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The writer had a good start. Basic sentences were used.

Some sentences were not clear.

I think this very important ecause college students have to work in future f can some experience by part-time job, I believe it good for . work, can meet many different people, colleague, guest, and boss will through many thing with them, learning knowledge and interesting things. Sometime meet bad people, they trouble have to calm, angry, try use communication with this process, you can . , you can money part-time job, it can expense I support college students to part-time job. A example, I have part-time job in Carrefour summer vacation and winter vacation, my colleagues have come from south of Taiwan can to things at quit time are very interesting and funny, me understand things, can meet very guest someone can't find thing, but the thing front, can ask too stupid, and the question not any relation my work after get a "thanks", I content.

I think this very important. Because college students have to work in future, if can get some experience by part-time job, I believe it good for you. In the work, can meet many different people, they maybe are your colleague, guest, and boss, you will through many thing with them, can learning many knowledge and interesting things to you. Sometime you can meet bad people, they can make trouble to you, you have to calm, don't angry, try use communication with they, in this process, and you can grow up of your mind. In the other, you can get money by part-time job, it can lower home expense, so, I support college students go to do part-time job. A example, I have do part-time job in Carrefour in summer vacation and winter vacation, in my colleagues, have come from south of Taiwan, he can tall to we have very things at quit time, it are very interesting and funny, let me understand very things, in the work, can meet very much guest, someone can't find the thing, but the thing at they front, someone can ask too stupid question, and the question is not any relation in my work, but after question can get a "thanks", I was content.

SIN

B2_0

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The writer could make basic sentences with SV.

Wrong word choices were used.

I think this very important ecause college students have to work in future f can some experience by part-time job, I believe it good for . work, can meet many different people, colleague, guest, and boss will through many thing with them, learning knowledge and interesting things. Sometime meet bad people, they trouble have to calm, angry, try use communication with this process, you can . , you can money part-time job, it can expense I support college students to part-time job. A example, I have part-time job in Carrefour summer vacation and winter vacation, my colleagues have come from south of Taiwan can to things at quit time are very interesting and funny, me understand things, can meet very guest someone can't find thing, but the thing front, can ask too stupid, and the question not any relation my work after get a "thanks", I content.

I think this very important. Because college students have to work in future, if can get some experience by part-time job, I believe it good for you. In the work, can meet many different people, they maybe are your colleague, guest, and boss, you will through many thing with them, can learning many knowledge and interesting things to you. Sometime you can meet bad people, they can make trouble to you, you have to calm, don't angry, try use communication with they, in this process, and you can grow up of your mind. In the other, you can get money by part-time job, it can lower home expense, so, I support college students go to do part-time job. A example, I have do part-time job in Carrefour in summer vacation and winter vacation, in my colleagues, have come from south of Taiwan, he can tall to we have very things at quit time, it are very interesting and funny, let me understand very things, in the work, can meet very much guest, someone can't find the thing, but the thing at they front, someone can ask too stupid question, and the question is not any relation in my work, but after question can get a "thanks", I was content.

KOR

B2_0

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45

Good word choices were chosen. Complex sentences were used.

Some explanation were irrelevant.

I think this very important ecause college students have to work in future f can some experience by part-time job, I believe it good for . work, can meet many different people, colleague, guest, and boss will through many thing with them, learning knowledge and interesting things. Sometime meet bad people, they trouble have to calm, angry, try use communication with this process, you can . , you can money part-time job, it can expense I support college students to part-time job. A example, I have part-time job in Carrefour summer vacation and winter vacation, my colleagues have come from south of Taiwan can to things at quit time are very interesting and funny, me understand things, can meet very guest someone can't find thing, but the thing front, can ask too stupid, and the question not any relation my work after get a "thanks", I content.

I think this very important. Because college students have to work in future, if can get some experience by part-time job, I believe it good for you. In the work, can meet many different people, they maybe are your colleague, guest, and boss, you will through many thing with them, can learning many knowledge and interesting things to you. Sometime you can meet bad people, they can make trouble to you, you have to calm, don't angry, try use communication with they, in this process, and you can grow up of your mind. In the other, you can get money by part-time job, it can lower home expense, so, I support college students go to do part-time job. A example, I have do part-time job in Carrefour in summer vacation and winter vacation, in my colleagues, have come from south of Taiwan, he can tall to we have very things at quit time, it are very interesting and funny, let me understand very things, in the work, can meet very much guest, someone can't find the thing, but the thing at they front, someone can ask too stupid question, and the question is not any relation in my work, but after question can get a "thanks", I was content.

ENS

ENS

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27

The writer could use basic sentences with easy words.

There were a big errors that make the sentences hard to understand.

I think this very important ecause college students have to work in future f can some experience by part-time job, I believe it good for . work, can meet many different people, colleague, guest, and boss will through many thing with them, learning knowledge and interesting things. Sometime meet bad people, they trouble have to calm, angry, try use communication with this process, you can . , you can money part-time job, it can expense I support college students to part-time job. A example, I have part-time job in Carrefour summer vacation and winter vacation, my colleagues have come from south of Taiwan can to things at quit time are very interesting and funny, me understand things, can meet very guest someone can't find thing, but the thing front, can ask too stupid, and the question not any relation my work after get a "thanks", I content.

I think this very important. Because college students have to work in future, if can get some experience by part-time job, I believe it good for you. In the work, can meet many different people, they maybe are your colleague, guest, and boss, you will through many thing with them, can learning many knowledge and interesting things to you. Sometime you can meet bad people, they can make trouble to you, you have to calm, don't angry, try use communication with they, in this process, and you can grow up of your mind. In the other, you can get money by part-time job, it can lower home expense, so, I support college students go to do part-time job. A example, I have do part-time job in Carrefour in summer vacation and winter vacation, in my colleagues, have come from south of Taiwan, he can tall to we have very things at quit time, it are very interesting and funny, let me understand very things, in the work, can meet very much guest, someone can't find the thing, but the thing at they front, someone can ask too stupid question, and the question is not any relation in my work, but after question can get a "thanks", I was content.

KOR

B1_1

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The writer showed good reasons.

Some phrases were not clear.

I think this very important ecause college students have to work in future f can some experience by part-time job, I believe it good for . work, can meet many different people, colleague, guest, and boss will through many thing with them, learning knowledge and interesting things. Sometime meet bad people, they trouble have to calm, angry, try use communication with this process, you can . , you can money part-time job, it can expense I support college students to part-time job. A example, I have part-time job in Carrefour summer vacation and winter vacation, my colleagues have come from south of Taiwan can to things at quit time are very interesting and funny, me understand things, can meet very guest someone can't find thing, but the thing front, can ask too stupid, and the question not any relation my work after get a "thanks", I content.

I think this very important. Because college students have to work in future, if can get some experience by part-time job, I believe it good for you. In the work, can meet many different people, they maybe are your colleague, guest, and boss, you will through many thing with them, can learning many knowledge and interesting things to you. Sometime you can meet bad people, they can make trouble to you, you have to calm, don't angry, try use communication with they, in this process, and you can grow up of your mind. In the other, you can get money by part-time job, it can lower home expense, so, I support college students go to do part-time job. A example, I have do part-time job in Carrefour in summer vacation and winter vacation, in my colleagues, have come from south of Taiwan, he can tall to we have very things at quit time, it are very interesting and funny, let me understand very things, in the work, can meet very much guest, someone can't find the thing, but the thing at they front, someone can ask too stupid question, and the question is not any relation in my work, but after question can get a "thanks", I was content.

CHN

B1_1

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45

The writer provided good explanations.

Misspelling was made.

I think this very important ecause college students have to work in future f can some experience by part-time job, I believe it good for . work, can meet many different people, colleague, guest, and boss will through many thing with them, learning knowledge and interesting things. Sometime meet bad people, they trouble have to calm, angry, try use communication with this process, you can . , you can money part-time job, it can expense I support college students to part-time job. A example, I have part-time job in Carrefour summer vacation and winter vacation, my colleagues have come from south of Taiwan can to things at quit time are very interesting and funny, me understand things, can meet very guest someone can't find thing, but the thing front, can ask too stupid, and the question not any relation my work after get a "thanks", I content.

I think this very important. Because college students have to work in future, if can get some experience by part-time job, I believe it good for you. In the work, can meet many different people, they maybe are your colleague, guest, and boss, you will through many thing with them, can learning many knowledge and interesting things to you. Sometime you can meet bad people, they can make trouble to you, you have to calm, don't angry, try use communication with they, in this process, and you can grow up of your mind. In the other, you can get money by part-time job, it can lower home expense, so, I support college students go to do part-time job. A example, I have do part-time job in Carrefour in summer vacation and winter vacation, in my colleagues, have come from south of Taiwan, he can tall to we have very things at quit time, it are very interesting and funny, let me understand very things, in the work, can meet very much guest, someone can't find the thing, but the thing at they front, someone can ask too stupid question, and the question is not any relation in my work, but after question can get a "thanks", I was content.

JPN

B1_1

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73

The writer could make basic sentences with SV.

The writer wrote out of topic.

I think this very important ecause college students have to work in future f can some experience by part-time job, I believe it good for . work, can meet many different people, colleague, guest, and boss will through many thing with them, learning knowledge and interesting things. Sometime meet bad people, they trouble have to calm, angry, try use communication with this process, you can . , you can money part-time job, it can expense I support college students to part-time job. A example, I have part-time job in Carrefour summer vacation and winter vacation, my colleagues have come from south of Taiwan can to things at quit time are very interesting and funny, me understand things, can meet very guest someone can't find thing, but the thing front, can ask too stupid, and the question not any relation my work after get a "thanks", I content.

I think this very important. Because college students have to work in future, if can get some experience by part-time job, I believe it good for you. In the work, can meet many different people, they maybe are your colleague, guest, and boss, you will through many thing with them, can learning many knowledge and interesting things to you. Sometime you can meet bad people, they can make trouble to you, you have to calm, don't angry, try use communication with they, in this process, and you can grow up of your mind. In the other, you can get money by part-time job, it can lower home expense, so, I support college students go to do part-time job. A example, I have do part-time job in Carrefour in summer vacation and winter vacation, in my colleagues, have come from south of Taiwan, he can tall to we have very things at quit time, it are very interesting and funny, let me understand very things, in the work, can meet very much guest, someone can't find the thing, but the thing at they front, someone can ask too stupid question, and the question is not any relation in my work, but after question can get a "thanks", I was content.

JPN

B1_1

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The writer tried to share her ideas as much.

There were some grammar errors.

I think this very important ecause college students have to work in future f can some experience by part-time job, I believe it good for . work, can meet many different people, colleague, guest, and boss will through many thing with them, learning knowledge and interesting things. Sometime meet bad people, they trouble have to calm, angry, try use communication with this process, you can . , you can money part-time job, it can expense I support college students to part-time job. A example, I have part-time job in Carrefour summer vacation and winter vacation, my colleagues have come from south of Taiwan can to things at quit time are very interesting and funny, me understand things, can meet very guest someone can't find thing, but the thing front, can ask too stupid, and the question not any relation my work after get a "thanks", I content.

I think this very important. Because college students have to work in future, if can get some experience by part-time job, I believe it good for you. In the work, can meet many different people, they maybe are your colleague, guest, and boss, you will through many thing with them, can learning many knowledge and interesting things to you. Sometime you can meet bad people, they can make trouble to you, you have to calm, don't angry, try use communication with they, in this process, and you can grow up of your mind. In the other, you can get money by part-time job, it can lower home expense, so, I support college students go to do part-time job. A example, I have do part-time job in Carrefour in summer vacation and winter vacation, in my colleagues, have come from south of Taiwan, he can tall to we have very things at quit time, it are very interesting and funny, let me understand very things, in the work, can meet very much guest, someone can't find the thing, but the thing at they front, someone can ask too stupid question, and the question is not any relation in my work, but after question can get a "thanks", I was content.

IDN

A2_0

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Interesting Introduction

The examples were not convincing.

I think this very important ecause college students have to work in future f can some experience by part-time job, I believe it good for . work, can meet many different people, colleague, guest, and boss will through many thing with them, learning knowledge and interesting things. Sometime meet bad people, they trouble have to calm, angry, try use communication with this process, you can . , you can money part-time job, it can expense I support college students to part-time job. A example, I have part-time job in Carrefour summer vacation and winter vacation, my colleagues have come from south of Taiwan can to things at quit time are very interesting and funny, me understand things, can meet very guest someone can't find thing, but the thing front, can ask too stupid, and the question not any relation my work after get a "thanks", I content.

I think this very important. Because college students have to work in future, if can get some experience by part-time job, I believe it good for you. In the work, can meet many different people, they maybe are your colleague, guest, and boss, you will through many thing with them, can learning many knowledge and interesting things to you. Sometime you can meet bad people, they can make trouble to you, you have to calm, don't angry, try use communication with they, in this process, and you can grow up of your mind. In the other, you can get money by part-time job, it can lower home expense, so, I support college students go to do part-time job. A example, I have do part-time job in Carrefour in summer vacation and winter vacation, in my colleagues, have come from south of Taiwan, he can tall to we have very things at quit time, it are very interesting and funny, let me understand very things, in the work, can meet very much guest, someone can't find the thing, but the thing at they front, someone can ask too stupid question, and the question is not any relation in my work, but after question can get a "thanks", I was content.

CHN

B1_2

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The writer got some really nice ideas in this paper.

There were some minor mistakes.

I think this very important ecause college students have to work in future f can some experience by part-time job, I believe it good for . work, can meet many different people, colleague, guest, and boss will through many thing with them, learning knowledge and interesting things. Sometime meet bad people, they trouble have to calm, angry, try use communication with this process, you can . , you can money part-time job, it can expense I support college students to part-time job. A example, I have part-time job in Carrefour summer vacation and winter vacation, my colleagues have come from south of Taiwan can to things at quit time are very interesting and funny, me understand things, can meet very guest someone can't find thing, but the thing front, can ask too stupid, and the question not any relation my work after get a "thanks", I content.

I think this very important. Because college students have to work in future, if can get some experience by part-time job, I believe it good for you. In the work, can meet many different people, they maybe are your colleague, guest, and boss, you will through many thing with them, can learning many knowledge and interesting things to you. Sometime you can meet bad people, they can make trouble to you, you have to calm, don't angry, try use communication with they, in this process, and you can grow up of your mind. In the other, you can get money by part-time job, it can lower home expense, so, I support college students go to do part-time job. A example, I have do part-time job in Carrefour in summer vacation and winter vacation, in my colleagues, have come from south of Taiwan, he can tall to we have very things at quit time, it are very interesting and funny, let me understand very things, in the work, can meet very much guest, someone can't find the thing, but the thing at they front, someone can ask too stupid question, and the question is not any relation in my work, but after question can get a "thanks", I was content.

CHN

B1_2

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85.5

The essay is written well. The grammar part is excellent.

The reasons are not so strong. No more weak point was observed.

arttime job is something we do besides our regular work or studies. n world most people are independet and part time jobs in order to more money to fulfill their basic or some do it to study their own money. ducation is very costly and all people can afford it students on schlrships studying abrod or people parttime jobs in order to their fees. ome people fun or some experience. arttime job include working in a bank or organization. I myself have taught while I was studying just my passion. society has some boundaries because of which some feel shy doing work. n culture work is appreciated people be hardworking and most enjoy an whatever they do studies or work. I personally feel one must do some work for experience for confidence for and also to reduce burden parents. can do jobs in franchise organization or may teach. jobs are very helpful in todays world and especially in our country as we all the crisis. not feel shy doing any work that is respectable but do it with intrest.

Part time job is some thing we do besides our regular work or studies. in modren world most of people are independet and they do part time jobs in order to get more money to full fill their basic or some do it to study by their own money. education is very costly and all the people can not afford it . so students on schlorships studying abrod or poor people do part time jobs in order to get their fees. some people do it as fun or some experience. part time job includes teaching working in a bank or some organization. I my self have taught while I was studying just for my passion. our society has some boundaries because of which some feel shy in doing work. in westren culture how ever does whatever work is appreciated. people must be hard working and most enjoy an be sincue to whatevere they do either studies or work. I personally feel as a student one must do some work doing his studying period for experience for confidence for mangement and also for his expensies to reduce burden of his parents. they can do jobs in franchise organization or may teach. part jobs are very helpfull in todays world and especially in our country as we all know the crisis. we most not feel shyness in doing any work that is respectable but most do it with intrest.

IDN

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39.5

The ideas are given in order with supportive reasons.

There are a lot of grammar errors and misspelling words.

arttime job is something we do besides our regular work or studies. n world most people are independet and part time jobs in order to more money to fulfill their basic or some do it to study their own money. ducation is very costly and all people can afford it students on schlrships studying abrod or people parttime jobs in order to their fees. ome people fun or some experience. arttime job include working in a bank or organization. I myself have taught while I was studying just my passion. society has some boundaries because of which some feel shy doing work. n culture work is appreciated people be hardworking and most enjoy an whatever they do studies or work. I personally feel one must do some work for experience for confidence for and also to reduce burden parents. can do jobs in franchise organization or may teach. jobs are very helpful in todays world and especially in our country as we all the crisis. not feel shy doing any work that is respectable but do it with intrest.

Part time job is some thing we do besides our regular work or studies. in modren world most of people are independet and they do part time jobs in order to get more money to full fill their basic or some do it to study by their own money. education is very costly and all the people can not afford it . so students on schlorships studying abrod or poor people do part time jobs in order to get their fees. some people do it as fun or some experience. part time job includes teaching working in a bank or some organization. I my self have taught while I was studying just for my passion. our society has some boundaries because of which some feel shy in doing work. in westren culture how ever does whatever work is appreciated. people must be hard working and most enjoy an be sincue to whatevere they do either studies or work. I personally feel as a student one must do some work doing his studying period for experience for confidence for mangement and also for his expensies to reduce burden of his parents. they can do jobs in franchise organization or may teach. part jobs are very helpfull in todays world and especially in our country as we all know the crisis. we most not feel shyness in doing any work that is respectable but most do it with intrest.

THA

A2_0

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47.5

Supportive reasons are reasonable. The writer completes the task well.

There are a lot of grammar mistakes. No more weak point was observed.

arttime job is something we do besides our regular work or studies. n world most people are independet and part time jobs in order to more money to fulfill their basic or some do it to study their own money. ducation is very costly and all people can afford it students on schlrships studying abrod or people parttime jobs in order to their fees. ome people fun or some experience. arttime job include working in a bank or organization. I myself have taught while I was studying just my passion. society has some boundaries because of which some feel shy doing work. n culture work is appreciated people be hardworking and most enjoy an whatever they do studies or work. I personally feel one must do some work for experience for confidence for and also to reduce burden parents. can do jobs in franchise organization or may teach. jobs are very helpful in todays world and especially in our country as we all the crisis. not feel shy doing any work that is respectable but do it with intrest.

Part time job is some thing we do besides our regular work or studies. in modren world most of people are independet and they do part time jobs in order to get more money to full fill their basic or some do it to study by their own money. education is very costly and all the people can not afford it . so students on schlorships studying abrod or poor people do part time jobs in order to get their fees. some people do it as fun or some experience. part time job includes teaching working in a bank or some organization. I my self have taught while I was studying just for my passion. our society has some boundaries because of which some feel shy in doing work. in westren culture how ever does whatever work is appreciated. people must be hard working and most enjoy an be sincue to whatevere they do either studies or work. I personally feel as a student one must do some work doing his studying period for experience for confidence for mangement and also for his expensies to reduce burden of his parents. they can do jobs in franchise organization or may teach. part jobs are very helpfull in todays world and especially in our country as we all know the crisis. we most not feel shyness in doing any work that is respectable but most do it with intrest.

TWN

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24.5

The writer used the involvement through out the essay. Simple sentences were used well.

The writer did not complete the task by supporting the part time job side. There are grammatical error.

arttime job is something we do besides our regular work or studies. n world most people are independet and part time jobs in order to more money to fulfill their basic or some do it to study their own money. ducation is very costly and all people can afford it students on schlrships studying abrod or people parttime jobs in order to their fees. ome people fun or some experience. arttime job include working in a bank or organization. I myself have taught while I was studying just my passion. society has some boundaries because of which some feel shy doing work. n culture work is appreciated people be hardworking and most enjoy an whatever they do studies or work. I personally feel one must do some work for experience for confidence for and also to reduce burden parents. can do jobs in franchise organization or may teach. jobs are very helpful in todays world and especially in our country as we all the crisis. not feel shy doing any work that is respectable but do it with intrest.

Part time job is some thing we do besides our regular work or studies. in modren world most of people are independet and they do part time jobs in order to get more money to full fill their basic or some do it to study by their own money. education is very costly and all the people can not afford it . so students on schlorships studying abrod or poor people do part time jobs in order to get their fees. some people do it as fun or some experience. part time job includes teaching working in a bank or some organization. I my self have taught while I was studying just for my passion. our society has some boundaries because of which some feel shy in doing work. in westren culture how ever does whatever work is appreciated. people must be hard working and most enjoy an be sincue to whatevere they do either studies or work. I personally feel as a student one must do some work doing his studying period for experience for confidence for mangement and also for his expensies to reduce burden of his parents. they can do jobs in franchise organization or may teach. part jobs are very helpfull in todays world and especially in our country as we all know the crisis. we most not feel shyness in doing any work that is respectable but most do it with intrest.

CHN

B1_1

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The writer supports the important side. Supportive reasons are reasonable.

Using the punctuation is wrong. The article is not used correctly.

arttime job is something we do besides our regular work or studies. n world most people are independet and part time jobs in order to more money to fulfill their basic or some do it to study their own money. ducation is very costly and all people can afford it students on schlrships studying abrod or people parttime jobs in order to their fees. ome people fun or some experience. arttime job include working in a bank or organization. I myself have taught while I was studying just my passion. society has some boundaries because of which some feel shy doing work. n culture work is appreciated people be hardworking and most enjoy an whatever they do studies or work. I personally feel one must do some work for experience for confidence for and also to reduce burden parents. can do jobs in franchise organization or may teach. jobs are very helpful in todays world and especially in our country as we all the crisis. not feel shy doing any work that is respectable but do it with intrest.

Part time job is some thing we do besides our regular work or studies. in modren world most of people are independet and they do part time jobs in order to get more money to full fill their basic or some do it to study by their own money. education is very costly and all the people can not afford it . so students on schlorships studying abrod or poor people do part time jobs in order to get their fees. some people do it as fun or some experience. part time job includes teaching working in a bank or some organization. I my self have taught while I was studying just for my passion. our society has some boundaries because of which some feel shy in doing work. in westren culture how ever does whatever work is appreciated. people must be hard working and most enjoy an be sincue to whatevere they do either studies or work. I personally feel as a student one must do some work doing his studying period for experience for confidence for mangement and also for his expensies to reduce burden of his parents. they can do jobs in franchise organization or may teach. part jobs are very helpfull in todays world and especially in our country as we all know the crisis. we most not feel shyness in doing any work that is respectable but most do it with intrest.

THA

B1_1

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Grammar part is alright mostly. The reasons are good explained.

The writer did not complete tasks totally. There are a few grammar mistakes.

arttime job is something we do besides our regular work or studies. n world most people are independet and part time jobs in order to more money to fulfill their basic or some do it to study their own money. ducation is very costly and all people can afford it students on schlrships studying abrod or people parttime jobs in order to their fees. ome people fun or some experience. arttime job include working in a bank or organization. I myself have taught while I was studying just my passion. society has some boundaries because of which some feel shy doing work. n culture work is appreciated people be hardworking and most enjoy an whatever they do studies or work. I personally feel one must do some work for experience for confidence for and also to reduce burden parents. can do jobs in franchise organization or may teach. jobs are very helpful in todays world and especially in our country as we all the crisis. not feel shy doing any work that is respectable but do it with intrest.

Part time job is some thing we do besides our regular work or studies. in modren world most of people are independet and they do part time jobs in order to get more money to full fill their basic or some do it to study by their own money. education is very costly and all the people can not afford it . so students on schlorships studying abrod or poor people do part time jobs in order to get their fees. some people do it as fun or some experience. part time job includes teaching working in a bank or some organization. I my self have taught while I was studying just for my passion. our society has some boundaries because of which some feel shy in doing work. in westren culture how ever does whatever work is appreciated. people must be hard working and most enjoy an be sincue to whatevere they do either studies or work. I personally feel as a student one must do some work doing his studying period for experience for confidence for mangement and also for his expensies to reduce burden of his parents. they can do jobs in franchise organization or may teach. part jobs are very helpfull in todays world and especially in our country as we all know the crisis. we most not feel shyness in doing any work that is respectable but most do it with intrest.

TWN

B2_0

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55

59.5

The order of season is organized well. It is easy to follow.

There are grammar mistakes. The writer did not support only the important side totally.

arttime job is something we do besides our regular work or studies. n world most people are independet and part time jobs in order to more money to fulfill their basic or some do it to study their own money. ducation is very costly and all people can afford it students on schlrships studying abrod or people parttime jobs in order to their fees. ome people fun or some experience. arttime job include working in a bank or organization. I myself have taught while I was studying just my passion. society has some boundaries because of which some feel shy doing work. n culture work is appreciated people be hardworking and most enjoy an whatever they do studies or work. I personally feel one must do some work for experience for confidence for and also to reduce burden parents. can do jobs in franchise organization or may teach. jobs are very helpful in todays world and especially in our country as we all the crisis. not feel shy doing any work that is respectable but do it with intrest.

Part time job is some thing we do besides our regular work or studies. in modren world most of people are independet and they do part time jobs in order to get more money to full fill their basic or some do it to study by their own money. education is very costly and all the people can not afford it . so students on schlorships studying abrod or poor people do part time jobs in order to get their fees. some people do it as fun or some experience. part time job includes teaching working in a bank or some organization. I my self have taught while I was studying just for my passion. our society has some boundaries because of which some feel shy in doing work. in westren culture how ever does whatever work is appreciated. people must be hard working and most enjoy an be sincue to whatevere they do either studies or work. I personally feel as a student one must do some work doing his studying period for experience for confidence for mangement and also for his expensies to reduce burden of his parents. they can do jobs in franchise organization or may teach. part jobs are very helpfull in todays world and especially in our country as we all know the crisis. we most not feel shyness in doing any work that is respectable but most do it with intrest.

IDN

B1_2

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50.5

The writer strongly supports the importance of part time job. Supportive reasons are good.

There are many missing punction and grammar errors.

arttime job is something we do besides our regular work or studies. n world most people are independet and part time jobs in order to more money to fulfill their basic or some do it to study their own money. ducation is very costly and all people can afford it students on schlrships studying abrod or people parttime jobs in order to their fees. ome people fun or some experience. arttime job include working in a bank or organization. I myself have taught while I was studying just my passion. society has some boundaries because of which some feel shy doing work. n culture work is appreciated people be hardworking and most enjoy an whatever they do studies or work. I personally feel one must do some work for experience for confidence for and also to reduce burden parents. can do jobs in franchise organization or may teach. jobs are very helpful in todays world and especially in our country as we all the crisis. not feel shy doing any work that is respectable but do it with intrest.

Part time job is some thing we do besides our regular work or studies. in modren world most of people are independet and they do part time jobs in order to get more money to full fill their basic or some do it to study by their own money. education is very costly and all the people can not afford it . so students on schlorships studying abrod or poor people do part time jobs in order to get their fees. some people do it as fun or some experience. part time job includes teaching working in a bank or some organization. I my self have taught while I was studying just for my passion. our society has some boundaries because of which some feel shy in doing work. in westren culture how ever does whatever work is appreciated. people must be hard working and most enjoy an be sincue to whatevere they do either studies or work. I personally feel as a student one must do some work doing his studying period for experience for confidence for mangement and also for his expensies to reduce burden of his parents. they can do jobs in franchise organization or may teach. part jobs are very helpfull in todays world and especially in our country as we all know the crisis. we most not feel shyness in doing any work that is respectable but most do it with intrest.

JPN

B1_2

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45

38

41.5

The writer strongly supports the benefit side. The grammar part is fair.

Supportive reason is not reasonable, especially, a part time job by student affect the labor market.

arttime job is something we do besides our regular work or studies. n world most people are independet and part time jobs in order to more money to fulfill their basic or some do it to study their own money. ducation is very costly and all people can afford it students on schlrships studying abrod or people parttime jobs in order to their fees. ome people fun or some experience. arttime job include working in a bank or organization. I myself have taught while I was studying just my passion. society has some boundaries because of which some feel shy doing work. n culture work is appreciated people be hardworking and most enjoy an whatever they do studies or work. I personally feel one must do some work for experience for confidence for and also to reduce burden parents. can do jobs in franchise organization or may teach. jobs are very helpful in todays world and especially in our country as we all the crisis. not feel shy doing any work that is respectable but do it with intrest.

Part time job is some thing we do besides our regular work or studies. in modren world most of people are independet and they do part time jobs in order to get more money to full fill their basic or some do it to study by their own money. education is very costly and all the people can not afford it . so students on schlorships studying abrod or poor people do part time jobs in order to get their fees. some people do it as fun or some experience. part time job includes teaching working in a bank or some organization. I my self have taught while I was studying just for my passion. our society has some boundaries because of which some feel shy in doing work. in westren culture how ever does whatever work is appreciated. people must be hard working and most enjoy an be sincue to whatevere they do either studies or work. I personally feel as a student one must do some work doing his studying period for experience for confidence for mangement and also for his expensies to reduce burden of his parents. they can do jobs in franchise organization or may teach. part jobs are very helpfull in todays world and especially in our country as we all know the crisis. we most not feel shyness in doing any work that is respectable but most do it with intrest.

SIN

B2_0

9

9

9

9

9

9

9

5

5

5

96

78

87

The essay is excellent in the language part. Reasons are well described.

The writer did not support the important side completely.

arttime job is something we do besides our regular work or studies. n world most people are independet and part time jobs in order to more money to fulfill their basic or some do it to study their own money. ducation is very costly and all people can afford it students on schlrships studying abrod or people parttime jobs in order to their fees. ome people fun or some experience. arttime job include working in a bank or organization. I myself have taught while I was studying just my passion. society has some boundaries because of which some feel shy doing work. n culture work is appreciated people be hardworking and most enjoy an whatever they do studies or work. I personally feel one must do some work for experience for confidence for and also to reduce burden parents. can do jobs in franchise organization or may teach. jobs are very helpful in todays world and especially in our country as we all the crisis. not feel shy doing any work that is respectable but do it with intrest.

Part time job is some thing we do besides our regular work or studies. in modren world most of people are independet and they do part time jobs in order to get more money to full fill their basic or some do it to study by their own money. education is very costly and all the people can not afford it . so students on schlorships studying abrod or poor people do part time jobs in order to get their fees. some people do it as fun or some experience. part time job includes teaching working in a bank or some organization. I my self have taught while I was studying just for my passion. our society has some boundaries because of which some feel shy in doing work. in westren culture how ever does whatever work is appreciated. people must be hard working and most enjoy an be sincue to whatevere they do either studies or work. I personally feel as a student one must do some work doing his studying period for experience for confidence for mangement and also for his expensies to reduce burden of his parents. they can do jobs in franchise organization or may teach. part jobs are very helpfull in todays world and especially in our country as we all know the crisis. we most not feel shyness in doing any work that is respectable but most do it with intrest.

CHN

B2_0

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3

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8

21

21

21

The sentence structures were simple and easy to understand.

There were some incorrect articles and prepositions usage.

I agree that it is important for college students to have part-time job. I have three reasons to support my stance. Firstly, a part-time job is an important chance to experience society. Because college is the place to prepare before going to real society, part-time job is very necessary to know how working is or how we can enjoy it. In my experience, I learned that even one mistake cannot be allowed in a . I also the importance of relationship with my seniors. reason is a monetary problem. I think college students need a lot of money for texts or entertainment owever we are already adults and should not totally depend on our parents finance. Therefore it is quite better to earn ourselves as much as possible. As for me, I live without working if I ask my parents to support me but I to work. That's because I have to learn to manage myself before graduating university. After I started to work, I actually to think the importance of money I buy something. Lastly, I think a part-time job is a good opportunity to new friends. In college, it is difficult to find kinds of friends because ages and departments are limited. However, if we work, we can meet kinds of people regardless of age or . I think such relationship precious even get older. all reasons, I strongly believe that having a part-time job is important for college students.

I agree that it is important for college students to have a part-time job. I have three reasons to support my stance. Firstly, a part-time job is an important chance to experience the society. Because a college is the place to prepare before going to the real society, part-time job is very necessary to know how severe working is or how we can enjoy it. In my experience, I learned that even one mistake cannot be allowed in a serves through working in bakery. I also noticed the importance of the relationship with my seniors. Second reason is a monetary problem. I think college students need a lot of money for texts or for some entertainments. However we are already adults and should not totally depend on our parents in finance. Therefore it is quite better to earn by ourselves as much as possible. As for me, I can live without working if I ask my parents to support me but I chose to work. That's because I have to learn to manage myself before graduating university. After I started to work, I actually became to think the importance of money when I buy something. Lastly, I think a part-time job is a good opportunity to get new friends. In a college, it is difficult to find so many kinds of friends because ages and departments are limited. However, if we work, we can meet any kinds of people regardless of ages or spatiality. I think such relationship is precious even after getting older. From all those reasons, I strongly believe that having a part-time job is important for college students.

JPN

B1_1

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39

39

39

There were good reasons with clear example in the essay. The writer use simple words.

Missing some article words where necessary.

I agree that it is important for college students to have part-time job. I have three reasons to support my stance. Firstly, a part-time job is an important chance to experience society. Because college is the place to prepare before going to real society, part-time job is very necessary to know how working is or how we can enjoy it. In my experience, I learned that even one mistake cannot be allowed in a . I also the importance of relationship with my seniors. reason is a monetary problem. I think college students need a lot of money for texts or entertainment owever we are already adults and should not totally depend on our parents finance. Therefore it is quite better to earn ourselves as much as possible. As for me, I live without working if I ask my parents to support me but I to work. That's because I have to learn to manage myself before graduating university. After I started to work, I actually to think the importance of money I buy something. Lastly, I think a part-time job is a good opportunity to new friends. In college, it is difficult to find kinds of friends because ages and departments are limited. However, if we work, we can meet kinds of people regardless of age or . I think such relationship precious even get older. all reasons, I strongly believe that having a part-time job is important for college students.

I agree that it is important for college students to have a part-time job. I have three reasons to support my stance. Firstly, a part-time job is an important chance to experience the society. Because a college is the place to prepare before going to the real society, part-time job is very necessary to know how severe working is or how we can enjoy it. In my experience, I learned that even one mistake cannot be allowed in a serves through working in bakery. I also noticed the importance of the relationship with my seniors. Second reason is a monetary problem. I think college students need a lot of money for texts or for some entertainments. However we are already adults and should not totally depend on our parents in finance. Therefore it is quite better to earn by ourselves as much as possible. As for me, I can live without working if I ask my parents to support me but I chose to work. That's because I have to learn to manage myself before graduating university. After I started to work, I actually became to think the importance of money when I buy something. Lastly, I think a part-time job is a good opportunity to get new friends. In a college, it is difficult to find so many kinds of friends because ages and departments are limited. However, if we work, we can meet any kinds of people regardless of ages or spatiality. I think such relationship is precious even after getting older. From all those reasons, I strongly believe that having a part-time job is important for college students.

CHN

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74

74

74

The writer could come up with a very good start at the beginning. The sentence structure was good.

there were incorrect subject-verb agreement found.

I agree that it is important for college students to have part-time job. I have three reasons to support my stance. Firstly, a part-time job is an important chance to experience society. Because college is the place to prepare before going to real society, part-time job is very necessary to know how working is or how we can enjoy it. In my experience, I learned that even one mistake cannot be allowed in a . I also the importance of relationship with my seniors. reason is a monetary problem. I think college students need a lot of money for texts or entertainment owever we are already adults and should not totally depend on our parents finance. Therefore it is quite better to earn ourselves as much as possible. As for me, I live without working if I ask my parents to support me but I to work. That's because I have to learn to manage myself before graduating university. After I started to work, I actually to think the importance of money I buy something. Lastly, I think a part-time job is a good opportunity to new friends. In college, it is difficult to find kinds of friends because ages and departments are limited. However, if we work, we can meet kinds of people regardless of age or . I think such relationship precious even get older. all reasons, I strongly believe that having a part-time job is important for college students.

I agree that it is important for college students to have a part-time job. I have three reasons to support my stance. Firstly, a part-time job is an important chance to experience the society. Because a college is the place to prepare before going to the real society, part-time job is very necessary to know how severe working is or how we can enjoy it. In my experience, I learned that even one mistake cannot be allowed in a serves through working in bakery. I also noticed the importance of the relationship with my seniors. Second reason is a monetary problem. I think college students need a lot of money for texts or for some entertainments. However we are already adults and should not totally depend on our parents in finance. Therefore it is quite better to earn by ourselves as much as possible. As for me, I can live without working if I ask my parents to support me but I chose to work. That's because I have to learn to manage myself before graduating university. After I started to work, I actually became to think the importance of money when I buy something. Lastly, I think a part-time job is a good opportunity to get new friends. In a college, it is difficult to find so many kinds of friends because ages and departments are limited. However, if we work, we can meet any kinds of people regardless of ages or spatiality. I think such relationship is precious even after getting older. From all those reasons, I strongly believe that having a part-time job is important for college students.

TWN

A2_0

2

2

2

2

2

7

7

5

4

5

38

38

38

The writer could come up many reasons.

There were many wrong verb forms in the writing. Some sentences missed the verbs and articles in front of noun words.

I agree that it is important for college students to have part-time job. I have three reasons to support my stance. Firstly, a part-time job is an important chance to experience society. Because college is the place to prepare before going to real society, part-time job is very necessary to know how working is or how we can enjoy it. In my experience, I learned that even one mistake cannot be allowed in a . I also the importance of relationship with my seniors. reason is a monetary problem. I think college students need a lot of money for texts or entertainment owever we are already adults and should not totally depend on our parents finance. Therefore it is quite better to earn ourselves as much as possible. As for me, I live without working if I ask my parents to support me but I to work. That's because I have to learn to manage myself before graduating university. After I started to work, I actually to think the importance of money I buy something. Lastly, I think a part-time job is a good opportunity to new friends. In college, it is difficult to find kinds of friends because ages and departments are limited. However, if we work, we can meet kinds of people regardless of age or . I think such relationship precious even get older. all reasons, I strongly believe that having a part-time job is important for college students.

I agree that it is important for college students to have a part-time job. I have three reasons to support my stance. Firstly, a part-time job is an important chance to experience the society. Because a college is the place to prepare before going to the real society, part-time job is very necessary to know how severe working is or how we can enjoy it. In my experience, I learned that even one mistake cannot be allowed in a serves through working in bakery. I also noticed the importance of the relationship with my seniors. Second reason is a monetary problem. I think college students need a lot of money for texts or for some entertainments. However we are already adults and should not totally depend on our parents in finance. Therefore it is quite better to earn by ourselves as much as possible. As for me, I can live without working if I ask my parents to support me but I chose to work. That's because I have to learn to manage myself before graduating university. After I started to work, I actually became to think the importance of money when I buy something. Lastly, I think a part-time job is a good opportunity to get new friends. In a college, it is difficult to find so many kinds of friends because ages and departments are limited. However, if we work, we can meet any kinds of people regardless of ages or spatiality. I think such relationship is precious even after getting older. From all those reasons, I strongly believe that having a part-time job is important for college students.

JPN

B1_1

6

9

1

6

7

7

7

8

8

1

60

60

60

The reasons were logical. It was good organizing ideas in writing.

there were some grammar errors in using verb form and the articles. The wrong word choices were found.

I agree that it is important for college students to have part-time job. I have three reasons to support my stance. Firstly, a part-time job is an important chance to experience society. Because college is the place to prepare before going to real society, part-time job is very necessary to know how working is or how we can enjoy it. In my experience, I learned that even one mistake cannot be allowed in a . I also the importance of relationship with my seniors. reason is a monetary problem. I think college students need a lot of money for texts or entertainment owever we are already adults and should not totally depend on our parents finance. Therefore it is quite better to earn ourselves as much as possible. As for me, I live without working if I ask my parents to support me but I to work. That's because I have to learn to manage myself before graduating university. After I started to work, I actually to think the importance of money I buy something. Lastly, I think a part-time job is a good opportunity to new friends. In college, it is difficult to find kinds of friends because ages and departments are limited. However, if we work, we can meet kinds of people regardless of age or . I think such relationship precious even get older. all reasons, I strongly believe that having a part-time job is important for college students.

I agree that it is important for college students to have a part-time job. I have three reasons to support my stance. Firstly, a part-time job is an important chance to experience the society. Because a college is the place to prepare before going to the real society, part-time job is very necessary to know how severe working is or how we can enjoy it. In my experience, I learned that even one mistake cannot be allowed in a serves through working in bakery. I also noticed the importance of the relationship with my seniors. Second reason is a monetary problem. I think college students need a lot of money for texts or for some entertainments. However we are already adults and should not totally depend on our parents in finance. Therefore it is quite better to earn by ourselves as much as possible. As for me, I can live without working if I ask my parents to support me but I chose to work. That's because I have to learn to manage myself before graduating university. After I started to work, I actually became to think the importance of money when I buy something. Lastly, I think a part-time job is a good opportunity to get new friends. In a college, it is difficult to find so many kinds of friends because ages and departments are limited. However, if we work, we can meet any kinds of people regardless of ages or spatiality. I think such relationship is precious even after getting older. From all those reasons, I strongly believe that having a part-time job is important for college students.

IDN

B1_1

9

6

6

7

7

9

9

8

7

3

71

71

71

The writer could come up with several reasons. The reasons showed the various aspect.

Incorrect pronoun usage and prepositions were found.

I agree that it is important for college students to have part-time job. I have three reasons to support my stance. Firstly, a part-time job is an important chance to experience society. Because college is the place to prepare before going to real society, part-time job is very necessary to know how working is or how we can enjoy it. In my experience, I learned that even one mistake cannot be allowed in a . I also the importance of relationship with my seniors. reason is a monetary problem. I think college students need a lot of money for texts or entertainment owever we are already adults and should not totally depend on our parents finance. Therefore it is quite better to earn ourselves as much as possible. As for me, I live without working if I ask my parents to support me but I to work. That's because I have to learn to manage myself before graduating university. After I started to work, I actually to think the importance of money I buy something. Lastly, I think a part-time job is a good opportunity to new friends. In college, it is difficult to find kinds of friends because ages and departments are limited. However, if we work, we can meet kinds of people regardless of age or . I think such relationship precious even get older. all reasons, I strongly believe that having a part-time job is important for college students.

I agree that it is important for college students to have a part-time job. I have three reasons to support my stance. Firstly, a part-time job is an important chance to experience the society. Because a college is the place to prepare before going to the real society, part-time job is very necessary to know how severe working is or how we can enjoy it. In my experience, I learned that even one mistake cannot be allowed in a serves through working in bakery. I also noticed the importance of the relationship with my seniors. Second reason is a monetary problem. I think college students need a lot of money for texts or for some entertainments. However we are already adults and should not totally depend on our parents in finance. Therefore it is quite better to earn by ourselves as much as possible. As for me, I can live without working if I ask my parents to support me but I chose to work. That's because I have to learn to manage myself before graduating university. After I started to work, I actually became to think the importance of money when I buy something. Lastly, I think a part-time job is a good opportunity to get new friends. In a college, it is difficult to find so many kinds of friends because ages and departments are limited. However, if we work, we can meet any kinds of people regardless of ages or spatiality. I think such relationship is precious even after getting older. From all those reasons, I strongly believe that having a part-time job is important for college students.

JPN

B1_1

6

5

8

8

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9

8

8

7

8

75

75

75

The essay was very clear organizing. The reasons and the conclusions are logically connected.

There were wrong word choices in the articles and prepositions.

I agree that it is important for college students to have part-time job. I have three reasons to support my stance. Firstly, a part-time job is an important chance to experience society. Because college is the place to prepare before going to real society, part-time job is very necessary to know how working is or how we can enjoy it. In my experience, I learned that even one mistake cannot be allowed in a . I also the importance of relationship with my seniors. reason is a monetary problem. I think college students need a lot of money for texts or entertainment owever we are already adults and should not totally depend on our parents finance. Therefore it is quite better to earn ourselves as much as possible. As for me, I live without working if I ask my parents to support me but I to work. That's because I have to learn to manage myself before graduating university. After I started to work, I actually to think the importance of money I buy something. Lastly, I think a part-time job is a good opportunity to new friends. In college, it is difficult to find kinds of friends because ages and departments are limited. However, if we work, we can meet kinds of people regardless of age or . I think such relationship precious even get older. all reasons, I strongly believe that having a part-time job is important for college students.

I agree that it is important for college students to have a part-time job. I have three reasons to support my stance. Firstly, a part-time job is an important chance to experience the society. Because a college is the place to prepare before going to the real society, part-time job is very necessary to know how severe working is or how we can enjoy it. In my experience, I learned that even one mistake cannot be allowed in a serves through working in bakery. I also noticed the importance of the relationship with my seniors. Second reason is a monetary problem. I think college students need a lot of money for texts or for some entertainments. However we are already adults and should not totally depend on our parents in finance. Therefore it is quite better to earn by ourselves as much as possible. As for me, I can live without working if I ask my parents to support me but I chose to work. That's because I have to learn to manage myself before graduating university. After I started to work, I actually became to think the importance of money when I buy something. Lastly, I think a part-time job is a good opportunity to get new friends. In a college, it is difficult to find so many kinds of friends because ages and departments are limited. However, if we work, we can meet any kinds of people regardless of ages or spatiality. I think such relationship is precious even after getting older. From all those reasons, I strongly believe that having a part-time job is important for college students.

JPN

B1_2

6

5

7

7

8

8

8

7

7

7

70

70

70

The writing was very clear organizing ideas and the writer could come up with many good reasons to support the ideas.

There were some errors in using articles. It was the agreement mistake.

I agree that it is important for college students to have part-time job. I have three reasons to support my stance. Firstly, a part-time job is an important chance to experience society. Because college is the place to prepare before going to real society, part-time job is very necessary to know how working is or how we can enjoy it. In my experience, I learned that even one mistake cannot be allowed in a . I also the importance of relationship with my seniors. reason is a monetary problem. I think college students need a lot of money for texts or entertainment owever we are already adults and should not totally depend on our parents finance. Therefore it is quite better to earn ourselves as much as possible. As for me, I live without working if I ask my parents to support me but I to work. That's because I have to learn to manage myself before graduating university. After I started to work, I actually to think the importance of money I buy something. Lastly, I think a part-time job is a good opportunity to new friends. In college, it is difficult to find kinds of friends because ages and departments are limited. However, if we work, we can meet kinds of people regardless of age or . I think such relationship precious even get older. all reasons, I strongly believe that having a part-time job is important for college students.

I agree that it is important for college students to have a part-time job. I have three reasons to support my stance. Firstly, a part-time job is an important chance to experience the society. Because a college is the place to prepare before going to the real society, part-time job is very necessary to know how severe working is or how we can enjoy it. In my experience, I learned that even one mistake cannot be allowed in a serves through working in bakery. I also noticed the importance of the relationship with my seniors. Second reason is a monetary problem. I think college students need a lot of money for texts or for some entertainments. However we are already adults and should not totally depend on our parents in finance. Therefore it is quite better to earn by ourselves as much as possible. As for me, I can live without working if I ask my parents to support me but I chose to work. That's because I have to learn to manage myself before graduating university. After I started to work, I actually became to think the importance of money when I buy something. Lastly, I think a part-time job is a good opportunity to get new friends. In a college, it is difficult to find so many kinds of friends because ages and departments are limited. However, if we work, we can meet any kinds of people regardless of ages or spatiality. I think such relationship is precious even after getting older. From all those reasons, I strongly believe that having a part-time job is important for college students.

PHL

B2_0

2

2

1

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2

5

5

5

8

38

38

38

The writer could come up with a very strong believing opinion.

There were some errors in using articles and wrong word choices.

I agree that it is important for college students to have part-time job. I have three reasons to support my stance. Firstly, a part-time job is an important chance to experience society. Because college is the place to prepare before going to real society, part-time job is very necessary to know how working is or how we can enjoy it. In my experience, I learned that even one mistake cannot be allowed in a . I also the importance of relationship with my seniors. reason is a monetary problem. I think college students need a lot of money for texts or entertainment owever we are already adults and should not totally depend on our parents finance. Therefore it is quite better to earn ourselves as much as possible. As for me, I live without working if I ask my parents to support me but I to work. That's because I have to learn to manage myself before graduating university. After I started to work, I actually to think the importance of money I buy something. Lastly, I think a part-time job is a good opportunity to new friends. In college, it is difficult to find kinds of friends because ages and departments are limited. However, if we work, we can meet kinds of people regardless of age or . I think such relationship precious even get older. all reasons, I strongly believe that having a part-time job is important for college students.

I agree that it is important for college students to have a part-time job. I have three reasons to support my stance. Firstly, a part-time job is an important chance to experience the society. Because a college is the place to prepare before going to the real society, part-time job is very necessary to know how severe working is or how we can enjoy it. In my experience, I learned that even one mistake cannot be allowed in a serves through working in bakery. I also noticed the importance of the relationship with my seniors. Second reason is a monetary problem. I think college students need a lot of money for texts or for some entertainments. However we are already adults and should not totally depend on our parents in finance. Therefore it is quite better to earn by ourselves as much as possible. As for me, I can live without working if I ask my parents to support me but I chose to work. That's because I have to learn to manage myself before graduating university. After I started to work, I actually became to think the importance of money when I buy something. Lastly, I think a part-time job is a good opportunity to get new friends. In a college, it is difficult to find so many kinds of friends because ages and departments are limited. However, if we work, we can meet any kinds of people regardless of ages or spatiality. I think such relationship is precious even after getting older. From all those reasons, I strongly believe that having a part-time job is important for college students.

CHN

B1_2

1

2

2

2

4

2

4

4

1

2

24

24

24

The writer's reasons were good. Not any other strong points were found.

The essay was difficult to understand. There were no spaces between some words.

I agree that it is important for college students to have part-time job. I have three reasons to support my stance. Firstly, a part-time job is an important chance to experience society. Because college is the place to prepare before going to real society, part-time job is very necessary to know how working is or how we can enjoy it. In my experience, I learned that even one mistake cannot be allowed in a . I also the importance of relationship with my seniors. reason is a monetary problem. I think college students need a lot of money for texts or entertainment owever we are already adults and should not totally depend on our parents finance. Therefore it is quite better to earn ourselves as much as possible. As for me, I live without working if I ask my parents to support me but I to work. That's because I have to learn to manage myself before graduating university. After I started to work, I actually to think the importance of money I buy something. Lastly, I think a part-time job is a good opportunity to new friends. In college, it is difficult to find kinds of friends because ages and departments are limited. However, if we work, we can meet kinds of people regardless of age or . I think such relationship precious even get older. all reasons, I strongly believe that having a part-time job is important for college students.

I agree that it is important for college students to have a part-time job. I have three reasons to support my stance. Firstly, a part-time job is an important chance to experience the society. Because a college is the place to prepare before going to the real society, part-time job is very necessary to know how severe working is or how we can enjoy it. In my experience, I learned that even one mistake cannot be allowed in a serves through working in bakery. I also noticed the importance of the relationship with my seniors. Second reason is a monetary problem. I think college students need a lot of money for texts or for some entertainments. However we are already adults and should not totally depend on our parents in finance. Therefore it is quite better to earn by ourselves as much as possible. As for me, I can live without working if I ask my parents to support me but I chose to work. That's because I have to learn to manage myself before graduating university. After I started to work, I actually became to think the importance of money when I buy something. Lastly, I think a part-time job is a good opportunity to get new friends. In a college, it is difficult to find so many kinds of friends because ages and departments are limited. However, if we work, we can meet any kinds of people regardless of ages or spatiality. I think such relationship is precious even after getting older. From all those reasons, I strongly believe that having a part-time job is important for college students.

ENS

ENS

8

6

7

8

8

8

7

6

7

7

72

72

72

The writer has good reasons to give supported

some problem with word used

There no complete agreement among students view about whether we should take part-time job. Many students hold the opinion that we should have part-time jobs. However, there are a lot a different view. eople who hold the view think it is helpful and wise to take part-time jobs. Firstly, they think they can develop their experience and capacities working. this can for the in the future. Second, they can money on their own, cultivating their independence and skill. Finally, they can a lot of people and learn from them what cannot be taught in school. people who take the second view they think it's not for students to part-time jobs. tudents primary task is to study, without the knowledge they should in school may lose the opportunity a better job after graduation. it is not right for them to spend their energy and time on part-time job. Weighing the two views, I think it is beneficial for us to try part-time jobs but putting all time and energy .

There are no complete agreements among the students about the view about whether we should take part-time job. Many students hold the opinion that we should have part-time jobs. However, also there are a lot of them having a different view. The people who hold the first view think it is helpful and wise to take part-time jobs. Firstly, they think they can develop their experience and capacities during working. It is obvious that this can make preparations for the job in the future. Second, they can get money on their own, cultivating their independence and skill. Finally, they can contract a lot of people and learn from them what cannot be taught in the school. But the people who take the second view don't think so, they think it's not suit for students to do part-time jobs. Students' primary task is to study, without being worsted in the knowledge which they should gain in the school; they may lose the opportunity of finding a better job after graduation. So it is not right for them to spend their energy and time on part-time job. Weighing the two kinds of views, I think it is beneficial for us to try part-time jobs but not putting all the time and energy on it.

TWN

B1_2

9

7

9

9

9

9

7

8

8

8

83

83

83

This is a good piece of writing. The writer states clear reasons that college students should do a part time job. The writing contains many sequence words that make it easy to follow. The sentence structures are good with appropriate use of word choice and punctuations.

There are some wrong words

There no complete agreement among students view about whether we should take part-time job. Many students hold the opinion that we should have part-time jobs. However, there are a lot a different view. eople who hold the view think it is helpful and wise to take part-time jobs. Firstly, they think they can develop their experience and capacities working. this can for the in the future. Second, they can money on their own, cultivating their independence and skill. Finally, they can a lot of people and learn from them what cannot be taught in school. people who take the second view they think it's not for students to part-time jobs. tudents primary task is to study, without the knowledge they should in school may lose the opportunity a better job after graduation. it is not right for them to spend their energy and time on part-time job. Weighing the two views, I think it is beneficial for us to try part-time jobs but putting all time and energy .

There are no complete agreements among the students about the view about whether we should take part-time job. Many students hold the opinion that we should have part-time jobs. However, also there are a lot of them having a different view. The people who hold the first view think it is helpful and wise to take part-time jobs. Firstly, they think they can develop their experience and capacities during working. It is obvious that this can make preparations for the job in the future. Second, they can get money on their own, cultivating their independence and skill. Finally, they can contract a lot of people and learn from them what cannot be taught in the school. But the people who take the second view don't think so, they think it's not suit for students to do part-time jobs. Students' primary task is to study, without being worsted in the knowledge which they should gain in the school; they may lose the opportunity of finding a better job after graduation. So it is not right for them to spend their energy and time on part-time job. Weighing the two kinds of views, I think it is beneficial for us to try part-time jobs but not putting all the time and energy on it.

SIN

B2_0

1

2

3

4

1

2

5

6

6

7

37

37

37

The writer states both views on having a part time job. The writing’s structure is very well organized with good reasons to support the main ideas. There are linking words that make the writing easy to follow. The use of grammar is good.

There are some minor mistakes in sentence structure.

There no complete agreement among students view about whether we should take part-time job. Many students hold the opinion that we should have part-time jobs. However, there are a lot a different view. eople who hold the view think it is helpful and wise to take part-time jobs. Firstly, they think they can develop their experience and capacities working. this can for the in the future. Second, they can money on their own, cultivating their independence and skill. Finally, they can a lot of people and learn from them what cannot be taught in school. people who take the second view they think it's not for students to part-time jobs. tudents primary task is to study, without the knowledge they should in school may lose the opportunity a better job after graduation. it is not right for them to spend their energy and time on part-time job. Weighing the two views, I think it is beneficial for us to try part-time jobs but putting all time and energy .

There are no complete agreements among the students about the view about whether we should take part-time job. Many students hold the opinion that we should have part-time jobs. However, also there are a lot of them having a different view. The people who hold the first view think it is helpful and wise to take part-time jobs. Firstly, they think they can develop their experience and capacities during working. It is obvious that this can make preparations for the job in the future. Second, they can get money on their own, cultivating their independence and skill. Finally, they can contract a lot of people and learn from them what cannot be taught in the school. But the people who take the second view don't think so, they think it's not suit for students to do part-time jobs. Students' primary task is to study, without being worsted in the knowledge which they should gain in the school; they may lose the opportunity of finding a better job after graduation. So it is not right for them to spend their energy and time on part-time job. Weighing the two kinds of views, I think it is beneficial for us to try part-time jobs but not putting all the time and energy on it.

KOR

B1_2

7

6

7

6

7

7

6

7

6

6

65

65

65

The writer give interesting idea to support own view

some grammar problems in sentences

There no complete agreement among students view about whether we should take part-time job. Many students hold the opinion that we should have part-time jobs. However, there are a lot a different view. eople who hold the view think it is helpful and wise to take part-time jobs. Firstly, they think they can develop their experience and capacities working. this can for the in the future. Second, they can money on their own, cultivating their independence and skill. Finally, they can a lot of people and learn from them what cannot be taught in school. people who take the second view they think it's not for students to part-time jobs. tudents primary task is to study, without the knowledge they should in school may lose the opportunity a better job after graduation. it is not right for them to spend their energy and time on part-time job. Weighing the two views, I think it is beneficial for us to try part-time jobs but putting all time and energy .

There are no complete agreements among the students about the view about whether we should take part-time job. Many students hold the opinion that we should have part-time jobs. However, also there are a lot of them having a different view. The people who hold the first view think it is helpful and wise to take part-time jobs. Firstly, they think they can develop their experience and capacities during working. It is obvious that this can make preparations for the job in the future. Second, they can get money on their own, cultivating their independence and skill. Finally, they can contract a lot of people and learn from them what cannot be taught in the school. But the people who take the second view don't think so, they think it's not suit for students to do part-time jobs. Students' primary task is to study, without being worsted in the knowledge which they should gain in the school; they may lose the opportunity of finding a better job after graduation. So it is not right for them to spend their energy and time on part-time job. Weighing the two kinds of views, I think it is beneficial for us to try part-time jobs but not putting all the time and energy on it.

CHN

B1_1

5

2

4

6

6

6

5

6

6

7

53

53

53

The writer supports a social opinion about having a part time job. He/she organizes the writing well with many good connectors and it is easy to follow.

Many sentences are too short that they should be compound together to make them more complex.

There no complete agreement among students view about whether we should take part-time job. Many students hold the opinion that we should have part-time jobs. However, there are a lot a different view. eople who hold the view think it is helpful and wise to take part-time jobs. Firstly, they think they can develop their experience and capacities working. this can for the in the future. Second, they can money on their own, cultivating their independence and skill. Finally, they can a lot of people and learn from them what cannot be taught in school. people who take the second view they think it's not for students to part-time jobs. tudents primary task is to study, without the knowledge they should in school may lose the opportunity a better job after graduation. it is not right for them to spend their energy and time on part-time job. Weighing the two views, I think it is beneficial for us to try part-time jobs but putting all time and energy .

There are no complete agreements among the students about the view about whether we should take part-time job. Many students hold the opinion that we should have part-time jobs. However, also there are a lot of them having a different view. The people who hold the first view think it is helpful and wise to take part-time jobs. Firstly, they think they can develop their experience and capacities during working. It is obvious that this can make preparations for the job in the future. Second, they can get money on their own, cultivating their independence and skill. Finally, they can contract a lot of people and learn from them what cannot be taught in the school. But the people who take the second view don't think so, they think it's not suit for students to do part-time jobs. Students' primary task is to study, without being worsted in the knowledge which they should gain in the school; they may lose the opportunity of finding a better job after graduation. So it is not right for them to spend their energy and time on part-time job. Weighing the two kinds of views, I think it is beneficial for us to try part-time jobs but not putting all the time and energy on it.

TWN

B1_1

5

3

4

5

6

6

5

6

1

6

47

47

47

The writer attempts to give reasons for the main point and make a good writing structure.

There are a lot of grammar mistakes that make it difficult to understand the sentences. There are problems about using words.

There no complete agreement among students view about whether we should take part-time job. Many students hold the opinion that we should have part-time jobs. However, there are a lot a different view. eople who hold the view think it is helpful and wise to take part-time jobs. Firstly, they think they can develop their experience and capacities working. this can for the in the future. Second, they can money on their own, cultivating their independence and skill. Finally, they can a lot of people and learn from them what cannot be taught in school. people who take the second view they think it's not for students to part-time jobs. tudents primary task is to study, without the knowledge they should in school may lose the opportunity a better job after graduation. it is not right for them to spend their energy and time on part-time job. Weighing the two views, I think it is beneficial for us to try part-time jobs but putting all time and energy .

There are no complete agreements among the students about the view about whether we should take part-time job. Many students hold the opinion that we should have part-time jobs. However, also there are a lot of them having a different view. The people who hold the first view think it is helpful and wise to take part-time jobs. Firstly, they think they can develop their experience and capacities during working. It is obvious that this can make preparations for the job in the future. Second, they can get money on their own, cultivating their independence and skill. Finally, they can contract a lot of people and learn from them what cannot be taught in the school. But the people who take the second view don't think so, they think it's not suit for students to do part-time jobs. Students' primary task is to study, without being worsted in the knowledge which they should gain in the school; they may lose the opportunity of finding a better job after graduation. So it is not right for them to spend their energy and time on part-time job. Weighing the two kinds of views, I think it is beneficial for us to try part-time jobs but not putting all the time and energy on it.

KOR

B2_0

5

2

4

6

6

6

5

6

6

7

53

53

53

The writer states both positive and negative view of having a part time job.

has problem with sentence, word used in context

There no complete agreement among students view about whether we should take part-time job. Many students hold the opinion that we should have part-time jobs. However, there are a lot a different view. eople who hold the view think it is helpful and wise to take part-time jobs. Firstly, they think they can develop their experience and capacities working. this can for the in the future. Second, they can money on their own, cultivating their independence and skill. Finally, they can a lot of people and learn from them what cannot be taught in school. people who take the second view they think it's not for students to part-time jobs. tudents primary task is to study, without the knowledge they should in school may lose the opportunity a better job after graduation. it is not right for them to spend their energy and time on part-time job. Weighing the two views, I think it is beneficial for us to try part-time jobs but putting all time and energy .

There are no complete agreements among the students about the view about whether we should take part-time job. Many students hold the opinion that we should have part-time jobs. However, also there are a lot of them having a different view. The people who hold the first view think it is helpful and wise to take part-time jobs. Firstly, they think they can develop their experience and capacities during working. It is obvious that this can make preparations for the job in the future. Second, they can get money on their own, cultivating their independence and skill. Finally, they can contract a lot of people and learn from them what cannot be taught in the school. But the people who take the second view don't think so, they think it's not suit for students to do part-time jobs. Students' primary task is to study, without being worsted in the knowledge which they should gain in the school; they may lose the opportunity of finding a better job after graduation. So it is not right for them to spend their energy and time on part-time job. Weighing the two kinds of views, I think it is beneficial for us to try part-time jobs but not putting all the time and energy on it.

TWN

A2_0

5

3

4

5

6

6

5

6

7

6

53

53

53

The writer give concrete reason and is able to give support ideas

has problem with grammar used and sentences structure

There no complete agreement among students view about whether we should take part-time job. Many students hold the opinion that we should have part-time jobs. However, there are a lot a different view. eople who hold the view think it is helpful and wise to take part-time jobs. Firstly, they think they can develop their experience and capacities working. this can for the in the future. Second, they can money on their own, cultivating their independence and skill. Finally, they can a lot of people and learn from them what cannot be taught in school. people who take the second view they think it's not for students to part-time jobs. tudents primary task is to study, without the knowledge they should in school may lose the opportunity a better job after graduation. it is not right for them to spend their energy and time on part-time job. Weighing the two views, I think it is beneficial for us to try part-time jobs but putting all time and energy .

There are no complete agreements among the students about the view about whether we should take part-time job. Many students hold the opinion that we should have part-time jobs. However, also there are a lot of them having a different view. The people who hold the first view think it is helpful and wise to take part-time jobs. Firstly, they think they can develop their experience and capacities during working. It is obvious that this can make preparations for the job in the future. Second, they can get money on their own, cultivating their independence and skill. Finally, they can contract a lot of people and learn from them what cannot be taught in the school. But the people who take the second view don't think so, they think it's not suit for students to do part-time jobs. Students' primary task is to study, without being worsted in the knowledge which they should gain in the school; they may lose the opportunity of finding a better job after graduation. So it is not right for them to spend their energy and time on part-time job. Weighing the two kinds of views, I think it is beneficial for us to try part-time jobs but not putting all the time and energy on it.

TWN

B1_1

3

5

5

4

6

6

6

7

6

8

56

56

56

The writer has point out concrete idea and supported view

be stick on his own reason

There no complete agreement among students view about whether we should take part-time job. Many students hold the opinion that we should have part-time jobs. However, there are a lot a different view. eople who hold the view think it is helpful and wise to take part-time jobs. Firstly, they think they can develop their experience and capacities working. this can for the in the future. Second, they can money on their own, cultivating their independence and skill. Finally, they can a lot of people and learn from them what cannot be taught in school. people who take the second view they think it's not for students to part-time jobs. tudents primary task is to study, without the knowledge they should in school may lose the opportunity a better job after graduation. it is not right for them to spend their energy and time on part-time job. Weighing the two views, I think it is beneficial for us to try part-time jobs but putting all time and energy .

There are no complete agreements among the students about the view about whether we should take part-time job. Many students hold the opinion that we should have part-time jobs. However, also there are a lot of them having a different view. The people who hold the first view think it is helpful and wise to take part-time jobs. Firstly, they think they can develop their experience and capacities during working. It is obvious that this can make preparations for the job in the future. Second, they can get money on their own, cultivating their independence and skill. Finally, they can contract a lot of people and learn from them what cannot be taught in the school. But the people who take the second view don't think so, they think it's not suit for students to do part-time jobs. Students' primary task is to study, without being worsted in the knowledge which they should gain in the school; they may lose the opportunity of finding a better job after graduation. So it is not right for them to spend their energy and time on part-time job. Weighing the two kinds of views, I think it is beneficial for us to try part-time jobs but not putting all the time and energy on it.

JPN

B1_2

6

5

5

6

5

4

5

5

5

6

52

52

52

The wrier can give concrete ideas and give reasonable example

There is a bit confusing with sentence structure and word used

There no complete agreement among students view about whether we should take part-time job. Many students hold the opinion that we should have part-time jobs. However, there are a lot a different view. eople who hold the view think it is helpful and wise to take part-time jobs. Firstly, they think they can develop their experience and capacities working. this can for the in the future. Second, they can money on their own, cultivating their independence and skill. Finally, they can a lot of people and learn from them what cannot be taught in school. people who take the second view they think it's not for students to part-time jobs. tudents primary task is to study, without the knowledge they should in school may lose the opportunity a better job after graduation. it is not right for them to spend their energy and time on part-time job. Weighing the two views, I think it is beneficial for us to try part-time jobs but putting all time and energy .

There are no complete agreements among the students about the view about whether we should take part-time job. Many students hold the opinion that we should have part-time jobs. However, also there are a lot of them having a different view. The people who hold the first view think it is helpful and wise to take part-time jobs. Firstly, they think they can develop their experience and capacities during working. It is obvious that this can make preparations for the job in the future. Second, they can get money on their own, cultivating their independence and skill. Finally, they can contract a lot of people and learn from them what cannot be taught in the school. But the people who take the second view don't think so, they think it's not suit for students to do part-time jobs. Students' primary task is to study, without being worsted in the knowledge which they should gain in the school; they may lose the opportunity of finding a better job after graduation. So it is not right for them to spend their energy and time on part-time job. Weighing the two kinds of views, I think it is beneficial for us to try part-time jobs but not putting all the time and energy on it.

SIN

B2_0

9

10

9

10

9

10

9

3

5

9

83

83

83

This attempt is inadequate and requires considerable effort by the reader

There were minor errors in the wrong word used and the wrong article used.

These days, fee expensive. Many students are to an Exhibition or difficult a part-time job going to university. , I agree important for college students part-time job. First, students parents. your pocket money and university having a part-time job. Naturally, it is difficult concentrate major and it is to . mmunity, so everybody parent not rich. , have part-time job. Second, a part-time job kind of social life. Therefore, experience social life and after their university, experienc social life. Naturally, university life is community life it is different having part-time job. Last, having a part-time job value of money. having a part-time job having a part-time job money. Nohaving a part-time job does not realize value of money having a part-time job buy something. It is important for college students to have part-time job. Therefore, I think I agree college students having part-time job.

These days, fee of university is expensive. Many students are given to an exhibition or it is difficulty that having a part-time job and going to university. So, I agree to important for college students having a part-time job. First, Grow up students assists of parents. Make your pocket money and fee of university for having a part-time job. Naturally, it is difficult that concentrate of major and it is tired to less of sleeping. Immunity is weak, so you should sick but, everybody parent is not rich. So, they have a part-time job. Second, a part-time job is kind of social life. Therefore, they are experience to social life and after their graduate university, it is important to experience social life. Naturally, university life is community life. But, it is different to having part-time job. Last, you having a part-time job are realized value of money. One is non-having a part-time job; the other is having a part-time job. It is different that wastefully of money. Non-having a part-time job does not realize value of money. But, having a part-time job buy something is think about spend the money. It is important for college students to have a part-time job. Therefore, I think I agree to important for college students having a part-time job.

THA

A2_0

6

4

4

4

5

6

8

5

2

4

48

48

48

The writer attempted to explain. He/she expressed some reasons to support their claims.

There were minor errors in the article and punctuation such as: In(At) present, / to (for) wasteful (activities)….

These days, fee expensive. Many students are to an Exhibition or difficult a part-time job going to university. , I agree important for college students part-time job. First, students parents. your pocket money and university having a part-time job. Naturally, it is difficult concentrate major and it is to . mmunity, so everybody parent not rich. , have part-time job. Second, a part-time job kind of social life. Therefore, experience social life and after their university, experienc social life. Naturally, university life is community life it is different having part-time job. Last, having a part-time job value of money. having a part-time job having a part-time job money. Nohaving a part-time job does not realize value of money having a part-time job buy something. It is important for college students to have part-time job. Therefore, I think I agree college students having part-time job.

These days, fee of university is expensive. Many students are given to an exhibition or it is difficulty that having a part-time job and going to university. So, I agree to important for college students having a part-time job. First, Grow up students assists of parents. Make your pocket money and fee of university for having a part-time job. Naturally, it is difficult that concentrate of major and it is tired to less of sleeping. Immunity is weak, so you should sick but, everybody parent is not rich. So, they have a part-time job. Second, a part-time job is kind of social life. Therefore, they are experience to social life and after their graduate university, it is important to experience social life. Naturally, university life is community life. But, it is different to having part-time job. Last, you having a part-time job are realized value of money. One is non-having a part-time job; the other is having a part-time job. It is different that wastefully of money. Non-having a part-time job does not realize value of money. But, having a part-time job buy something is think about spend the money. It is important for college students to have a part-time job. Therefore, I think I agree to important for college students having a part-time job.

TWN

B2_0

8

5

5

5

8

8

3

10

5

6

63

63

63

The writer made a good attempt at a well-organized narrative. 

Minor errors are in infinitives, plurals, and preposition. For instance: ability they lacking of, =which abilities they lack. 

These days, fee expensive. Many students are to an Exhibition or difficult a part-time job going to university. , I agree important for college students part-time job. First, students parents. your pocket money and university having a part-time job. Naturally, it is difficult concentrate major and it is to . mmunity, so everybody parent not rich. , have part-time job. Second, a part-time job kind of social life. Therefore, experience social life and after their university, experienc social life. Naturally, university life is community life it is different having part-time job. Last, having a part-time job value of money. having a part-time job having a part-time job money. Nohaving a part-time job does not realize value of money having a part-time job buy something. It is important for college students to have part-time job. Therefore, I think I agree college students having part-time job.

These days, fee of university is expensive. Many students are given to an exhibition or it is difficulty that having a part-time job and going to university. So, I agree to important for college students having a part-time job. First, Grow up students assists of parents. Make your pocket money and fee of university for having a part-time job. Naturally, it is difficult that concentrate of major and it is tired to less of sleeping. Immunity is weak, so you should sick but, everybody parent is not rich. So, they have a part-time job. Second, a part-time job is kind of social life. Therefore, they are experience to social life and after their graduate university, it is important to experience social life. Naturally, university life is community life. But, it is different to having part-time job. Last, you having a part-time job are realized value of money. One is non-having a part-time job; the other is having a part-time job. It is different that wastefully of money. Non-having a part-time job does not realize value of money. But, having a part-time job buy something is think about spend the money. It is important for college students to have a part-time job. Therefore, I think I agree to important for college students having a part-time job.

KOR

A2_0

4

5

3

5

4

2

1

1

3

2

30

30

30

The writer had come up with some confident ideas, but no more strong points were observed. 

There were major errors in punctuation, plurals, articles, and prepositions, e.g., it, especially (at) private schools.

These days, fee expensive. Many students are to an Exhibition or difficult a part-time job going to university. , I agree important for college students part-time job. First, students parents. your pocket money and university having a part-time job. Naturally, it is difficult concentrate major and it is to . mmunity, so everybody parent not rich. , have part-time job. Second, a part-time job kind of social life. Therefore, experience social life and after their university, experienc social life. Naturally, university life is community life it is different having part-time job. Last, having a part-time job value of money. having a part-time job having a part-time job money. Nohaving a part-time job does not realize value of money having a part-time job buy something. It is important for college students to have part-time job. Therefore, I think I agree college students having part-time job.

These days, fee of university is expensive. Many students are given to an exhibition or it is difficulty that having a part-time job and going to university. So, I agree to important for college students having a part-time job. First, Grow up students assists of parents. Make your pocket money and fee of university for having a part-time job. Naturally, it is difficult that concentrate of major and it is tired to less of sleeping. Immunity is weak, so you should sick but, everybody parent is not rich. So, they have a part-time job. Second, a part-time job is kind of social life. Therefore, they are experience to social life and after their graduate university, it is important to experience social life. Naturally, university life is community life. But, it is different to having part-time job. Last, you having a part-time job are realized value of money. One is non-having a part-time job; the other is having a part-time job. It is different that wastefully of money. Non-having a part-time job does not realize value of money. But, having a part-time job buy something is think about spend the money. It is important for college students to have a part-time job. Therefore, I think I agree to important for college students having a part-time job.

JPN

B1_1

7

3

2

5

6

10

9

7

8

3

60

60

60

The writer attempted to explain her/his claim. No more strong points were observed.

There are some major articles. Wrong word choices were observed.

These days, fee expensive. Many students are to an Exhibition or difficult a part-time job going to university. , I agree important for college students part-time job. First, students parents. your pocket money and university having a part-time job. Naturally, it is difficult concentrate major and it is to . mmunity, so everybody parent not rich. , have part-time job. Second, a part-time job kind of social life. Therefore, experience social life and after their university, experienc social life. Naturally, university life is community life it is different having part-time job. Last, having a part-time job value of money. having a part-time job having a part-time job money. Nohaving a part-time job does not realize value of money having a part-time job buy something. It is important for college students to have part-time job. Therefore, I think I agree college students having part-time job.

These days, fee of university is expensive. Many students are given to an exhibition or it is difficulty that having a part-time job and going to university. So, I agree to important for college students having a part-time job. First, Grow up students assists of parents. Make your pocket money and fee of university for having a part-time job. Naturally, it is difficult that concentrate of major and it is tired to less of sleeping. Immunity is weak, so you should sick but, everybody parent is not rich. So, they have a part-time job. Second, a part-time job is kind of social life. Therefore, they are experience to social life and after their graduate university, it is important to experience social life. Naturally, university life is community life. But, it is different to having part-time job. Last, you having a part-time job are realized value of money. One is non-having a part-time job; the other is having a part-time job. It is different that wastefully of money. Non-having a part-time job does not realize value of money. But, having a part-time job buy something is think about spend the money. It is important for college students to have a part-time job. Therefore, I think I agree to important for college students having a part-time job.

PHL

B2_0

4

3

6

6

7

4

7

5

6

7

55

55

55

The writer attempted to explain it. No more strong points were observed.

There were some errors in grammar, punctuation, and word usage observed.

These days, fee expensive. Many students are to an Exhibition or difficult a part-time job going to university. , I agree important for college students part-time job. First, students parents. your pocket money and university having a part-time job. Naturally, it is difficult concentrate major and it is to . mmunity, so everybody parent not rich. , have part-time job. Second, a part-time job kind of social life. Therefore, experience social life and after their university, experienc social life. Naturally, university life is community life it is different having part-time job. Last, having a part-time job value of money. having a part-time job having a part-time job money. Nohaving a part-time job does not realize value of money having a part-time job buy something. It is important for college students to have part-time job. Therefore, I think I agree college students having part-time job.

These days, fee of university is expensive. Many students are given to an exhibition or it is difficulty that having a part-time job and going to university. So, I agree to important for college students having a part-time job. First, Grow up students assists of parents. Make your pocket money and fee of university for having a part-time job. Naturally, it is difficult that concentrate of major and it is tired to less of sleeping. Immunity is weak, so you should sick but, everybody parent is not rich. So, they have a part-time job. Second, a part-time job is kind of social life. Therefore, they are experience to social life and after their graduate university, it is important to experience social life. Naturally, university life is community life. But, it is different to having part-time job. Last, you having a part-time job are realized value of money. One is non-having a part-time job; the other is having a part-time job. It is different that wastefully of money. Non-having a part-time job does not realize value of money. But, having a part-time job buy something is think about spend the money. It is important for college students to have a part-time job. Therefore, I think I agree to important for college students having a part-time job.

CHN

A2_0

2

4

8

9

9

5

8

9

6

5

65

65

65

The writer has a good reason for expressing his or her ideas clearly. 

There were minor errors. such as: from (a )very poor family/ can have practice are/ (the most) more important (thing) is (to) study.

These days, fee expensive. Many students are to an Exhibition or difficult a part-time job going to university. , I agree important for college students part-time job. First, students parents. your pocket money and university having a part-time job. Naturally, it is difficult concentrate major and it is to . mmunity, so everybody parent not rich. , have part-time job. Second, a part-time job kind of social life. Therefore, experience social life and after their university, experienc social life. Naturally, university life is community life it is different having part-time job. Last, having a part-time job value of money. having a part-time job having a part-time job money. Nohaving a part-time job does not realize value of money having a part-time job buy something. It is important for college students to have part-time job. Therefore, I think I agree college students having part-time job.

These days, fee of university is expensive. Many students are given to an exhibition or it is difficulty that having a part-time job and going to university. So, I agree to important for college students having a part-time job. First, Grow up students assists of parents. Make your pocket money and fee of university for having a part-time job. Naturally, it is difficult that concentrate of major and it is tired to less of sleeping. Immunity is weak, so you should sick but, everybody parent is not rich. So, they have a part-time job. Second, a part-time job is kind of social life. Therefore, they are experience to social life and after their graduate university, it is important to experience social life. Naturally, university life is community life. But, it is different to having part-time job. Last, you having a part-time job are realized value of money. One is non-having a part-time job; the other is having a part-time job. It is different that wastefully of money. Non-having a part-time job does not realize value of money. But, having a part-time job buy something is think about spend the money. It is important for college students to have a part-time job. Therefore, I think I agree to important for college students having a part-time job.

CHN

B2_0

7

8

7

8

9

8

9

10

9

8

83

83

83

The writer has clearly come up with a confident idea with many reasons for support. 

There were minor errors such as: in the part-time jobs/ habit that (of) spends(ing).

These days, fee expensive. Many students are to an Exhibition or difficult a part-time job going to university. , I agree important for college students part-time job. First, students parents. your pocket money and university having a part-time job. Naturally, it is difficult concentrate major and it is to . mmunity, so everybody parent not rich. , have part-time job. Second, a part-time job kind of social life. Therefore, experience social life and after their university, experienc social life. Naturally, university life is community life it is different having part-time job. Last, having a part-time job value of money. having a part-time job having a part-time job money. Nohaving a part-time job does not realize value of money having a part-time job buy something. It is important for college students to have part-time job. Therefore, I think I agree college students having part-time job.

These days, fee of university is expensive. Many students are given to an exhibition or it is difficulty that having a part-time job and going to university. So, I agree to important for college students having a part-time job. First, Grow up students assists of parents. Make your pocket money and fee of university for having a part-time job. Naturally, it is difficult that concentrate of major and it is tired to less of sleeping. Immunity is weak, so you should sick but, everybody parent is not rich. So, they have a part-time job. Second, a part-time job is kind of social life. Therefore, they are experience to social life and after their graduate university, it is important to experience social life. Naturally, university life is community life. But, it is different to having part-time job. Last, you having a part-time job are realized value of money. One is non-having a part-time job; the other is having a part-time job. It is different that wastefully of money. Non-having a part-time job does not realize value of money. But, having a part-time job buy something is think about spend the money. It is important for college students to have a part-time job. Therefore, I think I agree to important for college students having a part-time job.

THA

B1_1

2

3

1

2

2

4

4

3

2

4

27

27

27

The writer attempted to explain. And He/she expressed some reasons.

There were major errors in the article, punctuation, plurals, prepositions, and word choices.

These days, fee expensive. Many students are to an Exhibition or difficult a part-time job going to university. , I agree important for college students part-time job. First, students parents. your pocket money and university having a part-time job. Naturally, it is difficult concentrate major and it is to . mmunity, so everybody parent not rich. , have part-time job. Second, a part-time job kind of social life. Therefore, experience social life and after their university, experienc social life. Naturally, university life is community life it is different having part-time job. Last, having a part-time job value of money. having a part-time job having a part-time job money. Nohaving a part-time job does not realize value of money having a part-time job buy something. It is important for college students to have part-time job. Therefore, I think I agree college students having part-time job.

These days, fee of university is expensive. Many students are given to an exhibition or it is difficulty that having a part-time job and going to university. So, I agree to important for college students having a part-time job. First, Grow up students assists of parents. Make your pocket money and fee of university for having a part-time job. Naturally, it is difficult that concentrate of major and it is tired to less of sleeping. Immunity is weak, so you should sick but, everybody parent is not rich. So, they have a part-time job. Second, a part-time job is kind of social life. Therefore, they are experience to social life and after their graduate university, it is important to experience social life. Naturally, university life is community life. But, it is different to having part-time job. Last, you having a part-time job are realized value of money. One is non-having a part-time job; the other is having a part-time job. It is different that wastefully of money. Non-having a part-time job does not realize value of money. But, having a part-time job buy something is think about spend the money. It is important for college students to have a part-time job. Therefore, I think I agree to important for college students having a part-time job.

JPN

A2_0

4

3

5

6

5

4

7

4

4

2

44

44

44

The narrative is organized quite well, no more strong points were observed.

Grammatical errors were made and some present tenses were mixed with past tenses.

These days, fee expensive. Many students are to an Exhibition or difficult a part-time job going to university. , I agree important for college students part-time job. First, students parents. your pocket money and university having a part-time job. Naturally, it is difficult concentrate major and it is to . mmunity, so everybody parent not rich. , have part-time job. Second, a part-time job kind of social life. Therefore, experience social life and after their university, experienc social life. Naturally, university life is community life it is different having part-time job. Last, having a part-time job value of money. having a part-time job having a part-time job money. Nohaving a part-time job does not realize value of money having a part-time job buy something. It is important for college students to have part-time job. Therefore, I think I agree college students having part-time job.

These days, fee of university is expensive. Many students are given to an exhibition or it is difficulty that having a part-time job and going to university. So, I agree to important for college students having a part-time job. First, Grow up students assists of parents. Make your pocket money and fee of university for having a part-time job. Naturally, it is difficult that concentrate of major and it is tired to less of sleeping. Immunity is weak, so you should sick but, everybody parent is not rich. So, they have a part-time job. Second, a part-time job is kind of social life. Therefore, they are experience to social life and after their graduate university, it is important to experience social life. Naturally, university life is community life. But, it is different to having part-time job. Last, you having a part-time job are realized value of money. One is non-having a part-time job; the other is having a part-time job. It is different that wastefully of money. Non-having a part-time job does not realize value of money. But, having a part-time job buy something is think about spend the money. It is important for college students to have a part-time job. Therefore, I think I agree to important for college students having a part-time job.

TWN

B1_1

5

5

4

4

5

5

2

5

3

3

41

41

41

More interesting as the writer's life story than as an essay on the pros and cons of the statement

Too much information about the writer's experiences and not enough counter argument

I strongly believe that students should have the to commit themselves part-time jobs those who are at tertiary level. This is because our century, tuition fees are inevitably increasing. Some parents would have a hard time paying tuition fees their children. To lessen the burden our parents are carrying, we must have the guts to help them. Another reason would be for students to gain experience and develop their strengths weaknesses. Engaging ourselves on things that we do not usually do can help improve our well-being. One's personality can be changed through socializing. Also, can help in applying for full-time jobs in the near future. experience, one can easily accepted companies if they already had previous experience especially those types that enhance one's skills. Lastly, for some students who do not have anything to work during their free hours, taking up a part-time job would be the best way to occupy their time. Instead of engaging ourselves on unnecessary matters, we can help not only to our and but also to country. One can extra income for future necessities.

I strongly believe that students should have the urge to commit themselves on part-time jobs pertaining to those who are at the tertiary level. This is because on our century today, the tuition fees are inevitably increasing. Some parents would have a hard time paying the tuition fees of their children. To lessen the burden our parents are carrying, we must have the guts to help them. Another reason would be for students to gain experience and to develop their strengths and weaknesses. Engaging ourselves on things that we do not usually do can help improve our well-being. One's personality can be changed through socializing. Also, this can help in applying for full-time jobs in the near future. Brought by experience, one can be easily accepted on companies if they already had previous experiences most especially those types that enhance one's skills. Lastly, for some students who do not have anything to work with during their free hours, taking up a part-time job would be the best way to occupy their time with. Instead of engaging ourselves on unnecessary matters, we can help not only to our family and self but also to the own country as well. One can gain extra income for future necessities.

THA

B1_1

4

4

4

4

3

4

2

2

3

2

32

32

32

It would appear that the writer has little to go on but does their best to present their case

Inexperience shows as the writer only circles around the edges of the points in their arguments

I strongly believe that students should have the to commit themselves part-time jobs those who are at tertiary level. This is because our century, tuition fees are inevitably increasing. Some parents would have a hard time paying tuition fees their children. To lessen the burden our parents are carrying, we must have the guts to help them. Another reason would be for students to gain experience and develop their strengths weaknesses. Engaging ourselves on things that we do not usually do can help improve our well-being. One's personality can be changed through socializing. Also, can help in applying for full-time jobs in the near future. experience, one can easily accepted companies if they already had previous experience especially those types that enhance one's skills. Lastly, for some students who do not have anything to work during their free hours, taking up a part-time job would be the best way to occupy their time. Instead of engaging ourselves on unnecessary matters, we can help not only to our and but also to country. One can extra income for future necessities.

I strongly believe that students should have the urge to commit themselves on part-time jobs pertaining to those who are at the tertiary level. This is because on our century today, the tuition fees are inevitably increasing. Some parents would have a hard time paying the tuition fees of their children. To lessen the burden our parents are carrying, we must have the guts to help them. Another reason would be for students to gain experience and to develop their strengths and weaknesses. Engaging ourselves on things that we do not usually do can help improve our well-being. One's personality can be changed through socializing. Also, this can help in applying for full-time jobs in the near future. Brought by experience, one can be easily accepted on companies if they already had previous experiences most especially those types that enhance one's skills. Lastly, for some students who do not have anything to work with during their free hours, taking up a part-time job would be the best way to occupy their time with. Instead of engaging ourselves on unnecessary matters, we can help not only to our family and self but also to the own country as well. One can gain extra income for future necessities.

CHN

B1_2

9

6

7

7

9

6

7

7

8

8

74

74

74

A well written piece with some very interesting points of view

Only a very few minor grammar errors but certainly good enough for anyone to understand

I strongly believe that students should have the to commit themselves part-time jobs those who are at tertiary level. This is because our century, tuition fees are inevitably increasing. Some parents would have a hard time paying tuition fees their children. To lessen the burden our parents are carrying, we must have the guts to help them. Another reason would be for students to gain experience and develop their strengths weaknesses. Engaging ourselves on things that we do not usually do can help improve our well-being. One's personality can be changed through socializing. Also, can help in applying for full-time jobs in the near future. experience, one can easily accepted companies if they already had previous experience especially those types that enhance one's skills. Lastly, for some students who do not have anything to work during their free hours, taking up a part-time job would be the best way to occupy their time. Instead of engaging ourselves on unnecessary matters, we can help not only to our and but also to country. One can extra income for future necessities.

I strongly believe that students should have the urge to commit themselves on part-time jobs pertaining to those who are at the tertiary level. This is because on our century today, the tuition fees are inevitably increasing. Some parents would have a hard time paying the tuition fees of their children. To lessen the burden our parents are carrying, we must have the guts to help them. Another reason would be for students to gain experience and to develop their strengths and weaknesses. Engaging ourselves on things that we do not usually do can help improve our well-being. One's personality can be changed through socializing. Also, this can help in applying for full-time jobs in the near future. Brought by experience, one can be easily accepted on companies if they already had previous experiences most especially those types that enhance one's skills. Lastly, for some students who do not have anything to work with during their free hours, taking up a part-time job would be the best way to occupy their time with. Instead of engaging ourselves on unnecessary matters, we can help not only to our family and self but also to the own country as well. One can gain extra income for future necessities.

HKG

B2_0

5

5

5

5

5

5

5

5

5

5

50

50

50

Another native English language writer undisguised as such

Too perfect to be written by anyone other than a native English speaker

I strongly believe that students should have the to commit themselves part-time jobs those who are at tertiary level. This is because our century, tuition fees are inevitably increasing. Some parents would have a hard time paying tuition fees their children. To lessen the burden our parents are carrying, we must have the guts to help them. Another reason would be for students to gain experience and develop their strengths weaknesses. Engaging ourselves on things that we do not usually do can help improve our well-being. One's personality can be changed through socializing. Also, can help in applying for full-time jobs in the near future. experience, one can easily accepted companies if they already had previous experience especially those types that enhance one's skills. Lastly, for some students who do not have anything to work during their free hours, taking up a part-time job would be the best way to occupy their time. Instead of engaging ourselves on unnecessary matters, we can help not only to our and but also to country. One can extra income for future necessities.

I strongly believe that students should have the urge to commit themselves on part-time jobs pertaining to those who are at the tertiary level. This is because on our century today, the tuition fees are inevitably increasing. Some parents would have a hard time paying the tuition fees of their children. To lessen the burden our parents are carrying, we must have the guts to help them. Another reason would be for students to gain experience and to develop their strengths and weaknesses. Engaging ourselves on things that we do not usually do can help improve our well-being. One's personality can be changed through socializing. Also, this can help in applying for full-time jobs in the near future. Brought by experience, one can be easily accepted on companies if they already had previous experiences most especially those types that enhance one's skills. Lastly, for some students who do not have anything to work with during their free hours, taking up a part-time job would be the best way to occupy their time with. Instead of engaging ourselves on unnecessary matters, we can help not only to our family and self but also to the own country as well. One can gain extra income for future necessities.

PHL

B2_0

9

9

7

8

8

8

9

8

7

8

81

81

81

Cleverly and amusingly articulated piece of writing with clear arguments for and against

Maybe too much emphasis on buying extravagances rather than financial necessity which is the usual point made in these essays

I strongly believe that students should have the to commit themselves part-time jobs those who are at tertiary level. This is because our century, tuition fees are inevitably increasing. Some parents would have a hard time paying tuition fees their children. To lessen the burden our parents are carrying, we must have the guts to help them. Another reason would be for students to gain experience and develop their strengths weaknesses. Engaging ourselves on things that we do not usually do can help improve our well-being. One's personality can be changed through socializing. Also, can help in applying for full-time jobs in the near future. experience, one can easily accepted companies if they already had previous experience especially those types that enhance one's skills. Lastly, for some students who do not have anything to work during their free hours, taking up a part-time job would be the best way to occupy their time. Instead of engaging ourselves on unnecessary matters, we can help not only to our and but also to country. One can extra income for future necessities.

I strongly believe that students should have the urge to commit themselves on part-time jobs pertaining to those who are at the tertiary level. This is because on our century today, the tuition fees are inevitably increasing. Some parents would have a hard time paying the tuition fees of their children. To lessen the burden our parents are carrying, we must have the guts to help them. Another reason would be for students to gain experience and to develop their strengths and weaknesses. Engaging ourselves on things that we do not usually do can help improve our well-being. One's personality can be changed through socializing. Also, this can help in applying for full-time jobs in the near future. Brought by experience, one can be easily accepted on companies if they already had previous experiences most especially those types that enhance one's skills. Lastly, for some students who do not have anything to work with during their free hours, taking up a part-time job would be the best way to occupy their time with. Instead of engaging ourselves on unnecessary matters, we can help not only to our family and self but also to the own country as well. One can gain extra income for future necessities.

KOR

B1_1

5

1

6

5

5

5

1

3

2

2

35

35

35

Easy to understand what the writer is saying, even if they don't actually go into much detail

A fairly unsophisticated essay making very general points without too much commitment

I strongly believe that students should have the to commit themselves part-time jobs those who are at tertiary level. This is because our century, tuition fees are inevitably increasing. Some parents would have a hard time paying tuition fees their children. To lessen the burden our parents are carrying, we must have the guts to help them. Another reason would be for students to gain experience and develop their strengths weaknesses. Engaging ourselves on things that we do not usually do can help improve our well-being. One's personality can be changed through socializing. Also, can help in applying for full-time jobs in the near future. experience, one can easily accepted companies if they already had previous experience especially those types that enhance one's skills. Lastly, for some students who do not have anything to work during their free hours, taking up a part-time job would be the best way to occupy their time. Instead of engaging ourselves on unnecessary matters, we can help not only to our and but also to country. One can extra income for future necessities.

I strongly believe that students should have the urge to commit themselves on part-time jobs pertaining to those who are at the tertiary level. This is because on our century today, the tuition fees are inevitably increasing. Some parents would have a hard time paying the tuition fees of their children. To lessen the burden our parents are carrying, we must have the guts to help them. Another reason would be for students to gain experience and to develop their strengths and weaknesses. Engaging ourselves on things that we do not usually do can help improve our well-being. One's personality can be changed through socializing. Also, this can help in applying for full-time jobs in the near future. Brought by experience, one can be easily accepted on companies if they already had previous experiences most especially those types that enhance one's skills. Lastly, for some students who do not have anything to work with during their free hours, taking up a part-time job would be the best way to occupy their time with. Instead of engaging ourselves on unnecessary matters, we can help not only to our family and self but also to the own country as well. One can gain extra income for future necessities.

CHN

B2_0

6

5

7

6

6

6

5

8

7

6

64

62

63

Some clever writing showing the student's conviction that they disagree with the opening statement

Apart from a few errors in grammar this piece of writing is in the main quite free of weak points

I strongly believe that students should have the to commit themselves part-time jobs those who are at tertiary level. This is because our century, tuition fees are inevitably increasing. Some parents would have a hard time paying tuition fees their children. To lessen the burden our parents are carrying, we must have the guts to help them. Another reason would be for students to gain experience and develop their strengths weaknesses. Engaging ourselves on things that we do not usually do can help improve our well-being. One's personality can be changed through socializing. Also, can help in applying for full-time jobs in the near future. experience, one can easily accepted companies if they already had previous experience especially those types that enhance one's skills. Lastly, for some students who do not have anything to work during their free hours, taking up a part-time job would be the best way to occupy their time. Instead of engaging ourselves on unnecessary matters, we can help not only to our and but also to country. One can extra income for future necessities.

I strongly believe that students should have the urge to commit themselves on part-time jobs pertaining to those who are at the tertiary level. This is because on our century today, the tuition fees are inevitably increasing. Some parents would have a hard time paying the tuition fees of their children. To lessen the burden our parents are carrying, we must have the guts to help them. Another reason would be for students to gain experience and to develop their strengths and weaknesses. Engaging ourselves on things that we do not usually do can help improve our well-being. One's personality can be changed through socializing. Also, this can help in applying for full-time jobs in the near future. Brought by experience, one can be easily accepted on companies if they already had previous experiences most especially those types that enhance one's skills. Lastly, for some students who do not have anything to work with during their free hours, taking up a part-time job would be the best way to occupy their time with. Instead of engaging ourselves on unnecessary matters, we can help not only to our family and self but also to the own country as well. One can gain extra income for future necessities.

KOR

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Details of the problems this student had in their part-time job create a good basis for their contradictions

The overall impression the reader has to this essay is one of confusion

I strongly believe that students should have the to commit themselves part-time jobs those who are at tertiary level. This is because our century, tuition fees are inevitably increasing. Some parents would have a hard time paying tuition fees their children. To lessen the burden our parents are carrying, we must have the guts to help them. Another reason would be for students to gain experience and develop their strengths weaknesses. Engaging ourselves on things that we do not usually do can help improve our well-being. One's personality can be changed through socializing. Also, can help in applying for full-time jobs in the near future. experience, one can easily accepted companies if they already had previous experience especially those types that enhance one's skills. Lastly, for some students who do not have anything to work during their free hours, taking up a part-time job would be the best way to occupy their time. Instead of engaging ourselves on unnecessary matters, we can help not only to our and but also to country. One can extra income for future necessities.

I strongly believe that students should have the urge to commit themselves on part-time jobs pertaining to those who are at the tertiary level. This is because on our century today, the tuition fees are inevitably increasing. Some parents would have a hard time paying the tuition fees of their children. To lessen the burden our parents are carrying, we must have the guts to help them. Another reason would be for students to gain experience and to develop their strengths and weaknesses. Engaging ourselves on things that we do not usually do can help improve our well-being. One's personality can be changed through socializing. Also, this can help in applying for full-time jobs in the near future. Brought by experience, one can be easily accepted on companies if they already had previous experiences most especially those types that enhance one's skills. Lastly, for some students who do not have anything to work with during their free hours, taking up a part-time job would be the best way to occupy their time with. Instead of engaging ourselves on unnecessary matters, we can help not only to our family and self but also to the own country as well. One can gain extra income for future necessities.

KOR

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The writer goes into great detail about their experience of working a part-time job

Unfortunately the writer has omitted to answer the question which is about students study time and work balance

I strongly believe that students should have the to commit themselves part-time jobs those who are at tertiary level. This is because our century, tuition fees are inevitably increasing. Some parents would have a hard time paying tuition fees their children. To lessen the burden our parents are carrying, we must have the guts to help them. Another reason would be for students to gain experience and develop their strengths weaknesses. Engaging ourselves on things that we do not usually do can help improve our well-being. One's personality can be changed through socializing. Also, can help in applying for full-time jobs in the near future. experience, one can easily accepted companies if they already had previous experience especially those types that enhance one's skills. Lastly, for some students who do not have anything to work during their free hours, taking up a part-time job would be the best way to occupy their time. Instead of engaging ourselves on unnecessary matters, we can help not only to our and but also to country. One can extra income for future necessities.

I strongly believe that students should have the urge to commit themselves on part-time jobs pertaining to those who are at the tertiary level. This is because on our century today, the tuition fees are inevitably increasing. Some parents would have a hard time paying the tuition fees of their children. To lessen the burden our parents are carrying, we must have the guts to help them. Another reason would be for students to gain experience and to develop their strengths and weaknesses. Engaging ourselves on things that we do not usually do can help improve our well-being. One's personality can be changed through socializing. Also, this can help in applying for full-time jobs in the near future. Brought by experience, one can be easily accepted on companies if they already had previous experiences most especially those types that enhance one's skills. Lastly, for some students who do not have anything to work with during their free hours, taking up a part-time job would be the best way to occupy their time with. Instead of engaging ourselves on unnecessary matters, we can help not only to our family and self but also to the own country as well. One can gain extra income for future necessities.

IDN

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A quite verbal speech written down more as a discussion of the topic in question

Quite poorly written and barely understandable except maybe to professional EFL speakers

I strongly believe that students should have the to commit themselves part-time jobs those who are at tertiary level. This is because our century, tuition fees are inevitably increasing. Some parents would have a hard time paying tuition fees their children. To lessen the burden our parents are carrying, we must have the guts to help them. Another reason would be for students to gain experience and develop their strengths weaknesses. Engaging ourselves on things that we do not usually do can help improve our well-being. One's personality can be changed through socializing. Also, can help in applying for full-time jobs in the near future. experience, one can easily accepted companies if they already had previous experience especially those types that enhance one's skills. Lastly, for some students who do not have anything to work during their free hours, taking up a part-time job would be the best way to occupy their time. Instead of engaging ourselves on unnecessary matters, we can help not only to our and but also to country. One can extra income for future necessities.

I strongly believe that students should have the urge to commit themselves on part-time jobs pertaining to those who are at the tertiary level. This is because on our century today, the tuition fees are inevitably increasing. Some parents would have a hard time paying the tuition fees of their children. To lessen the burden our parents are carrying, we must have the guts to help them. Another reason would be for students to gain experience and to develop their strengths and weaknesses. Engaging ourselves on things that we do not usually do can help improve our well-being. One's personality can be changed through socializing. Also, this can help in applying for full-time jobs in the near future. Brought by experience, one can be easily accepted on companies if they already had previous experiences most especially those types that enhance one's skills. Lastly, for some students who do not have anything to work with during their free hours, taking up a part-time job would be the best way to occupy their time with. Instead of engaging ourselves on unnecessary matters, we can help not only to our family and self but also to the own country as well. One can gain extra income for future necessities.

KOR

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Supports most ideas with basic examples, references, and details, makes key distinctions.

Varied transitional strategies connect ideas within and among paragraphs.

As a college student, it is important to have a part time job. have many benefit for . The first benefit is it can experience before they have real job. Students will need to know how act workplace, what they must do and how they use their at work. they need to know how they talk with the boss, what they need to do to earn a raise, and the workplace. The second benefit is to help their parents school funds. Hav a parttime job can help students decrease their parents work or month income. useful for live infamilies and have low month income. The third benefit is can help student before they have real job students will not surprised when they feel something different from working. the level of difficulties between real life at workplace and college life really different. At college, we only get frustated homework or study at work we can get frustrated our boss, our enem, or even our friends.

As a college student, it is important to have a part time job. It have many benefit for them. The first benefit is it can up his / her experience about working before they have a real job. Students will need to know how they act at work place, what they must do, and how they use their ability at work. And they need to know too how they talk with the boss, what they need to do to earn a raise, and learn a socialism at their work place. The second benefit is to help their parents about school funds. Have a part time job can help students to decrease their parents works, or to up his month income. It is useful for them that live in poor families and have low month income. The third benefit is it can help the preparation of a student before they have a real job. So students will not surprised when they feel something different from working. Because the level of difficulties between the real life at work place and the college life is really different. At college, we only get frustated from the homework or study things. But at work we can get frustrated from our boss, our enemy, or even our friends.

KOR

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Opinion is clearly stated, and the focus is mostly maintained.

Word forms are correct, sentence structure is effective. Presence of a few errors is not distracting.

As a college student, it is important to have a part time job. have many benefit for . The first benefit is it can experience before they have real job. Students will need to know how act workplace, what they must do and how they use their at work. they need to know how they talk with the boss, what they need to do to earn a raise, and the workplace. The second benefit is to help their parents school funds. Hav a parttime job can help students decrease their parents work or month income. useful for live infamilies and have low month income. The third benefit is can help student before they have real job students will not surprised when they feel something different from working. the level of difficulties between real life at workplace and college life really different. At college, we only get frustated homework or study at work we can get frustrated our boss, our enem, or even our friends.

As a college student, it is important to have a part time job. It have many benefit for them. The first benefit is it can up his / her experience about working before they have a real job. Students will need to know how they act at work place, what they must do, and how they use their ability at work. And they need to know too how they talk with the boss, what they need to do to earn a raise, and learn a socialism at their work place. The second benefit is to help their parents about school funds. Have a part time job can help students to decrease their parents works, or to up his month income. It is useful for them that live in poor families and have low month income. The third benefit is it can help the preparation of a student before they have a real job. So students will not surprised when they feel something different from working. Because the level of difficulties between the real life at work place and the college life is really different. At college, we only get frustated from the homework or study things. But at work we can get frustrated from our boss, our enemy, or even our friends.

KOR

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Main purpose and word-use are included and the sentences are pretty clear.

A few may be awkward, with some punctuation errors and a lack of variety.

As a college student, it is important to have a part time job. have many benefit for . The first benefit is it can experience before they have real job. Students will need to know how act workplace, what they must do and how they use their at work. they need to know how they talk with the boss, what they need to do to earn a raise, and the workplace. The second benefit is to help their parents school funds. Hav a parttime job can help students decrease their parents work or month income. useful for live infamilies and have low month income. The third benefit is can help student before they have real job students will not surprised when they feel something different from working. the level of difficulties between real life at workplace and college life really different. At college, we only get frustated homework or study at work we can get frustrated our boss, our enem, or even our friends.

As a college student, it is important to have a part time job. It have many benefit for them. The first benefit is it can up his / her experience about working before they have a real job. Students will need to know how they act at work place, what they must do, and how they use their ability at work. And they need to know too how they talk with the boss, what they need to do to earn a raise, and learn a socialism at their work place. The second benefit is to help their parents about school funds. Have a part time job can help students to decrease their parents works, or to up his month income. It is useful for them that live in poor families and have low month income. The third benefit is it can help the preparation of a student before they have a real job. So students will not surprised when they feel something different from working. Because the level of difficulties between the real life at work place and the college life is really different. At college, we only get frustated from the homework or study things. But at work we can get frustrated from our boss, our enemy, or even our friends.

IDN

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Demonstrates a clear understanding of the topic which is quite good one.

Introduction and conclusion may be present but repetitive, simplistic, or otherwise ineffective.

As a college student, it is important to have a part time job. have many benefit for . The first benefit is it can experience before they have real job. Students will need to know how act workplace, what they must do and how they use their at work. they need to know how they talk with the boss, what they need to do to earn a raise, and the workplace. The second benefit is to help their parents school funds. Hav a parttime job can help students decrease their parents work or month income. useful for live infamilies and have low month income. The third benefit is can help student before they have real job students will not surprised when they feel something different from working. the level of difficulties between real life at workplace and college life really different. At college, we only get frustated homework or study at work we can get frustrated our boss, our enem, or even our friends.

As a college student, it is important to have a part time job. It have many benefit for them. The first benefit is it can up his / her experience about working before they have a real job. Students will need to know how they act at work place, what they must do, and how they use their ability at work. And they need to know too how they talk with the boss, what they need to do to earn a raise, and learn a socialism at their work place. The second benefit is to help their parents about school funds. Have a part time job can help students to decrease their parents works, or to up his month income. It is useful for them that live in poor families and have low month income. The third benefit is it can help the preparation of a student before they have a real job. So students will not surprised when they feel something different from working. Because the level of difficulties between the real life at work place and the college life is really different. At college, we only get frustated from the homework or study things. But at work we can get frustrated from our boss, our enemy, or even our friends.

PHL

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Logical progression of ideas from beginning to end gets the point.

Word forms are correct, sentence structure is effective. Presence of a few errors is not distracting.

As a college student, it is important to have a part time job. have many benefit for . The first benefit is it can experience before they have real job. Students will need to know how act workplace, what they must do and how they use their at work. they need to know how they talk with the boss, what they need to do to earn a raise, and the workplace. The second benefit is to help their parents school funds. Hav a parttime job can help students decrease their parents work or month income. useful for live infamilies and have low month income. The third benefit is can help student before they have real job students will not surprised when they feel something different from working. the level of difficulties between real life at workplace and college life really different. At college, we only get frustated homework or study at work we can get frustrated our boss, our enem, or even our friends.

As a college student, it is important to have a part time job. It have many benefit for them. The first benefit is it can up his / her experience about working before they have a real job. Students will need to know how they act at work place, what they must do, and how they use their ability at work. And they need to know too how they talk with the boss, what they need to do to earn a raise, and learn a socialism at their work place. The second benefit is to help their parents about school funds. Have a part time job can help students to decrease their parents works, or to up his month income. It is useful for them that live in poor families and have low month income. The third benefit is it can help the preparation of a student before they have a real job. So students will not surprised when they feel something different from working. Because the level of difficulties between the real life at work place and the college life is really different. At college, we only get frustated from the homework or study things. But at work we can get frustrated from our boss, our enemy, or even our friends.

TWN

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Develops ideas cogently, organizes them logically with paragraphs and connects them with effective transitions.

Presents ideas in general terms, support for ideas is inconsistent, some distinctions need clarification, reasoning unclear.

As a college student, it is important to have a part time job. have many benefit for . The first benefit is it can experience before they have real job. Students will need to know how act workplace, what they must do and how they use their at work. they need to know how they talk with the boss, what they need to do to earn a raise, and the workplace. The second benefit is to help their parents school funds. Hav a parttime job can help students decrease their parents work or month income. useful for live infamilies and have low month income. The third benefit is can help student before they have real job students will not surprised when they feel something different from working. the level of difficulties between real life at workplace and college life really different. At college, we only get frustated homework or study at work we can get frustrated our boss, our enem, or even our friends.

As a college student, it is important to have a part time job. It have many benefit for them. The first benefit is it can up his / her experience about working before they have a real job. Students will need to know how they act at work place, what they must do, and how they use their ability at work. And they need to know too how they talk with the boss, what they need to do to earn a raise, and learn a socialism at their work place. The second benefit is to help their parents about school funds. Have a part time job can help students to decrease their parents works, or to up his month income. It is useful for them that live in poor families and have low month income. The third benefit is it can help the preparation of a student before they have a real job. So students will not surprised when they feel something different from working. Because the level of difficulties between the real life at work place and the college life is really different. At college, we only get frustated from the homework or study things. But at work we can get frustrated from our boss, our enemy, or even our friends.

IDN

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Presents ideas in general terms, support for ideas is inconsistent,

some distinctions need clarification, reasoning unclear. Transitions may be absent or confusing.

As a college student, it is important to have a part time job. have many benefit for . The first benefit is it can experience before they have real job. Students will need to know how act workplace, what they must do and how they use their at work. they need to know how they talk with the boss, what they need to do to earn a raise, and the workplace. The second benefit is to help their parents school funds. Hav a parttime job can help students decrease their parents work or month income. useful for live infamilies and have low month income. The third benefit is can help student before they have real job students will not surprised when they feel something different from working. the level of difficulties between real life at workplace and college life really different. At college, we only get frustated homework or study at work we can get frustrated our boss, our enem, or even our friends.

As a college student, it is important to have a part time job. It have many benefit for them. The first benefit is it can up his / her experience about working before they have a real job. Students will need to know how they act at work place, what they must do, and how they use their ability at work. And they need to know too how they talk with the boss, what they need to do to earn a raise, and learn a socialism at their work place. The second benefit is to help their parents about school funds. Have a part time job can help students to decrease their parents works, or to up his month income. It is useful for them that live in poor families and have low month income. The third benefit is it can help the preparation of a student before they have a real job. So students will not surprised when they feel something different from working. Because the level of difficulties between the real life at work place and the college life is really different. At college, we only get frustated from the homework or study things. But at work we can get frustrated from our boss, our enemy, or even our friends.

THA

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Presents ideas in general terms, support for ideas is inconsistent, some distinctions need clarification, reasoning unclear.

Word forms and sentence structures are adequate to convey basic meaning. Errors cause noticeable distraction

As a college student, it is important to have a part time job. have many benefit for . The first benefit is it can experience before they have real job. Students will need to know how act workplace, what they must do and how they use their at work. they need to know how they talk with the boss, what they need to do to earn a raise, and the workplace. The second benefit is to help their parents school funds. Hav a parttime job can help students decrease their parents work or month income. useful for live infamilies and have low month income. The third benefit is can help student before they have real job students will not surprised when they feel something different from working. the level of difficulties between real life at workplace and college life really different. At college, we only get frustated homework or study at work we can get frustrated our boss, our enem, or even our friends.

As a college student, it is important to have a part time job. It have many benefit for them. The first benefit is it can up his / her experience about working before they have a real job. Students will need to know how they act at work place, what they must do, and how they use their ability at work. And they need to know too how they talk with the boss, what they need to do to earn a raise, and learn a socialism at their work place. The second benefit is to help their parents about school funds. Have a part time job can help students to decrease their parents works, or to up his month income. It is useful for them that live in poor families and have low month income. The third benefit is it can help the preparation of a student before they have a real job. So students will not surprised when they feel something different from working. Because the level of difficulties between the real life at work place and the college life is really different. At college, we only get frustated from the homework or study things. But at work we can get frustrated from our boss, our enemy, or even our friends.

THA

B1_1

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Ideas are presented in general terms, and some distinctions need explanation.

Employs words that are unclear, sentence structures inadequate for clarity, errors are seriously distracting.

As a college student, it is important to have a part time job. have many benefit for . The first benefit is it can experience before they have real job. Students will need to know how act workplace, what they must do and how they use their at work. they need to know how they talk with the boss, what they need to do to earn a raise, and the workplace. The second benefit is to help their parents school funds. Hav a parttime job can help students decrease their parents work or month income. useful for live infamilies and have low month income. The third benefit is can help student before they have real job students will not surprised when they feel something different from working. the level of difficulties between real life at workplace and college life really different. At college, we only get frustated homework or study at work we can get frustrated our boss, our enem, or even our friends.

As a college student, it is important to have a part time job. It have many benefit for them. The first benefit is it can up his / her experience about working before they have a real job. Students will need to know how they act at work place, what they must do, and how they use their ability at work. And they need to know too how they talk with the boss, what they need to do to earn a raise, and learn a socialism at their work place. The second benefit is to help their parents about school funds. Have a part time job can help students to decrease their parents works, or to up his month income. It is useful for them that live in poor families and have low month income. The third benefit is it can help the preparation of a student before they have a real job. So students will not surprised when they feel something different from working. Because the level of difficulties between the real life at work place and the college life is really different. At college, we only get frustated from the homework or study things. But at work we can get frustrated from our boss, our enemy, or even our friends.

HKG

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The attention is firmly maintained as the opinion is introduced and communicated clearly.

Relevant, integrated evidence from multiple sources lends credibility to the exposition.

As a college student, it is important to have a part time job. have many benefit for . The first benefit is it can experience before they have real job. Students will need to know how act workplace, what they must do and how they use their at work. they need to know how they talk with the boss, what they need to do to earn a raise, and the workplace. The second benefit is to help their parents school funds. Hav a parttime job can help students decrease their parents work or month income. useful for live infamilies and have low month income. The third benefit is can help student before they have real job students will not surprised when they feel something different from working. the level of difficulties between real life at workplace and college life really different. At college, we only get frustated homework or study at work we can get frustrated our boss, our enem, or even our friends.

As a college student, it is important to have a part time job. It have many benefit for them. The first benefit is it can up his / her experience about working before they have a real job. Students will need to know how they act at work place, what they must do, and how they use their ability at work. And they need to know too how they talk with the boss, what they need to do to earn a raise, and learn a socialism at their work place. The second benefit is to help their parents about school funds. Have a part time job can help students to decrease their parents works, or to up his month income. It is useful for them that live in poor families and have low month income. The third benefit is it can help the preparation of a student before they have a real job. So students will not surprised when they feel something different from working. Because the level of difficulties between the real life at work place and the college life is really different. At college, we only get frustated from the homework or study things. But at work we can get frustrated from our boss, our enemy, or even our friends.

KOR

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Variety of vocabulary were used.

Some basic grammatical mistake were found. The essay was written with a verbal language instead of a written one.

Many college students have part-time job. very common circumstances and many students their part-time job. As a student, I also agree that college students have part-time job. I will my opinion why I agree that. First, college students will experiences social job. They can experience and things. is very important because social experience is very useful to all people. When they are adult, they have to work and earn money. During work, they meet many people and face hard times. , meeting many people and building experiences are important. Second, can their own money can buy anything that they want without their parent help. they can help their parents pay their tuition. If they earn money during vacation, they can money. Lastly, they can feel a sense of accomplishment their work. , they will work well in the future. In conclusion, as they part-time job, can social experience and help their parents. They also able to fulfill themselves through their part-time job. , it is important for college students to get part-time job.

Many college students have a part-time job today. It is very common circumstances and many students do their part-time job. As a student, I also agree that college students have a part-time job. I will talk about my opinion why I agree that. First, college students will get experiences about social job. They can experience hard and good things. It is very important because social experience is very useful to all people. When they are adult, they have to work and earn money. During they work, they meet many people and would be faced with hard times. So, meeting many people and building experiences are important. Second, they can get their own money. They can buy anything that they want to buy without their parent's help. And they can help their parents as they pay their tuition. If they earn money during vacation, they can get much money. Lastly, they can feel a sense of accomplishment as they do their work. So, they will work well in the future. In conclusion, as they have a part-time job, they can get social experience and help their parents. They are also able to fulfill themselves through their part-time job. So, it is important for college students to get a part-time job.

THA

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The writer has many unique reasons to support the idea of college students to have a part-time job.

There were a few grammar errors and wrong choice of word which made it hard to understand those points.

Many college students have part-time job. very common circumstances and many students their part-time job. As a student, I also agree that college students have part-time job. I will my opinion why I agree that. First, college students will experiences social job. They can experience and things. is very important because social experience is very useful to all people. When they are adult, they have to work and earn money. During work, they meet many people and face hard times. , meeting many people and building experiences are important. Second, can their own money can buy anything that they want without their parent help. they can help their parents pay their tuition. If they earn money during vacation, they can money. Lastly, they can feel a sense of accomplishment their work. , they will work well in the future. In conclusion, as they part-time job, can social experience and help their parents. They also able to fulfill themselves through their part-time job. , it is important for college students to get part-time job.

Many college students have a part-time job today. It is very common circumstances and many students do their part-time job. As a student, I also agree that college students have a part-time job. I will talk about my opinion why I agree that. First, college students will get experiences about social job. They can experience hard and good things. It is very important because social experience is very useful to all people. When they are adult, they have to work and earn money. During they work, they meet many people and would be faced with hard times. So, meeting many people and building experiences are important. Second, they can get their own money. They can buy anything that they want to buy without their parent's help. And they can help their parents as they pay their tuition. If they earn money during vacation, they can get much money. Lastly, they can feel a sense of accomplishment as they do their work. So, they will work well in the future. In conclusion, as they have a part-time job, they can get social experience and help their parents. They are also able to fulfill themselves through their part-time job. So, it is important for college students to get a part-time job.

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No strong points were observed.

Incomplete or unclear sentences made it hard to understand the writer's idea.

Many college students have part-time job. very common circumstances and many students their part-time job. As a student, I also agree that college students have part-time job. I will my opinion why I agree that. First, college students will experiences social job. They can experience and things. is very important because social experience is very useful to all people. When they are adult, they have to work and earn money. During work, they meet many people and face hard times. , meeting many people and building experiences are important. Second, can their own money can buy anything that they want without their parent help. they can help their parents pay their tuition. If they earn money during vacation, they can money. Lastly, they can feel a sense of accomplishment their work. , they will work well in the future. In conclusion, as they part-time job, can social experience and help their parents. They also able to fulfill themselves through their part-time job. , it is important for college students to get part-time job.

Many college students have a part-time job today. It is very common circumstances and many students do their part-time job. As a student, I also agree that college students have a part-time job. I will talk about my opinion why I agree that. First, college students will get experiences about social job. They can experience hard and good things. It is very important because social experience is very useful to all people. When they are adult, they have to work and earn money. During they work, they meet many people and would be faced with hard times. So, meeting many people and building experiences are important. Second, they can get their own money. They can buy anything that they want to buy without their parent's help. And they can help their parents as they pay their tuition. If they earn money during vacation, they can get much money. Lastly, they can feel a sense of accomplishment as they do their work. So, they will work well in the future. In conclusion, as they have a part-time job, they can get social experience and help their parents. They are also able to fulfill themselves through their part-time job. So, it is important for college students to get a part-time job.

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The essay was well-organized and explained.

No strong points were observed.

Many college students have part-time job. very common circumstances and many students their part-time job. As a student, I also agree that college students have part-time job. I will my opinion why I agree that. First, college students will experiences social job. They can experience and things. is very important because social experience is very useful to all people. When they are adult, they have to work and earn money. During work, they meet many people and face hard times. , meeting many people and building experiences are important. Second, can their own money can buy anything that they want without their parent help. they can help their parents pay their tuition. If they earn money during vacation, they can money. Lastly, they can feel a sense of accomplishment their work. , they will work well in the future. In conclusion, as they part-time job, can social experience and help their parents. They also able to fulfill themselves through their part-time job. , it is important for college students to get part-time job.

Many college students have a part-time job today. It is very common circumstances and many students do their part-time job. As a student, I also agree that college students have a part-time job. I will talk about my opinion why I agree that. First, college students will get experiences about social job. They can experience hard and good things. It is very important because social experience is very useful to all people. When they are adult, they have to work and earn money. During they work, they meet many people and would be faced with hard times. So, meeting many people and building experiences are important. Second, they can get their own money. They can buy anything that they want to buy without their parent's help. And they can help their parents as they pay their tuition. If they earn money during vacation, they can get much money. Lastly, they can feel a sense of accomplishment as they do their work. So, they will work well in the future. In conclusion, as they have a part-time job, they can get social experience and help their parents. They are also able to fulfill themselves through their part-time job. So, it is important for college students to get a part-time job.

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Unique solution to find a balance of studying and doing part-time job was shown.

The writer did not clearly state his own point of view. Incoherent pronouns, verb redundancies and missing words were found.

Many college students have part-time job. very common circumstances and many students their part-time job. As a student, I also agree that college students have part-time job. I will my opinion why I agree that. First, college students will experiences social job. They can experience and things. is very important because social experience is very useful to all people. When they are adult, they have to work and earn money. During work, they meet many people and face hard times. , meeting many people and building experiences are important. Second, can their own money can buy anything that they want without their parent help. they can help their parents pay their tuition. If they earn money during vacation, they can money. Lastly, they can feel a sense of accomplishment their work. , they will work well in the future. In conclusion, as they part-time job, can social experience and help their parents. They also able to fulfill themselves through their part-time job. , it is important for college students to get part-time job.

Many college students have a part-time job today. It is very common circumstances and many students do their part-time job. As a student, I also agree that college students have a part-time job. I will talk about my opinion why I agree that. First, college students will get experiences about social job. They can experience hard and good things. It is very important because social experience is very useful to all people. When they are adult, they have to work and earn money. During they work, they meet many people and would be faced with hard times. So, meeting many people and building experiences are important. Second, they can get their own money. They can buy anything that they want to buy without their parent's help. And they can help their parents as they pay their tuition. If they earn money during vacation, they can get much money. Lastly, they can feel a sense of accomplishment as they do their work. So, they will work well in the future. In conclusion, as they have a part-time job, they can get social experience and help their parents. They are also able to fulfill themselves through their part-time job. So, it is important for college students to get a part-time job.

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The writer showed both pros and cons of doing a part-time job.

No strong points were observed.

Many college students have part-time job. very common circumstances and many students their part-time job. As a student, I also agree that college students have part-time job. I will my opinion why I agree that. First, college students will experiences social job. They can experience and things. is very important because social experience is very useful to all people. When they are adult, they have to work and earn money. During work, they meet many people and face hard times. , meeting many people and building experiences are important. Second, can their own money can buy anything that they want without their parent help. they can help their parents pay their tuition. If they earn money during vacation, they can money. Lastly, they can feel a sense of accomplishment their work. , they will work well in the future. In conclusion, as they part-time job, can social experience and help their parents. They also able to fulfill themselves through their part-time job. , it is important for college students to get part-time job.

Many college students have a part-time job today. It is very common circumstances and many students do their part-time job. As a student, I also agree that college students have a part-time job. I will talk about my opinion why I agree that. First, college students will get experiences about social job. They can experience hard and good things. It is very important because social experience is very useful to all people. When they are adult, they have to work and earn money. During they work, they meet many people and would be faced with hard times. So, meeting many people and building experiences are important. Second, they can get their own money. They can buy anything that they want to buy without their parent's help. And they can help their parents as they pay their tuition. If they earn money during vacation, they can get much money. Lastly, they can feel a sense of accomplishment as they do their work. So, they will work well in the future. In conclusion, as they have a part-time job, they can get social experience and help their parents. They are also able to fulfill themselves through their part-time job. So, it is important for college students to get a part-time job.

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No strong points were observed.

The writer used too much of the verbal language than the written one.

Many college students have part-time job. very common circumstances and many students their part-time job. As a student, I also agree that college students have part-time job. I will my opinion why I agree that. First, college students will experiences social job. They can experience and things. is very important because social experience is very useful to all people. When they are adult, they have to work and earn money. During work, they meet many people and face hard times. , meeting many people and building experiences are important. Second, can their own money can buy anything that they want without their parent help. they can help their parents pay their tuition. If they earn money during vacation, they can money. Lastly, they can feel a sense of accomplishment their work. , they will work well in the future. In conclusion, as they part-time job, can social experience and help their parents. They also able to fulfill themselves through their part-time job. , it is important for college students to get part-time job.

Many college students have a part-time job today. It is very common circumstances and many students do their part-time job. As a student, I also agree that college students have a part-time job. I will talk about my opinion why I agree that. First, college students will get experiences about social job. They can experience hard and good things. It is very important because social experience is very useful to all people. When they are adult, they have to work and earn money. During they work, they meet many people and would be faced with hard times. So, meeting many people and building experiences are important. Second, they can get their own money. They can buy anything that they want to buy without their parent's help. And they can help their parents as they pay their tuition. If they earn money during vacation, they can get much money. Lastly, they can feel a sense of accomplishment as they do their work. So, they will work well in the future. In conclusion, as they have a part-time job, they can get social experience and help their parents. They are also able to fulfill themselves through their part-time job. So, it is important for college students to get a part-time job.

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Diverse choices of vocabulary were used. The structure of the essay was unique and interesting.

There were some incomplete or unclear sentences. Wrong choice of words were used. It was hard to understand.

Many college students have part-time job. very common circumstances and many students their part-time job. As a student, I also agree that college students have part-time job. I will my opinion why I agree that. First, college students will experiences social job. They can experience and things. is very important because social experience is very useful to all people. When they are adult, they have to work and earn money. During work, they meet many people and face hard times. , meeting many people and building experiences are important. Second, can their own money can buy anything that they want without their parent help. they can help their parents pay their tuition. If they earn money during vacation, they can money. Lastly, they can feel a sense of accomplishment their work. , they will work well in the future. In conclusion, as they part-time job, can social experience and help their parents. They also able to fulfill themselves through their part-time job. , it is important for college students to get part-time job.

Many college students have a part-time job today. It is very common circumstances and many students do their part-time job. As a student, I also agree that college students have a part-time job. I will talk about my opinion why I agree that. First, college students will get experiences about social job. They can experience hard and good things. It is very important because social experience is very useful to all people. When they are adult, they have to work and earn money. During they work, they meet many people and would be faced with hard times. So, meeting many people and building experiences are important. Second, they can get their own money. They can buy anything that they want to buy without their parent's help. And they can help their parents as they pay their tuition. If they earn money during vacation, they can get much money. Lastly, they can feel a sense of accomplishment as they do their work. So, they will work well in the future. In conclusion, as they have a part-time job, they can get social experience and help their parents. They are also able to fulfill themselves through their part-time job. So, it is important for college students to get a part-time job.

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The writer tried to express his idea with basic grammar.

Grammar and vocabulary need to be improved.

Many college students have part-time job. very common circumstances and many students their part-time job. As a student, I also agree that college students have part-time job. I will my opinion why I agree that. First, college students will experiences social job. They can experience and things. is very important because social experience is very useful to all people. When they are adult, they have to work and earn money. During work, they meet many people and face hard times. , meeting many people and building experiences are important. Second, can their own money can buy anything that they want without their parent help. they can help their parents pay their tuition. If they earn money during vacation, they can money. Lastly, they can feel a sense of accomplishment their work. , they will work well in the future. In conclusion, as they part-time job, can social experience and help their parents. They also able to fulfill themselves through their part-time job. , it is important for college students to get part-time job.

Many college students have a part-time job today. It is very common circumstances and many students do their part-time job. As a student, I also agree that college students have a part-time job. I will talk about my opinion why I agree that. First, college students will get experiences about social job. They can experience hard and good things. It is very important because social experience is very useful to all people. When they are adult, they have to work and earn money. During they work, they meet many people and would be faced with hard times. So, meeting many people and building experiences are important. Second, they can get their own money. They can buy anything that they want to buy without their parent's help. And they can help their parents as they pay their tuition. If they earn money during vacation, they can get much money. Lastly, they can feel a sense of accomplishment as they do their work. So, they will work well in the future. In conclusion, as they have a part-time job, they can get social experience and help their parents. They are also able to fulfill themselves through their part-time job. So, it is important for college students to get a part-time job.

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No strong points were observed.

Some major grammatical mistakes were found. It was almost incomprehensible.

Many college students have part-time job. very common circumstances and many students their part-time job. As a student, I also agree that college students have part-time job. I will my opinion why I agree that. First, college students will experiences social job. They can experience and things. is very important because social experience is very useful to all people. When they are adult, they have to work and earn money. During work, they meet many people and face hard times. , meeting many people and building experiences are important. Second, can their own money can buy anything that they want without their parent help. they can help their parents pay their tuition. If they earn money during vacation, they can money. Lastly, they can feel a sense of accomplishment their work. , they will work well in the future. In conclusion, as they part-time job, can social experience and help their parents. They also able to fulfill themselves through their part-time job. , it is important for college students to get part-time job.

Many college students have a part-time job today. It is very common circumstances and many students do their part-time job. As a student, I also agree that college students have a part-time job. I will talk about my opinion why I agree that. First, college students will get experiences about social job. They can experience hard and good things. It is very important because social experience is very useful to all people. When they are adult, they have to work and earn money. During they work, they meet many people and would be faced with hard times. So, meeting many people and building experiences are important. Second, they can get their own money. They can buy anything that they want to buy without their parent's help. And they can help their parents as they pay their tuition. If they earn money during vacation, they can get much money. Lastly, they can feel a sense of accomplishment as they do their work. So, they will work well in the future. In conclusion, as they have a part-time job, they can get social experience and help their parents. They are also able to fulfill themselves through their part-time job. So, it is important for college students to get a part-time job.

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Well written essay. Strong points and statements which supported the whole argument were relayed.

Not many weak points about this essay. There were a couple of errors when it came to the writer's grammar.

depends on the person's need. Different students have different needs. For , they do not have to consider whether they have money to live or not. However, for , part-time job very important. there are some students will have a part-time job in order to job experience. For me, having a part-time job is quite important. My parents cannot send too much money for me as allowance, so if I want to buy some new , go to restaurant or , I myself. having part-time jobs is not only to earn some money but also to some experience. Therefore, I always make myself have two part-time jobs during each semester. One, the key-in job, is for my daily , and another, school office helper, is for the experience. Both of them are simple jobs and can earn 95 NT dollars hour. Although having a part-time job is quite important is also important. That is why my two part-time jobs are both provided from my school, NCCU. The importance of having part-time jobs is different different students. you need, just go find one we college students all have to remember not only responsibility job but protect ourselves

It depends on the person's need. Different students have different needs. For a rich one, they do not have to consider whether they have money to live or not. However, for a poor one, having a part-time job is very important. But there are some students will have a part-time job in order to get job experiences. For me, having a part-time job is quite important. My parents cannot send too much money for me as allowance, so if I want to buy some new stuff, go to the restaurant or go traveling, etc. I have to deal with the spending myself. But having part-time jobs is not only to earn some money as allowance but also to get some experiences. Therefore, I always make myself have two part-time jobs during each semester. One, the key-in job, is for my daily lives, and another, school office helper, is for the experience. Both of them are simple jobs and can earn 95 NT dollars at each hour. Although, having a part-time job, for some students, is quite important. Safety is also important. That is why my two part-time jobs are both provided from my school, NCCU. The importance of having part-time jobs is different from different students. As long as you need, then just go to find one. But we college students all have to remember not only taking the responsibility to the job but protect ourselves

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A good example was provided in the essay and there was use of a few complex words - "asset", "essential" and "additional."

The writer's vocabulary was all over the place in the written essay. Framing sentences with a better choice of words would have made the essay good.

depends on the person's need. Different students have different needs. For , they do not have to consider whether they have money to live or not. However, for , part-time job very important. there are some students will have a part-time job in order to job experience. For me, having a part-time job is quite important. My parents cannot send too much money for me as allowance, so if I want to buy some new , go to restaurant or , I myself. having part-time jobs is not only to earn some money but also to some experience. Therefore, I always make myself have two part-time jobs during each semester. One, the key-in job, is for my daily , and another, school office helper, is for the experience. Both of them are simple jobs and can earn 95 NT dollars hour. Although having a part-time job is quite important is also important. That is why my two part-time jobs are both provided from my school, NCCU. The importance of having part-time jobs is different different students. you need, just go find one we college students all have to remember not only responsibility job but protect ourselves

It depends on the person's need. Different students have different needs. For a rich one, they do not have to consider whether they have money to live or not. However, for a poor one, having a part-time job is very important. But there are some students will have a part-time job in order to get job experiences. For me, having a part-time job is quite important. My parents cannot send too much money for me as allowance, so if I want to buy some new stuff, go to the restaurant or go traveling, etc. I have to deal with the spending myself. But having part-time jobs is not only to earn some money as allowance but also to get some experiences. Therefore, I always make myself have two part-time jobs during each semester. One, the key-in job, is for my daily lives, and another, school office helper, is for the experience. Both of them are simple jobs and can earn 95 NT dollars at each hour. Although, having a part-time job, for some students, is quite important. Safety is also important. That is why my two part-time jobs are both provided from my school, NCCU. The importance of having part-time jobs is different from different students. As long as you need, then just go to find one. But we college students all have to remember not only taking the responsibility to the job but protect ourselves

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The writer was very fluent in the written essay and the use of words was pretty good. A very well-written essay with well thought of examples to support the claim.

Missed punctuation at the initial few lines of the essay. Did not find any other weak point about the writer.

depends on the person's need. Different students have different needs. For , they do not have to consider whether they have money to live or not. However, for , part-time job very important. there are some students will have a part-time job in order to job experience. For me, having a part-time job is quite important. My parents cannot send too much money for me as allowance, so if I want to buy some new , go to restaurant or , I myself. having part-time jobs is not only to earn some money but also to some experience. Therefore, I always make myself have two part-time jobs during each semester. One, the key-in job, is for my daily , and another, school office helper, is for the experience. Both of them are simple jobs and can earn 95 NT dollars hour. Although having a part-time job is quite important is also important. That is why my two part-time jobs are both provided from my school, NCCU. The importance of having part-time jobs is different different students. you need, just go find one we college students all have to remember not only responsibility job but protect ourselves

It depends on the person's need. Different students have different needs. For a rich one, they do not have to consider whether they have money to live or not. However, for a poor one, having a part-time job is very important. But there are some students will have a part-time job in order to get job experiences. For me, having a part-time job is quite important. My parents cannot send too much money for me as allowance, so if I want to buy some new stuff, go to the restaurant or go traveling, etc. I have to deal with the spending myself. But having part-time jobs is not only to earn some money as allowance but also to get some experiences. Therefore, I always make myself have two part-time jobs during each semester. One, the key-in job, is for my daily lives, and another, school office helper, is for the experience. Both of them are simple jobs and can earn 95 NT dollars at each hour. Although, having a part-time job, for some students, is quite important. Safety is also important. That is why my two part-time jobs are both provided from my school, NCCU. The importance of having part-time jobs is different from different students. As long as you need, then just go to find one. But we college students all have to remember not only taking the responsibility to the job but protect ourselves

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The writer was able to come up with three valid reasons to support the claim that was being made in the essay.

Punctuation and choice of words could have been better. There were a few spelling errors and grammar was incorrect in the essay.

depends on the person's need. Different students have different needs. For , they do not have to consider whether they have money to live or not. However, for , part-time job very important. there are some students will have a part-time job in order to job experience. For me, having a part-time job is quite important. My parents cannot send too much money for me as allowance, so if I want to buy some new , go to restaurant or , I myself. having part-time jobs is not only to earn some money but also to some experience. Therefore, I always make myself have two part-time jobs during each semester. One, the key-in job, is for my daily , and another, school office helper, is for the experience. Both of them are simple jobs and can earn 95 NT dollars hour. Although having a part-time job is quite important is also important. That is why my two part-time jobs are both provided from my school, NCCU. The importance of having part-time jobs is different different students. you need, just go find one we college students all have to remember not only responsibility job but protect ourselves

It depends on the person's need. Different students have different needs. For a rich one, they do not have to consider whether they have money to live or not. However, for a poor one, having a part-time job is very important. But there are some students will have a part-time job in order to get job experiences. For me, having a part-time job is quite important. My parents cannot send too much money for me as allowance, so if I want to buy some new stuff, go to the restaurant or go traveling, etc. I have to deal with the spending myself. But having part-time jobs is not only to earn some money as allowance but also to get some experiences. Therefore, I always make myself have two part-time jobs during each semester. One, the key-in job, is for my daily lives, and another, school office helper, is for the experience. Both of them are simple jobs and can earn 95 NT dollars at each hour. Although, having a part-time job, for some students, is quite important. Safety is also important. That is why my two part-time jobs are both provided from my school, NCCU. The importance of having part-time jobs is different from different students. As long as you need, then just go to find one. But we college students all have to remember not only taking the responsibility to the job but protect ourselves

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The writer included good examples in the essay and seemed quite knowledgeable in terms of the complex words used.

Grammar was a minor problem at times and punctuation could have been better.

depends on the person's need. Different students have different needs. For , they do not have to consider whether they have money to live or not. However, for , part-time job very important. there are some students will have a part-time job in order to job experience. For me, having a part-time job is quite important. My parents cannot send too much money for me as allowance, so if I want to buy some new , go to restaurant or , I myself. having part-time jobs is not only to earn some money but also to some experience. Therefore, I always make myself have two part-time jobs during each semester. One, the key-in job, is for my daily , and another, school office helper, is for the experience. Both of them are simple jobs and can earn 95 NT dollars hour. Although having a part-time job is quite important is also important. That is why my two part-time jobs are both provided from my school, NCCU. The importance of having part-time jobs is different different students. you need, just go find one we college students all have to remember not only responsibility job but protect ourselves

It depends on the person's need. Different students have different needs. For a rich one, they do not have to consider whether they have money to live or not. However, for a poor one, having a part-time job is very important. But there are some students will have a part-time job in order to get job experiences. For me, having a part-time job is quite important. My parents cannot send too much money for me as allowance, so if I want to buy some new stuff, go to the restaurant or go traveling, etc. I have to deal with the spending myself. But having part-time jobs is not only to earn some money as allowance but also to get some experiences. Therefore, I always make myself have two part-time jobs during each semester. One, the key-in job, is for my daily lives, and another, school office helper, is for the experience. Both of them are simple jobs and can earn 95 NT dollars at each hour. Although, having a part-time job, for some students, is quite important. Safety is also important. That is why my two part-time jobs are both provided from my school, NCCU. The importance of having part-time jobs is different from different students. As long as you need, then just go to find one. But we college students all have to remember not only taking the responsibility to the job but protect ourselves

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The writer seemed willing to communicate in his essay, even though the words did not go well together.

Grammar and vocabulary was not right. Certain sentences in the essay did not make sense at all.

depends on the person's need. Different students have different needs. For , they do not have to consider whether they have money to live or not. However, for , part-time job very important. there are some students will have a part-time job in order to job experience. For me, having a part-time job is quite important. My parents cannot send too much money for me as allowance, so if I want to buy some new , go to restaurant or , I myself. having part-time jobs is not only to earn some money but also to some experience. Therefore, I always make myself have two part-time jobs during each semester. One, the key-in job, is for my daily , and another, school office helper, is for the experience. Both of them are simple jobs and can earn 95 NT dollars hour. Although having a part-time job is quite important is also important. That is why my two part-time jobs are both provided from my school, NCCU. The importance of having part-time jobs is different different students. you need, just go find one we college students all have to remember not only responsibility job but protect ourselves

It depends on the person's need. Different students have different needs. For a rich one, they do not have to consider whether they have money to live or not. However, for a poor one, having a part-time job is very important. But there are some students will have a part-time job in order to get job experiences. For me, having a part-time job is quite important. My parents cannot send too much money for me as allowance, so if I want to buy some new stuff, go to the restaurant or go traveling, etc. I have to deal with the spending myself. But having part-time jobs is not only to earn some money as allowance but also to get some experiences. Therefore, I always make myself have two part-time jobs during each semester. One, the key-in job, is for my daily lives, and another, school office helper, is for the experience. Both of them are simple jobs and can earn 95 NT dollars at each hour. Although, having a part-time job, for some students, is quite important. Safety is also important. That is why my two part-time jobs are both provided from my school, NCCU. The importance of having part-time jobs is different from different students. As long as you need, then just go to find one. But we college students all have to remember not only taking the responsibility to the job but protect ourselves

CHN

A2_0

6

5

6

5

5

5

5

6

6

5

54

54

54

The writer used examples in trying to support the argument. It was vital to highlight that experiences can be obtained from doing part-time job while still in the university.

If the writer had less grammar errors, the idea of the whole essay would be easier to understand and it would have made a lot more sense.

depends on the person's need. Different students have different needs. For , they do not have to consider whether they have money to live or not. However, for , part-time job very important. there are some students will have a part-time job in order to job experience. For me, having a part-time job is quite important. My parents cannot send too much money for me as allowance, so if I want to buy some new , go to restaurant or , I myself. having part-time jobs is not only to earn some money but also to some experience. Therefore, I always make myself have two part-time jobs during each semester. One, the key-in job, is for my daily , and another, school office helper, is for the experience. Both of them are simple jobs and can earn 95 NT dollars hour. Although having a part-time job is quite important is also important. That is why my two part-time jobs are both provided from my school, NCCU. The importance of having part-time jobs is different different students. you need, just go find one we college students all have to remember not only responsibility job but protect ourselves

It depends on the person's need. Different students have different needs. For a rich one, they do not have to consider whether they have money to live or not. However, for a poor one, having a part-time job is very important. But there are some students will have a part-time job in order to get job experiences. For me, having a part-time job is quite important. My parents cannot send too much money for me as allowance, so if I want to buy some new stuff, go to the restaurant or go traveling, etc. I have to deal with the spending myself. But having part-time jobs is not only to earn some money as allowance but also to get some experiences. Therefore, I always make myself have two part-time jobs during each semester. One, the key-in job, is for my daily lives, and another, school office helper, is for the experience. Both of them are simple jobs and can earn 95 NT dollars at each hour. Although, having a part-time job, for some students, is quite important. Safety is also important. That is why my two part-time jobs are both provided from my school, NCCU. The importance of having part-time jobs is different from different students. As long as you need, then just go to find one. But we college students all have to remember not only taking the responsibility to the job but protect ourselves

TWN

B1_2

7

7

6

5

5

8

8

9

7

7

69

69

69

He stuck to the main goal of why college students must have a part-time job and he penned down logical reasons to serve his purpose.

His grammar was a big problem in what he wrote and his use of punctuation could have been better in his essay.

depends on the person's need. Different students have different needs. For , they do not have to consider whether they have money to live or not. However, for , part-time job very important. there are some students will have a part-time job in order to job experience. For me, having a part-time job is quite important. My parents cannot send too much money for me as allowance, so if I want to buy some new , go to restaurant or , I myself. having part-time jobs is not only to earn some money but also to some experience. Therefore, I always make myself have two part-time jobs during each semester. One, the key-in job, is for my daily , and another, school office helper, is for the experience. Both of them are simple jobs and can earn 95 NT dollars hour. Although having a part-time job is quite important is also important. That is why my two part-time jobs are both provided from my school, NCCU. The importance of having part-time jobs is different different students. you need, just go find one we college students all have to remember not only responsibility job but protect ourselves

It depends on the person's need. Different students have different needs. For a rich one, they do not have to consider whether they have money to live or not. However, for a poor one, having a part-time job is very important. But there are some students will have a part-time job in order to get job experiences. For me, having a part-time job is quite important. My parents cannot send too much money for me as allowance, so if I want to buy some new stuff, go to the restaurant or go traveling, etc. I have to deal with the spending myself. But having part-time jobs is not only to earn some money as allowance but also to get some experiences. Therefore, I always make myself have two part-time jobs during each semester. One, the key-in job, is for my daily lives, and another, school office helper, is for the experience. Both of them are simple jobs and can earn 95 NT dollars at each hour. Although, having a part-time job, for some students, is quite important. Safety is also important. That is why my two part-time jobs are both provided from my school, NCCU. The importance of having part-time jobs is different from different students. As long as you need, then just go to find one. But we college students all have to remember not only taking the responsibility to the job but protect ourselves

THA

B1_2

3

2

2

1

1

2

1

2

3

3

20

20

20

No strong points on this one, except the writer was trying to make sense with the words used and you can see the willingness to actually come up with an essay for the task at hand.

Grammar and typos are both big issues on this one. The essay was all over the place No fluency was present.

depends on the person's need. Different students have different needs. For , they do not have to consider whether they have money to live or not. However, for , part-time job very important. there are some students will have a part-time job in order to job experience. For me, having a part-time job is quite important. My parents cannot send too much money for me as allowance, so if I want to buy some new , go to restaurant or , I myself. having part-time jobs is not only to earn some money but also to some experience. Therefore, I always make myself have two part-time jobs during each semester. One, the key-in job, is for my daily , and another, school office helper, is for the experience. Both of them are simple jobs and can earn 95 NT dollars hour. Although having a part-time job is quite important is also important. That is why my two part-time jobs are both provided from my school, NCCU. The importance of having part-time jobs is different different students. you need, just go find one we college students all have to remember not only responsibility job but protect ourselves

It depends on the person's need. Different students have different needs. For a rich one, they do not have to consider whether they have money to live or not. However, for a poor one, having a part-time job is very important. But there are some students will have a part-time job in order to get job experiences. For me, having a part-time job is quite important. My parents cannot send too much money for me as allowance, so if I want to buy some new stuff, go to the restaurant or go traveling, etc. I have to deal with the spending myself. But having part-time jobs is not only to earn some money as allowance but also to get some experiences. Therefore, I always make myself have two part-time jobs during each semester. One, the key-in job, is for my daily lives, and another, school office helper, is for the experience. Both of them are simple jobs and can earn 95 NT dollars at each hour. Although, having a part-time job, for some students, is quite important. Safety is also important. That is why my two part-time jobs are both provided from my school, NCCU. The importance of having part-time jobs is different from different students. As long as you need, then just go to find one. But we college students all have to remember not only taking the responsibility to the job but protect ourselves

KOR

A2_0

6

5

5

6

5

5

5

6

6

6

55

55

55

The writer was firm in their belief and it was clearly seen in the submitted essay.

Punctuation marks could have been used to highlight some parts and create breaks between sentences.

depends on the person's need. Different students have different needs. For , they do not have to consider whether they have money to live or not. However, for , part-time job very important. there are some students will have a part-time job in order to job experience. For me, having a part-time job is quite important. My parents cannot send too much money for me as allowance, so if I want to buy some new , go to restaurant or , I myself. having part-time jobs is not only to earn some money but also to some experience. Therefore, I always make myself have two part-time jobs during each semester. One, the key-in job, is for my daily , and another, school office helper, is for the experience. Both of them are simple jobs and can earn 95 NT dollars hour. Although having a part-time job is quite important is also important. That is why my two part-time jobs are both provided from my school, NCCU. The importance of having part-time jobs is different different students. you need, just go find one we college students all have to remember not only responsibility job but protect ourselves

It depends on the person's need. Different students have different needs. For a rich one, they do not have to consider whether they have money to live or not. However, for a poor one, having a part-time job is very important. But there are some students will have a part-time job in order to get job experiences. For me, having a part-time job is quite important. My parents cannot send too much money for me as allowance, so if I want to buy some new stuff, go to the restaurant or go traveling, etc. I have to deal with the spending myself. But having part-time jobs is not only to earn some money as allowance but also to get some experiences. Therefore, I always make myself have two part-time jobs during each semester. One, the key-in job, is for my daily lives, and another, school office helper, is for the experience. Both of them are simple jobs and can earn 95 NT dollars at each hour. Although, having a part-time job, for some students, is quite important. Safety is also important. That is why my two part-time jobs are both provided from my school, NCCU. The importance of having part-time jobs is different from different students. As long as you need, then just go to find one. But we college students all have to remember not only taking the responsibility to the job but protect ourselves

TWN

A2_0

6

4

6

7

7

8

8

7

7

7

67

67

67

The writer show a deep understanding of the situation by using real life situation to prove the statement.

Some spelling and grammar mistake, overall the essay is alright.

In the last years, college students taking part-time job become very popular in the big city. Many people believe that it is important for college students to have part-time job I disagree with . I have some reason to support my . Firstly, I hold that everyone should the most important thing be done in period. student, study is key word. If you cannot study well, you wast your time. Secondly, students want to lessen their parents' financial burden taking a part-time job has a effect on their . They do not the most important thing their parents is that they can learn well and live a better life after they graduate. Therefore, pay attention your now. The most important thing is not to have a part-time job right now learn professional skills and practic is the most serious in the university. If you want to earn moremoney, this will really help you later. don't be influenced by others try to keep on learning and you will succeed in the future.

In the last years, college students taking a part-time job become very popular in the big city. Many people believe that it is important for college students to have a part-time job. But I disagree with it. I have some reason to support my idea. Firstly, I hold that everyone should have the most important thing to be done in the different period. To be a student, study is the key word for us. If you cannot study well, you waste your time. Secondly, lots of students want to lessen their parents' financial burden through taking a part-time job. But it has a bad effect on their study. They do not know the most important thing their parents respect is that they can learn well and live a better life after they graduate. Therefore, pay much attention on your study now. The most important thing is not to have a part-time job right now, learn professional skills and practice yourself is the most serious thing in the university. If you want to earn more money, this will really help you later. So don't be influenced by others and try to keep on learning knowledge and you will succeed in the future.

TWN

B1_1

8

8

8

8

8

7

8

8

8

7

78

78

78

Supporting ideas are explained with great detail and even real life example.

Some minor grammar mistake and most of the idea could've be more creative.

In the last years, college students taking part-time job become very popular in the big city. Many people believe that it is important for college students to have part-time job I disagree with . I have some reason to support my . Firstly, I hold that everyone should the most important thing be done in period. student, study is key word. If you cannot study well, you wast your time. Secondly, students want to lessen their parents' financial burden taking a part-time job has a effect on their . They do not the most important thing their parents is that they can learn well and live a better life after they graduate. Therefore, pay attention your now. The most important thing is not to have a part-time job right now learn professional skills and practic is the most serious in the university. If you want to earn moremoney, this will really help you later. don't be influenced by others try to keep on learning and you will succeed in the future.

In the last years, college students taking a part-time job become very popular in the big city. Many people believe that it is important for college students to have a part-time job. But I disagree with it. I have some reason to support my idea. Firstly, I hold that everyone should have the most important thing to be done in the different period. To be a student, study is the key word for us. If you cannot study well, you waste your time. Secondly, lots of students want to lessen their parents' financial burden through taking a part-time job. But it has a bad effect on their study. They do not know the most important thing their parents respect is that they can learn well and live a better life after they graduate. Therefore, pay much attention on your study now. The most important thing is not to have a part-time job right now, learn professional skills and practice yourself is the most serious thing in the university. If you want to earn more money, this will really help you later. So don't be influenced by others and try to keep on learning knowledge and you will succeed in the future.

JPN

B1_2

5

6

5

6

7

7

7

7

5

4

59

59

59

Main statement are well supported with credible idea. Essay are organized thoroughly

Some words are used for informal situation only,

In the last years, college students taking part-time job become very popular in the big city. Many people believe that it is important for college students to have part-time job I disagree with . I have some reason to support my . Firstly, I hold that everyone should the most important thing be done in period. student, study is key word. If you cannot study well, you wast your time. Secondly, students want to lessen their parents' financial burden taking a part-time job has a effect on their . They do not the most important thing their parents is that they can learn well and live a better life after they graduate. Therefore, pay attention your now. The most important thing is not to have a part-time job right now learn professional skills and practic is the most serious in the university. If you want to earn moremoney, this will really help you later. don't be influenced by others try to keep on learning and you will succeed in the future.

In the last years, college students taking a part-time job become very popular in the big city. Many people believe that it is important for college students to have a part-time job. But I disagree with it. I have some reason to support my idea. Firstly, I hold that everyone should have the most important thing to be done in the different period. To be a student, study is the key word for us. If you cannot study well, you waste your time. Secondly, lots of students want to lessen their parents' financial burden through taking a part-time job. But it has a bad effect on their study. They do not know the most important thing their parents respect is that they can learn well and live a better life after they graduate. Therefore, pay much attention on your study now. The most important thing is not to have a part-time job right now, learn professional skills and practice yourself is the most serious thing in the university. If you want to earn more money, this will really help you later. So don't be influenced by others and try to keep on learning knowledge and you will succeed in the future.

IDN

A2_0

1

1

1

1

1

0

0

1

1

1.5

8.5

8.5

8.5

Support idea are well written with idea and such.

The essay isn't balanced, there are a number of grammar mistake that result in change of context.

In the last years, college students taking part-time job become very popular in the big city. Many people believe that it is important for college students to have part-time job I disagree with . I have some reason to support my . Firstly, I hold that everyone should the most important thing be done in period. student, study is key word. If you cannot study well, you wast your time. Secondly, students want to lessen their parents' financial burden taking a part-time job has a effect on their . They do not the most important thing their parents is that they can learn well and live a better life after they graduate. Therefore, pay attention your now. The most important thing is not to have a part-time job right now learn professional skills and practic is the most serious in the university. If you want to earn moremoney, this will really help you later. don't be influenced by others try to keep on learning and you will succeed in the future.

In the last years, college students taking a part-time job become very popular in the big city. Many people believe that it is important for college students to have a part-time job. But I disagree with it. I have some reason to support my idea. Firstly, I hold that everyone should have the most important thing to be done in the different period. To be a student, study is the key word for us. If you cannot study well, you waste your time. Secondly, lots of students want to lessen their parents' financial burden through taking a part-time job. But it has a bad effect on their study. They do not know the most important thing their parents respect is that they can learn well and live a better life after they graduate. Therefore, pay much attention on your study now. The most important thing is not to have a part-time job right now, learn professional skills and practice yourself is the most serious thing in the university. If you want to earn more money, this will really help you later. So don't be influenced by others and try to keep on learning knowledge and you will succeed in the future.

IDN

B1_2

4

4

4

6

7

8

7

7

6

8

61

61

61

There are no major grammar mistake that affect the context of the essay

Word choice isn't great as the writer use some at the wrong scenario

In the last years, college students taking part-time job become very popular in the big city. Many people believe that it is important for college students to have part-time job I disagree with . I have some reason to support my . Firstly, I hold that everyone should the most important thing be done in period. student, study is key word. If you cannot study well, you wast your time. Secondly, students want to lessen their parents' financial burden taking a part-time job has a effect on their . They do not the most important thing their parents is that they can learn well and live a better life after they graduate. Therefore, pay attention your now. The most important thing is not to have a part-time job right now learn professional skills and practic is the most serious in the university. If you want to earn moremoney, this will really help you later. don't be influenced by others try to keep on learning and you will succeed in the future.

In the last years, college students taking a part-time job become very popular in the big city. Many people believe that it is important for college students to have a part-time job. But I disagree with it. I have some reason to support my idea. Firstly, I hold that everyone should have the most important thing to be done in the different period. To be a student, study is the key word for us. If you cannot study well, you waste your time. Secondly, lots of students want to lessen their parents' financial burden through taking a part-time job. But it has a bad effect on their study. They do not know the most important thing their parents respect is that they can learn well and live a better life after they graduate. Therefore, pay much attention on your study now. The most important thing is not to have a part-time job right now, learn professional skills and practice yourself is the most serious thing in the university. If you want to earn more money, this will really help you later. So don't be influenced by others and try to keep on learning knowledge and you will succeed in the future.

THA

B1_2

3

6

6

3

4

3

3

4

6

6

44

44

44

New idea were introduced which is somewhat convincing.

There are parts of the essay that don't make sense. A number of grammar mistake were made.

In the last years, college students taking part-time job become very popular in the big city. Many people believe that it is important for college students to have part-time job I disagree with . I have some reason to support my . Firstly, I hold that everyone should the most important thing be done in period. student, study is key word. If you cannot study well, you wast your time. Secondly, students want to lessen their parents' financial burden taking a part-time job has a effect on their . They do not the most important thing their parents is that they can learn well and live a better life after they graduate. Therefore, pay attention your now. The most important thing is not to have a part-time job right now learn professional skills and practic is the most serious in the university. If you want to earn moremoney, this will really help you later. don't be influenced by others try to keep on learning and you will succeed in the future.

In the last years, college students taking a part-time job become very popular in the big city. Many people believe that it is important for college students to have a part-time job. But I disagree with it. I have some reason to support my idea. Firstly, I hold that everyone should have the most important thing to be done in the different period. To be a student, study is the key word for us. If you cannot study well, you waste your time. Secondly, lots of students want to lessen their parents' financial burden through taking a part-time job. But it has a bad effect on their study. They do not know the most important thing their parents respect is that they can learn well and live a better life after they graduate. Therefore, pay much attention on your study now. The most important thing is not to have a part-time job right now, learn professional skills and practice yourself is the most serious thing in the university. If you want to earn more money, this will really help you later. So don't be influenced by others and try to keep on learning knowledge and you will succeed in the future.

IDN

B1_1

4

5

4

5

6

5

6

5

6

6

52

52

52

There are usage of metaphor within of the essay.

A great number of grammar mistakes are discovered, some sentence don't make sense.

In the last years, college students taking part-time job become very popular in the big city. Many people believe that it is important for college students to have part-time job I disagree with . I have some reason to support my . Firstly, I hold that everyone should the most important thing be done in period. student, study is key word. If you cannot study well, you wast your time. Secondly, students want to lessen their parents' financial burden taking a part-time job has a effect on their . They do not the most important thing their parents is that they can learn well and live a better life after they graduate. Therefore, pay attention your now. The most important thing is not to have a part-time job right now learn professional skills and practic is the most serious in the university. If you want to earn moremoney, this will really help you later. don't be influenced by others try to keep on learning and you will succeed in the future.

In the last years, college students taking a part-time job become very popular in the big city. Many people believe that it is important for college students to have a part-time job. But I disagree with it. I have some reason to support my idea. Firstly, I hold that everyone should have the most important thing to be done in the different period. To be a student, study is the key word for us. If you cannot study well, you waste your time. Secondly, lots of students want to lessen their parents' financial burden through taking a part-time job. But it has a bad effect on their study. They do not know the most important thing their parents respect is that they can learn well and live a better life after they graduate. Therefore, pay much attention on your study now. The most important thing is not to have a part-time job right now, learn professional skills and practice yourself is the most serious thing in the university. If you want to earn more money, this will really help you later. So don't be influenced by others and try to keep on learning knowledge and you will succeed in the future.

IDN

B1_1

2

4

2

3

2

5

3

4.5

5

4

34.5

34.5

34.5

Word usage and spelling were accurate. Conjunctions were introduce to improve flow of ideas.

Repeatedly have a number of grammar mistakes.

In the last years, college students taking part-time job become very popular in the big city. Many people believe that it is important for college students to have part-time job I disagree with . I have some reason to support my . Firstly, I hold that everyone should the most important thing be done in period. student, study is key word. If you cannot study well, you wast your time. Secondly, students want to lessen their parents' financial burden taking a part-time job has a effect on their . They do not the most important thing their parents is that they can learn well and live a better life after they graduate. Therefore, pay attention your now. The most important thing is not to have a part-time job right now learn professional skills and practic is the most serious in the university. If you want to earn moremoney, this will really help you later. don't be influenced by others try to keep on learning and you will succeed in the future.

In the last years, college students taking a part-time job become very popular in the big city. Many people believe that it is important for college students to have a part-time job. But I disagree with it. I have some reason to support my idea. Firstly, I hold that everyone should have the most important thing to be done in the different period. To be a student, study is the key word for us. If you cannot study well, you waste your time. Secondly, lots of students want to lessen their parents' financial burden through taking a part-time job. But it has a bad effect on their study. They do not know the most important thing their parents respect is that they can learn well and live a better life after they graduate. Therefore, pay much attention on your study now. The most important thing is not to have a part-time job right now, learn professional skills and practice yourself is the most serious thing in the university. If you want to earn more money, this will really help you later. So don't be influenced by others and try to keep on learning knowledge and you will succeed in the future.

THA

B1_1

1

2

2

1

2

2

1

2

2

1

16

16

16

No strong point observed.

Ideas are overlapped and some don't make sense. The essay is quite disorganized.

In the last years, college students taking part-time job become very popular in the big city. Many people believe that it is important for college students to have part-time job I disagree with . I have some reason to support my . Firstly, I hold that everyone should the most important thing be done in period. student, study is key word. If you cannot study well, you wast your time. Secondly, students want to lessen their parents' financial burden taking a part-time job has a effect on their . They do not the most important thing their parents is that they can learn well and live a better life after they graduate. Therefore, pay attention your now. The most important thing is not to have a part-time job right now learn professional skills and practic is the most serious in the university. If you want to earn moremoney, this will really help you later. don't be influenced by others try to keep on learning and you will succeed in the future.

In the last years, college students taking a part-time job become very popular in the big city. Many people believe that it is important for college students to have a part-time job. But I disagree with it. I have some reason to support my idea. Firstly, I hold that everyone should have the most important thing to be done in the different period. To be a student, study is the key word for us. If you cannot study well, you waste your time. Secondly, lots of students want to lessen their parents' financial burden through taking a part-time job. But it has a bad effect on their study. They do not know the most important thing their parents respect is that they can learn well and live a better life after they graduate. Therefore, pay much attention on your study now. The most important thing is not to have a part-time job right now, learn professional skills and practice yourself is the most serious thing in the university. If you want to earn more money, this will really help you later. So don't be influenced by others and try to keep on learning knowledge and you will succeed in the future.

CHN

A2_0

9

9

9

8

8

8

8

7

8

8

82

82

82

There are no grammar mistake, the writer show a deep understanding of the problem

The essay seems to prove the idea is valid not invalid like the writer opinion.

In the last years, college students taking part-time job become very popular in the big city. Many people believe that it is important for college students to have part-time job I disagree with . I have some reason to support my . Firstly, I hold that everyone should the most important thing be done in period. student, study is key word. If you cannot study well, you wast your time. Secondly, students want to lessen their parents' financial burden taking a part-time job has a effect on their . They do not the most important thing their parents is that they can learn well and live a better life after they graduate. Therefore, pay attention your now. The most important thing is not to have a part-time job right now learn professional skills and practic is the most serious in the university. If you want to earn moremoney, this will really help you later. don't be influenced by others try to keep on learning and you will succeed in the future.

In the last years, college students taking a part-time job become very popular in the big city. Many people believe that it is important for college students to have a part-time job. But I disagree with it. I have some reason to support my idea. Firstly, I hold that everyone should have the most important thing to be done in the different period. To be a student, study is the key word for us. If you cannot study well, you waste your time. Secondly, lots of students want to lessen their parents' financial burden through taking a part-time job. But it has a bad effect on their study. They do not know the most important thing their parents respect is that they can learn well and live a better life after they graduate. Therefore, pay much attention on your study now. The most important thing is not to have a part-time job right now, learn professional skills and practice yourself is the most serious thing in the university. If you want to earn more money, this will really help you later. So don't be influenced by others and try to keep on learning knowledge and you will succeed in the future.