family, they can reduce their family burden. But after-school work has brought a lot of problems. For example, some students all the time think of their part-time jobs and cannot decide study is more important now. So some students now have some problems with study and some even don't go to class on time. As for me, I think the main task of students is to study hard and learn important knowledge. They can earn money later. So college students now need to know what are more important is study.

TWN

B1_2

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62.5

good reasoning

vocabulary problems

Today, more and more college students are taking part-time jobs. told different people hold different viewpoints. Some people agree with the idea of topic A, which part-time job very good for college students. In my opinion, it is not so important for college students to have part-time jobs. I have some reasons to prove my point. Some people think there are some advantages if students take part-time jobs. They think that many students gain experience from part-time job. Some people even say they can practice some good character. On the other hand, students can earn money from part-time jobs. If they are from very famil, they can reduce their family burden. after-school work has brought a lot of problems. For example, some students all the time their part-time jobs and cannot decide study is more important now. So some students now have problems with study and some don't go to class on time. As for me, I think the main task students is to study hard and important knowledge. They can earn money later. college students need to know what important is stud.

Today, more and more college students are taking part-time jobs. It told us different people hold different viewpoints. Some people agree with the idea of topic A, which part-time job is very good for college students. In my opinion, it is not so important for college students to have part-time jobs. I have some reasons to prove my point. Some people think there are some advantages if students take part-time jobs. They think that many students gain experience from part-time job. Some people even say they can have practice some good characters. On the other hand, students can earn money from doing part-time jobs. If they are from very poor family, they can reduce their family burden. But after-school work has brought a lot of problems. For example, some students all the time think of their part-time jobs and cannot decide study is more important now. So some students now have some problems with study and some even don't go to class on time. As for me, I think the main task of students is to study hard and learn important knowledge. They can earn money later. So college students now need to know what are more important is study.

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persuasive ideas

lexical errors are found

Today, more and more college students are taking part-time jobs. told different people hold different viewpoints. Some people agree with the idea of topic A, which part-time job very good for college students. In my opinion, it is not so important for college students to have part-time jobs. I have some reasons to prove my point. Some people think there are some advantages if students take part-time jobs. They think that many students gain experience from part-time job. Some people even say they can practice some good character. On the other hand, students can earn money from part-time jobs. If they are from very famil, they can reduce their family burden. after-school work has brought a lot of problems. For example, some students all the time their part-time jobs and cannot decide study is more important now. So some students now have problems with study and some don't go to class on time. As for me, I think the main task students is to study hard and important knowledge. They can earn money later. college students need to know what important is stud.

Today, more and more college students are taking part-time jobs. It told us different people hold different viewpoints. Some people agree with the idea of topic A, which part-time job is very good for college students. In my opinion, it is not so important for college students to have part-time jobs. I have some reasons to prove my point. Some people think there are some advantages if students take part-time jobs. They think that many students gain experience from part-time job. Some people even say they can have practice some good characters. On the other hand, students can earn money from doing part-time jobs. If they are from very poor family, they can reduce their family burden. But after-school work has brought a lot of problems. For example, some students all the time think of their part-time jobs and cannot decide study is more important now. So some students now have some problems with study and some even don't go to class on time. As for me, I think the main task of students is to study hard and learn important knowledge. They can earn money later. So college students now need to know what are more important is study.

CHN

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62.5

understandable

good vocabulary

Today, more and more college students are taking part-time jobs. told different people hold different viewpoints. Some people agree with the idea of topic A, which part-time job very good for college students. In my opinion, it is not so important for college students to have part-time jobs. I have some reasons to prove my point. Some people think there are some advantages if students take part-time jobs. They think that many students gain experience from part-time job. Some people even say they can practice some good character. On the other hand, students can earn money from part-time jobs. If they are from very famil, they can reduce their family burden. after-school work has brought a lot of problems. For example, some students all the time their part-time jobs and cannot decide study is more important now. So some students now have problems with study and some don't go to class on time. As for me, I think the main task students is to study hard and important knowledge. They can earn money later. college students need to know what important is stud.

Today, more and more college students are taking part-time jobs. It told us different people hold different viewpoints. Some people agree with the idea of topic A, which part-time job is very good for college students. In my opinion, it is not so important for college students to have part-time jobs. I have some reasons to prove my point. Some people think there are some advantages if students take part-time jobs. They think that many students gain experience from part-time job. Some people even say they can have practice some good characters. On the other hand, students can earn money from doing part-time jobs. If they are from very poor family, they can reduce their family burden. But after-school work has brought a lot of problems. For example, some students all the time think of their part-time jobs and cannot decide study is more important now. So some students now have some problems with study and some even don't go to class on time. As for me, I think the main task of students is to study hard and learn important knowledge. They can earn money later. So college students now need to know what are more important is study.

IDN

A2_0

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20

use of high-level vocabulary

weak grammar

Today, more and more college students are taking part-time jobs. told different people hold different viewpoints. Some people agree with the idea of topic A, which part-time job very good for college students. In my opinion, it is not so important for college students to have part-time jobs. I have some reasons to prove my point. Some people think there are some advantages if students take part-time jobs. They think that many students gain experience from part-time job. Some people even say they can practice some good character. On the other hand, students can earn money from part-time jobs. If they are from very famil, they can reduce their family burden. after-school work has brought a lot of problems. For example, some students all the time their part-time jobs and cannot decide study is more important now. So some students now have problems with study and some don't go to class on time. As for me, I think the main task students is to study hard and important knowledge. They can earn money later. college students need to know what important is stud.

Today, more and more college students are taking part-time jobs. It told us different people hold different viewpoints. Some people agree with the idea of topic A, which part-time job is very good for college students. In my opinion, it is not so important for college students to have part-time jobs. I have some reasons to prove my point. Some people think there are some advantages if students take part-time jobs. They think that many students gain experience from part-time job. Some people even say they can have practice some good characters. On the other hand, students can earn money from doing part-time jobs. If they are from very poor family, they can reduce their family burden. But after-school work has brought a lot of problems. For example, some students all the time think of their part-time jobs and cannot decide study is more important now. So some students now have some problems with study and some even don't go to class on time. As for me, I think the main task of students is to study hard and learn important knowledge. They can earn money later. So college students now need to know what are more important is study.

JPN

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30

accurate grammar

repetition of ideas

Today, more and more college students are taking part-time jobs. told different people hold different viewpoints. Some people agree with the idea of topic A, which part-time job very good for college students. In my opinion, it is not so important for college students to have part-time jobs. I have some reasons to prove my point. Some people think there are some advantages if students take part-time jobs. They think that many students gain experience from part-time job. Some people even say they can practice some good character. On the other hand, students can earn money from part-time jobs. If they are from very famil, they can reduce their family burden. after-school work has brought a lot of problems. For example, some students all the time their part-time jobs and cannot decide study is more important now. So some students now have problems with study and some don't go to class on time. As for me, I think the main task students is to study hard and important knowledge. They can earn money later. college students need to know what important is stud.

Today, more and more college students are taking part-time jobs. It told us different people hold different viewpoints. Some people agree with the idea of topic A, which part-time job is very good for college students. In my opinion, it is not so important for college students to have part-time jobs. I have some reasons to prove my point. Some people think there are some advantages if students take part-time jobs. They think that many students gain experience from part-time job. Some people even say they can have practice some good characters. On the other hand, students can earn money from doing part-time jobs. If they are from very poor family, they can reduce their family burden. But after-school work has brought a lot of problems. For example, some students all the time think of their part-time jobs and cannot decide study is more important now. So some students now have some problems with study and some even don't go to class on time. As for me, I think the main task of students is to study hard and learn important knowledge. They can earn money later. So college students now need to know what are more important is study.

CHN

B2_0

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largely readable

many grammar problems

Today, more and more college students are taking part-time jobs. told different people hold different viewpoints. Some people agree with the idea of topic A, which part-time job very good for college students. In my opinion, it is not so important for college students to have part-time jobs. I have some reasons to prove my point. Some people think there are some advantages if students take part-time jobs. They think that many students gain experience from part-time job. Some people even say they can practice some good character. On the other hand, students can earn money from part-time jobs. If they are from very famil, they can reduce their family burden. after-school work has brought a lot of problems. For example, some students all the time their part-time jobs and cannot decide study is more important now. So some students now have problems with study and some don't go to class on time. As for me, I think the main task students is to study hard and important knowledge. They can earn money later. college students need to know what important is stud.

Today, more and more college students are taking part-time jobs. It told us different people hold different viewpoints. Some people agree with the idea of topic A, which part-time job is very good for college students. In my opinion, it is not so important for college students to have part-time jobs. I have some reasons to prove my point. Some people think there are some advantages if students take part-time jobs. They think that many students gain experience from part-time job. Some people even say they can have practice some good characters. On the other hand, students can earn money from doing part-time jobs. If they are from very poor family, they can reduce their family burden. But after-school work has brought a lot of problems. For example, some students all the time think of their part-time jobs and cannot decide study is more important now. So some students now have some problems with study and some even don't go to class on time. As for me, I think the main task of students is to study hard and learn important knowledge. They can earn money later. So college students now need to know what are more important is study.

TWN

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58.5

convincing

article problem

Today, more and more college students are taking part-time jobs. told different people hold different viewpoints. Some people agree with the idea of topic A, which part-time job very good for college students. In my opinion, it is not so important for college students to have part-time jobs. I have some reasons to prove my point. Some people think there are some advantages if students take part-time jobs. They think that many students gain experience from part-time job. Some people even say they can practice some good character. On the other hand, students can earn money from part-time jobs. If they are from very famil, they can reduce their family burden. after-school work has brought a lot of problems. For example, some students all the time their part-time jobs and cannot decide study is more important now. So some students now have problems with study and some don't go to class on time. As for me, I think the main task students is to study hard and important knowledge. They can earn money later. college students need to know what important is stud.

Today, more and more college students are taking part-time jobs. It told us different people hold different viewpoints. Some people agree with the idea of topic A, which part-time job is very good for college students. In my opinion, it is not so important for college students to have part-time jobs. I have some reasons to prove my point. Some people think there are some advantages if students take part-time jobs. They think that many students gain experience from part-time job. Some people even say they can have practice some good characters. On the other hand, students can earn money from doing part-time jobs. If they are from very poor family, they can reduce their family burden. But after-school work has brought a lot of problems. For example, some students all the time think of their part-time jobs and cannot decide study is more important now. So some students now have some problems with study and some even don't go to class on time. As for me, I think the main task of students is to study hard and learn important knowledge. They can earn money later. So college students now need to know what are more important is study.

THA

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good topic sentence

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Today, more and more college students are taking part-time jobs. told different people hold different viewpoints. Some people agree with the idea of topic A, which part-time job very good for college students. In my opinion, it is not so important for college students to have part-time jobs. I have some reasons to prove my point. Some people think there are some advantages if students take part-time jobs. They think that many students gain experience from part-time job. Some people even say they can practice some good character. On the other hand, students can earn money from part-time jobs. If they are from very famil, they can reduce their family burden. after-school work has brought a lot of problems. For example, some students all the time their part-time jobs and cannot decide study is more important now. So some students now have problems with study and some don't go to class on time. As for me, I think the main task students is to study hard and important knowledge. They can earn money later. college students need to know what important is stud.

Today, more and more college students are taking part-time jobs. It told us different people hold different viewpoints. Some people agree with the idea of topic A, which part-time job is very good for college students. In my opinion, it is not so important for college students to have part-time jobs. I have some reasons to prove my point. Some people think there are some advantages if students take part-time jobs. They think that many students gain experience from part-time job. Some people even say they can have practice some good characters. On the other hand, students can earn money from doing part-time jobs. If they are from very poor family, they can reduce their family burden. But after-school work has brought a lot of problems. For example, some students all the time think of their part-time jobs and cannot decide study is more important now. So some students now have some problems with study and some even don't go to class on time. As for me, I think the main task of students is to study hard and learn important knowledge. They can earn money later. So college students now need to know what are more important is study.

CHN

B1_2

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50

good intro

grammar problems

Today, more and more college students are taking part-time jobs. told different people hold different viewpoints. Some people agree with the idea of topic A, which part-time job very good for college students. In my opinion, it is not so important for college students to have part-time jobs. I have some reasons to prove my point. Some people think there are some advantages if students take part-time jobs. They think that many students gain experience from part-time job. Some people even say they can practice some good character. On the other hand, students can earn money from part-time jobs. If they are from very famil, they can reduce their family burden. after-school work has brought a lot of problems. For example, some students all the time their part-time jobs and cannot decide study is more important now. So some students now have problems with study and some don't go to class on time. As for me, I think the main task students is to study hard and important knowledge. They can earn money later. college students need to know what important is stud.

Today, more and more college students are taking part-time jobs. It told us different people hold different viewpoints. Some people agree with the idea of topic A, which part-time job is very good for college students. In my opinion, it is not so important for college students to have part-time jobs. I have some reasons to prove my point. Some people think there are some advantages if students take part-time jobs. They think that many students gain experience from part-time job. Some people even say they can have practice some good characters. On the other hand, students can earn money from doing part-time jobs. If they are from very poor family, they can reduce their family burden. But after-school work has brought a lot of problems. For example, some students all the time think of their part-time jobs and cannot decide study is more important now. So some students now have some problems with study and some even don't go to class on time. As for me, I think the main task of students is to study hard and learn important knowledge. They can earn money later. So college students now need to know what are more important is study.