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KOR
B1_2
7
7
6
7
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7
7
7
7
70
70
70
Good overall command of language and free of misspellings.
A couple of incorrect use of words and grammar mistakes.
11,005
In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time once their school or other become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially . They are no , and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure their . They have to understand how hard thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they no students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to military first, I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher because she found no interest in education. some of my classmates felt sad and worried after because they found the skills or experiences that the wanted. I think it's good to test by having part-time job.
In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time job once their school grade or other condition become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially dependent. They are no more kids, and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure from their parent. They have to understand how hard is working, thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they are no more students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job suit them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to do the military responsibility first, and after one year then I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about finding no job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher in the kindergarten, because she found herself having no interest in education. And some of my classmates felt sad and worried after the interview of a job, because they found themselves having no the skills or experiences that the boss wanted. So I think it's good to test college students' ability by having part-time job.
KOR
B2_0
5
5
4
4
5
5
4
5
5
5
47
47
47
Sound composition of content with convincing real-life experiences. Accurate spellings.
Could not understand some phrases in the essay due to improper use of words. Need to work on grammar.
11,024
In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time once their school or other become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially . They are no , and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure their . They have to understand how hard thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they no students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to military first, I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher because she found no interest in education. some of my classmates felt sad and worried after because they found the skills or experiences that the wanted. I think it's good to test by having part-time job.
In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time job once their school grade or other condition become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially dependent. They are no more kids, and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure from their parent. They have to understand how hard is working, thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they are no more students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job suit them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to do the military responsibility first, and after one year then I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about finding no job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher in the kindergarten, because she found herself having no interest in education. And some of my classmates felt sad and worried after the interview of a job, because they found themselves having no the skills or experiences that the boss wanted. So I think it's good to test college students' ability by having part-time job.
CHN
B2_0
5
4
4
5
5
5
4
5
5
7
51
49
50
Effective use of transition words to guide the readers through the context.
Need to work on grammar. Sentence structure was a bit way too simple.
10,964
In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time once their school or other become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially . They are no , and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure their . They have to understand how hard thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they no students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to military first, I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher because she found no interest in education. some of my classmates felt sad and worried after because they found the skills or experiences that the wanted. I think it's good to test by having part-time job.
In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time job once their school grade or other condition become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially dependent. They are no more kids, and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure from their parent. They have to understand how hard is working, thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they are no more students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job suit them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to do the military responsibility first, and after one year then I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about finding no job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher in the kindergarten, because she found herself having no interest in education. And some of my classmates felt sad and worried after the interview of a job, because they found themselves having no the skills or experiences that the boss wanted. So I think it's good to test college students' ability by having part-time job.
THA
B1_1
6
4
6
5
6
4
4
5
5
5
52
50
51
Good command of language. Free of grammatical errors through the essay.
Sentence structure was way too simple. Context was weak in terms of logical flow.
10,936
In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time once their school or other become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially . They are no , and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure their . They have to understand how hard thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they no students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to military first, I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher because she found no interest in education. some of my classmates felt sad and worried after because they found the skills or experiences that the wanted. I think it's good to test by having part-time job.
In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time job once their school grade or other condition become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially dependent. They are no more kids, and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure from their parent. They have to understand how hard is working, thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they are no more students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job suit them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to do the military responsibility first, and after one year then I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about finding no job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher in the kindergarten, because she found herself having no interest in education. And some of my classmates felt sad and worried after the interview of a job, because they found themselves having no the skills or experiences that the boss wanted. So I think it's good to test college students' ability by having part-time job.
JPN
A2_0
6
5
5
5
6
6
6
6
6
6
55
57
56
The argument was clear and coherent. Relatively good command of language.
Need to work on grammar, proper word choice and phraseology.
11,043
In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time once their school or other become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially . They are no , and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure their . They have to understand how hard thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they no students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to military first, I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher because she found no interest in education. some of my classmates felt sad and worried after because they found the skills or experiences that the wanted. I think it's good to test by having part-time job.
In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time job once their school grade or other condition become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially dependent. They are no more kids, and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure from their parent. They have to understand how hard is working, thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they are no more students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job suit them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to do the military responsibility first, and after one year then I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about finding no job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher in the kindergarten, because she found herself having no interest in education. And some of my classmates felt sad and worried after the interview of a job, because they found themselves having no the skills or experiences that the boss wanted. So I think it's good to test college students' ability by having part-time job.
KOR
B2_0
10
9
10
10
10
10
9
9
9
8
95
94
94.5
Operational command of language with semantically complex words. Sophisticated arguments.
Some phrases may sound unnatural. Could have refined the sentences further to make them look more sophisticated.
10,956
In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time once their school or other become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially . They are no , and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure their . They have to understand how hard thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they no students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to military first, I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher because she found no interest in education. some of my classmates felt sad and worried after because they found the skills or experiences that the wanted. I think it's good to test by having part-time job.
In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time job once their school grade or other condition become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially dependent. They are no more kids, and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure from their parent. They have to understand how hard is working, thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they are no more students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job suit them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to do the military responsibility first, and after one year then I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about finding no job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher in the kindergarten, because she found herself having no interest in education. And some of my classmates felt sad and worried after the interview of a job, because they found themselves having no the skills or experiences that the boss wanted. So I think it's good to test college students' ability by having part-time job.
TWN
B2_0
7
6
6
7
7
7
6
6
6
7
68
65
66.5
Good command of language. Provided convincing reasons to back up the argument.
Several obvious grammatical mistakes could be seen. Could refine the overall language to make it more sophisticated.
10,983
In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time once their school or other become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially . They are no , and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure their . They have to understand how hard thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they no students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to military first, I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher because she found no interest in education. some of my classmates felt sad and worried after because they found the skills or experiences that the wanted. I think it's good to test by having part-time job.
In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time job once their school grade or other condition become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially dependent. They are no more kids, and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure from their parent. They have to understand how hard is working, thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they are no more students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job suit them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to do the military responsibility first, and after one year then I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about finding no job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher in the kindergarten, because she found herself having no interest in education. And some of my classmates felt sad and worried after the interview of a job, because they found themselves having no the skills or experiences that the boss wanted. So I think it's good to test college students' ability by having part-time job.
KOR
B1_2
2
2
1
1
2
1
1
2
2
2
11
16
13.5
Sound structure of context that comprises of several good reasoning.
Should pay attention to phraseology and sentence fragmentation. Could not fully understand the context.
11,030
In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time once their school or other become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially . They are no , and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure their . They have to understand how hard thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they no students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to military first, I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher because she found no interest in education. some of my classmates felt sad and worried after because they found the skills or experiences that the wanted. I think it's good to test by having part-time job.
In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time job once their school grade or other condition become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially dependent. They are no more kids, and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure from their parent. They have to understand how hard is working, thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they are no more students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job suit them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to do the military responsibility first, and after one year then I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about finding no job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher in the kindergarten, because she found herself having no interest in education. And some of my classmates felt sad and worried after the interview of a job, because they found themselves having no the skills or experiences that the boss wanted. So I think it's good to test college students' ability by having part-time job.
KOR
B1_2
1
1
1
1
2
1
1
1
1
1
5
11
8
Good overall context structure with proper use of transition words.
Several critical errors in grammar. Some phrases did not make sense. Had a hard time understanding the context.
10,943
In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time once their school or other become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially . They are no , and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure their . They have to understand how hard thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they no students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to military first, I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher because she found no interest in education. some of my classmates felt sad and worried after because they found the skills or experiences that the wanted. I think it's good to test by having part-time job.
In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time job once their school grade or other condition become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially dependent. They are no more kids, and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure from their parent. They have to understand how hard is working, thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they are no more students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job suit them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to do the military responsibility first, and after one year then I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about finding no job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher in the kindergarten, because she found herself having no interest in education. And some of my classmates felt sad and worried after the interview of a job, because they found themselves having no the skills or experiences that the boss wanted. So I think it's good to test college students' ability by having part-time job.
IDN
A2_0
6
6
6
6
6
6
6
6
6
6
63
60
61.5
Spellings were accurate. Good arguments to support the student's opinion.
Difficult to understand the context at the first glance. Need to work on grammar and word choice.
10,958
In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time once their school or other become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially . They are no , and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure their . They have to understand how hard thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they no students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to military first, I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher because she found no interest in education. some of my classmates felt sad and worried after because they found the skills or experiences that the wanted. I think it's good to test by having part-time job.
In my opinion, it is necessary for college students to have part-time job once their school grade or other condition become steady. Why? First, college students are old enough to be financially dependent. They are no more kids, and they have the responsibility to lessen the pressure from their parent. They have to understand how hard is working, thus, they can save and never waste their money. Second, they are no more students in a few years, so they have to judge what kind of job suit them through taking part-time jobs. Take me as an example. As a male, although I have to do the military responsibility first, and after one year then I have to work. I am very afraid now. Many of my classmates are worried about finding no job, and I may face the same situation after one year. One of my classmates declined a chance to be a teacher in the kindergarten, because she found herself having no interest in education. And some of my classmates felt sad and worried after the interview of a job, because they found themselves having no the skills or experiences that the boss wanted. So I think it's good to test college students' ability by having part-time job.
THA
B1_1
6
4
5
7
3
2
4
2
3
2
31
38
34.5
English is understandable. Used some complex words.
Same words are repeated several times. Seems that the first half is all introduction.
11,156
Actually, student have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, must learn basic theory. have only years to learn level knowledge and job do whole . If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. to the job, so can't avoid with others, many decide who they want who more level knowledge. Maybe there also several will part-time experience. most part-time the job you find the company untrained to do complex job. you also any from your part-time experience you find the job. -time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should your time well. Don't let part-time job huge in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your still should be first . Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student an unchangeable rule.
Actually, student doesn't have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, you must have to learn the basic theory. So you just have only 7 years to learn the pro level knowledge, and choice your job which you maybe will do your whole life. If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. Everyone wants to do the job they want, so you can't avoid to compare with others, many company decide who they want is determined by who have more pro level knowledge. Maybe there also have several company will decide it by your part-time experience. But the most of part-time job doesn't relative the job you find. Because the company doesn't let untrained person to do the complex job. So you also couldn't get any plus from your part-time experience when you find the job. Part-time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should control your time well. Don't let part-time job take huge part in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your study. Study still should be the first in your ranking. Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good experience to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student. It's an unchangeable rule.
TWN
B1_2
3
6
3
4
2
2
5
8
4
2
41
39
40
Good introduction and conclusion with complex words.
Could not understand the general idea. Maybe needed to discuss the idea in deeper level.
11,158
Actually, student have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, must learn basic theory. have only years to learn level knowledge and job do whole . If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. to the job, so can't avoid with others, many decide who they want who more level knowledge. Maybe there also several will part-time experience. most part-time the job you find the company untrained to do complex job. you also any from your part-time experience you find the job. -time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should your time well. Don't let part-time job huge in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your still should be first . Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student an unchangeable rule.
Actually, student doesn't have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, you must have to learn the basic theory. So you just have only 7 years to learn the pro level knowledge, and choice your job which you maybe will do your whole life. If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. Everyone wants to do the job they want, so you can't avoid to compare with others, many company decide who they want is determined by who have more pro level knowledge. Maybe there also have several company will decide it by your part-time experience. But the most of part-time job doesn't relative the job you find. Because the company doesn't let untrained person to do the complex job. So you also couldn't get any plus from your part-time experience when you find the job. Part-time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should control your time well. Don't let part-time job take huge part in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your study. Study still should be the first in your ranking. Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good experience to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student. It's an unchangeable rule.
JPN
B1_1
8
7
7
6
8
5
6
7
3
3
66
60
63
Very neat essay. Summarized three ideas well. grammar is not perfect but understandable.
Maybe conclusion can be improved by not repeating similar sentences and by using appropriate conjunction.
11,180
Actually, student have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, must learn basic theory. have only years to learn level knowledge and job do whole . If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. to the job, so can't avoid with others, many decide who they want who more level knowledge. Maybe there also several will part-time experience. most part-time the job you find the company untrained to do complex job. you also any from your part-time experience you find the job. -time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should your time well. Don't let part-time job huge in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your still should be first . Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student an unchangeable rule.
Actually, student doesn't have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, you must have to learn the basic theory. So you just have only 7 years to learn the pro level knowledge, and choice your job which you maybe will do your whole life. If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. Everyone wants to do the job they want, so you can't avoid to compare with others, many company decide who they want is determined by who have more pro level knowledge. Maybe there also have several company will decide it by your part-time experience. But the most of part-time job doesn't relative the job you find. Because the company doesn't let untrained person to do the complex job. So you also couldn't get any plus from your part-time experience when you find the job. Part-time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should control your time well. Don't let part-time job take huge part in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your study. Study still should be the first in your ranking. Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good experience to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student. It's an unchangeable rule.
THA
B1_1
1
2
1
2
3
2
2
4
2
3
8
22
15
Seems that the writer considers about the advantages and disadvantages.
Very difficult to understand due to English. The writer has to improve both grammar and vocabulary.
11,177
Actually, student have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, must learn basic theory. have only years to learn level knowledge and job do whole . If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. to the job, so can't avoid with others, many decide who they want who more level knowledge. Maybe there also several will part-time experience. most part-time the job you find the company untrained to do complex job. you also any from your part-time experience you find the job. -time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should your time well. Don't let part-time job huge in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your still should be first . Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student an unchangeable rule.
Actually, student doesn't have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, you must have to learn the basic theory. So you just have only 7 years to learn the pro level knowledge, and choice your job which you maybe will do your whole life. If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. Everyone wants to do the job they want, so you can't avoid to compare with others, many company decide who they want is determined by who have more pro level knowledge. Maybe there also have several company will decide it by your part-time experience. But the most of part-time job doesn't relative the job you find. Because the company doesn't let untrained person to do the complex job. So you also couldn't get any plus from your part-time experience when you find the job. Part-time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should control your time well. Don't let part-time job take huge part in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your study. Study still should be the first in your ranking. Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good experience to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student. It's an unchangeable rule.
KOR
B1_2
7
7
3
6
7
7
7
6
7
4
65
61
63
Unique opinion about the work in vacations. Good use of adverbs helps to follow the logic flow even easier.
Pity that the writer is weak in grammars. Also, some important prepositions are missing.
11,070
Actually, student have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, must learn basic theory. have only years to learn level knowledge and job do whole . If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. to the job, so can't avoid with others, many decide who they want who more level knowledge. Maybe there also several will part-time experience. most part-time the job you find the company untrained to do complex job. you also any from your part-time experience you find the job. -time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should your time well. Don't let part-time job huge in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your still should be first . Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student an unchangeable rule.
Actually, student doesn't have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, you must have to learn the basic theory. So you just have only 7 years to learn the pro level knowledge, and choice your job which you maybe will do your whole life. If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. Everyone wants to do the job they want, so you can't avoid to compare with others, many company decide who they want is determined by who have more pro level knowledge. Maybe there also have several company will decide it by your part-time experience. But the most of part-time job doesn't relative the job you find. Because the company doesn't let untrained person to do the complex job. So you also couldn't get any plus from your part-time experience when you find the job. Part-time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should control your time well. Don't let part-time job take huge part in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your study. Study still should be the first in your ranking. Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good experience to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student. It's an unchangeable rule.
KOR
B1_1
3
5
3
4
4
3
4
5
5
3
42
39
40.5
Despite poor English, the writer managed to write an easy-to-understand essay.
Teenagers may not be college students or vice versa. Could not understand some of the logics.
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Actually, student have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, must learn basic theory. have only years to learn level knowledge and job do whole . If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. to the job, so can't avoid with others, many decide who they want who more level knowledge. Maybe there also several will part-time experience. most part-time the job you find the company untrained to do complex job. you also any from your part-time experience you find the job. -time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should your time well. Don't let part-time job huge in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your still should be first . Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student an unchangeable rule.
Actually, student doesn't have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, you must have to learn the basic theory. So you just have only 7 years to learn the pro level knowledge, and choice your job which you maybe will do your whole life. If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. Everyone wants to do the job they want, so you can't avoid to compare with others, many company decide who they want is determined by who have more pro level knowledge. Maybe there also have several company will decide it by your part-time experience. But the most of part-time job doesn't relative the job you find. Because the company doesn't let untrained person to do the complex job. So you also couldn't get any plus from your part-time experience when you find the job. Part-time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should control your time well. Don't let part-time job take huge part in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your study. Study still should be the first in your ranking. Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good experience to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student. It's an unchangeable rule.
THA
B1_2
4
4
3
5
7
3
7
7
8
6
55
54
54.5
The well constructed discussion is easy to understand, which support the limited English of the writer.
The beginning and the end say differently. Maybe needed to check before submitting the essay.
11,150
Actually, student have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, must learn basic theory. have only years to learn level knowledge and job do whole . If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. to the job, so can't avoid with others, many decide who they want who more level knowledge. Maybe there also several will part-time experience. most part-time the job you find the company untrained to do complex job. you also any from your part-time experience you find the job. -time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should your time well. Don't let part-time job huge in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your still should be first . Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student an unchangeable rule.
Actually, student doesn't have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, you must have to learn the basic theory. So you just have only 7 years to learn the pro level knowledge, and choice your job which you maybe will do your whole life. If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. Everyone wants to do the job they want, so you can't avoid to compare with others, many company decide who they want is determined by who have more pro level knowledge. Maybe there also have several company will decide it by your part-time experience. But the most of part-time job doesn't relative the job you find. Because the company doesn't let untrained person to do the complex job. So you also couldn't get any plus from your part-time experience when you find the job. Part-time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should control your time well. Don't let part-time job take huge part in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your study. Study still should be the first in your ranking. Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good experience to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student. It's an unchangeable rule.
CHN
B1_1
7
7
7
7
6
6
7
8
6
9
77
70
73.5
Easy to follow the discussion flow. Explanations skillfully support the ideas.
As the writer stated the main reason is money, this aspect should have been discussed in deeper level.
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Actually, student have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, must learn basic theory. have only years to learn level knowledge and job do whole . If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. to the job, so can't avoid with others, many decide who they want who more level knowledge. Maybe there also several will part-time experience. most part-time the job you find the company untrained to do complex job. you also any from your part-time experience you find the job. -time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should your time well. Don't let part-time job huge in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your still should be first . Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student an unchangeable rule.
Actually, student doesn't have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, you must have to learn the basic theory. So you just have only 7 years to learn the pro level knowledge, and choice your job which you maybe will do your whole life. If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. Everyone wants to do the job they want, so you can't avoid to compare with others, many company decide who they want is determined by who have more pro level knowledge. Maybe there also have several company will decide it by your part-time experience. But the most of part-time job doesn't relative the job you find. Because the company doesn't let untrained person to do the complex job. So you also couldn't get any plus from your part-time experience when you find the job. Part-time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should control your time well. Don't let part-time job take huge part in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your study. Study still should be the first in your ranking. Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good experience to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student. It's an unchangeable rule.
JPN
A2_0
7
6
7
7
8
7
7
7
6
5
73
67
70
Well organized logic flow. Short but adequate examples were provided.
Maybe considering how to interest readers would make the essay even better.
11,089
Actually, student have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, must learn basic theory. have only years to learn level knowledge and job do whole . If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. to the job, so can't avoid with others, many decide who they want who more level knowledge. Maybe there also several will part-time experience. most part-time the job you find the company untrained to do complex job. you also any from your part-time experience you find the job. -time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should your time well. Don't let part-time job huge in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your still should be first . Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student an unchangeable rule.
Actually, student doesn't have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, you must have to learn the basic theory. So you just have only 7 years to learn the pro level knowledge, and choice your job which you maybe will do your whole life. If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. Everyone wants to do the job they want, so you can't avoid to compare with others, many company decide who they want is determined by who have more pro level knowledge. Maybe there also have several company will decide it by your part-time experience. But the most of part-time job doesn't relative the job you find. Because the company doesn't let untrained person to do the complex job. So you also couldn't get any plus from your part-time experience when you find the job. Part-time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should control your time well. Don't let part-time job take huge part in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your study. Study still should be the first in your ranking. Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good experience to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student. It's an unchangeable rule.
THA
A2_0
3
3
1
2
2
3
4
3
3
1
23
25
24
Seems that the writer concentrated on one topic, experience, and deep analyzed it.
Could not understand many sentences because they were too short. Need to learn how to use commas and verbs.
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Actually, student have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, must learn basic theory. have only years to learn level knowledge and job do whole . If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. to the job, so can't avoid with others, many decide who they want who more level knowledge. Maybe there also several will part-time experience. most part-time the job you find the company untrained to do complex job. you also any from your part-time experience you find the job. -time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should your time well. Don't let part-time job huge in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your still should be first . Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student an unchangeable rule.
Actually, student doesn't have a lot of time to waste. Before senior high, you must have to learn the basic theory. So you just have only 7 years to learn the pro level knowledge, and choice your job which you maybe will do your whole life. If you don't study hard, you may lose the job you want. Everyone wants to do the job they want, so you can't avoid to compare with others, many company decide who they want is determined by who have more pro level knowledge. Maybe there also have several company will decide it by your part-time experience. But the most of part-time job doesn't relative the job you find. Because the company doesn't let untrained person to do the complex job. So you also couldn't get any plus from your part-time experience when you find the job. Part-time job is not bad choice when you are a student, but you should control your time well. Don't let part-time job take huge part in your life. You still have to take time to concentrate on your study. Study still should be the first in your ranking. Time is money, if you control your time well, you will have a lot of good experience to enrich your life. Knowledge is the most important power for student. It's an unchangeable rule.
CHN
B2_0
9
9
10
10
8
9
9
9
10
9
90
92
91
Your message and reasons are quite clear, and each reason is mentioned in order with good writing skills.
No big weak point to be mentioned. Does it mean that the students who do not have part time job, cannot enjoy their college life?
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Nowadays, a number of college students are taking part-time jobs is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer , depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience provides youths with the chance to get society gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they from the job will certainly reduce the burden their parents . However, that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time should be for learning, thus leading to grades. the first for students. , some young people fail to spend their money reasonably fall into habit. it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-but it may have some side effects have a good plan. with many , part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.
Nowadays, quite a number of college students are taking part-time jobs. But is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer can be various, depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience which provides youths with the chance to get close to society as well as to gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and how to deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they get from the job will certainly reduce the burden of their parents more or less. However, it can't be ignored that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time which should be for learning to work, thus leading to decline of grades. But the fact is that the first thing for students is still study. Also, some young people fail to spend their money reasonably. Instead, they fall into the habit of wasting money. So, it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-regulation but it may have some side effects if the student doesn't have a good plan. In common with many things, part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.
THA
B1_2
5
4
4
5
5
5
6
4
5
4
48
47
47.5
Unique and good perspective that needed to check job whether it is safe and appropriate for students and ask parents’ opinion in advance.
Needed clearer explanation: “you work in restaurant, if you have bad friends, there are terrible things waiting for you too”. Terrible things happen only in restaurant?
11,313
Nowadays, a number of college students are taking part-time jobs is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer , depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience provides youths with the chance to get society gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they from the job will certainly reduce the burden their parents . However, that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time should be for learning, thus leading to grades. the first for students. , some young people fail to spend their money reasonably fall into habit. it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-but it may have some side effects have a good plan. with many , part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.
Nowadays, quite a number of college students are taking part-time jobs. But is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer can be various, depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience which provides youths with the chance to get close to society as well as to gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and how to deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they get from the job will certainly reduce the burden of their parents more or less. However, it can't be ignored that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time which should be for learning to work, thus leading to decline of grades. But the fact is that the first thing for students is still study. Also, some young people fail to spend their money reasonably. Instead, they fall into the habit of wasting money. So, it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-regulation but it may have some side effects if the student doesn't have a good plan. In common with many things, part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.
KOR
A2_0
3
4
5
4
4
4
5
3
4
4
42
40
41
Understand your reasons and conclusion. Nice idea to buy birthday present for your parents.
Not clear why is it important to make friends in part time job. What is the problem for the students who graduate with no experience of part time job?
11,332
Nowadays, a number of college students are taking part-time jobs is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer , depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience provides youths with the chance to get society gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they from the job will certainly reduce the burden their parents . However, that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time should be for learning, thus leading to grades. the first for students. , some young people fail to spend their money reasonably fall into habit. it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-but it may have some side effects have a good plan. with many , part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.
Nowadays, quite a number of college students are taking part-time jobs. But is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer can be various, depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience which provides youths with the chance to get close to society as well as to gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and how to deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they get from the job will certainly reduce the burden of their parents more or less. However, it can't be ignored that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time which should be for learning to work, thus leading to decline of grades. But the fact is that the first thing for students is still study. Also, some young people fail to spend their money reasonably. Instead, they fall into the habit of wasting money. So, it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-regulation but it may have some side effects if the student doesn't have a good plan. In common with many things, part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.
TWN
A2_0
5
7
6
6
6
6
6
6
7
6
61
61
61
Clearly categorized the students which need to have part time job or do not for reasoning of your conclusion.
Is there any solution for the students having a financial problem, not to be obliged to work? Minor spelling errors and conjugated forms of verbs are needed to be checked.
11,241
Nowadays, a number of college students are taking part-time jobs is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer , depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience provides youths with the chance to get society gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they from the job will certainly reduce the burden their parents . However, that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time should be for learning, thus leading to grades. the first for students. , some young people fail to spend their money reasonably fall into habit. it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-but it may have some side effects have a good plan. with many , part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.
Nowadays, quite a number of college students are taking part-time jobs. But is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer can be various, depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience which provides youths with the chance to get close to society as well as to gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and how to deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they get from the job will certainly reduce the burden of their parents more or less. However, it can't be ignored that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time which should be for learning to work, thus leading to decline of grades. But the fact is that the first thing for students is still study. Also, some young people fail to spend their money reasonably. Instead, they fall into the habit of wasting money. So, it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-regulation but it may have some side effects if the student doesn't have a good plan. In common with many things, part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.
TWN
A2_0
5
4
5
4
4
5
4
5
5
5
47
46
46.5
Your conclusion and reasons are relatively mentioned clearly. Global perspective related to the need of part time job by students.
What kind of experiences you can get from part time job and they help for what situation or problems?
11,308
Nowadays, a number of college students are taking part-time jobs is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer , depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience provides youths with the chance to get society gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they from the job will certainly reduce the burden their parents . However, that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time should be for learning, thus leading to grades. the first for students. , some young people fail to spend their money reasonably fall into habit. it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-but it may have some side effects have a good plan. with many , part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.
Nowadays, quite a number of college students are taking part-time jobs. But is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer can be various, depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience which provides youths with the chance to get close to society as well as to gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and how to deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they get from the job will certainly reduce the burden of their parents more or less. However, it can't be ignored that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time which should be for learning to work, thus leading to decline of grades. But the fact is that the first thing for students is still study. Also, some young people fail to spend their money reasonably. Instead, they fall into the habit of wasting money. So, it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-regulation but it may have some side effects if the student doesn't have a good plan. In common with many things, part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.
JPN
B1_1
7
7
7
8
7
7
6
6
7
8
62
70
66
Your message and reasons are clear to understand. Each reason is mentioned in order with your personal experience.
More detailed reasoning for “College students cannot get enough knowledge in their class?” is needed to be more convincing message.
11,219
Nowadays, a number of college students are taking part-time jobs is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer , depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience provides youths with the chance to get society gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they from the job will certainly reduce the burden their parents . However, that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time should be for learning, thus leading to grades. the first for students. , some young people fail to spend their money reasonably fall into habit. it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-but it may have some side effects have a good plan. with many , part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.
Nowadays, quite a number of college students are taking part-time jobs. But is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer can be various, depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience which provides youths with the chance to get close to society as well as to gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and how to deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they get from the job will certainly reduce the burden of their parents more or less. However, it can't be ignored that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time which should be for learning to work, thus leading to decline of grades. But the fact is that the first thing for students is still study. Also, some young people fail to spend their money reasonably. Instead, they fall into the habit of wasting money. So, it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-regulation but it may have some side effects if the student doesn't have a good plan. In common with many things, part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.
CHN
B1_2
6
5
7
6
4
3
4
5
4
5
41
49
45
Your reasons are simple and clearly mentioned. Well explained advantages of part time job.
Why is it important to learn experience in college, not in working society? To only understand how hard it is to earn money, leads to a good preparation for future? Challenge is to doing part time job?
11,311
Nowadays, a number of college students are taking part-time jobs is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer , depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience provides youths with the chance to get society gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they from the job will certainly reduce the burden their parents . However, that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time should be for learning, thus leading to grades. the first for students. , some young people fail to spend their money reasonably fall into habit. it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-but it may have some side effects have a good plan. with many , part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.
Nowadays, quite a number of college students are taking part-time jobs. But is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer can be various, depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience which provides youths with the chance to get close to society as well as to gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and how to deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they get from the job will certainly reduce the burden of their parents more or less. However, it can't be ignored that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time which should be for learning to work, thus leading to decline of grades. But the fact is that the first thing for students is still study. Also, some young people fail to spend their money reasonably. Instead, they fall into the habit of wasting money. So, it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-regulation but it may have some side effects if the student doesn't have a good plan. In common with many things, part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.
CHN
B2_0
8
8
9
9
8
8
8
8
8
8
84
82
83
Your conclusion and reasons are logically mentioned in order and advantages and disadvantages are well balanced.
Any idea that stops students spending unreasonably lots of money unreasonably earned by their part time job?
11,303
Nowadays, a number of college students are taking part-time jobs is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer , depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience provides youths with the chance to get society gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they from the job will certainly reduce the burden their parents . However, that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time should be for learning, thus leading to grades. the first for students. , some young people fail to spend their money reasonably fall into habit. it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-but it may have some side effects have a good plan. with many , part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.
Nowadays, quite a number of college students are taking part-time jobs. But is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer can be various, depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience which provides youths with the chance to get close to society as well as to gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and how to deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they get from the job will certainly reduce the burden of their parents more or less. However, it can't be ignored that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time which should be for learning to work, thus leading to decline of grades. But the fact is that the first thing for students is still study. Also, some young people fail to spend their money reasonably. Instead, they fall into the habit of wasting money. So, it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-regulation but it may have some side effects if the student doesn't have a good plan. In common with many things, part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.
PHL
B2_0
8
8
8
9
9
9
8
8
9
9
84
85
84.5
Your reasons are all logical to your conclusion and good perspective for focusing on student’s health.
Do you agree with part time job not tough which do not occupy their time too much?
11,289
Nowadays, a number of college students are taking part-time jobs is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer , depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience provides youths with the chance to get society gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they from the job will certainly reduce the burden their parents . However, that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time should be for learning, thus leading to grades. the first for students. , some young people fail to spend their money reasonably fall into habit. it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-but it may have some side effects have a good plan. with many , part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.
Nowadays, quite a number of college students are taking part-time jobs. But is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer can be various, depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience which provides youths with the chance to get close to society as well as to gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and how to deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they get from the job will certainly reduce the burden of their parents more or less. However, it can't be ignored that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time which should be for learning to work, thus leading to decline of grades. But the fact is that the first thing for students is still study. Also, some young people fail to spend their money reasonably. Instead, they fall into the habit of wasting money. So, it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-regulation but it may have some side effects if the student doesn't have a good plan. In common with many things, part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.
CHN
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Interesting perspective identifying the conditions under which a part-time job would be beneficial.
This is a unique way to let have a choice to the reader, but clearly statement of your conclusion is needed.
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Nowadays, a number of college students are taking part-time jobs is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer , depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience provides youths with the chance to get society gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they from the job will certainly reduce the burden their parents . However, that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time should be for learning, thus leading to grades. the first for students. , some young people fail to spend their money reasonably fall into habit. it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-but it may have some side effects have a good plan. with many , part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.
Nowadays, quite a number of college students are taking part-time jobs. But is it necessary for them to do so? In my opinion, the answer can be various, depending on the students themselves. Undoubtedly, taking a part-time job is a special experience which provides youths with the chance to get close to society as well as to gain more practical skills. In the process, the students learn how to communicate with different kinds of people and how to deal with challenging situations. Besides, the money they get from the job will certainly reduce the burden of their parents more or less. However, it can't be ignored that some students fail more important things in order to take part-time jobs. They spend time which should be for learning to work, thus leading to decline of grades. But the fact is that the first thing for students is still study. Also, some young people fail to spend their money reasonably. Instead, they fall into the habit of wasting money. So, it can be concluded that taking a part-time job is rewarding and eye-opening for those who have good self-regulation but it may have some side effects if the student doesn't have a good plan. In common with many things, part-time job is a double-edged sword. If you want to take it, do be careful.
THA
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I think get a part job while . If wants to money or more experience I think should be . , when are busy, no time and easily is not better choice. part job has negative and positive . positive : can more money help parent, increase income, experience, friends more independent take care . the negative easily tired, spend time work, and less time study. If you want to get good , I think should think twice about a part job like this manage our time and can maintain all of we should think twice about our health because tak a part job is pretty difficult when manage it . If I must chooseI not ecause is difficult me to manage my time, and I easily. Despite, I goals in my major (accounting) I just usual. a part job like this just my time and risk. I absolutely refuse this.
I think get a part job while study, is depend on the person. If she/ he wants to gain money or get more experience I think it should be okay. But, when we are really busy, no time and easily tired. It is not better choice. Get part job has a negative and positive opinions. In positive : you can get more money for helping your parent, increase your income, get more experience, get more friends and more independent for take care your self so you can be mature. And the negative area is : you easily for tired, spending many time for work, and less time of study. If you want to get good mark, I think we should think twice about take a part job like this? Can we manage our time, and can we maintain all of this, although we should think twice about our body health.. because take a part job is pretty difficult when you can't manage it in the right side. If I must choose one of this.. I will not. Because It is pretty difficult from me to manage my time, and actually I am easily tired. Despite, I didn't have any goals in my major (accounting ) like getting a good Final Exam mark or etc, I just doing all of this as usual. Take a part job like this just spend my time and myself into risks. So I absolutely refuse about this.
JPN
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Organized and with some good expressions
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I think get a part job while . If wants to money or more experience I think should be . , when are busy, no time and easily is not better choice. part job has negative and positive . positive : can more money help parent, increase income, experience, friends more independent take care . the negative easily tired, spend time work, and less time study. If you want to get good , I think should think twice about a part job like this manage our time and can maintain all of we should think twice about our health because tak a part job is pretty difficult when manage it . If I must chooseI not ecause is difficult me to manage my time, and I easily. Despite, I goals in my major (accounting) I just usual. a part job like this just my time and risk. I absolutely refuse this.
I think get a part job while study, is depend on the person. If she/ he wants to gain money or get more experience I think it should be okay. But, when we are really busy, no time and easily tired. It is not better choice. Get part job has a negative and positive opinions. In positive : you can get more money for helping your parent, increase your income, get more experience, get more friends and more independent for take care your self so you can be mature. And the negative area is : you easily for tired, spending many time for work, and less time of study. If you want to get good mark, I think we should think twice about take a part job like this? Can we manage our time, and can we maintain all of this, although we should think twice about our body health.. because take a part job is pretty difficult when you can't manage it in the right side. If I must choose one of this.. I will not. Because It is pretty difficult from me to manage my time, and actually I am easily tired. Despite, I didn't have any goals in my major (accounting ) like getting a good Final Exam mark or etc, I just doing all of this as usual. Take a part job like this just spend my time and myself into risks. So I absolutely refuse about this.
KOR
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Variety of points
Mostly personal, low fluency
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I think get a part job while . If wants to money or more experience I think should be . , when are busy, no time and easily is not better choice. part job has negative and positive . positive : can more money help parent, increase income, experience, friends more independent take care . the negative easily tired, spend time work, and less time study. If you want to get good , I think should think twice about a part job like this manage our time and can maintain all of we should think twice about our health because tak a part job is pretty difficult when manage it . If I must chooseI not ecause is difficult me to manage my time, and I easily. Despite, I goals in my major (accounting) I just usual. a part job like this just my time and risk. I absolutely refuse this.
I think get a part job while study, is depend on the person. If she/ he wants to gain money or get more experience I think it should be okay. But, when we are really busy, no time and easily tired. It is not better choice. Get part job has a negative and positive opinions. In positive : you can get more money for helping your parent, increase your income, get more experience, get more friends and more independent for take care your self so you can be mature. And the negative area is : you easily for tired, spending many time for work, and less time of study. If you want to get good mark, I think we should think twice about take a part job like this? Can we manage our time, and can we maintain all of this, although we should think twice about our body health.. because take a part job is pretty difficult when you can't manage it in the right side. If I must choose one of this.. I will not. Because It is pretty difficult from me to manage my time, and actually I am easily tired. Despite, I didn't have any goals in my major (accounting ) like getting a good Final Exam mark or etc, I just doing all of this as usual. Take a part job like this just spend my time and myself into risks. So I absolutely refuse about this.
CHN
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Neat and comprehensible, nice phrases
Some inaccurate word choices and syntax errors
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I think get a part job while . If wants to money or more experience I think should be . , when are busy, no time and easily is not better choice. part job has negative and positive . positive : can more money help parent, increase income, experience, friends more independent take care . the negative easily tired, spend time work, and less time study. If you want to get good , I think should think twice about a part job like this manage our time and can maintain all of we should think twice about our health because tak a part job is pretty difficult when manage it . If I must chooseI not ecause is difficult me to manage my time, and I easily. Despite, I goals in my major (accounting) I just usual. a part job like this just my time and risk. I absolutely refuse this.
I think get a part job while study, is depend on the person. If she/ he wants to gain money or get more experience I think it should be okay. But, when we are really busy, no time and easily tired. It is not better choice. Get part job has a negative and positive opinions. In positive : you can get more money for helping your parent, increase your income, get more experience, get more friends and more independent for take care your self so you can be mature. And the negative area is : you easily for tired, spending many time for work, and less time of study. If you want to get good mark, I think we should think twice about take a part job like this? Can we manage our time, and can we maintain all of this, although we should think twice about our body health.. because take a part job is pretty difficult when you can't manage it in the right side. If I must choose one of this.. I will not. Because It is pretty difficult from me to manage my time, and actually I am easily tired. Despite, I didn't have any goals in my major (accounting ) like getting a good Final Exam mark or etc, I just doing all of this as usual. Take a part job like this just spend my time and myself into risks. So I absolutely refuse about this.
PAK
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I think get a part job while . If wants to money or more experience I think should be . , when are busy, no time and easily is not better choice. part job has negative and positive . positive : can more money help parent, increase income, experience, friends more independent take care . the negative easily tired, spend time work, and less time study. If you want to get good , I think should think twice about a part job like this manage our time and can maintain all of we should think twice about our health because tak a part job is pretty difficult when manage it . If I must chooseI not ecause is difficult me to manage my time, and I easily. Despite, I goals in my major (accounting) I just usual. a part job like this just my time and risk. I absolutely refuse this.
I think get a part job while study, is depend on the person. If she/ he wants to gain money or get more experience I think it should be okay. But, when we are really busy, no time and easily tired. It is not better choice. Get part job has a negative and positive opinions. In positive : you can get more money for helping your parent, increase your income, get more experience, get more friends and more independent for take care your self so you can be mature. And the negative area is : you easily for tired, spending many time for work, and less time of study. If you want to get good mark, I think we should think twice about take a part job like this? Can we manage our time, and can we maintain all of this, although we should think twice about our body health.. because take a part job is pretty difficult when you can't manage it in the right side. If I must choose one of this.. I will not. Because It is pretty difficult from me to manage my time, and actually I am easily tired. Despite, I didn't have any goals in my major (accounting ) like getting a good Final Exam mark or etc, I just doing all of this as usual. Take a part job like this just spend my time and myself into risks. So I absolutely refuse about this.
THA
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Offers well thought counterpoints
hard to understand opening and closing statements
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I think get a part job while . If wants to money or more experience I think should be . , when are busy, no time and easily is not better choice. part job has negative and positive . positive : can more money help parent, increase income, experience, friends more independent take care . the negative easily tired, spend time work, and less time study. If you want to get good , I think should think twice about a part job like this manage our time and can maintain all of we should think twice about our health because tak a part job is pretty difficult when manage it . If I must chooseI not ecause is difficult me to manage my time, and I easily. Despite, I goals in my major (accounting) I just usual. a part job like this just my time and risk. I absolutely refuse this.
I think get a part job while study, is depend on the person. If she/ he wants to gain money or get more experience I think it should be okay. But, when we are really busy, no time and easily tired. It is not better choice. Get part job has a negative and positive opinions. In positive : you can get more money for helping your parent, increase your income, get more experience, get more friends and more independent for take care your self so you can be mature. And the negative area is : you easily for tired, spending many time for work, and less time of study. If you want to get good mark, I think we should think twice about take a part job like this? Can we manage our time, and can we maintain all of this, although we should think twice about our body health.. because take a part job is pretty difficult when you can't manage it in the right side. If I must choose one of this.. I will not. Because It is pretty difficult from me to manage my time, and actually I am easily tired. Despite, I didn't have any goals in my major (accounting ) like getting a good Final Exam mark or etc, I just doing all of this as usual. Take a part job like this just spend my time and myself into risks. So I absolutely refuse about this.
IDN
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Very interesting start, involvement
Attempting communication a bit beyond their reach. Serious comprehension problems
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I think get a part job while . If wants to money or more experience I think should be . , when are busy, no time and easily is not better choice. part job has negative and positive . positive : can more money help parent, increase income, experience, friends more independent take care . the negative easily tired, spend time work, and less time study. If you want to get good , I think should think twice about a part job like this manage our time and can maintain all of we should think twice about our health because tak a part job is pretty difficult when manage it . If I must chooseI not ecause is difficult me to manage my time, and I easily. Despite, I goals in my major (accounting) I just usual. a part job like this just my time and risk. I absolutely refuse this.
I think get a part job while study, is depend on the person. If she/ he wants to gain money or get more experience I think it should be okay. But, when we are really busy, no time and easily tired. It is not better choice. Get part job has a negative and positive opinions. In positive : you can get more money for helping your parent, increase your income, get more experience, get more friends and more independent for take care your self so you can be mature. And the negative area is : you easily for tired, spending many time for work, and less time of study. If you want to get good mark, I think we should think twice about take a part job like this? Can we manage our time, and can we maintain all of this, although we should think twice about our body health.. because take a part job is pretty difficult when you can't manage it in the right side. If I must choose one of this.. I will not. Because It is pretty difficult from me to manage my time, and actually I am easily tired. Despite, I didn't have any goals in my major (accounting ) like getting a good Final Exam mark or etc, I just doing all of this as usual. Take a part job like this just spend my time and myself into risks. So I absolutely refuse about this.
PHL
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Good sentence construction and attempts at higher level vocab
Should more clearly introduce argument then organize essay with more well-defined reasons
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I think get a part job while . If wants to money or more experience I think should be . , when are busy, no time and easily is not better choice. part job has negative and positive . positive : can more money help parent, increase income, experience, friends more independent take care . the negative easily tired, spend time work, and less time study. If you want to get good , I think should think twice about a part job like this manage our time and can maintain all of we should think twice about our health because tak a part job is pretty difficult when manage it . If I must chooseI not ecause is difficult me to manage my time, and I easily. Despite, I goals in my major (accounting) I just usual. a part job like this just my time and risk. I absolutely refuse this.
I think get a part job while study, is depend on the person. If she/ he wants to gain money or get more experience I think it should be okay. But, when we are really busy, no time and easily tired. It is not better choice. Get part job has a negative and positive opinions. In positive : you can get more money for helping your parent, increase your income, get more experience, get more friends and more independent for take care your self so you can be mature. And the negative area is : you easily for tired, spending many time for work, and less time of study. If you want to get good mark, I think we should think twice about take a part job like this? Can we manage our time, and can we maintain all of this, although we should think twice about our body health.. because take a part job is pretty difficult when you can't manage it in the right side. If I must choose one of this.. I will not. Because It is pretty difficult from me to manage my time, and actually I am easily tired. Despite, I didn't have any goals in my major (accounting ) like getting a good Final Exam mark or etc, I just doing all of this as usual. Take a part job like this just spend my time and myself into risks. So I absolutely refuse about this.
KOR
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I can discern very well what the author wants to say
Inaccuracies affect comprehension, fluency. Some ideas unconnected
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I think get a part job while . If wants to money or more experience I think should be . , when are busy, no time and easily is not better choice. part job has negative and positive . positive : can more money help parent, increase income, experience, friends more independent take care . the negative easily tired, spend time work, and less time study. If you want to get good , I think should think twice about a part job like this manage our time and can maintain all of we should think twice about our health because tak a part job is pretty difficult when manage it . If I must chooseI not ecause is difficult me to manage my time, and I easily. Despite, I goals in my major (accounting) I just usual. a part job like this just my time and risk. I absolutely refuse this.
I think get a part job while study, is depend on the person. If she/ he wants to gain money or get more experience I think it should be okay. But, when we are really busy, no time and easily tired. It is not better choice. Get part job has a negative and positive opinions. In positive : you can get more money for helping your parent, increase your income, get more experience, get more friends and more independent for take care your self so you can be mature. And the negative area is : you easily for tired, spending many time for work, and less time of study. If you want to get good mark, I think we should think twice about take a part job like this? Can we manage our time, and can we maintain all of this, although we should think twice about our body health.. because take a part job is pretty difficult when you can't manage it in the right side. If I must choose one of this.. I will not. Because It is pretty difficult from me to manage my time, and actually I am easily tired. Despite, I didn't have any goals in my major (accounting ) like getting a good Final Exam mark or etc, I just doing all of this as usual. Take a part job like this just spend my time and myself into risks. So I absolutely refuse about this.
TWN
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Interesting anecdotes and perspective
Missing articles, and resolution of writer's point if difficult to understand (surveys)
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I think get a part job while . If wants to money or more experience I think should be . , when are busy, no time and easily is not better choice. part job has negative and positive . positive : can more money help parent, increase income, experience, friends more independent take care . the negative easily tired, spend time work, and less time study. If you want to get good , I think should think twice about a part job like this manage our time and can maintain all of we should think twice about our health because tak a part job is pretty difficult when manage it . If I must chooseI not ecause is difficult me to manage my time, and I easily. Despite, I goals in my major (accounting) I just usual. a part job like this just my time and risk. I absolutely refuse this.
I think get a part job while study, is depend on the person. If she/ he wants to gain money or get more experience I think it should be okay. But, when we are really busy, no time and easily tired. It is not better choice. Get part job has a negative and positive opinions. In positive : you can get more money for helping your parent, increase your income, get more experience, get more friends and more independent for take care your self so you can be mature. And the negative area is : you easily for tired, spending many time for work, and less time of study. If you want to get good mark, I think we should think twice about take a part job like this? Can we manage our time, and can we maintain all of this, although we should think twice about our body health.. because take a part job is pretty difficult when you can't manage it in the right side. If I must choose one of this.. I will not. Because It is pretty difficult from me to manage my time, and actually I am easily tired. Despite, I didn't have any goals in my major (accounting ) like getting a good Final Exam mark or etc, I just doing all of this as usual. Take a part job like this just spend my time and myself into risks. So I absolutely refuse about this.
CHN
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consistent with the proper usage of punctuations, also uses basic cohesive devices
sentence structure repetitions: "some people." impedance with the word: selection. not so much opinion presented
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I agree because, first parttime make you spend your free time in the right way. kill time by shopping or traveling all of activity time if you get job in the shop or restaurant hat's earning you money. Second can improve your skill if you only meet small social and have no so the job would help you to meet many kinds of people might be good for you. Third your and can make you grow up the job sometime might be hard or ; if you can it that would be great. Fourth you are in college you are not little child. The parttime job can help and you would be proud earn your pocket money your two hands other your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. the last reason some learner have much time to exercise so do the job would help to move bod and use brain the result is health. I think is good way to spend your timeand don't forget to study hard too.
I agree because, first part time job make you spend your free time in the right way. Somebody kill their time by go shopping or traveling all of activity lose your time but if you get the job in the shop or restaurant. That's earning your money. Second it can improve your skill if you only meet the small social and have no accommodate so the job would help you to meet new many kinds of people that's might be good for you. Third it's improved your patient and can make you grow up; the job sometime might be hard or not comfortable; if you can pass it that would be great. Fourth you are in the college that's mean you are not the little child. The part time job can help you parent and you would be proud to your self that you can earn your pocket money by your two hands but in other word your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. And the last reason some learner have not much time to have an exercise so do the job would help you to move your body and use your brain the result is your health is good. I think it is the good way to spend your time on past time job and don't forget to study hard too.
CHN
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The essay stayed true to the topic and gave appropriate reasons
"College students" as a starter of a sentence was used thrice
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I agree because, first parttime make you spend your free time in the right way. kill time by shopping or traveling all of activity time if you get job in the shop or restaurant hat's earning you money. Second can improve your skill if you only meet small social and have no so the job would help you to meet many kinds of people might be good for you. Third your and can make you grow up the job sometime might be hard or ; if you can it that would be great. Fourth you are in college you are not little child. The parttime job can help and you would be proud earn your pocket money your two hands other your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. the last reason some learner have much time to exercise so do the job would help to move bod and use brain the result is health. I think is good way to spend your timeand don't forget to study hard too.
I agree because, first part time job make you spend your free time in the right way. Somebody kill their time by go shopping or traveling all of activity lose your time but if you get the job in the shop or restaurant. That's earning your money. Second it can improve your skill if you only meet the small social and have no accommodate so the job would help you to meet new many kinds of people that's might be good for you. Third it's improved your patient and can make you grow up; the job sometime might be hard or not comfortable; if you can pass it that would be great. Fourth you are in the college that's mean you are not the little child. The part time job can help you parent and you would be proud to your self that you can earn your pocket money by your two hands but in other word your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. And the last reason some learner have not much time to have an exercise so do the job would help you to move your body and use your brain the result is your health is good. I think it is the good way to spend your time on past time job and don't forget to study hard too.
KOR
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The first few sentences are still in control, which are quite understandable
many incomplete sentences and thoughts are quite vague, weak grammatical structures
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I agree because, first parttime make you spend your free time in the right way. kill time by shopping or traveling all of activity time if you get job in the shop or restaurant hat's earning you money. Second can improve your skill if you only meet small social and have no so the job would help you to meet many kinds of people might be good for you. Third your and can make you grow up the job sometime might be hard or ; if you can it that would be great. Fourth you are in college you are not little child. The parttime job can help and you would be proud earn your pocket money your two hands other your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. the last reason some learner have much time to exercise so do the job would help to move bod and use brain the result is health. I think is good way to spend your timeand don't forget to study hard too.
I agree because, first part time job make you spend your free time in the right way. Somebody kill their time by go shopping or traveling all of activity lose your time but if you get the job in the shop or restaurant. That's earning your money. Second it can improve your skill if you only meet the small social and have no accommodate so the job would help you to meet new many kinds of people that's might be good for you. Third it's improved your patient and can make you grow up; the job sometime might be hard or not comfortable; if you can pass it that would be great. Fourth you are in the college that's mean you are not the little child. The part time job can help you parent and you would be proud to your self that you can earn your pocket money by your two hands but in other word your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. And the last reason some learner have not much time to have an exercise so do the job would help you to move your body and use your brain the result is your health is good. I think it is the good way to spend your time on past time job and don't forget to study hard too.
SIN
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Some good word choices such as financially burdened, monetary reward, etc.
singular plural form problem ex. Students in college is --> students in college are
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I agree because, first parttime make you spend your free time in the right way. kill time by shopping or traveling all of activity time if you get job in the shop or restaurant hat's earning you money. Second can improve your skill if you only meet small social and have no so the job would help you to meet many kinds of people might be good for you. Third your and can make you grow up the job sometime might be hard or ; if you can it that would be great. Fourth you are in college you are not little child. The parttime job can help and you would be proud earn your pocket money your two hands other your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. the last reason some learner have much time to exercise so do the job would help to move bod and use brain the result is health. I think is good way to spend your timeand don't forget to study hard too.
I agree because, first part time job make you spend your free time in the right way. Somebody kill their time by go shopping or traveling all of activity lose your time but if you get the job in the shop or restaurant. That's earning your money. Second it can improve your skill if you only meet the small social and have no accommodate so the job would help you to meet new many kinds of people that's might be good for you. Third it's improved your patient and can make you grow up; the job sometime might be hard or not comfortable; if you can pass it that would be great. Fourth you are in the college that's mean you are not the little child. The part time job can help you parent and you would be proud to your self that you can earn your pocket money by your two hands but in other word your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. And the last reason some learner have not much time to have an exercise so do the job would help you to move your body and use your brain the result is your health is good. I think it is the good way to spend your time on past time job and don't forget to study hard too.
JPN
B1_2
8
8
5
8
7
6
8
8
9
8
83
75
79
provided many personal examples that makes the claim believable in a readers perspective
some words can be improved. Ex, instead of saying severe working--->difficult working
11,533
I agree because, first parttime make you spend your free time in the right way. kill time by shopping or traveling all of activity time if you get job in the shop or restaurant hat's earning you money. Second can improve your skill if you only meet small social and have no so the job would help you to meet many kinds of people might be good for you. Third your and can make you grow up the job sometime might be hard or ; if you can it that would be great. Fourth you are in college you are not little child. The parttime job can help and you would be proud earn your pocket money your two hands other your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. the last reason some learner have much time to exercise so do the job would help to move bod and use brain the result is health. I think is good way to spend your timeand don't forget to study hard too.
I agree because, first part time job make you spend your free time in the right way. Somebody kill their time by go shopping or traveling all of activity lose your time but if you get the job in the shop or restaurant. That's earning your money. Second it can improve your skill if you only meet the small social and have no accommodate so the job would help you to meet new many kinds of people that's might be good for you. Third it's improved your patient and can make you grow up; the job sometime might be hard or not comfortable; if you can pass it that would be great. Fourth you are in the college that's mean you are not the little child. The part time job can help you parent and you would be proud to your self that you can earn your pocket money by your two hands but in other word your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. And the last reason some learner have not much time to have an exercise so do the job would help you to move your body and use your brain the result is your health is good. I think it is the good way to spend your time on past time job and don't forget to study hard too.
CHN
A2_0
6
6
9
4
6
8
8
6
4
6
66
63
64.5
good usage of hyphen (after-school work), very concise and easy to read
lacks prepositions in some sentences, sometimes its hard to understand the point
11,560
I agree because, first parttime make you spend your free time in the right way. kill time by shopping or traveling all of activity time if you get job in the shop or restaurant hat's earning you money. Second can improve your skill if you only meet small social and have no so the job would help you to meet many kinds of people might be good for you. Third your and can make you grow up the job sometime might be hard or ; if you can it that would be great. Fourth you are in college you are not little child. The parttime job can help and you would be proud earn your pocket money your two hands other your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. the last reason some learner have much time to exercise so do the job would help to move bod and use brain the result is health. I think is good way to spend your timeand don't forget to study hard too.
I agree because, first part time job make you spend your free time in the right way. Somebody kill their time by go shopping or traveling all of activity lose your time but if you get the job in the shop or restaurant. That's earning your money. Second it can improve your skill if you only meet the small social and have no accommodate so the job would help you to meet new many kinds of people that's might be good for you. Third it's improved your patient and can make you grow up; the job sometime might be hard or not comfortable; if you can pass it that would be great. Fourth you are in the college that's mean you are not the little child. The part time job can help you parent and you would be proud to your self that you can earn your pocket money by your two hands but in other word your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. And the last reason some learner have not much time to have an exercise so do the job would help you to move your body and use your brain the result is your health is good. I think it is the good way to spend your time on past time job and don't forget to study hard too.
THA
B1_2
8
7
8
7
7
8
8
9
8
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78
79
reading is easy and sentence structure is good. The essay is quite well organized.
"I agree with part time job" was used twice in different sentences.
11,558
I agree because, first parttime make you spend your free time in the right way. kill time by shopping or traveling all of activity time if you get job in the shop or restaurant hat's earning you money. Second can improve your skill if you only meet small social and have no so the job would help you to meet many kinds of people might be good for you. Third your and can make you grow up the job sometime might be hard or ; if you can it that would be great. Fourth you are in college you are not little child. The parttime job can help and you would be proud earn your pocket money your two hands other your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. the last reason some learner have much time to exercise so do the job would help to move bod and use brain the result is health. I think is good way to spend your timeand don't forget to study hard too.
I agree because, first part time job make you spend your free time in the right way. Somebody kill their time by go shopping or traveling all of activity lose your time but if you get the job in the shop or restaurant. That's earning your money. Second it can improve your skill if you only meet the small social and have no accommodate so the job would help you to meet new many kinds of people that's might be good for you. Third it's improved your patient and can make you grow up; the job sometime might be hard or not comfortable; if you can pass it that would be great. Fourth you are in the college that's mean you are not the little child. The part time job can help you parent and you would be proud to your self that you can earn your pocket money by your two hands but in other word your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. And the last reason some learner have not much time to have an exercise so do the job would help you to move your body and use your brain the result is your health is good. I think it is the good way to spend your time on past time job and don't forget to study hard too.
JPN
A2_0
5
5
5
5
6
5
5
5
6
5
62
52
57
sentence structure is organized because of cohesive devices used (firstly, secondly)
strong at the start but struggled towards the middle to continue with the explanation
11,498
I agree because, first parttime make you spend your free time in the right way. kill time by shopping or traveling all of activity time if you get job in the shop or restaurant hat's earning you money. Second can improve your skill if you only meet small social and have no so the job would help you to meet many kinds of people might be good for you. Third your and can make you grow up the job sometime might be hard or ; if you can it that would be great. Fourth you are in college you are not little child. The parttime job can help and you would be proud earn your pocket money your two hands other your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. the last reason some learner have much time to exercise so do the job would help to move bod and use brain the result is health. I think is good way to spend your timeand don't forget to study hard too.
I agree because, first part time job make you spend your free time in the right way. Somebody kill their time by go shopping or traveling all of activity lose your time but if you get the job in the shop or restaurant. That's earning your money. Second it can improve your skill if you only meet the small social and have no accommodate so the job would help you to meet new many kinds of people that's might be good for you. Third it's improved your patient and can make you grow up; the job sometime might be hard or not comfortable; if you can pass it that would be great. Fourth you are in the college that's mean you are not the little child. The part time job can help you parent and you would be proud to your self that you can earn your pocket money by your two hands but in other word your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. And the last reason some learner have not much time to have an exercise so do the job would help you to move your body and use your brain the result is your health is good. I think it is the good way to spend your time on past time job and don't forget to study hard too.
CHN
B1_1
8
9
8
8
8
8
9
8
8
8
84
82
83
simple essay but was able to use complex sentencing. Well thought of
"social opinion" sounds awkward to me. Commas are sometimes missing in sentences
11,605
I agree because, first parttime make you spend your free time in the right way. kill time by shopping or traveling all of activity time if you get job in the shop or restaurant hat's earning you money. Second can improve your skill if you only meet small social and have no so the job would help you to meet many kinds of people might be good for you. Third your and can make you grow up the job sometime might be hard or ; if you can it that would be great. Fourth you are in college you are not little child. The parttime job can help and you would be proud earn your pocket money your two hands other your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. the last reason some learner have much time to exercise so do the job would help to move bod and use brain the result is health. I think is good way to spend your timeand don't forget to study hard too.
I agree because, first part time job make you spend your free time in the right way. Somebody kill their time by go shopping or traveling all of activity lose your time but if you get the job in the shop or restaurant. That's earning your money. Second it can improve your skill if you only meet the small social and have no accommodate so the job would help you to meet new many kinds of people that's might be good for you. Third it's improved your patient and can make you grow up; the job sometime might be hard or not comfortable; if you can pass it that would be great. Fourth you are in the college that's mean you are not the little child. The part time job can help you parent and you would be proud to your self that you can earn your pocket money by your two hands but in other word your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. And the last reason some learner have not much time to have an exercise so do the job would help you to move your body and use your brain the result is your health is good. I think it is the good way to spend your time on past time job and don't forget to study hard too.
JPN
A2_0
5
6
5
5
6
5
5
5
4
5
53
51
52
it started well and the word "preceding" makes the paragraph a bit sophisticated
it was not able to support its opinion very much, the explanations are a bit simplistic
11,541
I agree because, first parttime make you spend your free time in the right way. kill time by shopping or traveling all of activity time if you get job in the shop or restaurant hat's earning you money. Second can improve your skill if you only meet small social and have no so the job would help you to meet many kinds of people might be good for you. Third your and can make you grow up the job sometime might be hard or ; if you can it that would be great. Fourth you are in college you are not little child. The parttime job can help and you would be proud earn your pocket money your two hands other your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. the last reason some learner have much time to exercise so do the job would help to move bod and use brain the result is health. I think is good way to spend your timeand don't forget to study hard too.
I agree because, first part time job make you spend your free time in the right way. Somebody kill their time by go shopping or traveling all of activity lose your time but if you get the job in the shop or restaurant. That's earning your money. Second it can improve your skill if you only meet the small social and have no accommodate so the job would help you to meet new many kinds of people that's might be good for you. Third it's improved your patient and can make you grow up; the job sometime might be hard or not comfortable; if you can pass it that would be great. Fourth you are in the college that's mean you are not the little child. The part time job can help you parent and you would be proud to your self that you can earn your pocket money by your two hands but in other word your mother would not reprove you any more about your new shirt or new shoes. And the last reason some learner have not much time to have an exercise so do the job would help you to move your body and use your brain the result is your health is good. I think it is the good way to spend your time on past time job and don't forget to study hard too.
TWN
B2_0
6
5
4
7
5
6
6
5
4
10
60
58
59
The writer tries to communicate with the reader especially at the end of the essay.
But at the same time, the last part of the essay goes off the track.
11,683
I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have hardly work, they cannot accuratly work. is because they have not enough experience. In the university, no one teaches excutive . Second, orean students do not know money since orean university students pocket money from parents. think people who have never experienced part-time job do not know money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience part-time job and they do not know how to manage spending money ecause they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. it is good experience for university student to work part time job. ast thing is that they can know lots of people. If students work parttime job, they can know a lot workers than general university student. In Korea, it is important to know the people who in the same ., I agree with working part-time job.
I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience before getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have to hardly work, they can not accuratly work. that is because they have not enough experiences. In the university, no one teaches excutive abilities. Second, lots of korean students do not know valuableness about money since lots of korean university students get a pocket money from parents. i think people who have never experienced about part-time job do not know notableness about money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience to work as a part-time job and they do not know how to management spending money. Because they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. so it is good at experience for university student to work as a part time job. Last thing is that they can know lots of people. If students who work part time job, they can be know a lot of workers than general university student. In Korean, it is important to know the people who is in the same part. consequentially, I agree with working part-time job for university students.
CHN
A2_0
5
6
4
5
5
7
5
6
7
2
60
52
56
An well-thought introduction indicates that the writer is willing to communicate with the readers.
Because of language inaccuracy, some sentences were not understandable.
11,631
I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have hardly work, they cannot accuratly work. is because they have not enough experience. In the university, no one teaches excutive . Second, orean students do not know money since orean university students pocket money from parents. think people who have never experienced part-time job do not know money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience part-time job and they do not know how to manage spending money ecause they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. it is good experience for university student to work part time job. ast thing is that they can know lots of people. If students work parttime job, they can know a lot workers than general university student. In Korea, it is important to know the people who in the same ., I agree with working part-time job.
I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience before getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have to hardly work, they can not accuratly work. that is because they have not enough experiences. In the university, no one teaches excutive abilities. Second, lots of korean students do not know valuableness about money since lots of korean university students get a pocket money from parents. i think people who have never experienced about part-time job do not know notableness about money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience to work as a part-time job and they do not know how to management spending money. Because they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. so it is good at experience for university student to work as a part time job. Last thing is that they can know lots of people. If students who work part time job, they can be know a lot of workers than general university student. In Korean, it is important to know the people who is in the same part. consequentially, I agree with working part-time job for university students.
CHN
B1_1
9
9
9
7
10
8
10
7
5
8
85
82
83.5
The writer successfully conveys their opinion with logical and appropriate supporting ideas.
Although it is well-organized, the essay is a little short.
11,667
I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have hardly work, they cannot accuratly work. is because they have not enough experience. In the university, no one teaches excutive . Second, orean students do not know money since orean university students pocket money from parents. think people who have never experienced part-time job do not know money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience part-time job and they do not know how to manage spending money ecause they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. it is good experience for university student to work part time job. ast thing is that they can know lots of people. If students work parttime job, they can know a lot workers than general university student. In Korea, it is important to know the people who in the same ., I agree with working part-time job.
I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience before getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have to hardly work, they can not accuratly work. that is because they have not enough experiences. In the university, no one teaches excutive abilities. Second, lots of korean students do not know valuableness about money since lots of korean university students get a pocket money from parents. i think people who have never experienced about part-time job do not know notableness about money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience to work as a part-time job and they do not know how to management spending money. Because they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. so it is good at experience for university student to work as a part time job. Last thing is that they can know lots of people. If students who work part time job, they can be know a lot of workers than general university student. In Korean, it is important to know the people who is in the same part. consequentially, I agree with working part-time job for university students.
IDN
B1_2
6
5
4
7
10
9
8
10
6
7
80
72
76
The essay strictly sticks to the purpose of the task with an easy-to-understand logical structure.
There are some basic grammatical mistakes spotted, though they rarely hinder understanding.
11,665
I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have hardly work, they cannot accuratly work. is because they have not enough experience. In the university, no one teaches excutive . Second, orean students do not know money since orean university students pocket money from parents. think people who have never experienced part-time job do not know money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience part-time job and they do not know how to manage spending money ecause they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. it is good experience for university student to work part time job. ast thing is that they can know lots of people. If students work parttime job, they can know a lot workers than general university student. In Korea, it is important to know the people who in the same ., I agree with working part-time job.
I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience before getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have to hardly work, they can not accuratly work. that is because they have not enough experiences. In the university, no one teaches excutive abilities. Second, lots of korean students do not know valuableness about money since lots of korean university students get a pocket money from parents. i think people who have never experienced about part-time job do not know notableness about money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience to work as a part-time job and they do not know how to management spending money. Because they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. so it is good at experience for university student to work as a part time job. Last thing is that they can know lots of people. If students who work part time job, they can be know a lot of workers than general university student. In Korean, it is important to know the people who is in the same part. consequentially, I agree with working part-time job for university students.
CHN
B1_2
8
6
5
7
9
8
5
9
5
10
75
72
73.5
The essay expresses the writer's opinion and supporting details clearly.
The first half of the essay is essentially an introduction and is not directly related to the writer's opinion.
11,731
I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have hardly work, they cannot accuratly work. is because they have not enough experience. In the university, no one teaches excutive . Second, orean students do not know money since orean university students pocket money from parents. think people who have never experienced part-time job do not know money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience part-time job and they do not know how to manage spending money ecause they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. it is good experience for university student to work part time job. ast thing is that they can know lots of people. If students work parttime job, they can know a lot workers than general university student. In Korea, it is important to know the people who in the same ., I agree with working part-time job.
I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience before getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have to hardly work, they can not accuratly work. that is because they have not enough experiences. In the university, no one teaches excutive abilities. Second, lots of korean students do not know valuableness about money since lots of korean university students get a pocket money from parents. i think people who have never experienced about part-time job do not know notableness about money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience to work as a part-time job and they do not know how to management spending money. Because they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. so it is good at experience for university student to work as a part time job. Last thing is that they can know lots of people. If students who work part time job, they can be know a lot of workers than general university student. In Korean, it is important to know the people who is in the same part. consequentially, I agree with working part-time job for university students.
CHN
B1_1
8
7
6
10
10
9
9
10
10
9
90
88
89
By using the pronoun "we," the writer successfully get the reader involved in their discourse.
There are several minor grammatical mistakes, although they do not hinder understanding.
11,742
I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have hardly work, they cannot accuratly work. is because they have not enough experience. In the university, no one teaches excutive . Second, orean students do not know money since orean university students pocket money from parents. think people who have never experienced part-time job do not know money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience part-time job and they do not know how to manage spending money ecause they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. it is good experience for university student to work part time job. ast thing is that they can know lots of people. If students work parttime job, they can know a lot workers than general university student. In Korea, it is important to know the people who in the same ., I agree with working part-time job.
I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience before getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have to hardly work, they can not accuratly work. that is because they have not enough experiences. In the university, no one teaches excutive abilities. Second, lots of korean students do not know valuableness about money since lots of korean university students get a pocket money from parents. i think people who have never experienced about part-time job do not know notableness about money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience to work as a part-time job and they do not know how to management spending money. Because they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. so it is good at experience for university student to work as a part time job. Last thing is that they can know lots of people. If students who work part time job, they can be know a lot of workers than general university student. In Korean, it is important to know the people who is in the same part. consequentially, I agree with working part-time job for university students.
IDN
B2_0
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10
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10
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99
99.5
The writer clearly states their opinion with logical supporting ideas and with almost no grammatical or lexical mistakes.
A very few grammatical mistakes are found, but they are not so noticeable.
11,634
I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have hardly work, they cannot accuratly work. is because they have not enough experience. In the university, no one teaches excutive . Second, orean students do not know money since orean university students pocket money from parents. think people who have never experienced part-time job do not know money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience part-time job and they do not know how to manage spending money ecause they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. it is good experience for university student to work part time job. ast thing is that they can know lots of people. If students work parttime job, they can know a lot workers than general university student. In Korea, it is important to know the people who in the same ., I agree with working part-time job.
I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience before getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have to hardly work, they can not accuratly work. that is because they have not enough experiences. In the university, no one teaches excutive abilities. Second, lots of korean students do not know valuableness about money since lots of korean university students get a pocket money from parents. i think people who have never experienced about part-time job do not know notableness about money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience to work as a part-time job and they do not know how to management spending money. Because they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. so it is good at experience for university student to work as a part time job. Last thing is that they can know lots of people. If students who work part time job, they can be know a lot of workers than general university student. In Korean, it is important to know the people who is in the same part. consequentially, I agree with working part-time job for university students.
THA
B1_2
0
0
0
0
0
0
0
0
5
4
5
9
7
The pronouns "we" and "you" show that the writer wants to communicate with the reader.
Due to inaccuracy and lack of intelligibility, the essay is almost entirely illogical and incomprehensible.
11,702
I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have hardly work, they cannot accuratly work. is because they have not enough experience. In the university, no one teaches excutive . Second, orean students do not know money since orean university students pocket money from parents. think people who have never experienced part-time job do not know money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience part-time job and they do not know how to manage spending money ecause they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. it is good experience for university student to work part time job. ast thing is that they can know lots of people. If students work parttime job, they can know a lot workers than general university student. In Korea, it is important to know the people who in the same ., I agree with working part-time job.
I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience before getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have to hardly work, they can not accuratly work. that is because they have not enough experiences. In the university, no one teaches excutive abilities. Second, lots of korean students do not know valuableness about money since lots of korean university students get a pocket money from parents. i think people who have never experienced about part-time job do not know notableness about money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience to work as a part-time job and they do not know how to management spending money. Because they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. so it is good at experience for university student to work as a part time job. Last thing is that they can know lots of people. If students who work part time job, they can be know a lot of workers than general university student. In Korean, it is important to know the people who is in the same part. consequentially, I agree with working part-time job for university students.
TWN
B1_1
10
10
9
9
10
10
10
10
10
10
95
98
96.5
The writer uses both general and personal ideas to support their opinion on the topic and expresses them quite well in the essay.
There are a few minor grammatical mistakes seen in the essay, though they do not hinder understanding.
11,711
I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have hardly work, they cannot accuratly work. is because they have not enough experience. In the university, no one teaches excutive . Second, orean students do not know money since orean university students pocket money from parents. think people who have never experienced part-time job do not know money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience part-time job and they do not know how to manage spending money ecause they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. it is good experience for university student to work part time job. ast thing is that they can know lots of people. If students work parttime job, they can know a lot workers than general university student. In Korea, it is important to know the people who in the same ., I agree with working part-time job.
I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience before getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have to hardly work, they can not accuratly work. that is because they have not enough experiences. In the university, no one teaches excutive abilities. Second, lots of korean students do not know valuableness about money since lots of korean university students get a pocket money from parents. i think people who have never experienced about part-time job do not know notableness about money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience to work as a part-time job and they do not know how to management spending money. Because they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. so it is good at experience for university student to work as a part time job. Last thing is that they can know lots of people. If students who work part time job, they can be know a lot of workers than general university student. In Korean, it is important to know the people who is in the same part. consequentially, I agree with working part-time job for university students.
THA
A2_0
4
5
6
4
6
4
2
2
1
0
30
34
32
Most sentences are grammatically accurate, and it is not difficult to understand each of them.
The essay is written entirely one-sidedly with the writer's personal experiences being the only supporting idea.
11,708
I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have hardly work, they cannot accuratly work. is because they have not enough experience. In the university, no one teaches excutive . Second, orean students do not know money since orean university students pocket money from parents. think people who have never experienced part-time job do not know money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience part-time job and they do not know how to manage spending money ecause they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. it is good experience for university student to work part time job. ast thing is that they can know lots of people. If students work parttime job, they can know a lot workers than general university student. In Korea, it is important to know the people who in the same ., I agree with working part-time job.
I agree with the question. I have four reasons. First of all, I think it is important for university students to experience before getting a job. For example, if students who are finished university get a job and have to hardly work, they can not accuratly work. that is because they have not enough experiences. In the university, no one teaches excutive abilities. Second, lots of korean students do not know valuableness about money since lots of korean university students get a pocket money from parents. i think people who have never experienced about part-time job do not know notableness about money. Third, to know about spending money. I think a lot of student do not have experience to work as a part-time job and they do not know how to management spending money. Because they have never experienced working and earning the money themselves. so it is good at experience for university student to work as a part time job. Last thing is that they can know lots of people. If students who work part time job, they can be know a lot of workers than general university student. In Korean, it is important to know the people who is in the same part. consequentially, I agree with working part-time job for university students.
THA
B1_1
5
3
3
7
7
5
6
4
3
8
50
51
50.5
The writer's opinion communicates what this essay is all about and provided a topic sentence that is consistent.
The writer needs improvement on grammar, punctuation, word choice and sentence form.
11,822
I disagree with th opinion. I think that it is not important for college students to have part-time . There are two main reasons. The first reason is that students should study. What students have to do is study, but some students can't study enough because of their part-time job. For example, my friend has a part-time job English elementary school students. She looks so busy for teaching. She often checks their answers even during class the university. Also, she is likely to be late for a class because she has to prepare for teaching all night. I can't think it is good for her. In that case, part-time job prevents from . The second reason is that many students spend most salary playing, not living. They mainly spend their money clothes, their , dating, traveling and so on. This means most of them don't work for living. For instance, my friend who I stated above is one of students. She lives with her family and doesn't have to work. However, she wants to more clothes and follow fashion. In closing, I don't want to say students must not part-time , but it is not so for them. Therefore, I think it is unimportant for college students to have part-time .
I disagree with that opinion. I think that it is not important for college students to have a part-time job. There are two main reasons. The first reason is that students should study. What students have to do is study, but some students can't study enough because of their part-time job. For example, my friend has a part-time job to teach English for elementary school students. She looks so busy everyday to prepare for teaching. She often checks their answers in examination even during a class in the university. Also, she is likely to be late for a class because she has to prepare for teaching all night. I can't think it is good for her. In that case, part-time job prevents from her study. The second reason is that many students spend most salary playing, not living. They mainly spend their money clothes, their hobby, dating, traveling and so on. This means most of them don't work for living. For instance, my friend who I stated above is one of such students. She lives with her family and doesn't have to work. However, she wants to get more clothes and to follow fashion. In closing, I don't want to say students must not do part-time job, but it is not so important for them. Therefore, I think it is unimportant for college students to have a part-time job.
IDN
B1_2
4
7
3
6
7
5
5
4
6
7
55
54
54.5
The writer organized an argumentative essay on part time job and allows to logically and convincing support its stand.
The writer needs to learn more on grammar, punctuation, word choice and sentence form.
11,846
I disagree with th opinion. I think that it is not important for college students to have part-time . There are two main reasons. The first reason is that students should study. What students have to do is study, but some students can't study enough because of their part-time job. For example, my friend has a part-time job English elementary school students. She looks so busy for teaching. She often checks their answers even during class the university. Also, she is likely to be late for a class because she has to prepare for teaching all night. I can't think it is good for her. In that case, part-time job prevents from . The second reason is that many students spend most salary playing, not living. They mainly spend their money clothes, their , dating, traveling and so on. This means most of them don't work for living. For instance, my friend who I stated above is one of students. She lives with her family and doesn't have to work. However, she wants to more clothes and follow fashion. In closing, I don't want to say students must not part-time , but it is not so for them. Therefore, I think it is unimportant for college students to have part-time .
I disagree with that opinion. I think that it is not important for college students to have a part-time job. There are two main reasons. The first reason is that students should study. What students have to do is study, but some students can't study enough because of their part-time job. For example, my friend has a part-time job to teach English for elementary school students. She looks so busy everyday to prepare for teaching. She often checks their answers in examination even during a class in the university. Also, she is likely to be late for a class because she has to prepare for teaching all night. I can't think it is good for her. In that case, part-time job prevents from her study. The second reason is that many students spend most salary playing, not living. They mainly spend their money clothes, their hobby, dating, traveling and so on. This means most of them don't work for living. For instance, my friend who I stated above is one of such students. She lives with her family and doesn't have to work. However, she wants to get more clothes and to follow fashion. In closing, I don't want to say students must not do part-time job, but it is not so important for them. Therefore, I think it is unimportant for college students to have a part-time job.
SIN
B2_0
9
9
9
9
9
8
9
9
8
5
80
84
82
The writer's response has a clear and effective organizational structure creating unity and structure, it has an effective introduction and conclusion.
The writer needs to sum up each of the specific main points in the conclusion to further strengthen the essay.
11,884
I disagree with th opinion. I think that it is not important for college students to have part-time . There are two main reasons. The first reason is that students should study. What students have to do is study, but some students can't study enough because of their part-time job. For example, my friend has a part-time job English elementary school students. She looks so busy for teaching. She often checks their answers even during class the university. Also, she is likely to be late for a class because she has to prepare for teaching all night. I can't think it is good for her. In that case, part-time job prevents from . The second reason is that many students spend most salary playing, not living. They mainly spend their money clothes, their , dating, traveling and so on. This means most of them don't work for living. For instance, my friend who I stated above is one of students. She lives with her family and doesn't have to work. However, she wants to more clothes and follow fashion. In closing, I don't want to say students must not part-time , but it is not so for them. Therefore, I think it is unimportant for college students to have part-time .
I disagree with that opinion. I think that it is not important for college students to have a part-time job. There are two main reasons. The first reason is that students should study. What students have to do is study, but some students can't study enough because of their part-time job. For example, my friend has a part-time job to teach English for elementary school students. She looks so busy everyday to prepare for teaching. She often checks their answers in examination even during a class in the university. Also, she is likely to be late for a class because she has to prepare for teaching all night. I can't think it is good for her. In that case, part-time job prevents from her study. The second reason is that many students spend most salary playing, not living. They mainly spend their money clothes, their hobby, dating, traveling and so on. This means most of them don't work for living. For instance, my friend who I stated above is one of such students. She lives with her family and doesn't have to work. However, she wants to get more clothes and to follow fashion. In closing, I don't want to say students must not do part-time job, but it is not so important for them. Therefore, I think it is unimportant for college students to have a part-time job.
THA
A2_0
5
3
4
3
5
3
3
3
3
3
35
35
35
The writer's opinion are clear and consistent. Independent thinking is evident.
Grammar, spelling and punctuation need some improvement.
11,775
I disagree with th opinion. I think that it is not important for college students to have part-time . There are two main reasons. The first reason is that students should study. What students have to do is study, but some students can't study enough because of their part-time job. For example, my friend has a part-time job English elementary school students. She looks so busy for teaching. She often checks their answers even during class the university. Also, she is likely to be late for a class because she has to prepare for teaching all night. I can't think it is good for her. In that case, part-time job prevents from . The second reason is that many students spend most salary playing, not living. They mainly spend their money clothes, their , dating, traveling and so on. This means most of them don't work for living. For instance, my friend who I stated above is one of students. She lives with her family and doesn't have to work. However, she wants to more clothes and follow fashion. In closing, I don't want to say students must not part-time , but it is not so for them. Therefore, I think it is unimportant for college students to have part-time .
I disagree with that opinion. I think that it is not important for college students to have a part-time job. There are two main reasons. The first reason is that students should study. What students have to do is study, but some students can't study enough because of their part-time job. For example, my friend has a part-time job to teach English for elementary school students. She looks so busy everyday to prepare for teaching. She often checks their answers in examination even during a class in the university. Also, she is likely to be late for a class because she has to prepare for teaching all night. I can't think it is good for her. In that case, part-time job prevents from her study. The second reason is that many students spend most salary playing, not living. They mainly spend their money clothes, their hobby, dating, traveling and so on. This means most of them don't work for living. For instance, my friend who I stated above is one of such students. She lives with her family and doesn't have to work. However, she wants to get more clothes and to follow fashion. In closing, I don't want to say students must not do part-time job, but it is not so important for them. Therefore, I think it is unimportant for college students to have a part-time job.
KOR
B1_2
8
7
8
7
8
7
7
5
9
8
65
74
69.5
The writer's organization are purposeful, effective and appropriate.
nan
11,770
I disagree with th opinion. I think that it is not important for college students to have part-time . There are two main reasons. The first reason is that students should study. What students have to do is study, but some students can't study enough because of their part-time job. For example, my friend has a part-time job English elementary school students. She looks so busy for teaching. She often checks their answers even during class the university. Also, she is likely to be late for a class because she has to prepare for teaching all night. I can't think it is good for her. In that case, part-time job prevents from . The second reason is that many students spend most salary playing, not living. They mainly spend their money clothes, their , dating, traveling and so on. This means most of them don't work for living. For instance, my friend who I stated above is one of students. She lives with her family and doesn't have to work. However, she wants to more clothes and follow fashion. In closing, I don't want to say students must not part-time , but it is not so for them. Therefore, I think it is unimportant for college students to have part-time .
I disagree with that opinion. I think that it is not important for college students to have a part-time job. There are two main reasons. The first reason is that students should study. What students have to do is study, but some students can't study enough because of their part-time job. For example, my friend has a part-time job to teach English for elementary school students. She looks so busy everyday to prepare for teaching. She often checks their answers in examination even during a class in the university. Also, she is likely to be late for a class because she has to prepare for teaching all night. I can't think it is good for her. In that case, part-time job prevents from her study. The second reason is that many students spend most salary playing, not living. They mainly spend their money clothes, their hobby, dating, traveling and so on. This means most of them don't work for living. For instance, my friend who I stated above is one of such students. She lives with her family and doesn't have to work. However, she wants to get more clothes and to follow fashion. In closing, I don't want to say students must not do part-time job, but it is not so important for them. Therefore, I think it is unimportant for college students to have a part-time job.
THA
B1_2
6
6
4
7
5
3
4
5
3
5
55
48
51.5
The writer's response clearly and effectively expresses ideas using precise language, domain-specific vocabulary is clearly appropriate.
The writer needs improvement on grammar, punctuation, spelling, punctuation and word choice.
11,873
I disagree with th opinion. I think that it is not important for college students to have part-time . There are two main reasons. The first reason is that students should study. What students have to do is study, but some students can't study enough because of their part-time job. For example, my friend has a part-time job English elementary school students. She looks so busy for teaching. She often checks their answers even during class the university. Also, she is likely to be late for a class because she has to prepare for teaching all night. I can't think it is good for her. In that case, part-time job prevents from . The second reason is that many students spend most salary playing, not living. They mainly spend their money clothes, their , dating, traveling and so on. This means most of them don't work for living. For instance, my friend who I stated above is one of students. She lives with her family and doesn't have to work. However, she wants to more clothes and follow fashion. In closing, I don't want to say students must not part-time , but it is not so for them. Therefore, I think it is unimportant for college students to have part-time .
I disagree with that opinion. I think that it is not important for college students to have a part-time job. There are two main reasons. The first reason is that students should study. What students have to do is study, but some students can't study enough because of their part-time job. For example, my friend has a part-time job to teach English for elementary school students. She looks so busy everyday to prepare for teaching. She often checks their answers in examination even during a class in the university. Also, she is likely to be late for a class because she has to prepare for teaching all night. I can't think it is good for her. In that case, part-time job prevents from her study. The second reason is that many students spend most salary playing, not living. They mainly spend their money clothes, their hobby, dating, traveling and so on. This means most of them don't work for living. For instance, my friend who I stated above is one of such students. She lives with her family and doesn't have to work. However, she wants to get more clothes and to follow fashion. In closing, I don't want to say students must not do part-time job, but it is not so important for them. Therefore, I think it is unimportant for college students to have a part-time job.
JPN
B1_2
4
5
5
6
6
5
5
6
8
5
50
55
52.5
The writer's opinion are clearly structured, topic sentences are clear leading to the main idea of the essay.
The writer need improvement on grammar, punctuation, word choice and quantity writing.
11,836
I disagree with th opinion. I think that it is not important for college students to have part-time . There are two main reasons. The first reason is that students should study. What students have to do is study, but some students can't study enough because of their part-time job. For example, my friend has a part-time job English elementary school students. She looks so busy for teaching. She often checks their answers even during class the university. Also, she is likely to be late for a class because she has to prepare for teaching all night. I can't think it is good for her. In that case, part-time job prevents from . The second reason is that many students spend most salary playing, not living. They mainly spend their money clothes, their , dating, traveling and so on. This means most of them don't work for living. For instance, my friend who I stated above is one of students. She lives with her family and doesn't have to work. However, she wants to more clothes and follow fashion. In closing, I don't want to say students must not part-time , but it is not so for them. Therefore, I think it is unimportant for college students to have part-time .
I disagree with that opinion. I think that it is not important for college students to have a part-time job. There are two main reasons. The first reason is that students should study. What students have to do is study, but some students can't study enough because of their part-time job. For example, my friend has a part-time job to teach English for elementary school students. She looks so busy everyday to prepare for teaching. She often checks their answers in examination even during a class in the university. Also, she is likely to be late for a class because she has to prepare for teaching all night. I can't think it is good for her. In that case, part-time job prevents from her study. The second reason is that many students spend most salary playing, not living. They mainly spend their money clothes, their hobby, dating, traveling and so on. This means most of them don't work for living. For instance, my friend who I stated above is one of such students. She lives with her family and doesn't have to work. However, she wants to get more clothes and to follow fashion. In closing, I don't want to say students must not do part-time job, but it is not so important for them. Therefore, I think it is unimportant for college students to have a part-time job.
JPN
B1_1
6
7
5
8
8
7
5
5
7
5
65
63
64
The writer's claims and ideas are supported and consistent, topic sentences are clear.
The writer needs improvement on grammar, punctuation and word choice.
11,827
I disagree with th opinion. I think that it is not important for college students to have part-time . There are two main reasons. The first reason is that students should study. What students have to do is study, but some students can't study enough because of their part-time job. For example, my friend has a part-time job English elementary school students. She looks so busy for teaching. She often checks their answers even during class the university. Also, she is likely to be late for a class because she has to prepare for teaching all night. I can't think it is good for her. In that case, part-time job prevents from . The second reason is that many students spend most salary playing, not living. They mainly spend their money clothes, their , dating, traveling and so on. This means most of them don't work for living. For instance, my friend who I stated above is one of students. She lives with her family and doesn't have to work. However, she wants to more clothes and follow fashion. In closing, I don't want to say students must not part-time , but it is not so for them. Therefore, I think it is unimportant for college students to have part-time .
I disagree with that opinion. I think that it is not important for college students to have a part-time job. There are two main reasons. The first reason is that students should study. What students have to do is study, but some students can't study enough because of their part-time job. For example, my friend has a part-time job to teach English for elementary school students. She looks so busy everyday to prepare for teaching. She often checks their answers in examination even during a class in the university. Also, she is likely to be late for a class because she has to prepare for teaching all night. I can't think it is good for her. In that case, part-time job prevents from her study. The second reason is that many students spend most salary playing, not living. They mainly spend their money clothes, their hobby, dating, traveling and so on. This means most of them don't work for living. For instance, my friend who I stated above is one of such students. She lives with her family and doesn't have to work. However, she wants to get more clothes and to follow fashion. In closing, I don't want to say students must not do part-time job, but it is not so important for them. Therefore, I think it is unimportant for college students to have a part-time job.
TWN
B1_1
2
5
3
2
3
3
3
3
2
7
20
33
26.5
The writer's main claim is clear, significant and independent. Claims and ideas are supported and elaborated.
The writer needs to improve more on grammar, punctuation and quantity writing.
11,781
I disagree with th opinion. I think that it is not important for college students to have part-time . There are two main reasons. The first reason is that students should study. What students have to do is study, but some students can't study enough because of their part-time job. For example, my friend has a part-time job English elementary school students. She looks so busy for teaching. She often checks their answers even during class the university. Also, she is likely to be late for a class because she has to prepare for teaching all night. I can't think it is good for her. In that case, part-time job prevents from . The second reason is that many students spend most salary playing, not living. They mainly spend their money clothes, their , dating, traveling and so on. This means most of them don't work for living. For instance, my friend who I stated above is one of students. She lives with her family and doesn't have to work. However, she wants to more clothes and follow fashion. In closing, I don't want to say students must not part-time , but it is not so for them. Therefore, I think it is unimportant for college students to have part-time .
I disagree with that opinion. I think that it is not important for college students to have a part-time job. There are two main reasons. The first reason is that students should study. What students have to do is study, but some students can't study enough because of their part-time job. For example, my friend has a part-time job to teach English for elementary school students. She looks so busy everyday to prepare for teaching. She often checks their answers in examination even during a class in the university. Also, she is likely to be late for a class because she has to prepare for teaching all night. I can't think it is good for her. In that case, part-time job prevents from her study. The second reason is that many students spend most salary playing, not living. They mainly spend their money clothes, their hobby, dating, traveling and so on. This means most of them don't work for living. For instance, my friend who I stated above is one of such students. She lives with her family and doesn't have to work. However, she wants to get more clothes and to follow fashion. In closing, I don't want to say students must not do part-time job, but it is not so important for them. Therefore, I think it is unimportant for college students to have a part-time job.
JPN
B2_0
8
7
5
5
8
4
6
4
9
9
50
65
57.5
The writer clearly communicates what this essay is about and sentences are clear leading to the main idea.
The writer needs to improve on grammar, punctuation and the quantity of writing.
11,780
I disagree with th opinion. I think that it is not important for college students to have part-time . There are two main reasons. The first reason is that students should study. What students have to do is study, but some students can't study enough because of their part-time job. For example, my friend has a part-time job English elementary school students. She looks so busy for teaching. She often checks their answers even during class the university. Also, she is likely to be late for a class because she has to prepare for teaching all night. I can't think it is good for her. In that case, part-time job prevents from . The second reason is that many students spend most salary playing, not living. They mainly spend their money clothes, their , dating, traveling and so on. This means most of them don't work for living. For instance, my friend who I stated above is one of students. She lives with her family and doesn't have to work. However, she wants to more clothes and follow fashion. In closing, I don't want to say students must not part-time , but it is not so for them. Therefore, I think it is unimportant for college students to have part-time .
I disagree with that opinion. I think that it is not important for college students to have a part-time job. There are two main reasons. The first reason is that students should study. What students have to do is study, but some students can't study enough because of their part-time job. For example, my friend has a part-time job to teach English for elementary school students. She looks so busy everyday to prepare for teaching. She often checks their answers in examination even during a class in the university. Also, she is likely to be late for a class because she has to prepare for teaching all night. I can't think it is good for her. In that case, part-time job prevents from her study. The second reason is that many students spend most salary playing, not living. They mainly spend their money clothes, their hobby, dating, traveling and so on. This means most of them don't work for living. For instance, my friend who I stated above is one of such students. She lives with her family and doesn't have to work. However, she wants to get more clothes and to follow fashion. In closing, I don't want to say students must not do part-time job, but it is not so important for them. Therefore, I think it is unimportant for college students to have a part-time job.
HKG
B2_0
7
6
4
5
5
7
7
8
7
7
62
63
62.5
Reader involvement was quite good as well as good concluding remarks.
Difficult to clearly understand the purpose due to sentence structure.
11,975
not important at all in my view. Students have far too much to worry about just trying to pass their exams let alone also trying to hold down a job while they study. Some folks may disagree I know, but the fact still remains that in today's society, students are being taught to perform at high levels from primary school to university and/or college and quite frankly, it is a big ask. This is particularly true when students are studying for more comprehensive careers such as in medicine etc where study loads are quite and competition is high. Being a student myself, I can't imagine trying to get within the top ten percent of my course and down a job as well, even if it only for a few hours a week. It takes me all my time just to complete my study schedule on any given day without having to trundle off to a job at the local fast food shop. I know that several of my fellow students are in the same boat and feel the same way that I do. We have a tremendous amount of reading to do just to try to keep up with our workload. For me to pass with high scores, I know that I possibly take on a job and still perform at a high level. On that basis, I don't believe that it is important for students to have a part-time job because I believe, for me , that it is more important to focus on studies and let the jobs come later.
It's not important at all in my view. Students have far too much to worry about just trying to pass their exams let alone also trying to hold down a job while they study. Some folks may disagree I know, but the fact still remains that in today's society, students are being taught to perform at high levels from primary school to university and/or college and quite frankly, it is a big ask. This is particularly true when students are studying for more comprehensive careers such as in medicine etc where study loads are quite heavy and competition is high. Being a student myself, I can't imagine trying to get within the top ten percent of my course and hold down a job as well, even if it is only for a few hours a week. It takes me all my time just to complete my study schedule on any given day without having to trundle off to a job at the local fast food shop. I know that several of my fellow students are in the same boat and feel the same way that I do. We have a tremendous amount of reading to do, just to try to keep up with our workload. For me to pass with high scores, I know that I couldn't possibly take on a job and still perform at a high level. On that basis, I don't believe that it is important for students to have a part-time job because I believe, for me anyway, that it is more important to focus on studies and let the jobs come later.
TWN
B2_0
3
6
3
5
6
5
7
7
7
7
60
56
58
Some interesting ideas were expressed and supported.
Be careful about the use of plurals, particularly possessive forms.
11,946
not important at all in my view. Students have far too much to worry about just trying to pass their exams let alone also trying to hold down a job while they study. Some folks may disagree I know, but the fact still remains that in today's society, students are being taught to perform at high levels from primary school to university and/or college and quite frankly, it is a big ask. This is particularly true when students are studying for more comprehensive careers such as in medicine etc where study loads are quite and competition is high. Being a student myself, I can't imagine trying to get within the top ten percent of my course and down a job as well, even if it only for a few hours a week. It takes me all my time just to complete my study schedule on any given day without having to trundle off to a job at the local fast food shop. I know that several of my fellow students are in the same boat and feel the same way that I do. We have a tremendous amount of reading to do just to try to keep up with our workload. For me to pass with high scores, I know that I possibly take on a job and still perform at a high level. On that basis, I don't believe that it is important for students to have a part-time job because I believe, for me , that it is more important to focus on studies and let the jobs come later.
It's not important at all in my view. Students have far too much to worry about just trying to pass their exams let alone also trying to hold down a job while they study. Some folks may disagree I know, but the fact still remains that in today's society, students are being taught to perform at high levels from primary school to university and/or college and quite frankly, it is a big ask. This is particularly true when students are studying for more comprehensive careers such as in medicine etc where study loads are quite heavy and competition is high. Being a student myself, I can't imagine trying to get within the top ten percent of my course and hold down a job as well, even if it is only for a few hours a week. It takes me all my time just to complete my study schedule on any given day without having to trundle off to a job at the local fast food shop. I know that several of my fellow students are in the same boat and feel the same way that I do. We have a tremendous amount of reading to do, just to try to keep up with our workload. For me to pass with high scores, I know that I couldn't possibly take on a job and still perform at a high level. On that basis, I don't believe that it is important for students to have a part-time job because I believe, for me anyway, that it is more important to focus on studies and let the jobs come later.
CHN
B1_2
7
6
8
7
7
8
8
7
8
7
65
73
69
Concise writing style kept the meaning clear and easy to understand.
A clearer purpose would make understanding easier.
11,942
not important at all in my view. Students have far too much to worry about just trying to pass their exams let alone also trying to hold down a job while they study. Some folks may disagree I know, but the fact still remains that in today's society, students are being taught to perform at high levels from primary school to university and/or college and quite frankly, it is a big ask. This is particularly true when students are studying for more comprehensive careers such as in medicine etc where study loads are quite and competition is high. Being a student myself, I can't imagine trying to get within the top ten percent of my course and down a job as well, even if it only for a few hours a week. It takes me all my time just to complete my study schedule on any given day without having to trundle off to a job at the local fast food shop. I know that several of my fellow students are in the same boat and feel the same way that I do. We have a tremendous amount of reading to do just to try to keep up with our workload. For me to pass with high scores, I know that I possibly take on a job and still perform at a high level. On that basis, I don't believe that it is important for students to have a part-time job because I believe, for me , that it is more important to focus on studies and let the jobs come later.
It's not important at all in my view. Students have far too much to worry about just trying to pass their exams let alone also trying to hold down a job while they study. Some folks may disagree I know, but the fact still remains that in today's society, students are being taught to perform at high levels from primary school to university and/or college and quite frankly, it is a big ask. This is particularly true when students are studying for more comprehensive careers such as in medicine etc where study loads are quite heavy and competition is high. Being a student myself, I can't imagine trying to get within the top ten percent of my course and hold down a job as well, even if it is only for a few hours a week. It takes me all my time just to complete my study schedule on any given day without having to trundle off to a job at the local fast food shop. I know that several of my fellow students are in the same boat and feel the same way that I do. We have a tremendous amount of reading to do, just to try to keep up with our workload. For me to pass with high scores, I know that I couldn't possibly take on a job and still perform at a high level. On that basis, I don't believe that it is important for students to have a part-time job because I believe, for me anyway, that it is more important to focus on studies and let the jobs come later.
KOR
B1_1
3
2
2
3
3
7
6
2
3
6
52
37
44.5
The level of sophistication was good, this made the purpose easy to grasp.
Lack of prepositions made some sentences unintelligible.
11,973
not important at all in my view. Students have far too much to worry about just trying to pass their exams let alone also trying to hold down a job while they study. Some folks may disagree I know, but the fact still remains that in today's society, students are being taught to perform at high levels from primary school to university and/or college and quite frankly, it is a big ask. This is particularly true when students are studying for more comprehensive careers such as in medicine etc where study loads are quite and competition is high. Being a student myself, I can't imagine trying to get within the top ten percent of my course and down a job as well, even if it only for a few hours a week. It takes me all my time just to complete my study schedule on any given day without having to trundle off to a job at the local fast food shop. I know that several of my fellow students are in the same boat and feel the same way that I do. We have a tremendous amount of reading to do just to try to keep up with our workload. For me to pass with high scores, I know that I possibly take on a job and still perform at a high level. On that basis, I don't believe that it is important for students to have a part-time job because I believe, for me , that it is more important to focus on studies and let the jobs come later.
It's not important at all in my view. Students have far too much to worry about just trying to pass their exams let alone also trying to hold down a job while they study. Some folks may disagree I know, but the fact still remains that in today's society, students are being taught to perform at high levels from primary school to university and/or college and quite frankly, it is a big ask. This is particularly true when students are studying for more comprehensive careers such as in medicine etc where study loads are quite heavy and competition is high. Being a student myself, I can't imagine trying to get within the top ten percent of my course and hold down a job as well, even if it is only for a few hours a week. It takes me all my time just to complete my study schedule on any given day without having to trundle off to a job at the local fast food shop. I know that several of my fellow students are in the same boat and feel the same way that I do. We have a tremendous amount of reading to do, just to try to keep up with our workload. For me to pass with high scores, I know that I couldn't possibly take on a job and still perform at a high level. On that basis, I don't believe that it is important for students to have a part-time job because I believe, for me anyway, that it is more important to focus on studies and let the jobs come later.
PAK
B2_0
2
2
3
2
2
3
2
2
3
6
15
27
21
The writing flowed well, ideas were organized quite well, too.
Lack of transitional phrases made it difficult to read.
11,952
not important at all in my view. Students have far too much to worry about just trying to pass their exams let alone also trying to hold down a job while they study. Some folks may disagree I know, but the fact still remains that in today's society, students are being taught to perform at high levels from primary school to university and/or college and quite frankly, it is a big ask. This is particularly true when students are studying for more comprehensive careers such as in medicine etc where study loads are quite and competition is high. Being a student myself, I can't imagine trying to get within the top ten percent of my course and down a job as well, even if it only for a few hours a week. It takes me all my time just to complete my study schedule on any given day without having to trundle off to a job at the local fast food shop. I know that several of my fellow students are in the same boat and feel the same way that I do. We have a tremendous amount of reading to do just to try to keep up with our workload. For me to pass with high scores, I know that I possibly take on a job and still perform at a high level. On that basis, I don't believe that it is important for students to have a part-time job because I believe, for me , that it is more important to focus on studies and let the jobs come later.
It's not important at all in my view. Students have far too much to worry about just trying to pass their exams let alone also trying to hold down a job while they study. Some folks may disagree I know, but the fact still remains that in today's society, students are being taught to perform at high levels from primary school to university and/or college and quite frankly, it is a big ask. This is particularly true when students are studying for more comprehensive careers such as in medicine etc where study loads are quite heavy and competition is high. Being a student myself, I can't imagine trying to get within the top ten percent of my course and hold down a job as well, even if it is only for a few hours a week. It takes me all my time just to complete my study schedule on any given day without having to trundle off to a job at the local fast food shop. I know that several of my fellow students are in the same boat and feel the same way that I do. We have a tremendous amount of reading to do, just to try to keep up with our workload. For me to pass with high scores, I know that I couldn't possibly take on a job and still perform at a high level. On that basis, I don't believe that it is important for students to have a part-time job because I believe, for me anyway, that it is more important to focus on studies and let the jobs come later.
JPN
B1_2
3
3
6
3
5
5
6
3
6
6
60
46
53
What you wanted to say was well presented, the intent was clear.
Some irregularities in sentence structure made the meaning at times difficult to grasp.
11,981
not important at all in my view. Students have far too much to worry about just trying to pass their exams let alone also trying to hold down a job while they study. Some folks may disagree I know, but the fact still remains that in today's society, students are being taught to perform at high levels from primary school to university and/or college and quite frankly, it is a big ask. This is particularly true when students are studying for more comprehensive careers such as in medicine etc where study loads are quite and competition is high. Being a student myself, I can't imagine trying to get within the top ten percent of my course and down a job as well, even if it only for a few hours a week. It takes me all my time just to complete my study schedule on any given day without having to trundle off to a job at the local fast food shop. I know that several of my fellow students are in the same boat and feel the same way that I do. We have a tremendous amount of reading to do just to try to keep up with our workload. For me to pass with high scores, I know that I possibly take on a job and still perform at a high level. On that basis, I don't believe that it is important for students to have a part-time job because I believe, for me , that it is more important to focus on studies and let the jobs come later.
It's not important at all in my view. Students have far too much to worry about just trying to pass their exams let alone also trying to hold down a job while they study. Some folks may disagree I know, but the fact still remains that in today's society, students are being taught to perform at high levels from primary school to university and/or college and quite frankly, it is a big ask. This is particularly true when students are studying for more comprehensive careers such as in medicine etc where study loads are quite heavy and competition is high. Being a student myself, I can't imagine trying to get within the top ten percent of my course and hold down a job as well, even if it is only for a few hours a week. It takes me all my time just to complete my study schedule on any given day without having to trundle off to a job at the local fast food shop. I know that several of my fellow students are in the same boat and feel the same way that I do. We have a tremendous amount of reading to do, just to try to keep up with our workload. For me to pass with high scores, I know that I couldn't possibly take on a job and still perform at a high level. On that basis, I don't believe that it is important for students to have a part-time job because I believe, for me anyway, that it is more important to focus on studies and let the jobs come later.
IDN
B1_2
4
2
4
4
2
7
3
3
6
6
50
41
45.5
The purpose was clear and backed up with personal experience.
Misuse of “which” and “that” made it confusing at times.
11,986
not important at all in my view. Students have far too much to worry about just trying to pass their exams let alone also trying to hold down a job while they study. Some folks may disagree I know, but the fact still remains that in today's society, students are being taught to perform at high levels from primary school to university and/or college and quite frankly, it is a big ask. This is particularly true when students are studying for more comprehensive careers such as in medicine etc where study loads are quite and competition is high. Being a student myself, I can't imagine trying to get within the top ten percent of my course and down a job as well, even if it only for a few hours a week. It takes me all my time just to complete my study schedule on any given day without having to trundle off to a job at the local fast food shop. I know that several of my fellow students are in the same boat and feel the same way that I do. We have a tremendous amount of reading to do just to try to keep up with our workload. For me to pass with high scores, I know that I possibly take on a job and still perform at a high level. On that basis, I don't believe that it is important for students to have a part-time job because I believe, for me , that it is more important to focus on studies and let the jobs come later.
It's not important at all in my view. Students have far too much to worry about just trying to pass their exams let alone also trying to hold down a job while they study. Some folks may disagree I know, but the fact still remains that in today's society, students are being taught to perform at high levels from primary school to university and/or college and quite frankly, it is a big ask. This is particularly true when students are studying for more comprehensive careers such as in medicine etc where study loads are quite heavy and competition is high. Being a student myself, I can't imagine trying to get within the top ten percent of my course and hold down a job as well, even if it is only for a few hours a week. It takes me all my time just to complete my study schedule on any given day without having to trundle off to a job at the local fast food shop. I know that several of my fellow students are in the same boat and feel the same way that I do. We have a tremendous amount of reading to do, just to try to keep up with our workload. For me to pass with high scores, I know that I couldn't possibly take on a job and still perform at a high level. On that basis, I don't believe that it is important for students to have a part-time job because I believe, for me anyway, that it is more important to focus on studies and let the jobs come later.
TWN
B1_1
4
3
6
3
3
7
1
7
2
2
70
38
54
Good at getting your point across to the reader.
There appeared to be some redundancy in sentence structure due to the overuse of words with a similar meaning.
11,902
not important at all in my view. Students have far too much to worry about just trying to pass their exams let alone also trying to hold down a job while they study. Some folks may disagree I know, but the fact still remains that in today's society, students are being taught to perform at high levels from primary school to university and/or college and quite frankly, it is a big ask. This is particularly true when students are studying for more comprehensive careers such as in medicine etc where study loads are quite and competition is high. Being a student myself, I can't imagine trying to get within the top ten percent of my course and down a job as well, even if it only for a few hours a week. It takes me all my time just to complete my study schedule on any given day without having to trundle off to a job at the local fast food shop. I know that several of my fellow students are in the same boat and feel the same way that I do. We have a tremendous amount of reading to do just to try to keep up with our workload. For me to pass with high scores, I know that I possibly take on a job and still perform at a high level. On that basis, I don't believe that it is important for students to have a part-time job because I believe, for me , that it is more important to focus on studies and let the jobs come later.
It's not important at all in my view. Students have far too much to worry about just trying to pass their exams let alone also trying to hold down a job while they study. Some folks may disagree I know, but the fact still remains that in today's society, students are being taught to perform at high levels from primary school to university and/or college and quite frankly, it is a big ask. This is particularly true when students are studying for more comprehensive careers such as in medicine etc where study loads are quite heavy and competition is high. Being a student myself, I can't imagine trying to get within the top ten percent of my course and hold down a job as well, even if it is only for a few hours a week. It takes me all my time just to complete my study schedule on any given day without having to trundle off to a job at the local fast food shop. I know that several of my fellow students are in the same boat and feel the same way that I do. We have a tremendous amount of reading to do, just to try to keep up with our workload. For me to pass with high scores, I know that I couldn't possibly take on a job and still perform at a high level. On that basis, I don't believe that it is important for students to have a part-time job because I believe, for me anyway, that it is more important to focus on studies and let the jobs come later.
IDN
B1_2
7
7
6
4
6
6
6
7
8
8
70
65
67.5
There was a good willingness to get your points across and a clear argument.
There may be some work needed on prepositions.
11,945
not important at all in my view. Students have far too much to worry about just trying to pass their exams let alone also trying to hold down a job while they study. Some folks may disagree I know, but the fact still remains that in today's society, students are being taught to perform at high levels from primary school to university and/or college and quite frankly, it is a big ask. This is particularly true when students are studying for more comprehensive careers such as in medicine etc where study loads are quite and competition is high. Being a student myself, I can't imagine trying to get within the top ten percent of my course and down a job as well, even if it only for a few hours a week. It takes me all my time just to complete my study schedule on any given day without having to trundle off to a job at the local fast food shop. I know that several of my fellow students are in the same boat and feel the same way that I do. We have a tremendous amount of reading to do just to try to keep up with our workload. For me to pass with high scores, I know that I possibly take on a job and still perform at a high level. On that basis, I don't believe that it is important for students to have a part-time job because I believe, for me , that it is more important to focus on studies and let the jobs come later.
It's not important at all in my view. Students have far too much to worry about just trying to pass their exams let alone also trying to hold down a job while they study. Some folks may disagree I know, but the fact still remains that in today's society, students are being taught to perform at high levels from primary school to university and/or college and quite frankly, it is a big ask. This is particularly true when students are studying for more comprehensive careers such as in medicine etc where study loads are quite heavy and competition is high. Being a student myself, I can't imagine trying to get within the top ten percent of my course and hold down a job as well, even if it is only for a few hours a week. It takes me all my time just to complete my study schedule on any given day without having to trundle off to a job at the local fast food shop. I know that several of my fellow students are in the same boat and feel the same way that I do. We have a tremendous amount of reading to do, just to try to keep up with our workload. For me to pass with high scores, I know that I couldn't possibly take on a job and still perform at a high level. On that basis, I don't believe that it is important for students to have a part-time job because I believe, for me anyway, that it is more important to focus on studies and let the jobs come later.
TWN
B1_2
5
6
3
6
8
6
7
7
6
7
80
61
70.5
Some interesting ideas were expressed and supported.
Definite and indefinite articles were mixed up a little, but this wasn’t a big problem.
11,901
not important at all in my view. Students have far too much to worry about just trying to pass their exams let alone also trying to hold down a job while they study. Some folks may disagree I know, but the fact still remains that in today's society, students are being taught to perform at high levels from primary school to university and/or college and quite frankly, it is a big ask. This is particularly true when students are studying for more comprehensive careers such as in medicine etc where study loads are quite and competition is high. Being a student myself, I can't imagine trying to get within the top ten percent of my course and down a job as well, even if it only for a few hours a week. It takes me all my time just to complete my study schedule on any given day without having to trundle off to a job at the local fast food shop. I know that several of my fellow students are in the same boat and feel the same way that I do. We have a tremendous amount of reading to do just to try to keep up with our workload. For me to pass with high scores, I know that I possibly take on a job and still perform at a high level. On that basis, I don't believe that it is important for students to have a part-time job because I believe, for me , that it is more important to focus on studies and let the jobs come later.
It's not important at all in my view. Students have far too much to worry about just trying to pass their exams let alone also trying to hold down a job while they study. Some folks may disagree I know, but the fact still remains that in today's society, students are being taught to perform at high levels from primary school to university and/or college and quite frankly, it is a big ask. This is particularly true when students are studying for more comprehensive careers such as in medicine etc where study loads are quite heavy and competition is high. Being a student myself, I can't imagine trying to get within the top ten percent of my course and hold down a job as well, even if it is only for a few hours a week. It takes me all my time just to complete my study schedule on any given day without having to trundle off to a job at the local fast food shop. I know that several of my fellow students are in the same boat and feel the same way that I do. We have a tremendous amount of reading to do, just to try to keep up with our workload. For me to pass with high scores, I know that I couldn't possibly take on a job and still perform at a high level. On that basis, I don't believe that it is important for students to have a part-time job because I believe, for me anyway, that it is more important to focus on studies and let the jobs come later.
HKG
B2_0
7
6
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3
4
3
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3
4
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25
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33
Has potential to be a better piece of academic writing.
Shows no clear nor comprehensive thought pattern.
12,141
is true statement. Parttime the job that usually and done by college student For example private teacher, shopkeeper, seller, etc. part time on their they doing after they studied in the university. many for them. A part time job can many useful experience, knowledge, , and the important is money. College student as the young man who needs some money to their without their parents must begin to independence their by . As know, they have many to pay their , to buy need in their , or and other . They can show their that they can do and become active people training to society in the future and useful. Therefore, with that, can express that they from their studies or other skill they have . can creativ and contribute our government. Finally, it very thing for college student to have part time job to make be active and some money to fill their .
It is true statement. Part time job is the job that usually choosed and done by the college student. For example as private teacher, shopkeeper, seller, etc. They follow this job on the part time on their day which they don't doing everything after they had studied in the university. It has many benefit for them. A part time job can give many useful, experience, knowledge, proudly, and the important is money. College student as the young man who needs some money to go on their lifes without ask from their parents. They must begin to independence to follow their necessity by self. As know, they have many necessity to pay their study, to buy something that need in their day, or eat, and other thing. They can show to their family that they can do and become active people for training theirself to fill on the society in the future and useful for around. Therefore, with that, it can expression their skill that they get from their studies in university or other skill they have over there. It can make creative and contribute for our government. Finally, it's very benefit things for the college student to have a part time job to make they be active and get some money to fill their life.
PAK
B2_0
9
8
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7
7
7
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8
8
7
70
76
73
A new and interesting perspective. Written with originality.
I just wish the length of the piece was longer to more substantially discuss the views
12,146
is true statement. Parttime the job that usually and done by college student For example private teacher, shopkeeper, seller, etc. part time on their they doing after they studied in the university. many for them. A part time job can many useful experience, knowledge, , and the important is money. College student as the young man who needs some money to their without their parents must begin to independence their by . As know, they have many to pay their , to buy need in their , or and other . They can show their that they can do and become active people training to society in the future and useful. Therefore, with that, can express that they from their studies or other skill they have . can creativ and contribute our government. Finally, it very thing for college student to have part time job to make be active and some money to fill their .
It is true statement. Part time job is the job that usually choosed and done by the college student. For example as private teacher, shopkeeper, seller, etc. They follow this job on the part time on their day which they don't doing everything after they had studied in the university. It has many benefit for them. A part time job can give many useful, experience, knowledge, proudly, and the important is money. College student as the young man who needs some money to go on their lifes without ask from their parents. They must begin to independence to follow their necessity by self. As know, they have many necessity to pay their study, to buy something that need in their day, or eat, and other thing. They can show to their family that they can do and become active people for training theirself to fill on the society in the future and useful for around. Therefore, with that, it can expression their skill that they get from their studies in university or other skill they have over there. It can make creative and contribute for our government. Finally, it's very benefit things for the college student to have a part time job to make they be active and get some money to fill their life.
JPN
B1_1
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3
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4
4
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4
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30
47
38.5
Basic concepts and ideas conveyed as per the expected standard
Not written with much attention to language
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is true statement. Parttime the job that usually and done by college student For example private teacher, shopkeeper, seller, etc. part time on their they doing after they studied in the university. many for them. A part time job can many useful experience, knowledge, , and the important is money. College student as the young man who needs some money to their without their parents must begin to independence their by . As know, they have many to pay their , to buy need in their , or and other . They can show their that they can do and become active people training to society in the future and useful. Therefore, with that, can express that they from their studies or other skill they have . can creativ and contribute our government. Finally, it very thing for college student to have part time job to make be active and some money to fill their .
It is true statement. Part time job is the job that usually choosed and done by the college student. For example as private teacher, shopkeeper, seller, etc. They follow this job on the part time on their day which they don't doing everything after they had studied in the university. It has many benefit for them. A part time job can give many useful, experience, knowledge, proudly, and the important is money. College student as the young man who needs some money to go on their lifes without ask from their parents. They must begin to independence to follow their necessity by self. As know, they have many necessity to pay their study, to buy something that need in their day, or eat, and other thing. They can show to their family that they can do and become active people for training theirself to fill on the society in the future and useful for around. Therefore, with that, it can expression their skill that they get from their studies in university or other skill they have over there. It can make creative and contribute for our government. Finally, it's very benefit things for the college student to have a part time job to make they be active and get some money to fill their life.
IDN
A2_0
5
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4
4
7
8
7
7
7
6
75
61
68
The background of the country gives perspective to the piece
Written a little casually, and mostly with the pronoun we, it is unclear who we is
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is true statement. Parttime the job that usually and done by college student For example private teacher, shopkeeper, seller, etc. part time on their they doing after they studied in the university. many for them. A part time job can many useful experience, knowledge, , and the important is money. College student as the young man who needs some money to their without their parents must begin to independence their by . As know, they have many to pay their , to buy need in their , or and other . They can show their that they can do and become active people training to society in the future and useful. Therefore, with that, can express that they from their studies or other skill they have . can creativ and contribute our government. Finally, it very thing for college student to have part time job to make be active and some money to fill their .
It is true statement. Part time job is the job that usually choosed and done by the college student. For example as private teacher, shopkeeper, seller, etc. They follow this job on the part time on their day which they don't doing everything after they had studied in the university. It has many benefit for them. A part time job can give many useful, experience, knowledge, proudly, and the important is money. College student as the young man who needs some money to go on their lifes without ask from their parents. They must begin to independence to follow their necessity by self. As know, they have many necessity to pay their study, to buy something that need in their day, or eat, and other thing. They can show to their family that they can do and become active people for training theirself to fill on the society in the future and useful for around. Therefore, with that, it can expression their skill that they get from their studies in university or other skill they have over there. It can make creative and contribute for our government. Finally, it's very benefit things for the college student to have a part time job to make they be active and get some money to fill their life.
THA
A2_0
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7
7
7
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7
70
68
69
Personal examples work best. Fairly well written
Could have given the article more perspective and context
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is true statement. Parttime the job that usually and done by college student For example private teacher, shopkeeper, seller, etc. part time on their they doing after they studied in the university. many for them. A part time job can many useful experience, knowledge, , and the important is money. College student as the young man who needs some money to their without their parents must begin to independence their by . As know, they have many to pay their , to buy need in their , or and other . They can show their that they can do and become active people training to society in the future and useful. Therefore, with that, can express that they from their studies or other skill they have . can creativ and contribute our government. Finally, it very thing for college student to have part time job to make be active and some money to fill their .
It is true statement. Part time job is the job that usually choosed and done by the college student. For example as private teacher, shopkeeper, seller, etc. They follow this job on the part time on their day which they don't doing everything after they had studied in the university. It has many benefit for them. A part time job can give many useful, experience, knowledge, proudly, and the important is money. College student as the young man who needs some money to go on their lifes without ask from their parents. They must begin to independence to follow their necessity by self. As know, they have many necessity to pay their study, to buy something that need in their day, or eat, and other thing. They can show to their family that they can do and become active people for training theirself to fill on the society in the future and useful for around. Therefore, with that, it can expression their skill that they get from their studies in university or other skill they have over there. It can make creative and contribute for our government. Finally, it's very benefit things for the college student to have a part time job to make they be active and get some money to fill their life.
TWN
B1_1
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7
7
7
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Written with hope, experience and real life examples
Could have increased the level of involvement in the essay
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is true statement. Parttime the job that usually and done by college student For example private teacher, shopkeeper, seller, etc. part time on their they doing after they studied in the university. many for them. A part time job can many useful experience, knowledge, , and the important is money. College student as the young man who needs some money to their without their parents must begin to independence their by . As know, they have many to pay their , to buy need in their , or and other . They can show their that they can do and become active people training to society in the future and useful. Therefore, with that, can express that they from their studies or other skill they have . can creativ and contribute our government. Finally, it very thing for college student to have part time job to make be active and some money to fill their .
It is true statement. Part time job is the job that usually choosed and done by the college student. For example as private teacher, shopkeeper, seller, etc. They follow this job on the part time on their day which they don't doing everything after they had studied in the university. It has many benefit for them. A part time job can give many useful, experience, knowledge, proudly, and the important is money. College student as the young man who needs some money to go on their lifes without ask from their parents. They must begin to independence to follow their necessity by self. As know, they have many necessity to pay their study, to buy something that need in their day, or eat, and other thing. They can show to their family that they can do and become active people for training theirself to fill on the society in the future and useful for around. Therefore, with that, it can expression their skill that they get from their studies in university or other skill they have over there. It can make creative and contribute for our government. Finally, it's very benefit things for the college student to have a part time job to make they be active and get some money to fill their life.
TWN
B1_1
6
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60
67
63.5
Another good piece that ties in both the social and personal elements
More concrete examples could have been provided which were otherwise missing
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is true statement. Parttime the job that usually and done by college student For example private teacher, shopkeeper, seller, etc. part time on their they doing after they studied in the university. many for them. A part time job can many useful experience, knowledge, , and the important is money. College student as the young man who needs some money to their without their parents must begin to independence their by . As know, they have many to pay their , to buy need in their , or and other . They can show their that they can do and become active people training to society in the future and useful. Therefore, with that, can express that they from their studies or other skill they have . can creativ and contribute our government. Finally, it very thing for college student to have part time job to make be active and some money to fill their .
It is true statement. Part time job is the job that usually choosed and done by the college student. For example as private teacher, shopkeeper, seller, etc. They follow this job on the part time on their day which they don't doing everything after they had studied in the university. It has many benefit for them. A part time job can give many useful, experience, knowledge, proudly, and the important is money. College student as the young man who needs some money to go on their lifes without ask from their parents. They must begin to independence to follow their necessity by self. As know, they have many necessity to pay their study, to buy something that need in their day, or eat, and other thing. They can show to their family that they can do and become active people for training theirself to fill on the society in the future and useful for around. Therefore, with that, it can expression their skill that they get from their studies in university or other skill they have over there. It can make creative and contribute for our government. Finally, it's very benefit things for the college student to have a part time job to make they be active and get some money to fill their life.
IDN
B1_1
7
5
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3
4
4
3
35
47
41
This was a fairly standard piece of writing demonstrated here
Could have been a stronger essay if more original and focused content was written.
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is true statement. Parttime the job that usually and done by college student For example private teacher, shopkeeper, seller, etc. part time on their they doing after they studied in the university. many for them. A part time job can many useful experience, knowledge, , and the important is money. College student as the young man who needs some money to their without their parents must begin to independence their by . As know, they have many to pay their , to buy need in their , or and other . They can show their that they can do and become active people training to society in the future and useful. Therefore, with that, can express that they from their studies or other skill they have . can creativ and contribute our government. Finally, it very thing for college student to have part time job to make be active and some money to fill their .
It is true statement. Part time job is the job that usually choosed and done by the college student. For example as private teacher, shopkeeper, seller, etc. They follow this job on the part time on their day which they don't doing everything after they had studied in the university. It has many benefit for them. A part time job can give many useful, experience, knowledge, proudly, and the important is money. College student as the young man who needs some money to go on their lifes without ask from their parents. They must begin to independence to follow their necessity by self. As know, they have many necessity to pay their study, to buy something that need in their day, or eat, and other thing. They can show to their family that they can do and become active people for training theirself to fill on the society in the future and useful for around. Therefore, with that, it can expression their skill that they get from their studies in university or other skill they have over there. It can make creative and contribute for our government. Finally, it's very benefit things for the college student to have a part time job to make they be active and get some money to fill their life.
ENS
ENS
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A strong essay grounded in background, structure and original opinion
higher involvement could have increased the quality
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is true statement. Parttime the job that usually and done by college student For example private teacher, shopkeeper, seller, etc. part time on their they doing after they studied in the university. many for them. A part time job can many useful experience, knowledge, , and the important is money. College student as the young man who needs some money to their without their parents must begin to independence their by . As know, they have many to pay their , to buy need in their , or and other . They can show their that they can do and become active people training to society in the future and useful. Therefore, with that, can express that they from their studies or other skill they have . can creativ and contribute our government. Finally, it very thing for college student to have part time job to make be active and some money to fill their .
It is true statement. Part time job is the job that usually choosed and done by the college student. For example as private teacher, shopkeeper, seller, etc. They follow this job on the part time on their day which they don't doing everything after they had studied in the university. It has many benefit for them. A part time job can give many useful, experience, knowledge, proudly, and the important is money. College student as the young man who needs some money to go on their lifes without ask from their parents. They must begin to independence to follow their necessity by self. As know, they have many necessity to pay their study, to buy something that need in their day, or eat, and other thing. They can show to their family that they can do and become active people for training theirself to fill on the society in the future and useful for around. Therefore, with that, it can expression their skill that they get from their studies in university or other skill they have over there. It can make creative and contribute for our government. Finally, it's very benefit things for the college student to have a part time job to make they be active and get some money to fill their life.
THA
B1_2
4
4
3
3
7
6
7
6
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6
40
52
46
The length of the article is substantial even though nothing concrete is discussed
The way this is written, most often without punctuation or structure reflects the state of the writers mind
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is true statement. Parttime the job that usually and done by college student For example private teacher, shopkeeper, seller, etc. part time on their they doing after they studied in the university. many for them. A part time job can many useful experience, knowledge, , and the important is money. College student as the young man who needs some money to their without their parents must begin to independence their by . As know, they have many to pay their , to buy need in their , or and other . They can show their that they can do and become active people training to society in the future and useful. Therefore, with that, can express that they from their studies or other skill they have . can creativ and contribute our government. Finally, it very thing for college student to have part time job to make be active and some money to fill their .
It is true statement. Part time job is the job that usually choosed and done by the college student. For example as private teacher, shopkeeper, seller, etc. They follow this job on the part time on their day which they don't doing everything after they had studied in the university. It has many benefit for them. A part time job can give many useful, experience, knowledge, proudly, and the important is money. College student as the young man who needs some money to go on their lifes without ask from their parents. They must begin to independence to follow their necessity by self. As know, they have many necessity to pay their study, to buy something that need in their day, or eat, and other thing. They can show to their family that they can do and become active people for training theirself to fill on the society in the future and useful for around. Therefore, with that, it can expression their skill that they get from their studies in university or other skill they have over there. It can make creative and contribute for our government. Finally, it's very benefit things for the college student to have a part time job to make they be active and get some money to fill their life.
JPN
B2_0
6
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3
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60
60
60
A good punctuation and some strong points toward the overall opinion.
Try to use more concise language and add more content to avoid clunky sentences
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I agree. I have many friends who are part-time . They often work around a university. In particular, they go to after finishing the lesson. I do not have experience a part-time job. Nevertheless, I believe that college students need to work during school vacation. , , part-time job students importance of money. They will money through hard . Therefore, they will little money and save money. College students usually spend drinking and enjoying friends so they money easily. can to save money from wastefulness. Second, students are receiving a lot of money from their . , registration very expensive but many students obtain their parent. If they money to use their personal expense, parents will hard . Accordingly, students need to make money to use on their own. Last, students a priceless experience a part-time job. After graduat from college, they will work at company and many things at their company. If they have a part-time job, they a new opportunity before a true job. They can learn about key and in advance. It is thing for college students to have part-time job.
I agree. I have many friends who are having a part-time job. They often work around a university. In particular, they go to there after finishing the lesson. I do not have experience which works a part-time job. Nevertheless, I believe that college students need to work specially during school vacation. Because, First, A part-time job offers students importance of money. They will get money through hard suffer. Therefore, they will use little money and save money. College students usually spend drinking and enjoying friends so, they use money easily. It can intend to save money from the wastefulness. Second, students are receiving a lot of money from their parent. Especially, registration fee is very expensive but many students obtain their parent. If they get money to use their personal expense, parents will think a hard feel. Accordingly, students need to make the money to use on their own. Last, students get a priceless experience through a part-time job. After graduate from college, they will work at company and occur many things at their company. If they have a part-time job, they obtain a new opportunity before a true job. They can learn about their key contents and factors in advance. It is main thing for college students to have a part-time job.
TWN
B1_2
7
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8
7
6
6
7
6
8
60
69
64.5
A great job trying to involve the reader, and some thoughtful ideas.
Ensure the correct word placement/choices to improve the accuracy and flow of sentences
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I agree. I have many friends who are part-time . They often work around a university. In particular, they go to after finishing the lesson. I do not have experience a part-time job. Nevertheless, I believe that college students need to work during school vacation. , , part-time job students importance of money. They will money through hard . Therefore, they will little money and save money. College students usually spend drinking and enjoying friends so they money easily. can to save money from wastefulness. Second, students are receiving a lot of money from their . , registration very expensive but many students obtain their parent. If they money to use their personal expense, parents will hard . Accordingly, students need to make money to use on their own. Last, students a priceless experience a part-time job. After graduat from college, they will work at company and many things at their company. If they have a part-time job, they a new opportunity before a true job. They can learn about key and in advance. It is thing for college students to have part-time job.
I agree. I have many friends who are having a part-time job. They often work around a university. In particular, they go to there after finishing the lesson. I do not have experience which works a part-time job. Nevertheless, I believe that college students need to work specially during school vacation. Because, First, A part-time job offers students importance of money. They will get money through hard suffer. Therefore, they will use little money and save money. College students usually spend drinking and enjoying friends so, they use money easily. It can intend to save money from the wastefulness. Second, students are receiving a lot of money from their parent. Especially, registration fee is very expensive but many students obtain their parent. If they get money to use their personal expense, parents will think a hard feel. Accordingly, students need to make the money to use on their own. Last, students get a priceless experience through a part-time job. After graduate from college, they will work at company and occur many things at their company. If they have a part-time job, they obtain a new opportunity before a true job. They can learn about their key contents and factors in advance. It is main thing for college students to have a part-time job.
IDN
A2_0
6
6
6
6
4
7
6
8
6
8
55
63
59
A good structure with some well thought out ideas and arguments
Make sure that each sentence has the appropriate word and see where/if it should be used.
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I agree. I have many friends who are part-time . They often work around a university. In particular, they go to after finishing the lesson. I do not have experience a part-time job. Nevertheless, I believe that college students need to work during school vacation. , , part-time job students importance of money. They will money through hard . Therefore, they will little money and save money. College students usually spend drinking and enjoying friends so they money easily. can to save money from wastefulness. Second, students are receiving a lot of money from their . , registration very expensive but many students obtain their parent. If they money to use their personal expense, parents will hard . Accordingly, students need to make money to use on their own. Last, students a priceless experience a part-time job. After graduat from college, they will work at company and many things at their company. If they have a part-time job, they a new opportunity before a true job. They can learn about key and in advance. It is thing for college students to have part-time job.
I agree. I have many friends who are having a part-time job. They often work around a university. In particular, they go to there after finishing the lesson. I do not have experience which works a part-time job. Nevertheless, I believe that college students need to work specially during school vacation. Because, First, A part-time job offers students importance of money. They will get money through hard suffer. Therefore, they will use little money and save money. College students usually spend drinking and enjoying friends so, they use money easily. It can intend to save money from the wastefulness. Second, students are receiving a lot of money from their parent. Especially, registration fee is very expensive but many students obtain their parent. If they get money to use their personal expense, parents will think a hard feel. Accordingly, students need to make the money to use on their own. Last, students get a priceless experience through a part-time job. After graduate from college, they will work at company and occur many things at their company. If they have a part-time job, they obtain a new opportunity before a true job. They can learn about their key contents and factors in advance. It is main thing for college students to have a part-time job.
IDN
A2_0
5
5
3
2
5
5
5
2
6
8
30
46
38
A great job at involving the reader and creating interest. Some unique examples.
More time should have been taken to ensure that it makes sense, try to improve the fluency of the article.
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I agree. I have many friends who are part-time . They often work around a university. In particular, they go to after finishing the lesson. I do not have experience a part-time job. Nevertheless, I believe that college students need to work during school vacation. , , part-time job students importance of money. They will money through hard . Therefore, they will little money and save money. College students usually spend drinking and enjoying friends so they money easily. can to save money from wastefulness. Second, students are receiving a lot of money from their . , registration very expensive but many students obtain their parent. If they money to use their personal expense, parents will hard . Accordingly, students need to make money to use on their own. Last, students a priceless experience a part-time job. After graduat from college, they will work at company and many things at their company. If they have a part-time job, they a new opportunity before a true job. They can learn about key and in advance. It is thing for college students to have part-time job.
I agree. I have many friends who are having a part-time job. They often work around a university. In particular, they go to there after finishing the lesson. I do not have experience which works a part-time job. Nevertheless, I believe that college students need to work specially during school vacation. Because, First, A part-time job offers students importance of money. They will get money through hard suffer. Therefore, they will use little money and save money. College students usually spend drinking and enjoying friends so, they use money easily. It can intend to save money from the wastefulness. Second, students are receiving a lot of money from their parent. Especially, registration fee is very expensive but many students obtain their parent. If they get money to use their personal expense, parents will think a hard feel. Accordingly, students need to make the money to use on their own. Last, students get a priceless experience through a part-time job. After graduate from college, they will work at company and occur many things at their company. If they have a part-time job, they obtain a new opportunity before a true job. They can learn about their key contents and factors in advance. It is main thing for college students to have a part-time job.
THA
B1_1
5
5
5
3
4
3
4
6
6
5
35
46
40.5
Individual and thoughtful points and a good understanding of the task.
Think about the fluency and overall structure of sentences to ensure the clarity of the content.
12,196
I agree. I have many friends who are part-time . They often work around a university. In particular, they go to after finishing the lesson. I do not have experience a part-time job. Nevertheless, I believe that college students need to work during school vacation. , , part-time job students importance of money. They will money through hard . Therefore, they will little money and save money. College students usually spend drinking and enjoying friends so they money easily. can to save money from wastefulness. Second, students are receiving a lot of money from their . , registration very expensive but many students obtain their parent. If they money to use their personal expense, parents will hard . Accordingly, students need to make money to use on their own. Last, students a priceless experience a part-time job. After graduat from college, they will work at company and many things at their company. If they have a part-time job, they a new opportunity before a true job. They can learn about key and in advance. It is thing for college students to have part-time job.
I agree. I have many friends who are having a part-time job. They often work around a university. In particular, they go to there after finishing the lesson. I do not have experience which works a part-time job. Nevertheless, I believe that college students need to work specially during school vacation. Because, First, A part-time job offers students importance of money. They will get money through hard suffer. Therefore, they will use little money and save money. College students usually spend drinking and enjoying friends so, they use money easily. It can intend to save money from the wastefulness. Second, students are receiving a lot of money from their parent. Especially, registration fee is very expensive but many students obtain their parent. If they get money to use their personal expense, parents will think a hard feel. Accordingly, students need to make the money to use on their own. Last, students get a priceless experience through a part-time job. After graduate from college, they will work at company and occur many things at their company. If they have a part-time job, they obtain a new opportunity before a true job. They can learn about their key contents and factors in advance. It is main thing for college students to have a part-time job.
ENS
ENS
9
8
9
9
9
9
9
8
9
8
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87
86
A very clear and unique perspective, an excellent flow and nice to read.
Perhaps you could try to expand your vocabulary to add more depth and variety.
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I agree. I have many friends who are part-time . They often work around a university. In particular, they go to after finishing the lesson. I do not have experience a part-time job. Nevertheless, I believe that college students need to work during school vacation. , , part-time job students importance of money. They will money through hard . Therefore, they will little money and save money. College students usually spend drinking and enjoying friends so they money easily. can to save money from wastefulness. Second, students are receiving a lot of money from their . , registration very expensive but many students obtain their parent. If they money to use their personal expense, parents will hard . Accordingly, students need to make money to use on their own. Last, students a priceless experience a part-time job. After graduat from college, they will work at company and many things at their company. If they have a part-time job, they a new opportunity before a true job. They can learn about key and in advance. It is thing for college students to have part-time job.
I agree. I have many friends who are having a part-time job. They often work around a university. In particular, they go to there after finishing the lesson. I do not have experience which works a part-time job. Nevertheless, I believe that college students need to work specially during school vacation. Because, First, A part-time job offers students importance of money. They will get money through hard suffer. Therefore, they will use little money and save money. College students usually spend drinking and enjoying friends so, they use money easily. It can intend to save money from the wastefulness. Second, students are receiving a lot of money from their parent. Especially, registration fee is very expensive but many students obtain their parent. If they get money to use their personal expense, parents will think a hard feel. Accordingly, students need to make the money to use on their own. Last, students get a priceless experience through a part-time job. After graduate from college, they will work at company and occur many things at their company. If they have a part-time job, they obtain a new opportunity before a true job. They can learn about their key contents and factors in advance. It is main thing for college students to have a part-time job.
THA
A2_0
7
8
7
6
9
7
8
7
8
8
65
75
70
Well thought out ideas and a good grammar, good understanding of the task.
Try to build a structure such as intro/body/conclusion and sentence structure to ensure fluency
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I agree. I have many friends who are part-time . They often work around a university. In particular, they go to after finishing the lesson. I do not have experience a part-time job. Nevertheless, I believe that college students need to work during school vacation. , , part-time job students importance of money. They will money through hard . Therefore, they will little money and save money. College students usually spend drinking and enjoying friends so they money easily. can to save money from wastefulness. Second, students are receiving a lot of money from their . , registration very expensive but many students obtain their parent. If they money to use their personal expense, parents will hard . Accordingly, students need to make money to use on their own. Last, students a priceless experience a part-time job. After graduat from college, they will work at company and many things at their company. If they have a part-time job, they a new opportunity before a true job. They can learn about key and in advance. It is thing for college students to have part-time job.
I agree. I have many friends who are having a part-time job. They often work around a university. In particular, they go to there after finishing the lesson. I do not have experience which works a part-time job. Nevertheless, I believe that college students need to work specially during school vacation. Because, First, A part-time job offers students importance of money. They will get money through hard suffer. Therefore, they will use little money and save money. College students usually spend drinking and enjoying friends so, they use money easily. It can intend to save money from the wastefulness. Second, students are receiving a lot of money from their parent. Especially, registration fee is very expensive but many students obtain their parent. If they get money to use their personal expense, parents will think a hard feel. Accordingly, students need to make the money to use on their own. Last, students get a priceless experience through a part-time job. After graduate from college, they will work at company and occur many things at their company. If they have a part-time job, they obtain a new opportunity before a true job. They can learn about their key contents and factors in advance. It is main thing for college students to have a part-time job.
IDN
B1_1
2
3
2
2
1
1
2
2
1
2
20
18
19
Although the language is not clear, the content and views can still be understood
Find alternative language to use and build a structure to ensure that you are not repetitive.
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I agree. I have many friends who are part-time . They often work around a university. In particular, they go to after finishing the lesson. I do not have experience a part-time job. Nevertheless, I believe that college students need to work during school vacation. , , part-time job students importance of money. They will money through hard . Therefore, they will little money and save money. College students usually spend drinking and enjoying friends so they money easily. can to save money from wastefulness. Second, students are receiving a lot of money from their . , registration very expensive but many students obtain their parent. If they money to use their personal expense, parents will hard . Accordingly, students need to make money to use on their own. Last, students a priceless experience a part-time job. After graduat from college, they will work at company and many things at their company. If they have a part-time job, they a new opportunity before a true job. They can learn about key and in advance. It is thing for college students to have part-time job.
I agree. I have many friends who are having a part-time job. They often work around a university. In particular, they go to there after finishing the lesson. I do not have experience which works a part-time job. Nevertheless, I believe that college students need to work specially during school vacation. Because, First, A part-time job offers students importance of money. They will get money through hard suffer. Therefore, they will use little money and save money. College students usually spend drinking and enjoying friends so, they use money easily. It can intend to save money from the wastefulness. Second, students are receiving a lot of money from their parent. Especially, registration fee is very expensive but many students obtain their parent. If they get money to use their personal expense, parents will think a hard feel. Accordingly, students need to make the money to use on their own. Last, students get a priceless experience through a part-time job. After graduate from college, they will work at company and occur many things at their company. If they have a part-time job, they obtain a new opportunity before a true job. They can learn about their key contents and factors in advance. It is main thing for college students to have a part-time job.
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47.5
Some good ideas and reference points, a good understanding of the task.
Ensure the correct word placement to improve the accuracy and flow of sentences
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I agree. I have many friends who are part-time . They often work around a university. In particular, they go to after finishing the lesson. I do not have experience a part-time job. Nevertheless, I believe that college students need to work during school vacation. , , part-time job students importance of money. They will money through hard . Therefore, they will little money and save money. College students usually spend drinking and enjoying friends so they money easily. can to save money from wastefulness. Second, students are receiving a lot of money from their . , registration very expensive but many students obtain their parent. If they money to use their personal expense, parents will hard . Accordingly, students need to make money to use on their own. Last, students a priceless experience a part-time job. After graduat from college, they will work at company and many things at their company. If they have a part-time job, they a new opportunity before a true job. They can learn about key and in advance. It is thing for college students to have part-time job.
I agree. I have many friends who are having a part-time job. They often work around a university. In particular, they go to there after finishing the lesson. I do not have experience which works a part-time job. Nevertheless, I believe that college students need to work specially during school vacation. Because, First, A part-time job offers students importance of money. They will get money through hard suffer. Therefore, they will use little money and save money. College students usually spend drinking and enjoying friends so, they use money easily. It can intend to save money from the wastefulness. Second, students are receiving a lot of money from their parent. Especially, registration fee is very expensive but many students obtain their parent. If they get money to use their personal expense, parents will think a hard feel. Accordingly, students need to make the money to use on their own. Last, students get a priceless experience through a part-time job. After graduate from college, they will work at company and occur many things at their company. If they have a part-time job, they obtain a new opportunity before a true job. They can learn about their key contents and factors in advance. It is main thing for college students to have a part-time job.
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An interesting approach, and some thoughtful arguments
Try to build a structure such as intro/body/conclusion and sentence structure to ensure fluency
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I agree. I have many friends who are part-time . They often work around a university. In particular, they go to after finishing the lesson. I do not have experience a part-time job. Nevertheless, I believe that college students need to work during school vacation. , , part-time job students importance of money. They will money through hard . Therefore, they will little money and save money. College students usually spend drinking and enjoying friends so they money easily. can to save money from wastefulness. Second, students are receiving a lot of money from their . , registration very expensive but many students obtain their parent. If they money to use their personal expense, parents will hard . Accordingly, students need to make money to use on their own. Last, students a priceless experience a part-time job. After graduat from college, they will work at company and many things at their company. If they have a part-time job, they a new opportunity before a true job. They can learn about key and in advance. It is thing for college students to have part-time job.
I agree. I have many friends who are having a part-time job. They often work around a university. In particular, they go to there after finishing the lesson. I do not have experience which works a part-time job. Nevertheless, I believe that college students need to work specially during school vacation. Because, First, A part-time job offers students importance of money. They will get money through hard suffer. Therefore, they will use little money and save money. College students usually spend drinking and enjoying friends so, they use money easily. It can intend to save money from the wastefulness. Second, students are receiving a lot of money from their parent. Especially, registration fee is very expensive but many students obtain their parent. If they get money to use their personal expense, parents will think a hard feel. Accordingly, students need to make the money to use on their own. Last, students get a priceless experience through a part-time job. After graduate from college, they will work at company and occur many things at their company. If they have a part-time job, they obtain a new opportunity before a true job. They can learn about their key contents and factors in advance. It is main thing for college students to have a part-time job.