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KOR

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Good overall command of language and free of misspellings.

A couple of incorrect use of words and grammar mistakes.

In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time once their school or other become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially . They are no , and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure their . They have to understand how hard thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they no students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to military first, I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher because she found no interest in education. some of my classmates felt sad and worried after because they found the skills or experiences that the wanted. I think it's good to test by having part-time job.

In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time job once their school grade or other condition become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially dependent. They are no more kids, and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure from their parent. They have to understand how hard is working, thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they are no more students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job suit them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to do the military responsibility first, and after one year then I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about finding no job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher in the kindergarten, because she found herself having no interest in education. And some of my classmates felt sad and worried after the interview of a job, because they found themselves having no the skills or experiences that the boss wanted. So I think it's good to test college students' ability by having part-time job.

KOR

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Sound composition of content with convincing real-life experiences. Accurate spellings.

Could not understand some phrases in the essay due to improper use of words. Need to work on grammar.

In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time once their school or other become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially . They are no , and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure their . They have to understand how hard thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they no students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to military first, I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher because she found no interest in education. some of my classmates felt sad and worried after because they found the skills or experiences that the wanted. I think it's good to test by having part-time job.

In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time job once their school grade or other condition become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially dependent. They are no more kids, and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure from their parent. They have to understand how hard is working, thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they are no more students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job suit them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to do the military responsibility first, and after one year then I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about finding no job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher in the kindergarten, because she found herself having no interest in education. And some of my classmates felt sad and worried after the interview of a job, because they found themselves having no the skills or experiences that the boss wanted. So I think it's good to test college students' ability by having part-time job.

CHN

B2_0

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Effective use of transition words to guide the readers through the context.

Need to work on grammar. Sentence structure was a bit way too simple.

In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time once their school or other become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially . They are no , and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure their . They have to understand how hard thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they no students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to military first, I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher because she found no interest in education. some of my classmates felt sad and worried after because they found the skills or experiences that the wanted. I think it's good to test by having part-time job.

In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time job once their school grade or other condition become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially dependent. They are no more kids, and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure from their parent. They have to understand how hard is working, thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they are no more students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job suit them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to do the military responsibility first, and after one year then I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about finding no job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher in the kindergarten, because she found herself having no interest in education. And some of my classmates felt sad and worried after the interview of a job, because they found themselves having no the skills or experiences that the boss wanted. So I think it's good to test college students' ability by having part-time job.

THA

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Good command of language. Free of grammatical errors through the essay.

Sentence structure was way too simple. Context was weak in terms of logical flow.

In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time once their school or other become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially . They are no , and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure their . They have to understand how hard thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they no students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to military first, I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher because she found no interest in education. some of my classmates felt sad and worried after because they found the skills or experiences that the wanted. I think it's good to test by having part-time job.

In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time job once their school grade or other condition become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially dependent. They are no more kids, and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure from their parent. They have to understand how hard is working, thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they are no more students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job suit them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to do the military responsibility first, and after one year then I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about finding no job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher in the kindergarten, because she found herself having no interest in education. And some of my classmates felt sad and worried after the interview of a job, because they found themselves having no the skills or experiences that the boss wanted. So I think it's good to test college students' ability by having part-time job.

JPN

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The argument was clear and coherent. Relatively good command of language.

Need to work on grammar, proper word choice and phraseology.

In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time once their school or other become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially . They are no , and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure their . They have to understand how hard thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they no students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to military first, I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher because she found no interest in education. some of my classmates felt sad and worried after because they found the skills or experiences that the wanted. I think it's good to test by having part-time job.

In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time job once their school grade or other condition become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially dependent. They are no more kids, and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure from their parent. They have to understand how hard is working, thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they are no more students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job suit them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to do the military responsibility first, and after one year then I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about finding no job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher in the kindergarten, because she found herself having no interest in education. And some of my classmates felt sad and worried after the interview of a job, because they found themselves having no the skills or experiences that the boss wanted. So I think it's good to test college students' ability by having part-time job.

KOR

B2_0

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94.5

Operational command of language with semantically complex words. Sophisticated arguments.

Some phrases may sound unnatural. Could have refined the sentences further to make them look more sophisticated.

In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time once their school or other become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially . They are no , and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure their . They have to understand how hard thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they no students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to military first, I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher because she found no interest in education. some of my classmates felt sad and worried after because they found the skills or experiences that the wanted. I think it's good to test by having part-time job.

In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time job once their school grade or other condition become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially dependent. They are no more kids, and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure from their parent. They have to understand how hard is working, thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they are no more students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job suit them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to do the military responsibility first, and after one year then I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about finding no job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher in the kindergarten, because she found herself having no interest in education. And some of my classmates felt sad and worried after the interview of a job, because they found themselves having no the skills or experiences that the boss wanted. So I think it's good to test college students' ability by having part-time job.

TWN

B2_0

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66.5

Good command of language. Provided convincing reasons to back up the argument.

Several obvious grammatical mistakes could be seen. Could refine the overall language to make it more sophisticated.

In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time once their school or other become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially . They are no , and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure their . They have to understand how hard thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they no students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to military first, I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher because she found no interest in education. some of my classmates felt sad and worried after because they found the skills or experiences that the wanted. I think it's good to test by having part-time job.

In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time job once their school grade or other condition become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially dependent. They are no more kids, and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure from their parent. They have to understand how hard is working, thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they are no more students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job suit them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to do the military responsibility first, and after one year then I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about finding no job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher in the kindergarten, because she found herself having no interest in education. And some of my classmates felt sad and worried after the interview of a job, because they found themselves having no the skills or experiences that the boss wanted. So I think it's good to test college students' ability by having part-time job.

KOR

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Sound structure of context that comprises of several good reasoning.

Should pay attention to phraseology and sentence fragmentation. Could not fully understand the context.

In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time once their school or other become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially . They are no , and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure their . They have to understand how hard thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they no students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to military first, I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher because she found no interest in education. some of my classmates felt sad and worried after because they found the skills or experiences that the wanted. I think it's good to test by having part-time job.

In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time job once their school grade or other condition become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially dependent. They are no more kids, and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure from their parent. They have to understand how hard is working, thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they are no more students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job suit them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to do the military responsibility first, and after one year then I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about finding no job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher in the kindergarten, because she found herself having no interest in education. And some of my classmates felt sad and worried after the interview of a job, because they found themselves having no the skills or experiences that the boss wanted. So I think it's good to test college students' ability by having part-time job.

KOR

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Good overall context structure with proper use of transition words.

Several critical errors in grammar. Some phrases did not make sense. Had a hard time understanding the context.

In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time once their school or other become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially . They are no , and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure their . They have to understand how hard thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they no students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to military first, I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher because she found no interest in education. some of my classmates felt sad and worried after because they found the skills or experiences that the wanted. I think it's good to test by having part-time job.

In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time job once their school grade or other condition become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially dependent. They are no more kids, and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure from their parent. They have to understand how hard is working, thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they are no more students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job suit them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to do the military responsibility first, and after one year then I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about finding no job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher in the kindergarten, because she found herself having no interest in education. And some of my classmates felt sad and worried after the interview of a job, because they found themselves having no the skills or experiences that the boss wanted. So I think it's good to test college students' ability by having part-time job.

IDN

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61.5

Spellings were accurate. Good arguments to support the student's opinion.

Difficult to understand the context at the first glance. Need to work on grammar and word choice.

In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time once their school or other become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially . They are no , and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure their . They have to understand how hard thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they no students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to military first, I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher because she found no interest in education. some of my classmates felt sad and worried after because they found the skills or experiences that the wanted. I think it's good to test by having part-time job.

In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time job once their school grade or other condition become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially dependent. They are no more kids, and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure from their parent. They have to understand how hard is working, thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they are no more students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job suit them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to do the military responsibility first, and after one year then I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about finding no job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher in the kindergarten, because she found herself having no interest in education. And some of my classmates felt sad and worried after the interview of a job, because they found themselves having no the skills or experiences that the boss wanted. So I think it's good to test college students' ability by having part-time job.

THA

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English is understandable. Used some complex words.

Same words are repeated several times. Seems that the first half is all introduction.

Actually, student have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, must learn basic theory. have only years to learn level knowledge and job do whole . If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. to the job, so can't avoid with others, many decide who they want who more level knowledge. Maybe there also several will part-time experience. most part-time the job you find the company untrained to do complex job. you also any from your part-time experience you find the job. -time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should your time well. Don't let part-time job huge in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your still should be first . Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student an unchangeable rule.

Actually, student doesn't have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, you must have to learn the basic theory. So you just have only 7 years to learn the pro level knowledge, and choice your job which you maybe will do your whole life. If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. Everyone wants to do the job they want, so you can't avoid to compare with others, many company decide who they want is determined by who have more pro level knowledge. Maybe there also have several company will decide it by your part-time experience. But the most of part-time job doesn't relative the job you find. Because the company doesn't let untrained person to do the complex job. So you also couldn't get any plus from your part-time experience when you find the job. Part-time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should control your time well. Don't let part-time job take huge part in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your study. Study still should be the first in your ranking. Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good experience to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student. It's an unchangeable rule.

TWN

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Good introduction and conclusion with complex words.

Could not understand the general idea. Maybe needed to discuss the idea in deeper level.

Actually, student have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, must learn basic theory. have only years to learn level knowledge and job do whole . If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. to the job, so can't avoid with others, many decide who they want who more level knowledge. Maybe there also several will part-time experience. most part-time the job you find the company untrained to do complex job. you also any from your part-time experience you find the job. -time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should your time well. Don't let part-time job huge in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your still should be first . Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student an unchangeable rule.

Actually, student doesn't have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, you must have to learn the basic theory. So you just have only 7 years to learn the pro level knowledge, and choice your job which you maybe will do your whole life. If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. Everyone wants to do the job they want, so you can't avoid to compare with others, many company decide who they want is determined by who have more pro level knowledge. Maybe there also have several company will decide it by your part-time experience. But the most of part-time job doesn't relative the job you find. Because the company doesn't let untrained person to do the complex job. So you also couldn't get any plus from your part-time experience when you find the job. Part-time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should control your time well. Don't let part-time job take huge part in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your study. Study still should be the first in your ranking. Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good experience to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student. It's an unchangeable rule.

JPN

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Very neat essay. Summarized three ideas well. grammar is not perfect but understandable.

Maybe conclusion can be improved by not repeating similar sentences and by using appropriate conjunction.

Actually, student have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, must learn basic theory. have only years to learn level knowledge and job do whole . If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. to the job, so can't avoid with others, many decide who they want who more level knowledge. Maybe there also several will part-time experience. most part-time the job you find the company untrained to do complex job. you also any from your part-time experience you find the job. -time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should your time well. Don't let part-time job huge in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your still should be first . Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student an unchangeable rule.

Actually, student doesn't have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, you must have to learn the basic theory. So you just have only 7 years to learn the pro level knowledge, and choice your job which you maybe will do your whole life. If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. Everyone wants to do the job they want, so you can't avoid to compare with others, many company decide who they want is determined by who have more pro level knowledge. Maybe there also have several company will decide it by your part-time experience. But the most of part-time job doesn't relative the job you find. Because the company doesn't let untrained person to do the complex job. So you also couldn't get any plus from your part-time experience when you find the job. Part-time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should control your time well. Don't let part-time job take huge part in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your study. Study still should be the first in your ranking. Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good experience to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student. It's an unchangeable rule.

THA

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Seems that the writer considers about the advantages and disadvantages.

Very difficult to understand due to English. The writer has to improve both grammar and vocabulary.

Actually, student have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, must learn basic theory. have only years to learn level knowledge and job do whole . If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. to the job, so can't avoid with others, many decide who they want who more level knowledge. Maybe there also several will part-time experience. most part-time the job you find the company untrained to do complex job. you also any from your part-time experience you find the job. -time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should your time well. Don't let part-time job huge in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your still should be first . Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student an unchangeable rule.

Actually, student doesn't have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, you must have to learn the basic theory. So you just have only 7 years to learn the pro level knowledge, and choice your job which you maybe will do your whole life. If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. Everyone wants to do the job they want, so you can't avoid to compare with others, many company decide who they want is determined by who have more pro level knowledge. Maybe there also have several company will decide it by your part-time experience. But the most of part-time job doesn't relative the job you find. Because the company doesn't let untrained person to do the complex job. So you also couldn't get any plus from your part-time experience when you find the job. Part-time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should control your time well. Don't let part-time job take huge part in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your study. Study still should be the first in your ranking. Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good experience to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student. It's an unchangeable rule.

KOR

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Unique opinion about the work in vacations. Good use of adverbs helps to follow the logic flow even easier.

Pity that the writer is weak in grammars. Also, some important prepositions are missing.

Actually, student have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, must learn basic theory. have only years to learn level knowledge and job do whole . If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. to the job, so can't avoid with others, many decide who they want who more level knowledge. Maybe there also several will part-time experience. most part-time the job you find the company untrained to do complex job. you also any from your part-time experience you find the job. -time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should your time well. Don't let part-time job huge in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your still should be first . Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student an unchangeable rule.

Actually, student doesn't have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, you must have to learn the basic theory. So you just have only 7 years to learn the pro level knowledge, and choice your job which you maybe will do your whole life. If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. Everyone wants to do the job they want, so you can't avoid to compare with others, many company decide who they want is determined by who have more pro level knowledge. Maybe there also have several company will decide it by your part-time experience. But the most of part-time job doesn't relative the job you find. Because the company doesn't let untrained person to do the complex job. So you also couldn't get any plus from your part-time experience when you find the job. Part-time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should control your time well. Don't let part-time job take huge part in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your study. Study still should be the first in your ranking. Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good experience to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student. It's an unchangeable rule.

KOR

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40.5

Despite poor English, the writer managed to write an easy-to-understand essay.

Teenagers may not be college students or vice versa. Could not understand some of the logics.

Actually, student have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, must learn basic theory. have only years to learn level knowledge and job do whole . If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. to the job, so can't avoid with others, many decide who they want who more level knowledge. Maybe there also several will part-time experience. most part-time the job you find the company untrained to do complex job. you also any from your part-time experience you find the job. -time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should your time well. Don't let part-time job huge in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your still should be first . Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student an unchangeable rule.

Actually, student doesn't have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, you must have to learn the basic theory. So you just have only 7 years to learn the pro level knowledge, and choice your job which you maybe will do your whole life. If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. Everyone wants to do the job they want, so you can't avoid to compare with others, many company decide who they want is determined by who have more pro level knowledge. Maybe there also have several company will decide it by your part-time experience. But the most of part-time job doesn't relative the job you find. Because the company doesn't let untrained person to do the complex job. So you also couldn't get any plus from your part-time experience when you find the job. Part-time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should control your time well. Don't let part-time job take huge part in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your study. Study still should be the first in your ranking. Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good experience to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student. It's an unchangeable rule.

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The well constructed discussion is easy to understand, which support the limited English of the writer.

The beginning and the end say differently. Maybe needed to check before submitting the essay.

Actually, student have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, must learn basic theory. have only years to learn level knowledge and job do whole . If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. to the job, so can't avoid with others, many decide who they want who more level knowledge. Maybe there also several will part-time experience. most part-time the job you find the company untrained to do complex job. you also any from your part-time experience you find the job. -time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should your time well. Don't let part-time job huge in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your still should be first . Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student an unchangeable rule.

Actually, student doesn't have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, you must have to learn the basic theory. So you just have only 7 years to learn the pro level knowledge, and choice your job which you maybe will do your whole life. If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. Everyone wants to do the job they want, so you can't avoid to compare with others, many company decide who they want is determined by who have more pro level knowledge. Maybe there also have several company will decide it by your part-time experience. But the most of part-time job doesn't relative the job you find. Because the company doesn't let untrained person to do the complex job. So you also couldn't get any plus from your part-time experience when you find the job. Part-time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should control your time well. Don't let part-time job take huge part in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your study. Study still should be the first in your ranking. Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good experience to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student. It's an unchangeable rule.

CHN

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Easy to follow the discussion flow. Explanations skillfully support the ideas.

As the writer stated the main reason is money, this aspect should have been discussed in deeper level.

Actually, student have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, must learn basic theory. have only years to learn level knowledge and job do whole . If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. to the job, so can't avoid with others, many decide who they want who more level knowledge. Maybe there also several will part-time experience. most part-time the job you find the company untrained to do complex job. you also any from your part-time experience you find the job. -time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should your time well. Don't let part-time job huge in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your still should be first . Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student an unchangeable rule.

Actually, student doesn't have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, you must have to learn the basic theory. So you just have only 7 years to learn the pro level knowledge, and choice your job which you maybe will do your whole life. If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. Everyone wants to do the job they want, so you can't avoid to compare with others, many company decide who they want is determined by who have more pro level knowledge. Maybe there also have several company will decide it by your part-time experience. But the most of part-time job doesn't relative the job you find. Because the company doesn't let untrained person to do the complex job. So you also couldn't get any plus from your part-time experience when you find the job. Part-time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should control your time well. Don't let part-time job take huge part in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your study. Study still should be the first in your ranking. Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good experience to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student. It's an unchangeable rule.

JPN

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Well organized logic flow. Short but adequate examples were provided.

Maybe considering how to interest readers would make the essay even better.

Actually, student have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, must learn basic theory. have only years to learn level knowledge and job do whole . If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. to the job, so can't avoid with others, many decide who they want who more level knowledge. Maybe there also several will part-time experience. most part-time the job you find the company untrained to do complex job. you also any from your part-time experience you find the job. -time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should your time well. Don't let part-time job huge in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your still should be first . Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student an unchangeable rule.

Actually, student doesn't have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, you must have to learn the basic theory. So you just have only 7 years to learn the pro level knowledge, and choice your job which you maybe will do your whole life. If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. Everyone wants to do the job they want, so you can't avoid to compare with others, many company decide who they want is determined by who have more pro level knowledge. Maybe there also have several company will decide it by your part-time experience. But the most of part-time job doesn't relative the job you find. Because the company doesn't let untrained person to do the complex job. So you also couldn't get any plus from your part-time experience when you find the job. Part-time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should control your time well. Don't let part-time job take huge part in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your study. Study still should be the first in your ranking. Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good experience to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student. It's an unchangeable rule.

THA

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Seems that the writer concentrated on one topic, experience, and deep analyzed it.

Could not understand many sentences because they were too short. Need to learn how to use commas and verbs.

Actually, student have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, must learn basic theory. have only years to learn level knowledge and job do whole . If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. to the job, so can't avoid with others, many decide who they want who more level knowledge. Maybe there also several will part-time experience. most part-time the job you find the company untrained to do complex job. you also any from your part-time experience you find the job. -time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should your time well. Don't let part-time job huge in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your still should be first . Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student an unchangeable rule.

Actually, student doesn't have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, you must have to learn the basic theory. So you just have only 7 years to learn the pro level knowledge, and choice your job which you maybe will do your whole life. If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. Everyone wants to do the job they want, so you can't avoid to compare with others, many company decide who they want is determined by who have more pro level knowledge. Maybe there also have several company will decide it by your part-time experience. But the most of part-time job doesn't relative the job you find. Because the company doesn't let untrained person to do the complex job. So you also couldn't get any plus from your part-time experience when you find the job. Part-time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should control your time well. Don't let part-time job take huge part in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your study. Study still should be the first in your ranking. Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good experience to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student. It's an unchangeable rule.

CHN

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Your message and reasons are quite clear, and each reason is mentioned in order with good writing skills.

No big weak point to be mentioned. Does it mean that the students who do not have part time job, cannot enjoy their college life?

Nowadays, a number of college students are taking part-time jobs is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer , depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience provides youths with the chance to get society gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they from the job will certainly reduce the burden their parents . However, that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time should be for learning, thus leading to grades. the first for students. , some young people fail to spend their money reasonably fall into habit. it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-but it may have some side effects have a good plan. with many , part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.

Nowadays, quite a number of college students are taking part-time jobs. But is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer can be various, depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience which provides youths with the chance to get close to society as well as to gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and how to deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they get from the job will certainly reduce the burden of their parents more or less. However, it can't be ignored that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time which should be for learning to work, thus leading to decline of grades. But the fact is that the first thing for students is still study. Also, some young people fail to spend their money reasonably. Instead, they fall into the habit of wasting money. So, it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-regulation but it may have some side effects if the student doesn't have a good plan. In common with many things, part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.

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Unique and good perspective that needed to check job whether it is safe and appropriate for students and ask parents’ opinion in advance.

Needed clearer explanation: “you work in restaurant, if you have bad friends, there are terrible things waiting for you too”. Terrible things happen only in restaurant?

Nowadays, a number of college students are taking part-time jobs is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer , depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience provides youths with the chance to get society gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they from the job will certainly reduce the burden their parents . However, that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time should be for learning, thus leading to grades. the first for students. , some young people fail to spend their money reasonably fall into habit. it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-but it may have some side effects have a good plan. with many , part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.

Nowadays, quite a number of college students are taking part-time jobs. But is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer can be various, depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience which provides youths with the chance to get close to society as well as to gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and how to deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they get from the job will certainly reduce the burden of their parents more or less. However, it can't be ignored that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time which should be for learning to work, thus leading to decline of grades. But the fact is that the first thing for students is still study. Also, some young people fail to spend their money reasonably. Instead, they fall into the habit of wasting money. So, it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-regulation but it may have some side effects if the student doesn't have a good plan. In common with many things, part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.

KOR

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Understand your reasons and conclusion. Nice idea to buy birthday present for your parents.

Not clear why is it important to make friends in part time job. What is the problem for the students who graduate with no experience of part time job?

Nowadays, a number of college students are taking part-time jobs is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer , depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience provides youths with the chance to get society gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they from the job will certainly reduce the burden their parents . However, that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time should be for learning, thus leading to grades. the first for students. , some young people fail to spend their money reasonably fall into habit. it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-but it may have some side effects have a good plan. with many , part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.

Nowadays, quite a number of college students are taking part-time jobs. But is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer can be various, depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience which provides youths with the chance to get close to society as well as to gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and how to deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they get from the job will certainly reduce the burden of their parents more or less. However, it can't be ignored that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time which should be for learning to work, thus leading to decline of grades. But the fact is that the first thing for students is still study. Also, some young people fail to spend their money reasonably. Instead, they fall into the habit of wasting money. So, it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-regulation but it may have some side effects if the student doesn't have a good plan. In common with many things, part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.

TWN

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Clearly categorized the students which need to have part time job or do not for reasoning of your conclusion.

Is there any solution for the students having a financial problem, not to be obliged to work? Minor spelling errors and conjugated forms of verbs are needed to be checked.

Nowadays, a number of college students are taking part-time jobs is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer , depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience provides youths with the chance to get society gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they from the job will certainly reduce the burden their parents . However, that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time should be for learning, thus leading to grades. the first for students. , some young people fail to spend their money reasonably fall into habit. it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-but it may have some side effects have a good plan. with many , part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.

Nowadays, quite a number of college students are taking part-time jobs. But is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer can be various, depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience which provides youths with the chance to get close to society as well as to gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and how to deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they get from the job will certainly reduce the burden of their parents more or less. However, it can't be ignored that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time which should be for learning to work, thus leading to decline of grades. But the fact is that the first thing for students is still study. Also, some young people fail to spend their money reasonably. Instead, they fall into the habit of wasting money. So, it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-regulation but it may have some side effects if the student doesn't have a good plan. In common with many things, part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.

TWN

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Your conclusion and reasons are relatively mentioned clearly. Global perspective related to the need of part time job by students.

What kind of experiences you can get from part time job and they help for what situation or problems?

Nowadays, a number of college students are taking part-time jobs is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer , depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience provides youths with the chance to get society gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they from the job will certainly reduce the burden their parents . However, that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time should be for learning, thus leading to grades. the first for students. , some young people fail to spend their money reasonably fall into habit. it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-but it may have some side effects have a good plan. with many , part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.

Nowadays, quite a number of college students are taking part-time jobs. But is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer can be various, depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience which provides youths with the chance to get close to society as well as to gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and how to deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they get from the job will certainly reduce the burden of their parents more or less. However, it can't be ignored that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time which should be for learning to work, thus leading to decline of grades. But the fact is that the first thing for students is still study. Also, some young people fail to spend their money reasonably. Instead, they fall into the habit of wasting money. So, it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-regulation but it may have some side effects if the student doesn't have a good plan. In common with many things, part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.

JPN

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Your message and reasons are clear to understand. Each reason is mentioned in order with your personal experience.

More detailed reasoning for “College students cannot get enough knowledge in their class?” is needed to be more convincing message.

Nowadays, a number of college students are taking part-time jobs is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer , depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience provides youths with the chance to get society gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they from the job will certainly reduce the burden their parents . However, that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time should be for learning, thus leading to grades. the first for students. , some young people fail to spend their money reasonably fall into habit. it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-but it may have some side effects have a good plan. with many , part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.

Nowadays, quite a number of college students are taking part-time jobs. But is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer can be various, depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience which provides youths with the chance to get close to society as well as to gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and how to deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they get from the job will certainly reduce the burden of their parents more or less. However, it can't be ignored that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time which should be for learning to work, thus leading to decline of grades. But the fact is that the first thing for students is still study. Also, some young people fail to spend their money reasonably. Instead, they fall into the habit of wasting money. So, it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-regulation but it may have some side effects if the student doesn't have a good plan. In common with many things, part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.

CHN

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Your reasons are simple and clearly mentioned. Well explained advantages of part time job.

Why is it important to learn experience in college, not in working society? To only understand how hard it is to earn money, leads to a good preparation for future? Challenge is to doing part time job?

Nowadays, a number of college students are taking part-time jobs is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer , depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience provides youths with the chance to get society gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they from the job will certainly reduce the burden their parents . However, that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time should be for learning, thus leading to grades. the first for students. , some young people fail to spend their money reasonably fall into habit. it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-but it may have some side effects have a good plan. with many , part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.

Nowadays, quite a number of college students are taking part-time jobs. But is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer can be various, depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience which provides youths with the chance to get close to society as well as to gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and how to deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they get from the job will certainly reduce the burden of their parents more or less. However, it can't be ignored that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time which should be for learning to work, thus leading to decline of grades. But the fact is that the first thing for students is still study. Also, some young people fail to spend their money reasonably. Instead, they fall into the habit of wasting money. So, it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-regulation but it may have some side effects if the student doesn't have a good plan. In common with many things, part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.

CHN

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Your conclusion and reasons are logically mentioned in order and advantages and disadvantages are well balanced.

Any idea that stops students spending unreasonably lots of money unreasonably earned by their part time job?

Nowadays, a number of college students are taking part-time jobs is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer , depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience provides youths with the chance to get society gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they from the job will certainly reduce the burden their parents . However, that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time should be for learning, thus leading to grades. the first for students. , some young people fail to spend their money reasonably fall into habit. it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-but it may have some side effects have a good plan. with many , part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.

Nowadays, quite a number of college students are taking part-time jobs. But is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer can be various, depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience which provides youths with the chance to get close to society as well as to gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and how to deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they get from the job will certainly reduce the burden of their parents more or less. However, it can't be ignored that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time which should be for learning to work, thus leading to decline of grades. But the fact is that the first thing for students is still study. Also, some young people fail to spend their money reasonably. Instead, they fall into the habit of wasting money. So, it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-regulation but it may have some side effects if the student doesn't have a good plan. In common with many things, part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.

PHL

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Your reasons are all logical to your conclusion and good perspective for focusing on student’s health.

Do you agree with part time job not tough which do not occupy their time too much?

Nowadays, a number of college students are taking part-time jobs is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer , depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience provides youths with the chance to get society gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they from the job will certainly reduce the burden their parents . However, that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time should be for learning, thus leading to grades. the first for students. , some young people fail to spend their money reasonably fall into habit. it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-but it may have some side effects have a good plan. with many , part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.

Nowadays, quite a number of college students are taking part-time jobs. But is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer can be various, depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience which provides youths with the chance to get close to society as well as to gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and how to deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they get from the job will certainly reduce the burden of their parents more or less. However, it can't be ignored that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time which should be for learning to work, thus leading to decline of grades. But the fact is that the first thing for students is still study. Also, some young people fail to spend their money reasonably. Instead, they fall into the habit of wasting money. So, it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-regulation but it may have some side effects if the student doesn't have a good plan. In common with many things, part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.

CHN

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Interesting perspective identifying the conditions under which a part-time job would be beneficial.

This is a unique way to let have a choice to the reader, but clearly statement of your conclusion is needed.

Nowadays, a number of college students are taking part-time jobs is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer , depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience provides youths with the chance to get society gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they from the job will certainly reduce the burden their parents . However, that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time should be for learning, thus leading to grades. the first for students. , some young people fail to spend their money reasonably fall into habit. it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-but it may have some side effects have a good plan. with many , part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.

Nowadays, quite a number of college students are taking part-time jobs. But is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer can be various, depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience which provides youths with the chance to get close to society as well as to gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and how to deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they get from the job will certainly reduce the burden of their parents more or less. However, it can't be ignored that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time which should be for learning to work, thus leading to decline of grades. But the fact is that the first thing for students is still study. Also, some young people fail to spend their money reasonably. Instead, they fall into the habit of wasting money. So, it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-regulation but it may have some side effects if the student doesn't have a good plan. In common with many things, part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.

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I think get a part job while . If wants to money or more experience I think should be . , when are busy, no time and easily is not better choice. part job has negative and positive . positive : can more money help parent, increase income, experience, friends more independent take care . the negative easily tired, spend time work, and less time study. If you want to get good , I think should think twice about a part job like this manage our time and can maintain all of we should think twice about our health because tak a part job is pretty difficult when manage it . If I must chooseI not ecause is difficult me to manage my time, and I easily. Despite, I goals in my major (accounting) I just usual. a part job like this just my time and risk. I absolutely refuse this.

I think get a part job while study, is depend on the person. If she/ he wants to gain money or get more experience I think it should be okay. But, when we are really busy, no time and easily tired. It is not better choice. Get part job has a negative and positive opinions. In positive : you can get more money for helping your parent, increase your income, get more experience, get more friends and more independent for take care your self so you can be mature. And the negative area is : you easily for tired, spending many time for work, and less time of study. If you want to get good mark, I think we should think twice about take a part job like this? Can we manage our time, and can we maintain all of this, although we should think twice about our body health.. because take a part job is pretty difficult when you can't manage it in the right side. If I must choose one of this.. I will not. Because It is pretty difficult from me to manage my time, and actually I am easily tired. Despite, I didn't have any goals in my major (accounting ) like getting a good Final Exam mark or etc, I just doing all of this as usual. Take a part job like this just spend my time and myself into risks. So I absolutely refuse about this.

JPN

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I think get a part job while . If wants to money or more experience I think should be . , when are busy, no time and easily is not better choice. part job has negative and positive . positive : can more money help parent, increase income, experience, friends more independent take care . the negative easily tired, spend time work, and less time study. If you want to get good , I think should think twice about a part job like this manage our time and can maintain all of we should think twice about our health because tak a part job is pretty difficult when manage it . If I must chooseI not ecause is difficult me to manage my time, and I easily. Despite, I goals in my major (accounting) I just usual. a part job like this just my time and risk. I absolutely refuse this.

I think get a part job while study, is depend on the person. If she/ he wants to gain money or get more experience I think it should be okay. But, when we are really busy, no time and easily tired. It is not better choice. Get part job has a negative and positive opinions. In positive : you can get more money for helping your parent, increase your income, get more experience, get more friends and more independent for take care your self so you can be mature. And the negative area is : you easily for tired, spending many time for work, and less time of study. If you want to get good mark, I think we should think twice about take a part job like this? Can we manage our time, and can we maintain all of this, although we should think twice about our body health.. because take a part job is pretty difficult when you can't manage it in the right side. If I must choose one of this.. I will not. Because It is pretty difficult from me to manage my time, and actually I am easily tired. Despite, I didn't have any goals in my major (accounting ) like getting a good Final Exam mark or etc, I just doing all of this as usual. Take a part job like this just spend my time and myself into risks. So I absolutely refuse about this.

KOR

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I think get a part job while . If wants to money or more experience I think should be . , when are busy, no time and easily is not better choice. part job has negative and positive . positive : can more money help parent, increase income, experience, friends more independent take care . the negative easily tired, spend time work, and less time study. If you want to get good , I think should think twice about a part job like this manage our time and can maintain all of we should think twice about our health because tak a part job is pretty difficult when manage it . If I must chooseI not ecause is difficult me to manage my time, and I easily. Despite, I goals in my major (accounting) I just usual. a part job like this just my time and risk. I absolutely refuse this.

I think get a part job while study, is depend on the person. If she/ he wants to gain money or get more experience I think it should be okay. But, when we are really busy, no time and easily tired. It is not better choice. Get part job has a negative and positive opinions. In positive : you can get more money for helping your parent, increase your income, get more experience, get more friends and more independent for take care your self so you can be mature. And the negative area is : you easily for tired, spending many time for work, and less time of study. If you want to get good mark, I think we should think twice about take a part job like this? Can we manage our time, and can we maintain all of this, although we should think twice about our body health.. because take a part job is pretty difficult when you can't manage it in the right side. If I must choose one of this.. I will not. Because It is pretty difficult from me to manage my time, and actually I am easily tired. Despite, I didn't have any goals in my major (accounting ) like getting a good Final Exam mark or etc, I just doing all of this as usual. Take a part job like this just spend my time and myself into risks. So I absolutely refuse about this.

CHN

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I think get a part job while . If wants to money or more experience I think should be . , when are busy, no time and easily is not better choice. part job has negative and positive . positive : can more money help parent, increase income, experience, friends more independent take care . the negative easily tired, spend time work, and less time study. If you want to get good , I think should think twice about a part job like this manage our time and can maintain all of we should think twice about our health because tak a part job is pretty difficult when manage it . If I must chooseI not ecause is difficult me to manage my time, and I easily. Despite, I goals in my major (accounting) I just usual. a part job like this just my time and risk. I absolutely refuse this.

I think get a part job while study, is depend on the person. If she/ he wants to gain money or get more experience I think it should be okay. But, when we are really busy, no time and easily tired. It is not better choice. Get part job has a negative and positive opinions. In positive : you can get more money for helping your parent, increase your income, get more experience, get more friends and more independent for take care your self so you can be mature. And the negative area is : you easily for tired, spending many time for work, and less time of study. If you want to get good mark, I think we should think twice about take a part job like this? Can we manage our time, and can we maintain all of this, although we should think twice about our body health.. because take a part job is pretty difficult when you can't manage it in the right side. If I must choose one of this.. I will not. Because It is pretty difficult from me to manage my time, and actually I am easily tired. Despite, I didn't have any goals in my major (accounting ) like getting a good Final Exam mark or etc, I just doing all of this as usual. Take a part job like this just spend my time and myself into risks. So I absolutely refuse about this.

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I think get a part job while . If wants to money or more experience I think should be . , when are busy, no time and easily is not better choice. part job has negative and positive . positive : can more money help parent, increase income, experience, friends more independent take care . the negative easily tired, spend time work, and less time study. If you want to get good , I think should think twice about a part job like this manage our time and can maintain all of we should think twice about our health because tak a part job is pretty difficult when manage it . If I must chooseI not ecause is difficult me to manage my time, and I easily. Despite, I goals in my major (accounting) I just usual. a part job like this just my time and risk. I absolutely refuse this.

I think get a part job while study, is depend on the person. If she/ he wants to gain money or get more experience I think it should be okay. But, when we are really busy, no time and easily tired. It is not better choice. Get part job has a negative and positive opinions. In positive : you can get more money for helping your parent, increase your income, get more experience, get more friends and more independent for take care your self so you can be mature. And the negative area is : you easily for tired, spending many time for work, and less time of study. If you want to get good mark, I think we should think twice about take a part job like this? Can we manage our time, and can we maintain all of this, although we should think twice about our body health.. because take a part job is pretty difficult when you can't manage it in the right side. If I must choose one of this.. I will not. Because It is pretty difficult from me to manage my time, and actually I am easily tired. Despite, I didn't have any goals in my major (accounting ) like getting a good Final Exam mark or etc, I just doing all of this as usual. Take a part job like this just spend my time and myself into risks. So I absolutely refuse about this.

THA

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I think get a part job while . If wants to money or more experience I think should be . , when are busy, no time and easily is not better choice. part job has negative and positive . positive : can more money help parent, increase income, experience, friends more independent take care . the negative easily tired, spend time work, and less time study. If you want to get good , I think should think twice about a part job like this manage our time and can maintain all of we should think twice about our health because tak a part job is pretty difficult when manage it . If I must chooseI not ecause is difficult me to manage my time, and I easily. Despite, I goals in my major (accounting) I just usual. a part job like this just my time and risk. I absolutely refuse this.

I think get a part job while study, is depend on the person. If she/ he wants to gain money or get more experience I think it should be okay. But, when we are really busy, no time and easily tired. It is not better choice. Get part job has a negative and positive opinions. In positive : you can get more money for helping your parent, increase your income, get more experience, get more friends and more independent for take care your self so you can be mature. And the negative area is : you easily for tired, spending many time for work, and less time of study. If you want to get good mark, I think we should think twice about take a part job like this? Can we manage our time, and can we maintain all of this, although we should think twice about our body health.. because take a part job is pretty difficult when you can't manage it in the right side. If I must choose one of this.. I will not. Because It is pretty difficult from me to manage my time, and actually I am easily tired. Despite, I didn't have any goals in my major (accounting ) like getting a good Final Exam mark or etc, I just doing all of this as usual. Take a part job like this just spend my time and myself into risks. So I absolutely refuse about this.

IDN

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Very interesting start, involvement

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I think get a part job while . If wants to money or more experience I think should be . , when are busy, no time and easily is not better choice. part job has negative and positive . positive : can more money help parent, increase income, experience, friends more independent take care . the negative easily tired, spend time work, and less time study. If you want to get good , I think should think twice about a part job like this manage our time and can maintain all of we should think twice about our health because tak a part job is pretty difficult when manage it . If I must chooseI not ecause is difficult me to manage my time, and I easily. Despite, I goals in my major (accounting) I just usual. a part job like this just my time and risk. I absolutely refuse this.

I think get a part job while study, is depend on the person. If she/ he wants to gain money or get more experience I think it should be okay. But, when we are really busy, no time and easily tired. It is not better choice. Get part job has a negative and positive opinions. In positive : you can get more money for helping your parent, increase your income, get more experience, get more friends and more independent for take care your self so you can be mature. And the negative area is : you easily for tired, spending many time for work, and less time of study. If you want to get good mark, I think we should think twice about take a part job like this? Can we manage our time, and can we maintain all of this, although we should think twice about our body health.. because take a part job is pretty difficult when you can't manage it in the right side. If I must choose one of this.. I will not. Because It is pretty difficult from me to manage my time, and actually I am easily tired. Despite, I didn't have any goals in my major (accounting ) like getting a good Final Exam mark or etc, I just doing all of this as usual. Take a part job like this just spend my time and myself into risks. So I absolutely refuse about this.

PHL

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Should more clearly introduce argument then organize essay with more well-defined reasons

I think get a part job while . If wants to money or more experience I think should be . , when are busy, no time and easily is not better choice. part job has negative and positive . positive : can more money help parent, increase income, experience, friends more independent take care . the negative easily tired, spend time work, and less time study. If you want to get good , I think should think twice about a part job like this manage our time and can maintain all of we should think twice about our health because tak a part job is pretty difficult when manage it . If I must chooseI not ecause is difficult me to manage my time, and I easily. Despite, I goals in my major (accounting) I just usual. a part job like this just my time and risk. I absolutely refuse this.

I think get a part job while study, is depend on the person. If she/ he wants to gain money or get more experience I think it should be okay. But, when we are really busy, no time and easily tired. It is not better choice. Get part job has a negative and positive opinions. In positive : you can get more money for helping your parent, increase your income, get more experience, get more friends and more independent for take care your self so you can be mature. And the negative area is : you easily for tired, spending many time for work, and less time of study. If you want to get good mark, I think we should think twice about take a part job like this? Can we manage our time, and can we maintain all of this, although we should think twice about our body health.. because take a part job is pretty difficult when you can't manage it in the right side. If I must choose one of this.. I will not. Because It is pretty difficult from me to manage my time, and actually I am easily tired. Despite, I didn't have any goals in my major (accounting ) like getting a good Final Exam mark or etc, I just doing all of this as usual. Take a part job like this just spend my time and myself into risks. So I absolutely refuse about this.

KOR

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I can discern very well what the author wants to say

Inaccuracies affect comprehension, fluency. Some ideas unconnected

I think get a part job while . If wants to money or more experience I think should be . , when are busy, no time and easily is not better choice. part job has negative and positive . positive : can more money help parent, increase income, experience, friends more independent take care . the negative easily tired, spend time work, and less time study. If you want to get good , I think should think twice about a part job like this manage our time and can maintain all of we should think twice about our health because tak a part job is pretty difficult when manage it . If I must chooseI not ecause is difficult me to manage my time, and I easily. Despite, I goals in my major (accounting) I just usual. a part job like this just my time and risk. I absolutely refuse this.

I think get a part job while study, is depend on the person. If she/ he wants to gain money or get more experience I think it should be okay. But, when we are really busy, no time and easily tired. It is not better choice. Get part job has a negative and positive opinions. In positive : you can get more money for helping your parent, increase your income, get more experience, get more friends and more independent for take care your self so you can be mature. And the negative area is : you easily for tired, spending many time for work, and less time of study. If you want to get good mark, I think we should think twice about take a part job like this? Can we manage our time, and can we maintain all of this, although we should think twice about our body health.. because take a part job is pretty difficult when you can't manage it in the right side. If I must choose one of this.. I will not. Because It is pretty difficult from me to manage my time, and actually I am easily tired. Despite, I didn't have any goals in my major (accounting ) like getting a good Final Exam mark or etc, I just doing all of this as usual. Take a part job like this just spend my time and myself into risks. So I absolutely refuse about this.

TWN

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I think get a part job while . If wants to money or more experience I think should be . , when are busy, no time and easily is not better choice. part job has negative and positive . positive : can more money help parent, increase income, experience, friends more independent take care . the negative easily tired, spend time work, and less time study. If you want to get good , I think should think twice about a part job like this manage our time and can maintain all of we should think twice about our health because tak a part job is pretty difficult when manage it . If I must chooseI not ecause is difficult me to manage my time, and I easily. Despite, I goals in my major (accounting) I just usual. a part job like this just my time and risk. I absolutely refuse this.

I think get a part job while study, is depend on the person. If she/ he wants to gain money or get more experience I think it should be okay. But, when we are really busy, no time and easily tired. It is not better choice. Get part job has a negative and positive opinions. In positive : you can get more money for helping your parent, increase your income, get more experience, get more friends and more independent for take care your self so you can be mature. And the negative area is : you easily for tired, spending many time for work, and less time of study. If you want to get good mark, I think we should think twice about take a part job like this? Can we manage our time, and can we maintain all of this, although we should think twice about our body health.. because take a part job is pretty difficult when you can't manage it in the right side. If I must choose one of this.. I will not. Because It is pretty difficult from me to manage my time, and actually I am easily tired. Despite, I didn't have any goals in my major (accounting ) like getting a good Final Exam mark or etc, I just doing all of this as usual. Take a part job like this just spend my time and myself into risks. So I absolutely refuse about this.

CHN

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sentence structure repetitions: "some people." impedance with the word: selection. not so much opinion presented

I agree because, first parttime make you spend your free time in the right way. kill time by shopping or traveling all of activity time if you get job in the shop or restaurant hat's earning you money. Second can improve your skill if you only meet small social and have no so the job would help you to meet many kinds of people might be good for you. Third your and can make you grow up the job sometime might be hard or ; if you can it that would be great. Fourth you are in college you are not little child. The parttime job can help and you would be proud earn your pocket money your two hands other your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. the last reason some learner have much time to exercise so do the job would help to move bod and use brain the result is health. I think is good way to spend your timeand don't forget to study hard too.

I agree because, first part time job make you spend your free time in the right way. Somebody kill their time by go shopping or traveling all of activity lose your time but if you get the job in the shop or restaurant. That's earning your money. Second it can improve your skill if you only meet the small social and have no accommodate so the job would help you to meet new many kinds of people that's might be good for you. Third it's improved your patient and can make you grow up; the job sometime might be hard or not comfortable; if you can pass it that would be great. Fourth you are in the college that's mean you are not the little child. The part time job can help you parent and you would be proud to your self that you can earn your pocket money by your two hands but in other word your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. And the last reason some learner have not much time to have an exercise so do the job would help you to move your body and use your brain the result is your health is good. I think it is the good way to spend your time on past time job and don't forget to study hard too.

CHN

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"College students" as a starter of a sentence was used thrice

I agree because, first parttime make you spend your free time in the right way. kill time by shopping or traveling all of activity time if you get job in the shop or restaurant hat's earning you money. Second can improve your skill if you only meet small social and have no so the job would help you to meet many kinds of people might be good for you. Third your and can make you grow up the job sometime might be hard or ; if you can it that would be great. Fourth you are in college you are not little child. The parttime job can help and you would be proud earn your pocket money your two hands other your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. the last reason some learner have much time to exercise so do the job would help to move bod and use brain the result is health. I think is good way to spend your timeand don't forget to study hard too.

I agree because, first part time job make you spend your free time in the right way. Somebody kill their time by go shopping or traveling all of activity lose your time but if you get the job in the shop or restaurant. That's earning your money. Second it can improve your skill if you only meet the small social and have no accommodate so the job would help you to meet new many kinds of people that's might be good for you. Third it's improved your patient and can make you grow up; the job sometime might be hard or not comfortable; if you can pass it that would be great. Fourth you are in the college that's mean you are not the little child. The part time job can help you parent and you would be proud to your self that you can earn your pocket money by your two hands but in other word your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. And the last reason some learner have not much time to have an exercise so do the job would help you to move your body and use your brain the result is your health is good. I think it is the good way to spend your time on past time job and don't forget to study hard too.

KOR

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I agree because, first parttime make you spend your free time in the right way. kill time by shopping or traveling all of activity time if you get job in the shop or restaurant hat's earning you money. Second can improve your skill if you only meet small social and have no so the job would help you to meet many kinds of people might be good for you. Third your and can make you grow up the job sometime might be hard or ; if you can it that would be great. Fourth you are in college you are not little child. The parttime job can help and you would be proud earn your pocket money your two hands other your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. the last reason some learner have much time to exercise so do the job would help to move bod and use brain the result is health. I think is good way to spend your timeand don't forget to study hard too.

I agree because, first part time job make you spend your free time in the right way. Somebody kill their time by go shopping or traveling all of activity lose your time but if you get the job in the shop or restaurant. That's earning your money. Second it can improve your skill if you only meet the small social and have no accommodate so the job would help you to meet new many kinds of people that's might be good for you. Third it's improved your patient and can make you grow up; the job sometime might be hard or not comfortable; if you can pass it that would be great. Fourth you are in the college that's mean you are not the little child. The part time job can help you parent and you would be proud to your self that you can earn your pocket money by your two hands but in other word your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. And the last reason some learner have not much time to have an exercise so do the job would help you to move your body and use your brain the result is your health is good. I think it is the good way to spend your time on past time job and don't forget to study hard too.

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singular plural form problem ex. Students in college is --> students in college are

I agree because, first parttime make you spend your free time in the right way. kill time by shopping or traveling all of activity time if you get job in the shop or restaurant hat's earning you money. Second can improve your skill if you only meet small social and have no so the job would help you to meet many kinds of people might be good for you. Third your and can make you grow up the job sometime might be hard or ; if you can it that would be great. Fourth you are in college you are not little child. The parttime job can help and you would be proud earn your pocket money your two hands other your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. the last reason some learner have much time to exercise so do the job would help to move bod and use brain the result is health. I think is good way to spend your timeand don't forget to study hard too.

I agree because, first part time job make you spend your free time in the right way. Somebody kill their time by go shopping or traveling all of activity lose your time but if you get the job in the shop or restaurant. That's earning your money. Second it can improve your skill if you only meet the small social and have no accommodate so the job would help you to meet new many kinds of people that's might be good for you. Third it's improved your patient and can make you grow up; the job sometime might be hard or not comfortable; if you can pass it that would be great. Fourth you are in the college that's mean you are not the little child. The part time job can help you parent and you would be proud to your self that you can earn your pocket money by your two hands but in other word your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. And the last reason some learner have not much time to have an exercise so do the job would help you to move your body and use your brain the result is your health is good. I think it is the good way to spend your time on past time job and don't forget to study hard too.

JPN

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some words can be improved. Ex, instead of saying severe working--->difficult working

I agree because, first parttime make you spend your free time in the right way. kill time by shopping or traveling all of activity time if you get job in the shop or restaurant hat's earning you money. Second can improve your skill if you only meet small social and have no so the job would help you to meet many kinds of people might be good for you. Third your and can make you grow up the job sometime might be hard or ; if you can it that would be great. Fourth you are in college you are not little child. The parttime job can help and you would be proud earn your pocket money your two hands other your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. the last reason some learner have much time to exercise so do the job would help to move bod and use brain the result is health. I think is good way to spend your timeand don't forget to study hard too.

I agree because, first part time job make you spend your free time in the right way. Somebody kill their time by go shopping or traveling all of activity lose your time but if you get the job in the shop or restaurant. That's earning your money. Second it can improve your skill if you only meet the small social and have no accommodate so the job would help you to meet new many kinds of people that's might be good for you. Third it's improved your patient and can make you grow up; the job sometime might be hard or not comfortable; if you can pass it that would be great. Fourth you are in the college that's mean you are not the little child. The part time job can help you parent and you would be proud to your self that you can earn your pocket money by your two hands but in other word your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. And the last reason some learner have not much time to have an exercise so do the job would help you to move your body and use your brain the result is your health is good. I think it is the good way to spend your time on past time job and don't forget to study hard too.

CHN

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64.5

good usage of hyphen (after-school work), very concise and easy to read

lacks prepositions in some sentences, sometimes its hard to understand the point

I agree because, first parttime make you spend your free time in the right way. kill time by shopping or traveling all of activity time if you get job in the shop or restaurant hat's earning you money. Second can improve your skill if you only meet small social and have no so the job would help you to meet many kinds of people might be good for you. Third your and can make you grow up the job sometime might be hard or ; if you can it that would be great. Fourth you are in college you are not little child. The parttime job can help and you would be proud earn your pocket money your two hands other your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. the last reason some learner have much time to exercise so do the job would help to move bod and use brain the result is health. I think is good way to spend your timeand don't forget to study hard too.

I agree because, first part time job make you spend your free time in the right way. Somebody kill their time by go shopping or traveling all of activity lose your time but if you get the job in the shop or restaurant. That's earning your money. Second it can improve your skill if you only meet the small social and have no accommodate so the job would help you to meet new many kinds of people that's might be good for you. Third it's improved your patient and can make you grow up; the job sometime might be hard or not comfortable; if you can pass it that would be great. Fourth you are in the college that's mean you are not the little child. The part time job can help you parent and you would be proud to your self that you can earn your pocket money by your two hands but in other word your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. And the last reason some learner have not much time to have an exercise so do the job would help you to move your body and use your brain the result is your health is good. I think it is the good way to spend your time on past time job and don't forget to study hard too.

THA

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reading is easy and sentence structure is good. The essay is quite well organized.

"I agree with part time job" was used twice in different sentences.

I agree because, first parttime make you spend your free time in the right way. kill time by shopping or traveling all of activity time if you get job in the shop or restaurant hat's earning you money. Second can improve your skill if you only meet small social and have no so the job would help you to meet many kinds of people might be good for you. Third your and can make you grow up the job sometime might be hard or ; if you can it that would be great. Fourth you are in college you are not little child. The parttime job can help and you would be proud earn your pocket money your two hands other your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. the last reason some learner have much time to exercise so do the job would help to move bod and use brain the result is health. I think is good way to spend your timeand don't forget to study hard too.

I agree because, first part time job make you spend your free time in the right way. Somebody kill their time by go shopping or traveling all of activity lose your time but if you get the job in the shop or restaurant. That's earning your money. Second it can improve your skill if you only meet the small social and have no accommodate so the job would help you to meet new many kinds of people that's might be good for you. Third it's improved your patient and can make you grow up; the job sometime might be hard or not comfortable; if you can pass it that would be great. Fourth you are in the college that's mean you are not the little child. The part time job can help you parent and you would be proud to your self that you can earn your pocket money by your two hands but in other word your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. And the last reason some learner have not much time to have an exercise so do the job would help you to move your body and use your brain the result is your health is good. I think it is the good way to spend your time on past time job and don't forget to study hard too.

JPN

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sentence structure is organized because of cohesive devices used (firstly, secondly)

strong at the start but struggled towards the middle to continue with the explanation

I agree because, first parttime make you spend your free time in the right way. kill time by shopping or traveling all of activity time if you get job in the shop or restaurant hat's earning you money. Second can improve your skill if you only meet small social and have no so the job would help you to meet many kinds of people might be good for you. Third your and can make you grow up the job sometime might be hard or ; if you can it that would be great. Fourth you are in college you are not little child. The parttime job can help and you would be proud earn your pocket money your two hands other your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. the last reason some learner have much time to exercise so do the job would help to move bod and use brain the result is health. I think is good way to spend your timeand don't forget to study hard too.

I agree because, first part time job make you spend your free time in the right way. Somebody kill their time by go shopping or traveling all of activity lose your time but if you get the job in the shop or restaurant. That's earning your money. Second it can improve your skill if you only meet the small social and have no accommodate so the job would help you to meet new many kinds of people that's might be good for you. Third it's improved your patient and can make you grow up; the job sometime might be hard or not comfortable; if you can pass it that would be great. Fourth you are in the college that's mean you are not the little child. The part time job can help you parent and you would be proud to your self that you can earn your pocket money by your two hands but in other word your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. And the last reason some learner have not much time to have an exercise so do the job would help you to move your body and use your brain the result is your health is good. I think it is the good way to spend your time on past time job and don't forget to study hard too.

CHN

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83

simple essay but was able to use complex sentencing. Well thought of

"social opinion" sounds awkward to me. Commas are sometimes missing in sentences

I agree because, first parttime make you spend your free time in the right way. kill time by shopping or traveling all of activity time if you get job in the shop or restaurant hat's earning you money. Second can improve your skill if you only meet small social and have no so the job would help you to meet many kinds of people might be good for you. Third your and can make you grow up the job sometime might be hard or ; if you can it that would be great. Fourth you are in college you are not little child. The parttime job can help and you would be proud earn your pocket money your two hands other your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. the last reason some learner have much time to exercise so do the job would help to move bod and use brain the result is health. I think is good way to spend your timeand don't forget to study hard too.

I agree because, first part time job make you spend your free time in the right way. Somebody kill their time by go shopping or traveling all of activity lose your time but if you get the job in the shop or restaurant. That's earning your money. Second it can improve your skill if you only meet the small social and have no accommodate so the job would help you to meet new many kinds of people that's might be good for you. Third it's improved your patient and can make you grow up; the job sometime might be hard or not comfortable; if you can pass it that would be great. Fourth you are in the college that's mean you are not the little child. The part time job can help you parent and you would be proud to your self that you can earn your pocket money by your two hands but in other word your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. And the last reason some learner have not much time to have an exercise so do the job would help you to move your body and use your brain the result is your health is good. I think it is the good way to spend your time on past time job and don't forget to study hard too.

JPN

A2_0

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it started well and the word "preceding" makes the paragraph a bit sophisticated

it was not able to support its opinion very much, the explanations are a bit simplistic

I agree because, first parttime make you spend your free time in the right way. kill time by shopping or traveling all of activity time if you get job in the shop or restaurant hat's earning you money. Second can improve your skill if you only meet small social and have no so the job would help you to meet many kinds of people might be good for you. Third your and can make you grow up the job sometime might be hard or ; if you can it that would be great. Fourth you are in college you are not little child. The parttime job can help and you would be proud earn your pocket money your two hands other your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. the last reason some learner have much time to exercise so do the job would help to move bod and use brain the result is health. I think is good way to spend your timeand don't forget to study hard too.

I agree because, first part time job make you spend your free time in the right way. Somebody kill their time by go shopping or traveling all of activity lose your time but if you get the job in the shop or restaurant. That's earning your money. Second it can improve your skill if you only meet the small social and have no accommodate so the job would help you to meet new many kinds of people that's might be good for you. Third it's improved your patient and can make you grow up; the job sometime might be hard or not comfortable; if you can pass it that would be great. Fourth you are in the college that's mean you are not the little child. The part time job can help you parent and you would be proud to your self that you can earn your pocket money by your two hands but in other word your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. And the last reason some learner have not much time to have an exercise so do the job would help you to move your body and use your brain the result is your health is good. I think it is the good way to spend your time on past time job and don't forget to study hard too.

TWN

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The writer tries to communicate with the reader especially at the end of the essay.

But at the same time, the last part of the essay goes off the track.

I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have hardly work, they cannot accuratly work. is because they have not enough experience. In the university, no one teaches excutive . Second, orean students do not know money since orean university students pocket money from parents. think people who have never experienced part-time job do not know money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience part-time job and they do not know how to manage spending money ecause they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. it is good experience for university student to work part time job. ast thing is that they can know lots of people. If students work parttime job, they can know a lot workers than general university student. In Korea, it is important to know the people who in the same ., I agree with working part-time job.

I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience before getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have to hardly work, they can not accuratly work. that is because they have not enough experiences. In the university, no one teaches excutive abilities. Second, lots of korean students do not know valuableness about money since lots of korean university students get a pocket money from parents. i think people who have never experienced about part-time job do not know notableness about money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience to work as a part-time job and they do not know how to management spending money. Because they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. so it is good at experience for university student to work as a part time job. Last thing is that they can know lots of people. If students who work part time job, they can be know a lot of workers than general university student. In Korean, it is important to know the people who is in the same part. consequentially, I agree with working part-time job for university students.

CHN

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An well-thought introduction indicates that the writer is willing to communicate with the readers.

Because of language inaccuracy, some sentences were not understandable.

I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have hardly work, they cannot accuratly work. is because they have not enough experience. In the university, no one teaches excutive . Second, orean students do not know money since orean university students pocket money from parents. think people who have never experienced part-time job do not know money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience part-time job and they do not know how to manage spending money ecause they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. it is good experience for university student to work part time job. ast thing is that they can know lots of people. If students work parttime job, they can know a lot workers than general university student. In Korea, it is important to know the people who in the same ., I agree with working part-time job.

I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience before getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have to hardly work, they can not accuratly work. that is because they have not enough experiences. In the university, no one teaches excutive abilities. Second, lots of korean students do not know valuableness about money since lots of korean university students get a pocket money from parents. i think people who have never experienced about part-time job do not know notableness about money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience to work as a part-time job and they do not know how to management spending money. Because they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. so it is good at experience for university student to work as a part time job. Last thing is that they can know lots of people. If students who work part time job, they can be know a lot of workers than general university student. In Korean, it is important to know the people who is in the same part. consequentially, I agree with working part-time job for university students.

CHN

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The writer successfully conveys their opinion with logical and appropriate supporting ideas.

Although it is well-organized, the essay is a little short.

I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have hardly work, they cannot accuratly work. is because they have not enough experience. In the university, no one teaches excutive . Second, orean students do not know money since orean university students pocket money from parents. think people who have never experienced part-time job do not know money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience part-time job and they do not know how to manage spending money ecause they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. it is good experience for university student to work part time job. ast thing is that they can know lots of people. If students work parttime job, they can know a lot workers than general university student. In Korea, it is important to know the people who in the same ., I agree with working part-time job.

I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience before getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have to hardly work, they can not accuratly work. that is because they have not enough experiences. In the university, no one teaches excutive abilities. Second, lots of korean students do not know valuableness about money since lots of korean university students get a pocket money from parents. i think people who have never experienced about part-time job do not know notableness about money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience to work as a part-time job and they do not know how to management spending money. Because they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. so it is good at experience for university student to work as a part time job. Last thing is that they can know lots of people. If students who work part time job, they can be know a lot of workers than general university student. In Korean, it is important to know the people who is in the same part. consequentially, I agree with working part-time job for university students.

IDN

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The essay strictly sticks to the purpose of the task with an easy-to-understand logical structure.

There are some basic grammatical mistakes spotted, though they rarely hinder understanding.

I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have hardly work, they cannot accuratly work. is because they have not enough experience. In the university, no one teaches excutive . Second, orean students do not know money since orean university students pocket money from parents. think people who have never experienced part-time job do not know money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience part-time job and they do not know how to manage spending money ecause they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. it is good experience for university student to work part time job. ast thing is that they can know lots of people. If students work parttime job, they can know a lot workers than general university student. In Korea, it is important to know the people who in the same ., I agree with working part-time job.

I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience before getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have to hardly work, they can not accuratly work. that is because they have not enough experiences. In the university, no one teaches excutive abilities. Second, lots of korean students do not know valuableness about money since lots of korean university students get a pocket money from parents. i think people who have never experienced about part-time job do not know notableness about money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience to work as a part-time job and they do not know how to management spending money. Because they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. so it is good at experience for university student to work as a part time job. Last thing is that they can know lots of people. If students who work part time job, they can be know a lot of workers than general university student. In Korean, it is important to know the people who is in the same part. consequentially, I agree with working part-time job for university students.

CHN

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73.5

The essay expresses the writer's opinion and supporting details clearly.

The first half of the essay is essentially an introduction and is not directly related to the writer's opinion.

I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have hardly work, they cannot accuratly work. is because they have not enough experience. In the university, no one teaches excutive . Second, orean students do not know money since orean university students pocket money from parents. think people who have never experienced part-time job do not know money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience part-time job and they do not know how to manage spending money ecause they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. it is good experience for university student to work part time job. ast thing is that they can know lots of people. If students work parttime job, they can know a lot workers than general university student. In Korea, it is important to know the people who in the same ., I agree with working part-time job.

I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience before getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have to hardly work, they can not accuratly work. that is because they have not enough experiences. In the university, no one teaches excutive abilities. Second, lots of korean students do not know valuableness about money since lots of korean university students get a pocket money from parents. i think people who have never experienced about part-time job do not know notableness about money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience to work as a part-time job and they do not know how to management spending money. Because they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. so it is good at experience for university student to work as a part time job. Last thing is that they can know lots of people. If students who work part time job, they can be know a lot of workers than general university student. In Korean, it is important to know the people who is in the same part. consequentially, I agree with working part-time job for university students.

CHN

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By using the pronoun "we," the writer successfully get the reader involved in their discourse.

There are several minor grammatical mistakes, although they do not hinder understanding.

I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have hardly work, they cannot accuratly work. is because they have not enough experience. In the university, no one teaches excutive . Second, orean students do not know money since orean university students pocket money from parents. think people who have never experienced part-time job do not know money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience part-time job and they do not know how to manage spending money ecause they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. it is good experience for university student to work part time job. ast thing is that they can know lots of people. If students work parttime job, they can know a lot workers than general university student. In Korea, it is important to know the people who in the same ., I agree with working part-time job.

I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience before getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have to hardly work, they can not accuratly work. that is because they have not enough experiences. In the university, no one teaches excutive abilities. Second, lots of korean students do not know valuableness about money since lots of korean university students get a pocket money from parents. i think people who have never experienced about part-time job do not know notableness about money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience to work as a part-time job and they do not know how to management spending money. Because they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. so it is good at experience for university student to work as a part time job. Last thing is that they can know lots of people. If students who work part time job, they can be know a lot of workers than general university student. In Korean, it is important to know the people who is in the same part. consequentially, I agree with working part-time job for university students.

IDN

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The writer clearly states their opinion with logical supporting ideas and with almost no grammatical or lexical mistakes.

A very few grammatical mistakes are found, but they are not so noticeable.

I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have hardly work, they cannot accuratly work. is because they have not enough experience. In the university, no one teaches excutive . Second, orean students do not know money since orean university students pocket money from parents. think people who have never experienced part-time job do not know money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience part-time job and they do not know how to manage spending money ecause they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. it is good experience for university student to work part time job. ast thing is that they can know lots of people. If students work parttime job, they can know a lot workers than general university student. In Korea, it is important to know the people who in the same ., I agree with working part-time job.

I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience before getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have to hardly work, they can not accuratly work. that is because they have not enough experiences. In the university, no one teaches excutive abilities. Second, lots of korean students do not know valuableness about money since lots of korean university students get a pocket money from parents. i think people who have never experienced about part-time job do not know notableness about money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience to work as a part-time job and they do not know how to management spending money. Because they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. so it is good at experience for university student to work as a part time job. Last thing is that they can know lots of people. If students who work part time job, they can be know a lot of workers than general university student. In Korean, it is important to know the people who is in the same part. consequentially, I agree with working part-time job for university students.

THA

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The pronouns "we" and "you" show that the writer wants to communicate with the reader.

Due to inaccuracy and lack of intelligibility, the essay is almost entirely illogical and incomprehensible.

I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have hardly work, they cannot accuratly work. is because they have not enough experience. In the university, no one teaches excutive . Second, orean students do not know money since orean university students pocket money from parents. think people who have never experienced part-time job do not know money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience part-time job and they do not know how to manage spending money ecause they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. it is good experience for university student to work part time job. ast thing is that they can know lots of people. If students work parttime job, they can know a lot workers than general university student. In Korea, it is important to know the people who in the same ., I agree with working part-time job.

I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience before getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have to hardly work, they can not accuratly work. that is because they have not enough experiences. In the university, no one teaches excutive abilities. Second, lots of korean students do not know valuableness about money since lots of korean university students get a pocket money from parents. i think people who have never experienced about part-time job do not know notableness about money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience to work as a part-time job and they do not know how to management spending money. Because they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. so it is good at experience for university student to work as a part time job. Last thing is that they can know lots of people. If students who work part time job, they can be know a lot of workers than general university student. In Korean, it is important to know the people who is in the same part. consequentially, I agree with working part-time job for university students.

TWN

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96.5

The writer uses both general and personal ideas to support their opinion on the topic and expresses them quite well in the essay.

There are a few minor grammatical mistakes seen in the essay, though they do not hinder understanding.

I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have hardly work, they cannot accuratly work. is because they have not enough experience. In the university, no one teaches excutive . Second, orean students do not know money since orean university students pocket money from parents. think people who have never experienced part-time job do not know money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience part-time job and they do not know how to manage spending money ecause they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. it is good experience for university student to work part time job. ast thing is that they can know lots of people. If students work parttime job, they can know a lot workers than general university student. In Korea, it is important to know the people who in the same ., I agree with working part-time job.

I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience before getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have to hardly work, they can not accuratly work. that is because they have not enough experiences. In the university, no one teaches excutive abilities. Second, lots of korean students do not know valuableness about money since lots of korean university students get a pocket money from parents. i think people who have never experienced about part-time job do not know notableness about money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience to work as a part-time job and they do not know how to management spending money. Because they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. so it is good at experience for university student to work as a part time job. Last thing is that they can know lots of people. If students who work part time job, they can be know a lot of workers than general university student. In Korean, it is important to know the people who is in the same part. consequentially, I agree with working part-time job for university students.

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Most sentences are grammatically accurate, and it is not difficult to understand each of them.

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I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have hardly work, they cannot accuratly work. is because they have not enough experience. In the university, no one teaches excutive . Second, orean students do not know money since orean university students pocket money from parents. think people who have never experienced part-time job do not know money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience part-time job and they do not know how to manage spending money ecause they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. it is good experience for university student to work part time job. ast thing is that they can know lots of people. If students work parttime job, they can know a lot workers than general university student. In Korea, it is important to know the people who in the same ., I agree with working part-time job.

I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience before getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have to hardly work, they can not accuratly work. that is because they have not enough experiences. In the university, no one teaches excutive abilities. Second, lots of korean students do not know valuableness about money since lots of korean university students get a pocket money from parents. i think people who have never experienced about part-time job do not know notableness about money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience to work as a part-time job and they do not know how to management spending money. Because they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. so it is good at experience for university student to work as a part time job. Last thing is that they can know lots of people. If students who work part time job, they can be know a lot of workers than general university student. In Korean, it is important to know the people who is in the same part. consequentially, I agree with working part-time job for university students.

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The writer's opinion communicates what this essay is all about and provided a topic sentence that is consistent.

The writer needs improvement on grammar, punctuation, word choice and sentence form.

I disagree with th opinion. I think that it is not important for college students to have part-time . There are two main reasons. The first reason is that students should study. What students have to do is study, but some students can't study enough because of their part-time job. For example, my friend has a part-time job English elementary school students. She looks so busy for teaching. She often checks their answers even during class the university. Also, she is likely to be late for a class because she has to prepare for teaching all night. I can't think it is good for her. In that case, part-time job prevents from . The second reason is that many students spend most salary playing, not living. They mainly spend their money clothes, their , dating, traveling and so on. This means most of them don't work for living. For instance, my friend who I stated above is one of students. She lives with her family and doesn't have to work. However, she wants to more clothes and follow fashion. In closing, I don't want to say students must not part-time , but it is not so for them. Therefore, I think it is unimportant for college students to have part-time .

I disagree with that opinion. I think that it is not important for college students to have a part-time job. There are two main reasons. The first reason is that students should study. What students have to do is study, but some students can't study enough because of their part-time job. For example, my friend has a part-time job to teach English for elementary school students. She looks so busy everyday to prepare for teaching. She often checks their answers in examination even during a class in the university. Also, she is likely to be late for a class because she has to prepare for teaching all night. I can't think it is good for her. In that case, part-time job prevents from her study. The second reason is that many students spend most salary playing, not living. They mainly spend their money clothes, their hobby, dating, traveling and so on. This means most of them don't work for living. For instance, my friend who I stated above is one of such students. She lives with her family and doesn't have to work. However, she wants to get more clothes and to follow fashion. In closing, I don't want to say students must not do part-time job, but it is not so important for them. Therefore, I think it is unimportant for college students to have a part-time job.

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The writer organized an argumentative essay on part time job and allows to logically and convincing support its stand.

The writer needs to learn more on grammar, punctuation, word choice and sentence form.

I disagree with th opinion. I think that it is not important for college students to have part-time . There are two main reasons. The first reason is that students should study. What students have to do is study, but some students can't study enough because of their part-time job. For example, my friend has a part-time job English elementary school students. She looks so busy for teaching. She often checks their answers even during class the university. Also, she is likely to be late for a class because she has to prepare for teaching all night. I can't think it is good for her. In that case, part-time job prevents from . The second reason is that many students spend most salary playing, not living. They mainly spend their money clothes, their , dating, traveling and so on. This means most of them don't work for living. For instance, my friend who I stated above is one of students. She lives with her family and doesn't have to work. However, she wants to more clothes and follow fashion. In closing, I don't want to say students must not part-time , but it is not so for them. Therefore, I think it is unimportant for college students to have part-time .

I disagree with that opinion. I think that it is not important for college students to have a part-time job. There are two main reasons. The first reason is that students should study. What students have to do is study, but some students can't study enough because of their part-time job. For example, my friend has a part-time job to teach English for elementary school students. She looks so busy everyday to prepare for teaching. She often checks their answers in examination even during a class in the university. Also, she is likely to be late for a class because she has to prepare for teaching all night. I can't think it is good for her. In that case, part-time job prevents from her study. The second reason is that many students spend most salary playing, not living. They mainly spend their money clothes, their hobby, dating, traveling and so on. This means most of them don't work for living. For instance, my friend who I stated above is one of such students. She lives with her family and doesn't have to work. However, she wants to get more clothes and to follow fashion. In closing, I don't want to say students must not do part-time job, but it is not so important for them. Therefore, I think it is unimportant for college students to have a part-time job.

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The writer's response has a clear and effective organizational structure creating unity and structure, it has an effective introduction and conclusion.

The writer needs to sum up each of the specific main points in the conclusion to further strengthen the essay.

I disagree with th opinion. I think that it is not important for college students to have part-time . There are two main reasons. The first reason is that students should study. What students have to do is study, but some students can't study enough because of their part-time job. For example, my friend has a part-time job English elementary school students. She looks so busy for teaching. She often checks their answers even during class the university. Also, she is likely to be late for a class because she has to prepare for teaching all night. I can't think it is good for her. In that case, part-time job prevents from . The second reason is that many students spend most salary playing, not living. They mainly spend their money clothes, their , dating, traveling and so on. This means most of them don't work for living. For instance, my friend who I stated above is one of students. She lives with her family and doesn't have to work. However, she wants to more clothes and follow fashion. In closing, I don't want to say students must not part-time , but it is not so for them. Therefore, I think it is unimportant for college students to have part-time .

I disagree with that opinion. I think that it is not important for college students to have a part-time job. There are two main reasons. The first reason is that students should study. What students have to do is study, but some students can't study enough because of their part-time job. For example, my friend has a part-time job to teach English for elementary school students. She looks so busy everyday to prepare for teaching. She often checks their answers in examination even during a class in the university. Also, she is likely to be late for a class because she has to prepare for teaching all night. I can't think it is good for her. In that case, part-time job prevents from her study. The second reason is that many students spend most salary playing, not living. They mainly spend their money clothes, their hobby, dating, traveling and so on. This means most of them don't work for living. For instance, my friend who I stated above is one of such students. She lives with her family and doesn't have to work. However, she wants to get more clothes and to follow fashion. In closing, I don't want to say students must not do part-time job, but it is not so important for them. Therefore, I think it is unimportant for college students to have a part-time job.

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The writer's opinion are clear and consistent. Independent thinking is evident.

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I disagree with th opinion. I think that it is not important for college students to have part-time . There are two main reasons. The first reason is that students should study. What students have to do is study, but some students can't study enough because of their part-time job. For example, my friend has a part-time job English elementary school students. She looks so busy for teaching. She often checks their answers even during class the university. Also, she is likely to be late for a class because she has to prepare for teaching all night. I can't think it is good for her. In that case, part-time job prevents from . The second reason is that many students spend most salary playing, not living. They mainly spend their money clothes, their , dating, traveling and so on. This means most of them don't work for living. For instance, my friend who I stated above is one of students. She lives with her family and doesn't have to work. However, she wants to more clothes and follow fashion. In closing, I don't want to say students must not part-time , but it is not so for them. Therefore, I think it is unimportant for college students to have part-time .

I disagree with that opinion. I think that it is not important for college students to have a part-time job. There are two main reasons. The first reason is that students should study. What students have to do is study, but some students can't study enough because of their part-time job. For example, my friend has a part-time job to teach English for elementary school students. She looks so busy everyday to prepare for teaching. She often checks their answers in examination even during a class in the university. Also, she is likely to be late for a class because she has to prepare for teaching all night. I can't think it is good for her. In that case, part-time job prevents from her study. The second reason is that many students spend most salary playing, not living. They mainly spend their money clothes, their hobby, dating, traveling and so on. This means most of them don't work for living. For instance, my friend who I stated above is one of such students. She lives with her family and doesn't have to work. However, she wants to get more clothes and to follow fashion. In closing, I don't want to say students must not do part-time job, but it is not so important for them. Therefore, I think it is unimportant for college students to have a part-time job.

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The writer's organization are purposeful, effective and appropriate.

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I disagree with th opinion. I think that it is not important for college students to have part-time . There are two main reasons. The first reason is that students should study. What students have to do is study, but some students can't study enough because of their part-time job. For example, my friend has a part-time job English elementary school students. She looks so busy for teaching. She often checks their answers even during class the university. Also, she is likely to be late for a class because she has to prepare for teaching all night. I can't think it is good for her. In that case, part-time job prevents from . The second reason is that many students spend most salary playing, not living. They mainly spend their money clothes, their , dating, traveling and so on. This means most of them don't work for living. For instance, my friend who I stated above is one of students. She lives with her family and doesn't have to work. However, she wants to more clothes and follow fashion. In closing, I don't want to say students must not part-time , but it is not so for them. Therefore, I think it is unimportant for college students to have part-time .

I disagree with that opinion. I think that it is not important for college students to have a part-time job. There are two main reasons. The first reason is that students should study. What students have to do is study, but some students can't study enough because of their part-time job. For example, my friend has a part-time job to teach English for elementary school students. She looks so busy everyday to prepare for teaching. She often checks their answers in examination even during a class in the university. Also, she is likely to be late for a class because she has to prepare for teaching all night. I can't think it is good for her. In that case, part-time job prevents from her study. The second reason is that many students spend most salary playing, not living. They mainly spend their money clothes, their hobby, dating, traveling and so on. This means most of them don't work for living. For instance, my friend who I stated above is one of such students. She lives with her family and doesn't have to work. However, she wants to get more clothes and to follow fashion. In closing, I don't want to say students must not do part-time job, but it is not so important for them. Therefore, I think it is unimportant for college students to have a part-time job.

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The writer's response clearly and effectively expresses ideas using precise language, domain-specific vocabulary is clearly appropriate.

The writer needs improvement on grammar, punctuation, spelling, punctuation and word choice.

I disagree with th opinion. I think that it is not important for college students to have part-time . There are two main reasons. The first reason is that students should study. What students have to do is study, but some students can't study enough because of their part-time job. For example, my friend has a part-time job English elementary school students. She looks so busy for teaching. She often checks their answers even during class the university. Also, she is likely to be late for a class because she has to prepare for teaching all night. I can't think it is good for her. In that case, part-time job prevents from . The second reason is that many students spend most salary playing, not living. They mainly spend their money clothes, their , dating, traveling and so on. This means most of them don't work for living. For instance, my friend who I stated above is one of students. She lives with her family and doesn't have to work. However, she wants to more clothes and follow fashion. In closing, I don't want to say students must not part-time , but it is not so for them. Therefore, I think it is unimportant for college students to have part-time .

I disagree with that opinion. I think that it is not important for college students to have a part-time job. There are two main reasons. The first reason is that students should study. What students have to do is study, but some students can't study enough because of their part-time job. For example, my friend has a part-time job to teach English for elementary school students. She looks so busy everyday to prepare for teaching. She often checks their answers in examination even during a class in the university. Also, she is likely to be late for a class because she has to prepare for teaching all night. I can't think it is good for her. In that case, part-time job prevents from her study. The second reason is that many students spend most salary playing, not living. They mainly spend their money clothes, their hobby, dating, traveling and so on. This means most of them don't work for living. For instance, my friend who I stated above is one of such students. She lives with her family and doesn't have to work. However, she wants to get more clothes and to follow fashion. In closing, I don't want to say students must not do part-time job, but it is not so important for them. Therefore, I think it is unimportant for college students to have a part-time job.

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The writer's opinion are clearly structured, topic sentences are clear leading to the main idea of the essay.

The writer need improvement on grammar, punctuation, word choice and quantity writing.

I disagree with th opinion. I think that it is not important for college students to have part-time . There are two main reasons. The first reason is that students should study. What students have to do is study, but some students can't study enough because of their part-time job. For example, my friend has a part-time job English elementary school students. She looks so busy for teaching. She often checks their answers even during class the university. Also, she is likely to be late for a class because she has to prepare for teaching all night. I can't think it is good for her. In that case, part-time job prevents from . The second reason is that many students spend most salary playing, not living. They mainly spend their money clothes, their , dating, traveling and so on. This means most of them don't work for living. For instance, my friend who I stated above is one of students. She lives with her family and doesn't have to work. However, she wants to more clothes and follow fashion. In closing, I don't want to say students must not part-time , but it is not so for them. Therefore, I think it is unimportant for college students to have part-time .

I disagree with that opinion. I think that it is not important for college students to have a part-time job. There are two main reasons. The first reason is that students should study. What students have to do is study, but some students can't study enough because of their part-time job. For example, my friend has a part-time job to teach English for elementary school students. She looks so busy everyday to prepare for teaching. She often checks their answers in examination even during a class in the university. Also, she is likely to be late for a class because she has to prepare for teaching all night. I can't think it is good for her. In that case, part-time job prevents from her study. The second reason is that many students spend most salary playing, not living. They mainly spend their money clothes, their hobby, dating, traveling and so on. This means most of them don't work for living. For instance, my friend who I stated above is one of such students. She lives with her family and doesn't have to work. However, she wants to get more clothes and to follow fashion. In closing, I don't want to say students must not do part-time job, but it is not so important for them. Therefore, I think it is unimportant for college students to have a part-time job.